Name: Narshe Delvar (Anonymous) · Date: 04/10/07 - 02:27 pm · For: Chapter 1Mana's my first day at school

I find it kinda funny that I recognized most of them pictures. xD And can name a few from a game. =3 But enough of that, I like the character-sheet-like construction. Very descriptive, albeit, littered with many beginner's mistakes (constantly repeating the same words, don't worry, i do it myself every now and then) and a couple of spelling errors. That and it is very hard to read how the first Chapter is written. Space is needed between each character's saying. It makes it look so much better, and far easier to read. =3

Author's Response: thanks i will remember that