Sounds interesting. You should write more (if you have the general plot down already, that is... writing with no definite plot won't get too far, as I've unhappily found out before).

Tom Joad, eh? I remember Grapes of Wrath... Steinbeck is an awesome writer.

Also, I mean absolutely no offense, but I did catch some grammar mistakes and weakly phrased sentences. Maybe you could get someone to edit this a bit?

Overall, it's looking pretty nice. Cheers!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'll definitely work on writing more of it. I'll look back through, and catch those grammar mistakes and weak phrasing problems until I can find an editor. Thanks again, and cheers!