Reviews For Next Generation
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 14/09/11 - 02:03 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 3
wow....
kool urufu...
complete opposite scenes... who cn do tis b8r than u...?? xD
first megumi n her hihilarious jolly scene with her family... n than minoru... n his mom...
bth hv lost a parent... bt kibaa makes up 4 da loss i guess...
n OMG...!! shaved head :O
thts intense n serious :(
poor minoru... i just hope his mom stays alive till he professionally learns medical ninjutsu....
well anyways... awesome job...
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 14/09/11 - 01:47 pm · For: Misora Hatake
crush...
megumi... or naomi...or anybody... doesn't matter... :)
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 03:59 pm · For: Misora Hatake
Alright, thank you, Rainbow Fire! I'm glad you liked it! Akira is supposed to be like that. Kind, gentle, all that stuff. As for the work, I believe that's how he thinks: he has to repay his parents for being born.Sasaui, do you want me to write a chapter for Hoshi? Or do we wait until the chuunin exams?
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 12:22 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 4
Aww, Naomi's a sweetheart, she really is. And Konohamaru, heehee, he's such a loveable goofball.
I love Naomi's sweet personality, and the fact that she paid her respects to her deceased family members was really nice.
Great job, tigerseye! This was very good!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 12:21 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 3
I loved the juxtaposition here. Megumi and her father having an enjoyable morning, filled with fun and laughs. Then Minoru and his mom holding short yet depressing (just because of her dialogue) conversation.
There were a few spelling errors, and I do feel you got a bit lazy in description in some places. But it was overall a very good portrayal of two different mornings.
Well done, Wolf-chan. I enjoyed Megumi's scene, and Minoru's scene made me want to cry. And when Aika started talking... I just wanted to sob. Putting that against Kiba's humorous antics, it was a brilliant setup of characters and mornings. Great work, Wolf-chan!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 11:54 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 2
Aww, it's so nice that Akira is thinking of others the entire time. His mom... his dad... his brother... his crush ;D
Ramen for breakfast? Gosh, Naruto, what are you doing to your family? Ah, I guess I should have seen it coming. I wonder how often they do eat ramen for breakfast...
Aww, Akira, he's so helpful and selfless. Always willing to do work... does he really feel like he has to pay his parents back for giving birth to him or something? Goodness...
Very good intro, theez! It actually really described Akira very well. I look forward to reading more about him and his... counterparts, I suppose the word is :P
Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 05:34 am · For: Misora Hatake
I can write the Chapter for my character, Drucilla. And with that, quick question:
My character's father is Itachi Uchiha. SPOILER: It is well known that Itachi dies later in shippuden, killed by Sasuke. Because, of this, does Itachi have to be dead in this fic, or shall he still be alive? Just wondering...
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 05:17 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 4
Aww, Naomi's really sweet. She seems like a very understanding person, especially with Konohamaru. I like that she paid respects to Hiruzen and her mom. That's a nice little input. As for the necklace, I wonder if we'll be seeing it anytime soon ;)
Nice character and intro, tigerseye! This was awesome.
@theez
Oh, I'm glad you liked my chapter. Yeah, I just realized that Megumi's morning was a bit (okay, a lot) more exciting than Minoru's was. I guess it makes for a nice contrast :D But thanks for reviewing it.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 05:08 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 3
Hmm... I just realized that I started with a happy setting and then went depressing... I can't believe I did that, that's such a mean way place it... then again, I guess it's a nice parallel...
Holy crap, I just realized how alike Megumi and Minoru are. Sheesh, I need to start becoming more original with characters.
Oh, well, since you asked about copying it to the site, I'll tell you it turned out fine. The spacing was a little off, but that could be partly might fault; I probably spaced it weird on Word and didn't even realize it... Oh well.
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 11/09/11 - 03:25 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 3
Silverwolf1213, I know it is your OC, but still, great! Megumi's morning was funny, while Minoru's was...........Well............Uh............Slightly despressing. Oh well! It was great! And thanks for your review! I wanted to set Akira's personality for this chapter. Thanks, and good job!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 10/09/11 - 05:34 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 2
Ooh, I never imagined Akira was that kind hearted. He's really innocent and sweet. Wow... I wonder what will happen when he meets Arika and Hoshi... yikes...
Well, nice job theez! This was a really good intro to Akira!
In case you care, Sasaui, I'm currently writing mine, so they should be coming... probably around midnight, knowing me :P
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 09/09/11 - 08:26 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 1
Hmm, how did I miss this? Yeesh, I'm dizzy...
I really thought the entire first scene was very cozy. Kakashi and Shizune make for an interesting married couple, I think. And they were pretty in character, so go you :D I think a little more depth could be given on Takashi, but that's really all the complaints I have.
The ending scene... well, I certainly want to know what is going on with that. I really look forward to uncovering the mystery of the Seken and their leader.
