First, the advice. Like stories, poems should build up a vivid image for the reader to visualize; try working that in the next time you write a poem (if you'll write a poem, that is).

The rhyme is... getting there. Just keep trying. The only thing to remember is to not force a rhyme or trail off-topic just to carry the rhyme.

Consider the rhythm of your poem as well. It might not be easy at first, but practice makes perfect. Good luck!

Second, my reaction...

Heartbreak... there isn't much I can say about that. Other people might downplay what we feel, but it still hurts when we feel it. People shouldn't be dismissive of it.

Happy endings do come from the most unexpected of places. We might not have asked for them, but they make us happy either way. We might not want it at first, but then we realize how good it actually is, and how lucky we are.

Our feelings wax and wane as life goes on. We might feel some things that last for just a moment. But some feelings will persist through the highest peaks and lowest valleys of life.

You're really chivalrous, you know? Not that it's a bad thing... it's a great thing. But if you ever feel someday that it's not worth it being nice and all that, don't forget- being nice feels nice, too.

Scared of ruining everything, hmm? It might be just me, but I've found that risking everything to collapse and building things back up might be just as- if not much more- fun compared to trying to keep everything standing. You might want to give it a try sometime.

Man... that was a long review.

Anyhow, good work.