Oops, heh, it took me this long to actually get my lazy butt on here and read this story. XD Sorry Ty! Oh well... it's really good! Only thing is... you need to write more. >_> I don't wanna hear any crap about writer's block, either! Write, man, write! XD

More, pwease? :3 (I decided to ask nicely.)

Lets just hope this time one of your crazy stalker people won't find this review and come hunt me down and scream/yell at me. -_- Right, anyhoo, great job Ty! ^_^

I think this as an interesting idea, and I look forward to reading more. I do have a few things to point out that might be helpful.

First, a dramatis personae might be helpful. Having a handy references about what position character's hold in this alternate world would be very helpful.

Second, this is really minor, but as a student of Roman history, I must note that since this republican period, the Consul of the Senate would be speaking about the good of the State (latin, Res Publica, the root of the modern "republic"). Just minor, but it will help with flavor.

Author's Response: Ah, hah. I'm also taking a course on Rome and one in Latin, but it's easier to work with a plot having him speak of "blah" and corruption XD This was just a bit of an intro, characters shall be developed soon! I might write out a whole chapter in Latin, who know, (I'm still trying to think of who the other Consul will be, so we'll see that too ^^') It'll start moving faster soon. Sed, amo, ex fabula? It's getting there -_-