It's a good chapter, but I think that the reaction was a little exaggerated. I'm sorry, but that's what I think. Other than that, though, it was wonderful.

I love this story. I didn't think I'd liked it, but after forcing myself to finally try to read it, I found out I LOVE it! I'm so glad I try new things sometimes.

Go Erza! The race was interesting yet deadly. I'm not so sure I would have wanted to participate in it. It was, like the others, a great chapter.

Other than a few spelling mistakes I saw, it was awesome. You made the same mistake I used to with aloud and allowed. I can't wait to read more. This is very creative and original. I'm so glad you redid these chapters or I'd be hopelessly lost.

Up to here is gone. I'd been wanting to read it, but well...... I'll read the other chapters soon, but for a few days I'm not going to have internet service =(

Author's Response: I know, sorry............I\'ll put them back soon, as long as I know what has happened.........I\'m still sort of waiting to see if they come back, this has happened to a lot of people......... Again, sorry!

Wow, Lestelle is really cool. I love all of her abilities. They're just plain awesome. I feel really bad because of her mom =(. Poor Lestelle and Chihiro. You did really well at adding Lestelle to the original plot, by the way. I'm so looking forward to your next update!

Lestelle isn't very nice to Kakashi. Oh well, he does deserve it. Anyway, this was a great chapter. I absolutely love your characters. They're just plain awesome. I can't wait to see what's going to happen. I love seeing the different ways ocs effect the original teams.

Hm...... Is their kekkei genkai that one thing they did in the first chapter? Could you explain that better to me because I was a little confused? Or are you going to later on?

Okay, even though I'm confused, this chapter was awesome. I love this story. Oh, wait, their kekkei genkai is the future eye thing, isn't it? *face palms*. Okay, ignore the whole first part of this review. That was just something caused by it being 11:30 and my brain not fully operating after 11:03. I love your characters. They seem so cool and original. Overall great story, lilmissmindy!

Name: Kohana Sarutobi
Gender: Female
Animal partner: If she needs one, I'm going to go with a white wolf named Shiro.
Ancestor: Asuma and Kurenai
Village: Leaf
Age: 15 or 16. You choose which would work best.
Personality: She's the type of person who tries to cheer everyone up when things look bad. She tries to hide her pain from others in fear of upsetting them, no matter how painful the fact is (would you consider that a flaw?). When she does have something locked inside, she usually isolates herself. If I can think of anything else, I'll tell you. If not, have fun with her and add to her personality as much as you want.
Appearance: Bluish black hair held up with a bright blue ribbon given to her from her mother, crimson eyes, and pale skin. (optional ->) She has a scar from her back to her shoulder from defending a person from a falling piece of glass. She wears a red shirt, pink armbands, and black capris.
Unlocked Kekkei Genkai: Blood Demon: yeah, she gets a little crazy when covered in blood. It unlocks a warrior instinct that's a rare ability from her mother's clan (you can figure out the clan name). When she learns how to control it, though, it's quite useful. It boosts ones chakra, speed, and strength.
Unlocked Special Abilities: She can use some really strong flower and fire related jutsus if that counts.


Oh, and something unrelated, could you read my challenge a meeting of ocs. Then you'll understand my question: Who should go to whose (or would it be who's?) universe.

Author's Response: Ah! Sarutobi, nice thinking! Yeah, your character can have a white wolf. I love wolves, so they are all welcome! Concealing pain from others is a definite flaw, so nice thinking on that one. Nice kekkei genkai, sounds very interesting and original. I love it! Oh, and I am on my way to check out your challenge. *looks at challenge* Oh, it sounds very cool. I might have to attempt that for myself one of these days. Now, for your question, are you asking about for your own OCs and who should go where? If you are, I say Sasaui should go into your story, Never Too Late. My reason: Sasaui is Sasuke\'s twin, so it would be really cool if she ended up in a universe where Sasuke has no idea who she is and he happens to be falling in love with a girl she doesn\'t know nor possibly like. I hope that helps. Anyways, thanks a lot for joining! I can\'t wait to write this story!

