Reviews For Little by Little
Name: ChicagoIsCalling7 (Signed) · Date: 15/01/10 - 03:56 pm · For: Chapter 1
I didn't actually read any chapters, I'm just reviewing to contact you, thought I could just email you... but I always do things more complicated than they need to be.
Anyway, I remember you said you got a bad review on this story so I just wanted to check it out. The review. I saw your response too.
I can't say the review was unwarrented because I haven't actually read a chapter yet, but I understand why you would feel that way. Writers in particular, especially fresh or new ones, will always be sensitive to reviews and criticism. When there's a bad one, it's hard to continue and find that inspiration. But don't forget it's not you, it's just the story - and idea that's going no where. Although from the other reviews it seems this fic accumulated quite a few fans.
But anyway, I'm glad you didn't quit on fanfics altogether. You're too good for that.
Funny thing is, in one of my reviews for By Your Side, I called the person who left a not-so-good review here an ass.... who turns out to Miki Everless.... but then I go on to praise her in my other review... heh, ironic, ain't it?
Anyway, I know this happened to you a while ago and you're probably over it, if not a bit healing from that bruise to your ego, but I wasn't there for you properly when it happened. I still wanted to say my piece though and let you know you're a fantastic fanfic writer, but again, not every idea is golden. So you move on to the next one, which is, by the way, gold with diamonds all around and maybe even a lining of silver!!! Yeah, I'm talkin bout By Your Side!
Anyway, lotsa love Sarahkins, keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Just read when you get the chance, mm'kay? And yeah, my hubris was a little bashed but I'm over it, ha ha. :)
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 09:16 pm · For: VERY IMPORTANT AUTHOR'S NOTE
NOOOOO!
Your story is really good, please continue!
I really like it!
Boy you've been having a bad day.
Sorry about you being rejected. Whoever rejected you is a jerk!
Please feel better, and WRITE MORE!!!
YOU ARE A TOTALLY AWESOME WRITER!!!
(cept for Yaoi an Yuri parts)
I hope this cheers you up!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, it did cheer me up. :) I will continue this story, I've decided.
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 09:17 am · For: VERY IMPORTANT AUTHOR'S NOTE
Ok, first of all, this story doesn't suck in any way. Ok, it's not perfect (but Firefly Tears wasn't perfect either). You are still young and developing your writing skills and I'd hate to see you quitting this story, because you think it isn't good or because you got a bad review.
Think of this as a learning experience. If you write "perfect stories" (which I don't believe exist at all), what can you possibly learn from them? You need to hold you chin up high! If someone doesn't like your story or says it suck - reread your text. Try to find out why they didnt like it - and then fix it! I know it's hard to write a story when you feel like no one is reading or reviewing it, but I think you shouldn't give up. :)
Author's Response: Okay, thanks for your advice, Ai-chan!!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 09:07 am · For: Devora
A prince! A different world! I didn't see this coming at all! :D But I'm really happy this was how thingst turned out to be! This is resfreshing! ^^ (And you surely now how to hook your readers by telling something in each chapter yet not telling everything. :D)
Author's Response: Ah, okay.. it's nice to hear that things are okay with this...
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 08:58 am · For: Hiding Something
Ok, now this was the chapter that got me confused a bit. Because Tenten didn't make any sense. You see, Shou has been very nice, just moved in to their home, made breakfast and then Tenten just has this sudden outburst. o_o Well, you can say that she has temperament, but still it came a bit out of nowhere. :D (I mean the part about schedules.)
Author's Response: Yeah, but he was teasing her, and it pissed her off. <-- (?? Not even sure...she's a weird character...)
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 08:49 am · For: Bike
Whaaaaat, orange-vodka-juice... FOR BREAKFAST? :D (Ok, actually, now I'm going to have a beer, because the vodka reminded me that there are still two cans in the refridgerator).
But Shou seems a bit too good to be true. :D But then again, you're going to be nice to the family you've just moved in. Well, at least I would.