It was a very good first chapter, and I look forward to the other introductions. As Wolf-chan said, I cannot write my own character's intro. I wouldn't say that I don't believe in my writing abilities (thanks, Wolf-chan *insert eye roll*), I'm just sure it would come out awful. So if it's not too much trouble, I would appreciate it if you wrote mine out. Sorry if it's an inconvenience. If it is... make Wolf-chan do it ;) I'm kidding!... mostly...
But please keep up the good work with this story!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 09:02 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 1
awesome....!!
kool chapter....
n hey np bout da crush.... m glad tht u included kaz in tis story.... :D
anybody else will do....
eh.... u mean we hv 2 write the scene fr our own characters....? c_D really?? uh....
hmm....
anyways interesting beginning.... =)
lol at her spitting on kakashi's mask.... xDDD
Author's Response: Well, you don't have to. Krina asked if you wanted to. Anyway, is there anyone else you would want his crush to be? Anyway, I'm glad that you liked it. This is probably going to have a light beginning like the actual Naruto instead of all the crap I usually add in the beginning (and by crap, I mean the crappy, pain filled days I give them.)
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 04:26 am · For: The Seken
I feel the same as Silverwolf1213, if someone wants to join as a Seken, feel free to take her off.
Name: Aiko Akira.
Nickname: Akiro is Arika's name for her, because she has Akira's first name as her last.
Gender: Female.
Age: 11
Personality: Shy, Timid, and strong. She doesn't hang around many people, but watches Arika train, hoping to be like her someday.
Appearance (pictures accepted): [Disclaimer, not my picture.]http://kingdomhearts.wikia.com/index.php?title=Xion&image=Xion_Keyblade_Days-png Looks like that, but with a regular sword instead of a Keyblade.
Any open team.
Reason for fighting: To become strong.
Chakra Nature: Fire.
Fighting style: Uses sword to make people back away, and then strikes.
Kekkei Genkai: You can name this, but her sword is enveloped in fire and lava, and it kills, even if it doesn't really hurt the person. Because it's poison. There's a catch though: It uses all of her power.
Again, if someone decides to join, take her off!
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 05:59 pm · For: Misora Hatake
Also, I can give you a morning scene, if you want. I totally forgot, sorry!
Author's Response: OK. Just send it to me by email when you get it done.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 11:37 am · For: The Seken
Alright, here's your... seventh seken member, if I'm correct.
Name: Akuma Oonishi
Nickname: none
Gender: Male
Age: 14
Personality: He's quiet and keeps to himself. He's very awkward with others, so he just tries to keep from being social with anyone. When he's not using his powers, he feels lost and incomplete. However, when he is fighting, he is excited and more outgoing.
Appearance (pictures accepted): (this is not mine)
Team: 4
Reason for fighting: He only feels like his true self when he is fighting.
Chakra Nature: Earth
Fighting style: He likes to conceal himself in nature before jumping into a fight. It starts out sneaky and then turns full-on offense.
Kekkei Genkai: none
Hmm, I feel kind of bad for making so many characters. If someone else suddenly wants to join before you start writing the Seken members, please let them and take this guy away.
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 06:20 am · For: Misora Hatake
Alright, I'll give you Akira's crush. If it's alright, Naomi Yamanaka. Nice job, can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: Yeah, it's just fine. It will be interesting since she's crushing on Rainbow Fire's character. And no, that doesn't mean you have to change it. It'll be like Naruto, Sakura, and Sasuke. Naruto likes Sakura, but she likes Sasuke. I'm kinda interested to see how this'll play out.
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 06:08 am · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 1
Okay, PLEASE do not kill Akira! Wait, Madara is being killed, sorry. T_T or wait......Is Akira being killed? Oh well. Arika, is the opposite of Akira. Great intro here! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Wait, did I make it sound like he was going to be killed? If so, I'm SOOOO sorry. I'd never be able to kill him off. He's amazing. Well, now that you speak of it, I might just do it....... =D Yeah, I'd never do it. I'm mean, but I'm not that mean. Especially when the oc belongs to someone else.
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 08:25 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 1
Interesting beginning, I'm ok with writing an opening for Naomi, so if you still want those please tell me. Regarding crushes, is it ok if I keep the crush I put before? Looking forward to seeing how this turns out!
Author's Response: Yeah, it's perfectly fine to keep it the same. It was just now that there's more choices, I wanted to know if anyone from the beginning (like with Silverwolf and her first character) had decided who their crush would be. Anyway, about the chapter, just send it to me by email and I'll add it. Anyway, I'm glad that you liked it.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 07:47 pm · For: Episode 1: And So It Begins...... Part 1
Whoa! Awesome! I'm happy to see you've gotten this out!
I loved the family scene in this. It was very comfortable and sweet. Then of course, that last scene was pretty intense. It makes me worried to see what is in store for the plot.
