Reviews For the return
Name: aichilover (Signed) · Date: 27/04/08 - 05:10 am · For: Chapter 8
nice go on pleas :D
Author's Response: I will its just gonna take a while... my muse has deserted me TT. But i found a new muse after that and im still tring to find time to work.
Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 23/01/08 - 05:40 pm · For: sorry
congrats on ur girlfriend! keep up the great story!
Author's Response: I will but this story seems to have lost some of the luster from when i started most people have told me in a very round about way that my writing stinks so its harder to write.
Name: mattie (Anonymous) · Date: 23/11/07 - 04:25 pm · For: autours notes
naruto's sister should be funny, witty, and smart. very easygoing though, and nice. she should look like him too, but not be too pretty.
Author's Response: Believe me. How I write Narutos' sister she will fit that mold. But I will make it interesting to be sure of.
Name: Becca (Anonymous) · Date: 10/11/07 - 08:16 am · For: sorry
I really like your story so far, but I think you need to start capalizing some of your letters, like; I and proper names. It would be a little easier to read.
Author's Response: Ok I will its just sometimes I go through and type to fast.
Name: runescap21 (Signed) · Date: 17/10/07 - 04:52 pm · For: sorry
4TH HOKAGE!!@!!!!!
Author's Response: YOSH!!!! Your enthusiam enspires me to write. *strikes nice guy pose*
Name: i like bacon (Signed) · Date: 24/08/07 - 03:03 am · For: sorry
next chapter yeah
Author's Response: sorry working on it hard just not easy wroters block lol
Name: oblivionprince (Anonymous) · Date: 10/08/07 - 08:42 am · For: the setup
Last time you responded to my reply it say you would update soon, when i found out you put up this explanation about why you have not update I was upset
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-- narutoartlover : well taht was just tosay im not giving up. dude its just my life is hectic read my bio on the site and youll see what im talking about and if you want to talk more please email me instead of putting up a reveiw to answer a response to a reveiw
Name: oblivionprince (Anonymous) · Date: 08/08/07 - 08:43 am · For: the setup
I forgive you but just this once
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-- narutoartlover : huh what are you talking about dude
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:43 am · For: His father.
loved it
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-- narutoartlover : good youll like it even more in later chapters
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:43 am · For: sorry
i loved it
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-- narutoartlover : thanks
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:33 am · For: a surprising moment
i love it like all your chapters
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-- narutoartlover : ok thanks youve reveiwed every chapter so far
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:30 am · For: hes back
funny and sweet
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-- narutoartlover : thanks hina-chan
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:28 am · For: the return of some
nice dude i love it
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-- narutoartlover : thanks thats really nice
Name: hinachan (Anonymous) · Date: 07/08/07 - 09:10 am · For: the setup
i love it cant wait to finish
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-- narutoartlover : thanks
Name: ohyeah (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 - 05:03 pm · For: His father.
i think i read this and i forgot about it but are you going to update anytime soon its been like forever
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-- narutoartlover : i know ive been busy and im working on it what do you expect its summer im not going to stay in and work all day. XD
Name: oblivionprince (Anonymous) · Date: 28/07/07 - 01:17 pm · For: His father.
Yes I have thank you I like the idea of naruto & hinata geting together
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-- narutoartlover : ok well i enjoy writing it and your reveiws are insoiring me to update quickly
Name: oblivionprince (Anonymous) · Date: 28/07/07 - 11:53 am · For: His father.
this is a nice story & his father should be The 4th
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-- narutoartlover : thanks have you read the prequel to it yet if not read that first
Name: rasengan_welch (Signed) · Date: 26/06/07 - 04:13 pm · For: the setup
and i meant his dad
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-- narutoartlover : DUH
Name: rasengan_welch (Signed) · Date: 25/06/07 - 11:00 pm · For: His father.
it should be a sister.and who the hell else would naruto be? yondaime! of course....duh
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-- narutoartlover : yeah im going to do that no matter what the vote.
Name: hibiki96 (Anonymous) · Date: 25/06/07 - 10:49 am · For: His father.
Well, a nice chapter, but it needs more detail. I cast my vote (I don't have a clue on what you're talking about with Naruto's dad) he shouldn't have any brothers or sisters (I'm so mean)
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-- narutoartlover : you know what im talking about his dad.
Name: hibiki96 (Anonymous) · Date: 25/06/07 - 10:43 am · For: a surprising moment
Even tough there are a few too many songs, it's good.
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-- narutoartlover : thanks a lot. also who are you to lecture on songas. huh
Name: Dark_Busta (Signed) · Date: 25/06/07 - 10:41 am · For: His father.
i say let naruto have a smarter younger brother and his dad idk you decide
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-- narutoartlover : every whos up on the anime knows who narutos dad should be
Name: Wharehouse (Signed) · Date: 17/06/07 - 07:53 pm · For: a surprising moment
I like your story but your writing style leaves the impression of reading a bullet point presentation. Try and work on making everything a little more fluid and your story could easily be great. Don't think I'm trying to be mean with the critique,
Take a few paragraphs from any point and try to stretch it out with appropriate descriptions and emphasis. If you do you'll likely see the difference it makes.
Good luck and I look forward to your future chapters and stories.
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-- hibiki96 : Well, I have a strange writing style. I set a mood, give some need-to-know stuff then wrap up the paragraph, I found that for people who don't like reading alot that it keeps them interested, but I'll keep that inmind
Name: ohyeah (Signed) · Date: 14/06/07 - 06:23 pm · For: the setup
i remember it now and also can you check out my story its another naruxhina but its jst the beginning i no its short but im not continuing it until i get reviews...and a well find my rough draft which is the second chapter and like the most important moment it like The story its how naruto found out hinata loved him so check out the story does he love me and r&r and wish me luck finding the rough draft
p.s. update soon
p.s.s.all japaneese is correct
p.s.s.s.sorry for this benig so long
Author's Response: its cool also i cant update i havent exactly typed the rest up lol
Name: ohyeah (Signed) · Date: 14/06/07 - 06:15 pm · For: a surprising moment
i seems familliar and i read your other story i think i read this before but dont remember it and pleass update no offense but i dont really like eading through the songs but thats just me so continue doing that if you like
Author's Response: how does it seem familear. i will update but i use songs only for important stuff. so no more songs for a while.