Wow..... wow.... Sorry, for a second there, that was the only word I could think of. It's so hard to find words to even begin to describe you awesomeness. I can't wait to read more of it. You did perfectly on all the ocs, and I absolutely loved Kohana. I don't think I could have written her better myself. Since I'm not sure Krina will bother getting on (she rarely gets on) Riku was awesome as well.

Author's Response: It\'s okay, \'wow\' is usually the only word I can come up with when I read stories *coughyourstoriescough* I\'m always really flattered when you call me awesome. Thank you so much! I\'m so relieved to hear that you liked Kohana. I\'m always nervous about introducing the characters. And since you are Krina\'s sister, I will gratefully accept your comment on Riku. Thank you for enjoying my portrayal of the characters. Thank you so much for reading and thanks even more for reviewing! You are the awesome one, Sasaui!

Can I change kohana's animal into a white tiger with black stripes? I've been reading Tiger's Curse and it's got me wanting her to have a tiger. The name is still Shiro. Oh, and he has bright blue eyes.

Author's Response: Oh, sure. It\'s a good thing I didn\'t start writing about Shiro yet >_< Okay, a white tiger it is. I kind think that fits her better anyway, actually.

So, that's everyone, right? Or did I miss someone when checking? Oh well, to your story. I absolutely loved it. I can still barely think of anything but wow. I can't believe you're so amazing. All of these characters are fantastic. They're so good its like they're your own ocs. I can't wait for another update. I'm in love with your story.

Author's Response: That\'s all of the heroes. I still have a few villains left to bring in. In total, that\'s approximately 15 characters >_< Well, I do enjoy writing about them, so it\'s no big deal. I\'m so relieved and grateful to read your review. Thank you so much for the positive feedback. I\'m very happy to hear that I\'m writing the characters well, obviously that is a huge challenge. Not to mention terrifying when I await the reviews of the characters\' owners. But thank you so much for the great support. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, it really makes my day!

First off I am going to say something to Glomp-chan: YOU ARE AWESOME. The Saviors idea is just plain amazing. You put one amazing brain (yours) and another (silverwolf's) and you get one amazing outcome.

As for your story, silverwolf, I will admit that I saw that part where you were a little worse in writing, but I cannot say anything bad about it since I do it as well. I mean, seriously, look at the introduction of Sorano and Rikuto to that of Amanda. My writing was WAY down I think. But since she already told you where, I'm not going to do it because I'm lazy that way. =P

Okay, now to the positive stuff.......

THAT IS IT! YOU HAVE DONE IT! I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU'VE DONE IT!

Dun dun dun.......

CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!! You officially have another story on the YOUR STORY list that I have created but continue to forget to add to my account profile. So basically I'm telling you that this story has achieved YOUR STORY status (even though I'm not really sure why getting my ultimate compliment is such a great thing to receive. Now if it was someone like BattyBigSister or all the other amazing authors here, I'd understand).

Okay, now to reviewing the sections (because all of them are so great they each deserve their own comments). I really liked the beginning. It was just Madara talking to Zetsu, but then you added that Saviors thing and it left the reader wondering what they were. That was just plain amazing and had me wanting to skip ahead just to find out.

And I agree BigSis, Kazuki and Rin do make an interesting couple. And by that, I mean two people, not what is probably going to happen in the future. I just love the way they act, with Rin's bloodthirsty and cold nature contrasting with his mostly relaxed and bright self (at least that's how I think he acts). And then you have Umiko just suddenly attack him. Is it just me or do these females hate Kazuki? Poor guy =(. It's pretty bad that I feel pity for the evil dude......