How old do you have to be in US to get a motorcycle? o.o Because in Finland we have to be 21 to get one. (I know, because I want to get one!)
But still - I'm hooked and going to read more!
Author's Response: You have to have a license to get one is all. So, sixteen, I guess. Haven't you ever had orange juice-vodka for breakfast? You're crazy-- it's so good!!!!!! Shou only seems too good to be true, key word being seems. As I get deeper into his character, he's actually moody and mischievous and has an awful temper, and he is always frustrated with others and teases people mercilessly.
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 15/11/09 - 08:41 am · For: Shou-chan
There's this aura of mystery around Shou. And I want to know what it's about! Hahaa, onto the next chapter!
Author's Response: Yes, he is a mystery boy!
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 13/11/09 - 07:16 pm · For: VERY IMPORTANT AUTHOR'S NOTE
:(
I like this story very, very much.
Yes, Shou is a Edward-esque character and he's all perfect and everything, but I like him!
Even though I kinda hate Twilight and all of that perfect vampire crap!
I don't think it's disappointing!!!
The only thing I would be disappointed about is if you stopped writing!
Just because people tell you it's bad doesn't mean you have to be discouraged!
Plus, I bet that most of those people that dissed your story are a little hypocritical and have double standards in their own right!
I'm sorry that you were rejected. That sucks majorly.
Love,
TheArdisaur;]
Author's Response: I like Shou too. I kinda don't want to give this story up, but it's not working out. I'll just give it another shot. Maybe it will get better. And I hate Twilight too. I'm not Team Edward or Team Jacob-- I'm "Team Shut the Hell Up About Twilight", y'know?
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 13/11/09 - 03:22 pm · For: Devora
Really nice! Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks. Nice to know someone's giving it a chance.
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 13/11/09 - 06:38 am · For: Hiding Something
I'm sorry, Sarah, but I really don't like this. Especially from someone with your talent.
Tenten is a HUGE bitch. It's like she's going out of her way to say the most rude thing possible.
Shou just swallows her crap. He's a shallow character that I don't find likeable.
The dialogue seems very, very scripted. Borderline unbelieveable.
Firefly Tears and You Found Me were amazing; they blew me away. This story is amateur compared to them.
Every author has their bad shots; you're lucky that this is your only one so far. You're an amazing writer, Sarah. Continue writing.
Author's Response: ...Well, this ruined my already bad day. Thanks for that. I get home from school after receiving the brush off-- midsentence-- by the guy I like as I was telling him just that, I was already pretty depressed. But to get my hopes up when I see it's a review form you and then come crashing back down...? I holed up in my room for a while and cried for an hour. Next time, I'll try to write a story that's better, and thanks for your honesty. I wouldn't want you reading crap that wasn't any good. Please look out for my next story. That may be coming soon because a comment like that from my favorite reviewer pretty much made me never want to continue this story again.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 09/11/09 - 03:22 pm · For: Hiding Something
Great!!!!!!
This is getting SUPER DUPER good!!
Name: Crimson Lily (Signed) · Date: 05/11/09 - 07:48 am · For: Bike
nice. hm.....i still cant get over his perfectness....but, i guess i cant change anything, and i'll have to wait until, as you said, his "real" personality to come out.
anyway, like tenten, SO AMAZING! update soon!!!
sorry if im not being very supportive of Shou, its just that my biggest, BIGGEST peeve when i read anything after reading twilight. perfectness in characters = totally uncool!!!
and i feel even worse cuz i know that in some of my stories there are perfect characters, like Aiden (sorta) and i hate it!
:P
Author's Response: Look. Shou is going to develop a lot more as a character, and he's going to change a lot. This awesome perfection is a farce so that he can fit in a little. This story's going to get a lot better and a lot more intense, and the chapters will get longer, too. And I was going to say...Aiden is the definition of perfect, so you shouldn't be talking, ha ha ha ha ha!!! But I am going to turn things up-side down in a few chapters. Just you wait-- I've got more writing talent than people know, and my style has developed a lot since Firefly Tears. (Actually, I'm kind of scared of not living up to Firefly Tears...people went crazy over that. I know you don't like yaoi, though, but Firefly Tears focuses on a Het relationship and a very mild, closer to friendship "yaoi" on the side. You might like Firefly Tears.)
