Reviews For Alone Together
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 07/02/14 - 07:18 am · For: Chapter 9
Always love reading a good fight! I must commend you on writing out all those hands signs wow :)
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 05/02/14 - 05:47 pm · For: Chapter 8
I'm quite looking forward to what you're going to do with the zabuza fight, and am already stoked for the chunin exams.
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 04/02/14 - 07:30 am · For: Chapter 8
Great chapter. I like the dynamics of their team, they compliment each other. Can't wait for the Zabuza meeting!!
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 24/01/14 - 06:50 pm · For: Chapter 7
I'm torn. I like how you conformed as much as possible to the lines in the English dub, but at the same time I want to say Kumori isn't sakura, but I also like that you kept as much of the original. anyway, good chapter ^_^
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/14 - 10:40 am · For: Chapter 7
All caught up! look forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Hope your enjoying it.
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 08/01/14 - 04:51 pm · For: Chapter 6
ha! kyou's with sakura ^_^
sory this review came so late. you wouldn't believe how long it took me to get back into this account =_=
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 27/12/13 - 01:02 pm · For: Chapter 1
First off, I apologize because I feel like there is going to be way too much nitpicky-ness in this, some personal opinions though so I guess those aren't as important, but the only way to help you get better is to tell you. First off, I was confused by the time frame. It was Naruto's eighth birthday, right? If so why was Kumori eleven? The people in Naruto's class would be at his age or one year difference like a normal school. I don't think Kumori would hold back enough to fail to the point he's with Naruto and Sasuke. Also if this is when Naruto is eight, neither Ino or Sakura would act as they did. Sakura didn't even tell Ino about her feelings until a year or so into the Academy. This would occur sometime further along either way. She obviously admired Sasuke but neither she or Ino were at the fawning point yet. Also, the villagers feared Naruto. He was the Jinchuuriki of the Kyuubi. They didn't know about his powers and thought he could kill them. Maybe the two chuunin would attack Naruto for revenge believing they were strong enough to handle it, but a whole pack of villagers? Doubtful. As for Sasuke, I know he was praised, but I think you may have overdone it. That's a bit of the personal opinion. I'm also hesitant about the him wanting friends thing. If this is soon after the massacre - I was confused by the time frame, as I said - maybe, but farther along he'd be more closed off and cold. Also I don't think he'd just walk off from Kumori after yelling for someone to help him. Why say to help just to walk off and not do so himself? I know you did this so Sasuke would go home, but maybe something else could have happened? Like he went with Kumori to make sure he was okay then something else happened to catch his house on fire. I'm also questioning Kumori's lack of adoption. Naruto was feared for his power and Sasuke was probably already aware enough of the situation to avoid adoption or something seeing as he would try to prevent it even if the Hokage offered. Kumori, though, was just a baby when he was taken in. You'd think someone would take him and then give him back if he was as destructive as you make him sound. I'm so sorry for how critical and nitpicky I just was, but like I said, this is the only way I can help.
Despite all the above, I did really like this story and see a lot of potential for it. I'm excited to see how them having each other from the get go will effect everything. I have a story where Naruto and Sasuke both have someone, so I like seeing how others think it will turn out. I already know yours is different than mine based on the summary, which intrigues me even more. Kumori's own addition to the Naruto plot has me interested. Why is he so strong? Will that play a part? Is there some mystery behind him? I want to find out just who he is and what his life as a ninja will be like.
Nice chapter, Beisenman.
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 17/12/13 - 04:16 pm · For: Chapter 5
I like the way you handled it. interesting to bring Kyo into the ranks of genin, I'll just bet he and Kumori end up on the same team.
Author's Response: Kyo will play a prominant role later on, but he won't be on kumori's team.
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 15/12/13 - 06:16 pm · For: Chapter 4
I'm officialy naming this "The Title Chapter" idk, I feel like this is where the fic really takes off storywise.
Author's Response: Yup, theres going to be a time jump and the story will me fairly cannon minus some changes.
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 14/12/13 - 10:34 pm · For: Chapter 4
I'm really liking this. You know I kind of wondered about the Uchiha compound, I like your explanation *grin*
Author's Response: I figure that he will eventually return to it, just not at the moment.
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 13/12/13 - 06:44 pm · For: Chapter 3
you have a good sense of pacing, you're giving the characters time to develop realistically. This is really good writing.
Author's Response: Thanks I appreciate that. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 11/12/13 - 09:21 am · For: Chapter 2
oh man, this is going to be good ^_^
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 11/12/13 - 07:15 am · For: Chapter 2
Looking forward to see where this is going!
Name: Jang Wo Li (Signed) · Date: 10/12/13 - 01:09 pm · For: Chapter 1
this is interesting. I'd like to see what you do with this, I'm surprised this hasn't gotten more attention
Author's Response: thanks for your review, I have this story also posted on another site but i wanted to see how it would do here.