Reviews For Different Details
Name: Katana (Signed) · Date: 20/05/10 - 09:10 am · For: Ice Heart
This is fantastic.
Author's Response:Thanks. Like you couldn't tell that to my face instead of getting my hopes up for an amazing review only to be disappointed by a 'this is fantastic' by a friend who is supposed to say that. Yeah. Thanks.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 29/04/10 - 09:55 pm · For: Ice Heart
well i do like the story's plot but;
the spacing....thats not wat i mean. the word i guess i shouldve used was indenting; making paragraphs...
the contents of the chapter seem...not to describitive. they just dont seem enough to tell all wat was there; its seemlying more like a large summary than an story. Try just adding some things to the scenes, thoughts, images, etc
other than all these things; u are doing quite well for a writer; keep up the good work
Author's Response:Ah, I see. I guess I should put more description, I'll make sure to do so next chapter. Thx, I'll do my best^^
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 26/04/10 - 12:46 pm · For: Ice Heart
:) He still doesn't know what a crush is?
Oh yeah, by spacing i meant 'entering'. instead of
Kevin smiled, and said through clenched teeth, "Would you like something to eat, Ma'am?"Marian wrinkled her nose at him and said, "Nothing, thank you. Now run along dear." Kevin glared at his little sister and walked away, thinking, 'WHY did i take that stupid bet!?'
you should make it like this
Kevin smiled, and said through clenched teeth, "Would you like something to eat, Ma'am?"
Marian wrinkled her nose at him and said, "Nothing, thank you. Now run along dear."
Kevin glared at his little sister and walked away, thinking, 'WHY did i take that stupid bet!?'
It's easier to read.
Good job! I liked this chapter. ^^
Author's Response: okay. That shouldn't be hard to do. Thx for the advice:D
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 26/04/10 - 12:38 pm · For: Forest of Death
I'm ok about Itachi. ^^ I heard somewhere that he was ordered to kil the Uchihas, but that bastard didn't have to go and do it! Well I don' know the full story anyway, so...
I like watching Naruto better, and i'm at the part where naruto is devoloping his own jutsu and the change in chakra thing.
You?
Author's Response: Well, I'd wait to judge until you have the full story. I feel bad for him, acutally. I used to hate him but then I found out the truth. Poor tachi.
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 23/04/10 - 02:56 pm · For: Glass Rose
Not really. I disliked Sakura in the beginning of the series, but then i started to like her a bit. My personal opinion of her then was that she was a bratty, spoiled fangirl who doesn't know anything, and is lazy.
After the chunin exams though, she sorta got over all that, so i like her better. ^^
i guess i'd say i dislike the akatsuki members the most, especially deidara.
Author's Response: yeah, she's alright in the shippuden but I can't get over my initial dislike of her. So, you dislike Itachi? He's my favorite...how much of Naruto have you watched/read?
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 22/04/10 - 12:11 pm · For: Glass Rose
Waaah! Gaara es in looove! ^-^ eh-heh, this is really sweet. (you need to space more though.)
You know what, when I first read Naruto, I thought Gaara/Hina was a good pair.
9then I thought Hina/Neji, then Hina/naruto, so I guess my interests change..
Author's Response: Yep. Though he doesn't know it's love yet:D Yeah, I'll space more on my next chapter. Hehe. I love a million pairs too. I have so many I can't keep count. I dislike Sakura though, for some reason. So I don't read or write about her if I can help it. Any character you dislike?
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 22/04/10 - 12:03 pm · For: Hinata's Cinnamon Buns
^^ seriously, I just read the part where Naruto said 'that's not what i meant when I said you souldn't leave without warning!' haha, seriously, that made my day.
Now, I've finished the chapter. Wondering what games he's talking about. ? hmm...
On to the next chapter!
Author's Response: haha. Yeah, Gaara just leaves him in the dust. Poor Naru-chan. You'll have to wait and see for the games:D
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 21/04/10 - 10:41 pm · For: Glass Rose
interesting and has a good start but there are a few problems. Spacing makes things much better and not so crowded.
I suggest between scenes to put ~~~~~~ to separate scenes soo its not confusing and the spacing inbetween diaolog and thoughts=it will just help with the reading. Also try using more paragraphs for the organization; ideas with similar ideas on the flow of the chapter in nice neat paragraphs
Other than that good job and keep it up! Just a few grammar helpings to go and it will be a good hit.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll keep that in mind when I write the next chapter:D
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 16/02/10 - 08:01 pm · For: Kazekage's Thanks
thats a sweet simple note....
Author's Response: Yep. It took me awhile to figure out wat was going to happen. A few failures and walla, it was an epiphany:D
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 11/02/10 - 09:23 pm · For: Kazekage's Thanks
I was wondering whther you would mind cheking out my story, Light the Darkness?
Sry to bother you. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I'll check it out. No problem. No bother:D
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 11/02/10 - 09:05 pm · For: Kazekage's Thanks
Heh, shino and kiba changed as well... Yeah, Hina is one of my fave characters too!
This was good. Please keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Yeah, I hope I didn't change them too much. Hinata is amazing! She is so underappriciated. Thx I'll keep working on this:D
Name: Katana (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 - 12:00 pm · For: Forest of Death
- Hello!
- What's up?
- I'm bored.
- I'm sure you can see that.
- Bye!
Author's Response: Fancy bullets^^ Yeah, of course your bored. You're in Mr. Parsons class, could you expect anything less?
Name: ninja melon (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 - 11:57 am · For: Forest of Death
THAT WAS INTENSE WRITE MORE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON IM ABUOT YO PEE MY SELF WITH ENTICIPATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL. I don't need to know that you were going to pee yourself. Seriously, keep that info to yourself. Have some modesty woman. And anticipation is spelt with a A not E:D
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 07/02/10 - 07:21 pm · For: Forest of Death
Hina's personality has sorta changed! Anyway, this is good. I likd it. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Yeah, she did. Hina's my favorite character:D Thanks, I'll keep going^^
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 05/02/10 - 06:04 pm · For: Forest of Death
hmm nvr thought of this pairing...interesting so keep on going!
Author's Response: I love weird pairings, their fun. I always kinda liked this pairing. Hinata, who always gives love and compassion with Gaara, lonely boy who never got love. I'll keep on this, don't worry.
Name: Katana (Signed) · Date: 05/02/10 - 05:08 pm · For: Forest of Death
loooooooooooooooooove it. post more SOOOOOOOOOON!!!!! Our story is so funny! Looooooooooove Into the Microwave.
Author's Response: OKAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYY! Yeah, our story if the f-ing bomb!