Name: Crimson Lily (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 - 07:41 pm · For: Shou-chan
ahhhh love it so far! haha your main character (its tenten, i just remembered. oh silly me...) is hilarious!!! :P
okay, before i go on a tangent on how fabulous this story is, let me point out some things I'd like to bring to your attention character wise.
1) Ok, i love Shou, cool guy (the glasses are SO AMAZING!), but she (Tenten) just met him what, an hour ago? she cant just meet him and then say "He was sweet and playful and had an easygoing nature." and " I wonder why I'd thought so poorly of him earlier-- he was actually a good person."
It just doesnt work like that. If you're going to say it, try to make it like "He SEEMED like he was pretty easygoing" and "He SEEMED like a good person" or something like that to say that she's still not COMPLETELY sure about him, cuz, like i said, she's only known him for an hour or so. And if he was nervous when he arrived, he cant just suddenly get all comfortable and preachy, in my opinion he'd still be extremely nervous and more reluctant to socialize.
okay, and finally 2) in the author notes...just dont, DON'T tell me what Shou is going to be like!!!!! PLEASE DONT! It ruins the expirience for me! I want to learn about Shou on my own, interpret him my own way! I mean, whatever floats your boat (it IS your story), but when i read that i automatically began to find myself looking for things that were wrong with him rather than seeing those good traits you listed.
Okay...im done. Sorry if im being harsh or mean, but i just had to get that off my chest! I LOVE THE STORY, dont doubt that for a second! And what i said, totally my opinion, dont feel like you have to change anything cuz of what i said! IT IS YOUR STORY, DO WHAT YOU WILL!!!
Yours Truly,
Crimson Lily
Author's Response: !!!!!! I couldn't believe how long this was. I was expecting something from, like, an reviewer I didn't know that said "Good. Keep updating." But this was like, "...WTF?! IT'S SO LONG!" But anyway, continuing on, thank you for all your advice on things-- I am still really inexperienced. Actually, I want to get this sort of feeling out there that Shou is just a sweet guy, so I had to make it seem instantly like he was the kindest person in the world. It's to make a lot of contrast for his real personality. And I'll try not to reveal a lot in the author notes! Sorry! But thanks for your review. I completely, totally, utterly love it!!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 - 04:01 pm · For: Shou-chan
Cool! Wow, quick update! :)
Author's Response: Thank you!! I love to update quickly.
Name: Ardisaur_rawr (Signed) · Date: 03/11/09 - 08:09 pm · For: Bike
LOL. That's awesome!
I like Shou already!
I know this will be just as good as the others!!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks. I'm trying to make Shou the kind of guy who will always surprise you-- he's all soft and sweet now, but later on, when he's really revealed for who he is, he's actually intense and prideful, unpredictable and extremely strong.
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 03/11/09 - 03:36 pm · For: Chapter 1
Wow, please update! :D
Really good job, by the way! My interest is piqued!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! Yeah, I just put chapter 2 up. Thank you so much for reading-- it's so nice to know that people are reading! I fell like this story won't nearly be as much of a success as Firefly Tears was, but I'm writing it because I think it will interest some people.
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 03/11/09 - 02:35 am · For: Chapter 1
Alright, you got me hooked. (So you are off to a great start!)
I really like Tenten's way of thinking. Because she really thinks like Tenten. :D At least I've always pictured her thinking like that.
But I do have few questions!
This story takes place at... US? And this century?
Author's Response: Story takes place in US (I can never remember Japan's schooling, etc.) and yes, it's in this time period. But thank you-- I didn't expect a review so quickly! And it's so short-- I can't believe how short this chapter was...oh well, my other chapters will probably be longer. But thank you for being the first reviewer!!