I sure do like Amaya's spunk. She just seems so..... I can't find the right word right now, but she's so whateverthewordI'mlookingforis. I guess she just seems to have a strong spark of life in her. And as many others have stated, the sugar thing has me curious. I know that fleamicheal said something about it being an uh-oh, and I can't wait to see what you have planned for that. Knowing you, it ought to be good.

If I said I loved that strange Rin and Kazuki thing, then I totally love the Shin and Karasu. I was totally captured when I read the guard scene. I think the way he held her back and everything. I don't know what it was, but I still have that stuck in my head.

And I shall tell you now - you did perfect with Riku. If anyone I knew reviewed more (including Krina, Sky-chan, and Starless__Night), you'd be told the same about all their characters. Everything about that scene was realistic. From Riku's worry to Kohana's need to not let on she was hurt so she wouldn't hurt her friend. Then again, I did create her, so I'll probably think most things that you do with her will be realistic. I think it's funny how everyone seems to be hungry through this, by the way. At first I thought they'd all meet at the ramen shop =P. Riku and Kohana's friendship and everything about Kohana was dead on. Great job, Silverwolf.

Reading Yuna and Kaoru was really fun. It goes from the friendship that is full of worry because of Kohana being attacked to a friendship that is happy and goofing off. I really liked that, even if you didn't intentionally do it (which you might have). The part where Kaoru having her hair eaten was comical and I'm glad Yuna was able to assure her about staying with her family.

No offense to either Lilmissmindy or you if you didn't mean to write her this way, but Megumi seems like a brat. I'm sorry, but she does. Just the money thing made her seem spoiled and like that money gave her height in the food chain of the world. It just may be the way my mind works, I dunno. She was wonderful, though, and so was Takara and Ginmaru. I keep on wondering if maybe they'll grow bonded like all the other pairs have and then she'll help her turn from the darkness. I always want to see the bad guys come into the light because, well, it's just me. I think everyone should have a one way ticket to the light side, but the stupid Darth Vader thing seems to make people think they have to go to the dark side to be cool (my lame attempt at a joke, but I had to make a mention of Darth Vader and the dark side because my family brought it when I was watching them play Monopoly).

And I'm so loving Yoru. Just that way he seems to not care about anything is so hilarious. I'm sorry, Shadow-san, but it's hilarious reading all these characters getting under your character's skin. I really wonder how he'll fight since he's always calm so he'd be hard to provoke or scare...... Well, I can't wait to see more of him. I just feel so attached to him for some reason.....

-_-'....... WE'VE BEEN TALKING TOO MUCH!!! I mean, seriously, have our minds blended together? Just the whole Karasu thing seems like what I had planned. Well, it wouldn't be exactly like yours, but still, they met because her. Either way, the meeting was just plain amazing. I can't wait to see what will happen next. And BigSis has a point about the wondering off part, but you've already told here you had something planned for that, so I'll just have to wait and see. The meeting was hilarious, though. Well, Riku's rage was hilarious. The whole Yuu stopping her was pretty cool, though. And I liked the calm nature that Yuna had. =D All the animals are really protective. I was afraid we'd see a cat/deer/snake fight. And then Ginmaru jumped in and it seemed to slowly defuse.... Ah, Megumi, just what she needed, huh? Now she won't have to spend all her daddy's money *insert eye roll* to find them.

Here is proof that for any of my ocs, I try to imagine the worst things happening. The moment I heard about the Saviors, I wondered what would happen if Kohana was captured by them. Yeah yeah, I know, I'm evil and you probably pity every oc that has to put up with me. And just think, most of my ocs are still kids and I've already tortured them.

And Kioshi should be hit! Yeah yeah, he's doing it for the greater good blah blah blah! But how dare he treat BigSis's oc the way he does! Making her what she is. Then again, it's just a fanfic, but still. He needs whacked the same way that I thought Hidan needed to have his head banged off the wall a dozen times. He's a great oc and everything, but I still want to whack him.

