Reviews For Forgotten Thunder
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 11/07/12 - 08:46 am · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
I love this story.
Name: RawrTheDinoLycan (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 04:34 am · For: Summary of a Dead Girl
Okay. I read the prequel to this before reading this one. I have been up for about 5 hours reading non-stop...
AND I LOVE IT!
Ohmigosh, I laughed, I screamed, I cried because I laughed too hard! It was just amazing, seriously I'm blown away.
I love the relationship between Nari, and well everyone. You have successfully created one of the most original Oc's I have ever had the pleasure of reading. I love Nari
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 21/05/11 - 06:45 pm · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
Aw, it's already over! So upsetting, I really enjoyed reading your stories. This story and the original were very entertaining. Very nice job, this was a great way to conclude Thunder and Swirls. I'm really impressed with your style of writing, I really really enjoy it. Great work!
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 27/07/10 - 03:30 pm · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
Gahh! Yay! Get some, Kaminari!
That was a good ending. It was so damn cute!
Oh man, this was way shorter than Thunder and Swirls, but I didn't really expect it to be longer. This was a good little sequel to give everybody a happy ending. I really hope you write some more! I enjoy your writing a lot.
Love,
TheArdisaur;)
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I was writing for all the wrong reasons, but I'm very happy that you liked this sequel as it is! I'm probably never going to finish my other story with the OC being adopted as a Nara, but I may possibly write a few OC oneshots and post them on this site. =] I prefer to write reader-inserts so most of my stories are on a more reader-insert friendly site. Thanks for the love and being an awesome reviewer! Peace out, Razor-san (Kamisori)
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 24/07/10 - 02:19 pm · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
Bravo! Very impressive! I read the other reviews before writing this, so I can say that I like it the way it is, but I also would have liked it if you had dragged it through saving Jessica. I read this as you were writing last year, and was very disppointed when you stopped updating. I understand your reasoning, so I'm not angry, and I was pleasently surprised when I saw that you had finally concluded it! Thank you for that. No matter what I could imagine, you are still the writer, and whatever you write is the story. That's your right. I loved the Sai/Shino rivalry, and Kamichi was believeable. I can't imagine writing something about a topic so vague as angels, heaven and hell, but you did an amazing job! I think the ending is suitable and satisfying. Congratulations, and I hope you enjoy the site even without your story. In a story I'm working on, I'm actually including a Shino/OC romance, and it's difficult! If I find help in your work or use anything of yours, I'll make sure to give you full credit! Thanks again for writing both stories and finishing this one! It has made my day, and inspired me to work on my story more!
Author's Response: Well...gosh, you got me all flustered! ^///^ The best thing about writing about a topic so vague like heaven and hell is being able to keep it in character while adding your own twist to its make up. Yay! Shino loving! Feel free to use my story, but just done plagerize. It'll get you kicked off. =( Thank you for the review!
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 21/07/10 - 07:07 pm · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
Well I took a quick review down memory lane to see what the story was about. I found the joke; please with a bug boy on top very funny and disturbing....
Mah; your story seems...not as good as the first part. I like how the beginning was with the mellow dramatics but, it seemed to just be a close to the character.
No huge questions for the future besides the Sai vs Shino deal, etc...Then again I like a close to things. It just seems to be a shame to close the story to here. There could be more to add you know, a prologue to to what happens.
You could have more dates shown for the character, perhaps a new threat, or just close it with Naruto becoming Hokage ( we all know he gets it. It's just stupid if he doesn't.)
Or you can leave it as it. It's your choice, just as I said before it's just a shame. I do enjoy reading about Kaminari and her antics.
CKL
Author's Response: Thanks for your honesty. :) In truth, I love the first part of this story very much. People wanted a sequel so bad that I forced myself to write on. I am not blind; I know this is NOTHING compared to Thunder and Swirls. That is why I was so reluctant to continue it. But, I just couldn't leave this unfinished, so I made a final chapter. (The chapter is called Lucky Eleven because it is my lucky number.) This is not how I wanted to close this story. I was going to involve the Hiyori clan and Shimo and all our favorite OCs in an effort to flamboyantly save Jessica. But I just lost interest. It makes sad to end it here, but maybe I'll rewrite it someday and tell the story of how Jessica was SUPPOSE to be revived. Until then, thank you for being such a good reviewer and having the patience to read and review this after a year. :)
Name: kuramasgurl018 (Signed) · Date: 21/07/10 - 01:18 pm · For: Lucky Eleven: Life Goes on Once More
I'm glad you finally updated I just wish you hadn't ended the story. It was a good story. I hope we can pu up a new chapter for the truth or dare story soon.
