Reviews For Welcome to the Family
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 06/02/12 - 07:47 pm · For: Chapter 3
Cool chap, but like I said, too detailled with less action. I like Rokariku the best and I liked the part where Kakashi told her that she "completely ignored Sakura" which was cool...
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and yeah, I liek to use a lot of detail when writing because those are the types of stories I enjoy reading. Feel free to skip to get to the action XD
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 06/02/12 - 07:13 pm · For: Chapter 1
Good story ^^ but a little bit too much text and detail can make a person skip para to get to the interesting parts. liked it. hee- alright, won't be one of the people who didn't review, now will I?
Name: Senjou (Anonymous) · Date: 30/01/12 - 01:25 am · For: Chapter 6
this story is so awesome~1 i cant wait for the next chapter~!!! >:3
Author's Response: 'Sank You!
Name: rocky-chick (Anonymous) · Date: 05/01/12 - 08:20 pm · For: Chapter 6
noooooooo!!!!! dont die Roka-chan that would be soooooo troublesome
Author's Response: LMAO thanks for the review!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/01/12 - 04:25 pm · For: Chapter 6
Beat for the last time?! You're killing her already?! What the heck?!
I didn't think this was terrible at all. I really enjoyed it. It was a great fight; repetitive, obviously, due to already knowing what happens with Haku. But your twist in the end there with Rokariku stopping Kakashi from killing Haku was brilliant. I really liked that scene, especially when she was ranting on them. It was just great.
Nice job on this! I especially can't wait for more now, what with that evil cliffhanger and all. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Yay! :D I was trying to do something out of Roka's character without being too OOC... That made sense in my head *sweatdrop* Thanks for your reviews :D They keep me going lol
Author's Response: Yay! :D I was trying to do something out of Roka's character without being too OOC... That made sense in my head *sweatdrop* Thanks for your reviews :D They keep me going lol
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/11/11 - 02:45 pm · For: Chapter 5
I really like this story, let me just say. Rokariku is quite an interesting character to read about. She's exceptionally smart, but she's not boring to read about; her intelligence doesn't make her an arrogant character to associate with. I like that about her. I know it's similar to Shikamaru, but the fact that she is a girl does help add an interesting spin to her personality. You have written the best of both sides, great job ;D
Meanwhile, I was trying to figure out the romance in this chapter, only to find that you haven't decided yet :P For now, I'm voting for Naruto, but I'm very fickle, so that might change later...
Anyway, excellent job on this chapter. I quite liked it, even if you think it went by slow. I flew threw this while reading, it was so interesting. Great job with this chapter, keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Yay! Your reviews always manage to make me smile and not want to smite Rokariku (she's a smartass) when she gets on my nerves. I can't even respond to the awesome compliment of character you gave me, so Ima just beam :D. rnrnEr, yeah *sweatdrop* ^.^''' I am so indecisive lol and like I said polls don't close until midway threw the Chuunin Exams (it'd be pretty bitchy of me to make you decide before she's even met Gaara haha)rnrnYay! I'll keep tryin' to do ya' proud :3
Name: Doppelganger10K (Signed) · Date: 03/08/11 - 01:54 pm · For: Chapter 4
OMG! WTF! is rokariku dead? if so than that kinda fills me with sadness because she/this story was so awesome! (p.s im pretty sure the way yore writing how shadow possesion jutsu works is wrong)
Author's Response: Haha, thank you XD. And really? How so?
Name: Doppelganger10K (Signed) · Date: 03/08/11 - 01:19 pm · For: Chapter 2
only 2 words can explain this; pure awesome
Author's Response: Only two words can explain what this review means to me: you kickass XD
Name: Doppelganger10K (Signed) · Date: 03/08/11 - 12:49 pm · For: Chapter 1
THIS. WAS. AMAZING. im kinda a action junky but even though this story dident have any of that i was still captivated! im totaly gunna read all the chapters!
Author's Response: OHMIGOSH Thank you for such a psyched review! XD
Name: kitsune2477 (Signed) · Date: 01/08/11 - 08:43 am · For: Chapter 4
Yay I really like this story it's totally worthy of more reviews!!!!! XD update again soon can't wait for more ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! ^^
Name: Cookie Krisp (Signed) · Date: 29/07/11 - 09:16 am · For: Chapter 4
I really like this story! Rokariku is definitely a very interesting character. I like the idea of Shikamaru having a twin sister. Her laziness is amusing. I like the way she contributes to Team seven. Sakura is supposed to have a brain, but she doesn't seem to be using it at all during the first part of the series. Rokariku fills in this gap though. I also like her interactions with the characters, especially with Shikamaru and Naruto. Her sibling moments are adorable with Shikamaru. I don't know who I think she should be with yet since I haven't seven seen her talk to Gaara or Haku yet. I'd really like for you to continue this story. I want to see where this is going. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! :D I'm out of town at the moment so the next update won't be until Sunday or Monday XD Thanks again!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 28/07/11 - 08:22 pm · For: Chapter 4
Wow, really good! I like how you add in Roka during these battles. And you're showing her awesome Nara calculating ability, which flows really well into the strategies. You really helped make these fight scenes original by adding in Roka, and her personality begins to surprise me, as I really like her.