As for Naomi, she's just plain amazing. My pity goes out to her, though. I can't believe that after everything Kioshi's done, he threw her into that filthy cell! I mean, seriously, experimenting on her until she is like she is! Unbelievable. I'm glad she at least has her friend Hamtaro, though. The way she went from talking from third person with humans to first person with Hamtaro was interesting. I kinda don't want any of the ocs to hurt her. She just seems to fragile and misguided. I hate when the dark hearted manipulate people who don't know better.

Overall this chapter was plain amazing. I loved every second of it and it keeps me wanting to know what's going to happen next. I hope this super long review makes up for the time I didn't review. But I just couldn't write a short one. This one deserved a longer review than this, but I don't want to make you fall asleep by rambling. I really wish there was a YOUR STORY button under that option list, but, sadly, that's only in the option box in my mind. Speaking of which, I think I need to do something. Give me a second......



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The heart symbolizes that the story is so great it will remain in my heart. Yeah, sappy, I know, but it's true. Great job, Silverwolf. There's is nothing more I can say except this is definitely more than worthy than YOUR STORY.

Author's Response: Ah, you saw my decrease in writing. Well, I\'m glad about that. That means you guys are paying attention and actually want to point it out to me, so thank you. Oh my gosh! I have achieved the YOUR STORY compliment for another story?! I feel so accomplished! Thank you very much!

Eh, I wasn\'t a fan of the beginning, mostly probably due to Zetsu; I just can\'t seem to wrap my mind around our cannibal friend. But yeah, the Saviors intro was meant as a semi-cliffhanger that was resolved at the very end of the chapter. Hehe, I\'m so evil :P

Oh, I\'ve thought of different outcomes for Kazuki and Rin, though I honestly don\'t know where the story will lead to in that aspect. But yeah, they do make quite the pair. As for girls being mean to Kazuki, Umiko just wanted to fight, that\'s all.

Ah, you like Amaya\'s spunk? Then I guess the word you\'re looking for is... uh, spunky, I guess? Really, 2-5 lines of the sugar reference has captured everyone\'s interest. Haha, yes, I do have an idea for that particular part of the story :D

Once again, everyone likes Shin and Karasu. I don\'t know what part you liked, but I\'m glad you liked it at all XD

Oh, thank you for telling me I did a good job on the characters for your friends. The Riku and Kohana scene was one of the first scene I wrote, because it was sweet and realistic (as you said).

Um... I actually didn\'t plan the transition that way. I just went in order of when I introduced the characters before. But I\'m glad you liked that anyway. Yuna and Kaoru are a really sweet pair to write about because I think their personalities just go so well together.

Oh, well, lilmissmindy had told me to write Megumi as disobedient, sarcastic, and loud. I suppose I didn\'t mean to make her come off as a brat. But lilmissmindy seemed to like her, so as long as I continue to write the characters as the creators wish, then I\'m alright with that. Huh, BattyBigSis said the same thing about Takara and Megumi bonding. You guys just might be too smart for me ;) Ah, you\'ll just have to wait and see about them.

I love Yoru too! His calm personality is so annoying, and I love that! I\'m glad you did too!

Haha, I guess we really have talked too much. I\'m sorry that this seemed like something that you imagined for your own story. But I\'m glad you liked the scene anyway! All the characters\' personalities meshed together, and I\'m glad to hear they blended well. I did think about the animals fighting, but that would have been counterproductive, as the heroes shouldn\'t really fight... yet ;)

Ah, the Saviors... yeah, I won\'t spoil anything ;D Though it\'s funny that you hate Kioshi so much; BattyBigSis herself said that she loved him. But I do also love Naomi, so I see where you\'re coming from.

Wow, thank you very much for the long review. When I said I liked long reviews because they help me to fix my mistakes, I didn\'t expect so much praise. And a beautiful banner to top it all off! Wow! Pfft, sappiness, I love sappiness, don\'t worry ;D Oh gosh, thank you very much for your wonderful review. It really made my day. You\'re amazing, Sasaui! Thank you!