Author's Response: Thanks.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 29/10/09 - 05:52 pm · For: Price of Progress
XD i think this chapter was nice, lil too short but its still somen....also wen u updating ur dare show? are u having a halloween special? *eyes gleam with hope*** tht would be awesome and u inspired me to hav my game show with my faved shows (i wont steel any of ur dares or truth things i swear and ill keep giving u dares and such !! ^^)
so anywho Write ON!
Author's Response: Ah, sorry. It would have been longer if I didn't accidently delete the chapter when it was half done. I don't know when the next chapter for K-gurl and I's dare show will be up. Sorry, but I've been busy with life and school. lol, thanks for the warning. ;] It would be pretty difficult to plagerize our dare show, but I'm happy that you put thought into telling me about it. Thanks.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 29/10/09 - 02:28 pm · For: Price of Progress
Poor Kaminari.
She has to suffer through Sai and Shino.
That's very mean.
Author's Response: x] There is a method to my maddness. TY 4 reviewing!
Name: kuramasgurl018 (Signed) · Date: 28/10/09 - 04:39 pm · For: Price of Progress
I'm glad you got this chapter up. Is Jessica going to ever come out of the coma and how about you do some flashbacks for things you didn't put in this story like the whole thing happeening with Jessica or the thing with Kaminari's aunt and Kakashi or something?
Author's Response: BTW, when are you going to update your stories??
Name: kuramasgurl018 (Signed) · Date: 28/10/09 - 04:38 pm · For: Price of Progress
I'm glad you got this chapter up. Is Jessica going to ever come out of the coma and how about you do some flashbacks for things you didn't put in this story like the whole thing happeening with Jessica or the thing with Kaminari's aunt and Kakashi or something?
Author's Response: Thank you for the suggestions. I don't know if/when Jessica will get out of her coma. It comes to me as I go. Thanks for the review!
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 14/10/09 - 11:55 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
Love triangle incoming! Write on lightning-san, good chapter! I like the way you introduced Sai and how you described him.
I think It would have been cool if you had made this sequel in first person now that I see how often you are portraying her thoughts and emotions aside from Naruto at the end. Just typing out my observation. xD
I think you are on a roll now so don't stop.
Ardi fails. haha
Author's Response: I've been waiting for you to say that. xD First pov is difficult for me to do. It will revolve around Nari, yes, but I like the style that I'm writing it. Thanks for the review.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 14/10/09 - 01:18 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
Okay then!!
Sorry that I did that!
I had it stuck in my head that 'Kawaii' meant scary!
haha
Author's Response: Don't worry about it. ^_^ I had to go and check to see if I was wrong. hehe, but if you fear cuteness, then it would be scary. ;P
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 14/10/09 - 12:42 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
Sai....?
Well, that was unexpected. o.O
COME ON< SHINO! APPEAR!
haha thanks for updating! I was waiting to read this chapter.
Update soon!
Author's Response: I haven't had the desire to write this story as much anymore. I hope this faze passes. Thanks for the review.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 13/10/09 - 09:01 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
X3 XD Sai does have the tendency to say the wrong things, its really amusing! good job on the chapter and WRit on!
Author's Response: Glad u think so!
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 13/10/09 - 08:07 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
'Kawaii' actually means scary.
LOL
Sorry, but I just wanted to let you know.
But, 'bijin' means beautiful.... if you want to use that...
Anywho.... good chapter.
A good banter session between Nari-san and Kakashi is always great!!
;]
I wish they could do something about Kaminari's inability to be a ninja.
I think that would just SUCK not being able to do what you love best!
DD:
Author's Response: no, actually, I'm right. I have a little japanese dictionary with me and it says that "kawaii" and "kawairashii" means cute, lovable, and darling. "Kawai-so," however, means pitiful. That dictionary is very reliable. Thanks for the review!
Name: kuramasgurl018 (Signed) · Date: 13/10/09 - 07:40 pm · For: Shino’s Competition?
Things are getting interesting. I can't wait to see teh next update and I hope that we can make the next chapter of the truth or dare story soon. Shino was jealous of Kamichi? That's funny.