Great job! Just a few spelling/grammar errors, nothing major :D
Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Yay! :D Success o(^.^)o Thanks a lot! You're reviews make me smile :D
Name: TeamWorkIsKey (Signed) · Date: 28/07/11 - 07:47 pm · For: Chapter 1
I really like this idea. I've never read a story where Shikamaru has a sibling. It's pretty refreshing and original. I like her name as well. It's interesting.
Oh, and don't worry I like the story as well. :) So far I think it's great. Good job.
As for your problem with a pairing for Rokariku for some reason my thoughts are pointing towards Gaara because everyone knows Shikamaru has something going on with Temari and I think it would be funny if they BOTH fell for a Sand Sibling. But that's just my opinion.
Otherwise I'd say Naruto because Shikamaru and Naruto get very close later on in the future, and I think it would be sweet if she ended up with Naruto who becomes one of her brothers closest friend.
But, I'm really on the offense about Haku because he ends up dying anyway... unless you change that.
Yeah, so this is the longest review I've given so far (feel honored lol). I'll end it with saying can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I do feel very honored, thank you! :D Nah, I'm rescuing Haku because his death just pisses me off. Hmm, it would be pretty funny if they both fell for the Sand Sibs haha. Thanks for your awesome review!
Name: Silvercatninja13 (Signed) · Date: 28/07/11 - 07:04 pm · For: Chapter 4
That was really good!! I really liked it. So let me get this straight, no SasukexOC pairings? Just trying to choose between Gaara, Naruto and Haku? Personally, I'm leaning away from Gaara...And I think I'm rooting for Haku. Naruto...well...is Naruto. Heheheh! :) Really great job though. You have my support!
Author's Response: Thanks :D And yeah no OcSasuke, that man has too many stories damnitt! Haha, thanks a lot for your review and your vote!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/07/11 - 12:03 pm · For: Chapter 3
Well, all that work paid off. Good job! :D
Once again, your character development really paid off. It's good to see more of who Roka really is, not just a female Shikamaru. Good work!
I loved the survival training scene and how it all played out. It all flowed extremely well.
Great job on the whole chapter. I still think a NaruXRoka pairing is starting to appear. But as you haven't introduced how she reacts to the other characters, I really can't tell.
Anyways, keep up the good work! Can't wait for more :D
Author's Response: Yay! You have no idea how happy this review made me :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 07:58 pm · For: Chapter 2
Wait... I'm confused at who you want as a pairing now. First you said you're stuck between Gaara, Haku and Naruto. Then you said no Naruto or Sasuke pairing. And then you said Gaara and Itachi?
Anyways, bravo! You showed us more of who Roka really is! Not quite like Shikamaru, as she actually has her own separate inner thoughts that help to differentiate her from her brother.
And I really liked how you continued to show her growing personality and blooming friendship with Naruto. It all went very well, I think.
Great job. I look forward to more!
Author's Response: Sorry! I'm confusing like that ^^ *sweatdrop* No Itachi because that would be, well, pedoish (I realized lol) and I decided that I have a different relationship in mind for Sasuke. So I'm torn between Gaara, Haku, and Naruto. I'm kind of leaning against Gaara though, simply because I want Shikamaru to end up with Temari. Ugh! Bah, me and my ranting XD sorry, sorry.rnrnYay! o(^.^)o Improvement! Hopefully you'll see more changes as her character develops.rnrnThanks for your review!
Name: Silvercatninja13 (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 04:37 pm · For: Chapter 2
It's really good and well written! I love how Rokariku is so much like Shikamaru, but is different at the same time. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 10:58 am · For: Chapter 1
Hmm... interesting...
It's really different to create an OC who is Shikamaru's twin sister. I find it slightly amusing. The scene where they woke up really caught my attention, just because it actually pretty funny. And the short family scene was pretty good, showing their kids' feelings and hinting at the parents' personalities.
But... once it got to the school, I found myself a little bored. Roka is exactly like Shikamaru, and I know that is what you were going for, but it sort of got a little boring hearing Roka think/say/do everything just like her brother.
I did like how Roka was looking through her classmates, thinking about who she would tolerate on her team and who she thought even had chances at being on her team. It was a good exchange and insight into the other characters.
And then you showed how Roka had her little exchange with Naruto on two occasions. When she told him how to steal the scroll, I was surprised, so it was an interesting twist.
Your writing is very good. It's nice and descriptive and flows very well. Your style is great; it's just the character I was a little concerned with. I just thought it would be good to make Roka not exactly like Shikamaru. Twins are rarely ever exactly the same, especially a boy/girl pair. A little more differentiation would be good, because otherwise, you've created a female replica of Shikamaru, which doesn't seem very productive.
But this story does seem interesting, and I'd like to see where you take it. Romance? Uh... I would say Naruto, just because I'm sure he would be very grateful that she gave him the light of day. But Sasuke, well, I feel like they already have that hate relationship blooming; it would be intersting to see a love/hate relationship :P So I'm not too sure.
But anyways, keep up the good work with this story. I look forward to seeing where this goes. There is originality here, and I like it. Just a little more character development, and this story will be even better :)
Author's Response: Wow, my first review and it's so descriptive O.O I think I love you! Haha :3rnrnI'm happy that you like the story! Sorry about the boring part *sweatdrop* rnrnI know you don't realy get a feel for her character in the first chapter, but I do hope you get a feel in the second and third! If not feel free to hit me across the face and tell me so :P rnrnThanks a lot for your review!