Reviews For The Life of Blood
Name: Neon151 (Signed) · Date: 12/11/07 - 08:55 pm · For: The new Ninja
I think this is the best work i did in many years.
Name: alwayssummerdays (Anonymous) · Date: 08/11/07 - 12:31 pm · For: A Tale Writen in Blood
Good that you got the new chapter up and that the spelling's good but you need to pace it out a bit. It moves very suddenly to different parts of the story without properly descring what's happening or hinting wih what's happening between the lines. You see it's hard to picture the scene when you leave a lot to the readers imagination. Sorry if this souns a bit negative it's just that I really think this story could be really good but you need to make it less of a chore to read through, but don't give up!looking forward to the new chapter!
Name: kibafan17 (Signed) · Date: 02/11/07 - 10:35 am · For: The new Ninja
Not bad by any means, I know that you have heard this already from the other two reviews but some punctuation needs to be included - The core of the story seems to be good and defiantly has potential, but if you don't break up the sentences a little more people will be put off.
If you find someone who can read through it and then help you put in commas, full stops, capital letters etc then you will definitely boost the story's potential.
The most important thing to remember is to keep trying! Punctuation isn't hard to understand really, all you need to do is ask for some help!
Kibafan17 =^.^=
Oh BTW - from your E-mail address I would guess that you are an outlaw star fan in which case you rock! XD
Author's Response: Thank you i appreciate the review and know that i do need more grammar lessons....but at least i am trying. Also I am an Outlaw Star fan just for the record. Well im not yet done with the story Im thinking of making a series of Kention And possibly some Paring storys as well. (wink* wink * nudge* nudge*) so all in all thanks for the review.
Name: Kashi (Anonymous) · Date: 01/11/07 - 07:57 pm · For: The new Ninja
Oh my gawd... Ouch. One big ouch. Honey, if you care about your fic and its characters and if you want the reviews you deserve as a writer, take your time to get your punctuation and capitalisation right, it makes it just too hard to read, thus potential readers, and reviewers aren't going to give it the time of day. Paragraphing is another big thing. Everytime a new person speaks start a new line.
Author's Response: i appreciate your review but however may i point out i did make sure everything was spelled correctly i ran it through spell check 3 times. I am trying my hardest and for future reference to all if you dont have anything nice to say dont say it at all.
Name: alwayssummerdays (Anonymous) · Date: 01/11/07 - 05:08 pm · For: The new Ninja
Very interesting and I'd definitely read the rest but the spelling and grammar and stuff is awful,it's very hard to read this.Keep up the effort though,can't wait for the next part!
Author's Response: thank you for the review....the spelling was correct however i made some spell checks on it....but still i should improve on that the grammar i know i need work on though but again thanks for the review.