Author's Response: Sorry that I've been MIA for so long. I won't have a computer til next week so maybe we'll make the next chapter then. :] It's not like the dares have been lacking. xD
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 23/09/09 - 05:54 pm · For: Summary of a Dead Girl
WTF? sry i was just reading the rev....tht is the most random thing i hav ever read in a rev....i just had to say tht/ =P lolz
Author's Response: lol, yeah it is. But I've been down lately so that boosted my spirits a bit. :]
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 - 02:59 pm · For: Heaven’s Gates Won’t Open Up For Me
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmz.
review:
*Yoda voice* A most interesting approach, discussing Naruto afterlife is. But beware! Caution you must take when including these angels, for down another path it may lead. Clouded is the future of this fiction...as is the fate of Kaminari. Odd is the apparent lack of knowledge of her closest companion. Meditate on this further, I will. *end*
*start Vader voice* I find your lack of inspiration...disturbing...However I will spare you this time. You may find that I won't be as forgiving next chapter.
*Obi-Wan* -Ah I don't want to hear you excuses this time y.n You have plenty of time to produce material at the academy. Perhaps in Algebra you would find your best opportunity. Heed those words my young apprentice, or Shino may never magically appear in your bedroom.
Whats with the emo chapter. All this angel stuff is getting annoying.
Author's Response: Too bad. The 'angel stuff' is important to the story, thus, I will put emphisis on it! Star Wars and Shino in my bedroom. I think I've had that dream before. xD Thanks for the feedback!
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 - 02:10 pm · For: Angel Wears Sneakers
lol fail guardian is full of fail.
"Uh... by the way...about you coming back to life and everything...I shoulda known about that and your best friend going into a coma. Annnnndddd about you knowing my name...yeah I really messed up on that one also considering you one of those 'normal humans' and I don't think you'll be going to go to heaven. Oh--and sorry to hear you'll never be a ninja again, but don't worry, at least you'll have me in your dreams *wink wink*"
LMAO
You need to pull some harry potter crap and get a wand and pull out those memories of his name xD.
review: The chapter was a bit funny. Everything was all cute with the pairings but a bit rushed. It read out like a list of pairings with a few comments thrown in. Kaminari saying she wants someone to tell her who all the "pairings" are reminded me right away I'm reading a fanfiction. (Was at least expecting a build up to Shino! xP)
Anyway the chapter soon picked up and we got some good information about her emotions and current state compared to everyone else and more info about the not so guardian angel.
-1 for the all the pairings talk. I think you could do more to portray all the crap that has happened during the time skip rather than pointing out everyone is holding hands, wearing wedding rings, and taking care of a baby. The only good part out of it for me was the ring on Kasumi's finger. Then I started thinking about Kaminari's aunt being married to her teacher lol.
+1 because the guardian part made me giggle.
10/10
Author's Response: Yay for good feedback. :) Thanks for the good review. Well like you said, it IS a fanfiction.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 - 01:14 pm · For: Heaven’s Gates Won’t Open Up For Me
Yay for updates! XD
Well, being a gaurdian angel won't be too bad!! You made it sound like Kaminari was going to hell that instant!! lol
Gooooooooooood chapter!!
Author's Response: Hahaha! >:] I luffles twists! I embrace them.
Name: kuramasgurl018 (Signed) · Date: 20/09/09 - 06:32 pm · For: Heaven’s Gates Won’t Open Up For Me
Things are getting interesting. I hope that things keep getting interesting in the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you. I hope to keep you intertained.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 20/09/09 - 04:10 pm · For: Heaven’s Gates Won’t Open Up For Me
thts very informitive. thx. i wonder wat will b hapn now to her and ....her guardain looked like gai! OOlll scary
Author's Response: lol, xD Thanks for the review.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 09/09/09 - 06:47 pm · For: Angel Wears Sneakers
Ohhh.... Nari-san... what has he gotten you into? Bad, bad Kamichi!!!
I like 'Forgotten Thunder'!!!!!
Besides, 'Life After Death' is too cliche.... it just doesn't suit this story....
Great chapter!! I wonder why it's all his fault?
Author's Response: Well...Kamichi IS Kaminari...kind of. Tee hee~! Thanks for the input. The current title STAYS.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 09/09/09 - 06:31 pm · For: Angel Wears Sneakers
oh snap.....its tht bad to no ur guardians name.....well this is going to be interesting and her not going to heaven means....o,o tht sucks....
good job on the ch thou and dnt change the name. it suits the story.
Author's Response: Ok! A no to the name changing! Thanks for your input!