About Krina's suggestion about writing the morning scenes... Well, it's not that I have a problem with writing it; I just don't have time. And I'll tell you now that Demon Fox is too lazy to write anything, and Rainbow Fire (friend of mine) doesn't believe in her writing abilities. Strange, since I think she gives such great advice... I might write mine though; however, I guarantee nothing...
But I really liked this chapter! It was pretty entertaining to see Misora's home life so far. Nice job, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm happy Krina did as well. How long she'll do it, however, is questionable. And I'm kinda happy to write one of these comfortable scenes. As for the intense part, I thought it was pretty creative. I started the idea, but then Krina made it that. As for you writing the chapter, just tell me so that I know for sure or not. Finally, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 09:04 am · For: Misora Hatake
name: kazuki sarutobi
nick name: kaz
gender:male
age:13
clan:sarutobi
village: leaf
personality: friendly,funny, carefree attitude, annoying, bt always prefers being with friends or in a group......
family: deceased father Asuma sr, mom kurenai, n elder brother Asuma jr who hs joined the ANBU....(actualy this character isn't possible.... bt cn u do a minor AU to fit him... or change Asuma jr's name....)
appearance: spiky black hair lik his dad's with a reddish tint... eyes like his mom's....
wears a black tank top, cargo pants n ninja shoes....
crush: misora......?
reason for fighting: he thinks of akira as a rival....so he tries to b btr than him...as well as prove his worth to his brother....
dream: join the ANBU someday... just lik his bro....
chakra: wind n lightening....
fighting style: he uses his father's chakra blades... more oftenly using wind chakra than lightening......
he even excels in genjutsu... his mom being his trainer....
kekkei genkai: none
hope m nt late... :/
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 02:42 am · For: The Seken
wow...o_O
urufu's gt quite a talent in making jounins....plz mke the team 2's jounin too... :P
k m making a sekken...
name: reymundo tadashi
nick name: rey
gender: male
age: 14
personality: grumpy, irritating, talkative, n loud......likes to gt on da bad side of people...
appearance: coal black hair, slits for eyes... which r fiery red... tanned skin, he hs wings like those of a dragon wrapped inside a cloak he wears.... the cloak is black with flames design ovr it..
team: 3
reason for fighting: he luv to fight... n he loves to watch others fight... he is often seen starting quarrels between others...
chakra nature: fire
fighting style: he cn fly bcoz of his wings...... he cn breathe fire... i mean lik a dragon.... he hs dragon abilities...
thts it.. tell me if uwnt me to change anything...
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/09/11 - 10:14 am · For: The Seken
Okay, let's see... I don't know too much about this Seken group, but I hope the character turns out alright.
Name: Aoi Kurokumo
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Age: 13
Personality: He's very quiet. He's not shy, he just enjoys being left alone. He usually only speaks when spoken to or when he wants to end a conversation.
Appearance (pictures accepted): (not mine)
Team: 3
Reason for fighting: To end all chaos for his leader
Chakra Nature: Lightning
Fighting style: He enjoys fighting, despite his quiet demeanor. He uses his speed to attack, and he's usually on offense, rather than defense.
Kekkei Genkai: Lightning Charge- It allows him to turn his body into a lightning bolt to either attack or travel to a faraway place to get there quickly.
Is this alright?
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 04/09/11 - 10:00 am · For: The Seken
Yay! More characters! Okay, I guess this is your... third Seken member, right?
Name: Ayumu Kagetori
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Age: 13
Personality: He's super creepy and sadistic. He's pretty bloodthirsty at most times, and he's extremely deadly.
Appearance (pictures accepted): (This is not mine)
I know that the picture isn't colored in, but I wanted him to be a shadow demon, so I think the gray and black is alright for his outfit colors. His hair is brown.
Team: 2
Reason for fighting: He wants to dominate over those who fear demons
Chakra Nature: Can I do Shadow? If not, then Earth.
Fighting style: He lurks in the shadows, usually wanting to strike when his enemy least expects it. He enjoys swift sneak attacks, rather than full fights.
Kekkei Genkai: none
I hope this guy turned out okay. Tell me if he didn't.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/11 - 09:42 am · For: The Seken
Okay, I'll make a Seken member too. I'm not sure how this will turn out, so please tell me if I mess up...
Name: Kimiko Ookami
Nickname: Kimi
Gender: Female
Age: 13
Personality: She's pretty quiet and relatively shy. She's afraid of others judging her. She is anit-social with people but she enjoys nature and its creatures.
Appearance (pictures accepted): (not my picture)
The girl is her in human form. The wolf is her in demon form. So that makes her a wolf demon.
Team: 2
Reason for fighting: To show that demons aren't monsters
Chakra Nature: Wind
Fighting style: Since she's a wolf demon, she can harness the powers of her wolf side. She attacks quickly and swiftly and then back away to stay away from counterattacks, similar to that of an actual wolf.
Kekkei Genkai: None
I hope I did alright with her. Please tell me if I did something wrong.
