Reviews For Seeling the Hawk *Chapters have been reworked*
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/09/12 - 02:26 pm · For: Chapter 2 - Distract! Distract! Distract!
Yeah like Silver said, I liked the original better. Don't be too hard on your writing. You don't wanna be re-working all the chapters that aren't perfect you know? Just let it flow and come to you naturally. In the end I'll love it, I'm the least picky person when it comes to fan-fiction honestly. But yeah pretty solid again! Can't wait to see the newest update.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 21/09/12 - 11:09 pm · For: Chapter 2 - Distract! Distract! Distract!
I had personally seen nothing wrong with the original version. I had really liked it. This newer one actually seems to have more mistakes, if I remember correctly. You forgot a lot of words many of the time, which means you rushed this and didn't edit it slowly enough to notice that sometimes your sentences didn't make sense. Don't get me wrong, this was still a very good chapter and I really like the story so far, but this did have a few errors in it, something that needs to be proofread. Sorry for being so mean T_T I do hope to see more though. Keep up the good work.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 07/07/12 - 09:46 am · For: Chapter 1 - It's our Job, damn it!
Wow. I really like this. I'm angry I didn't read this earlier.
You're writing is amazing. You definitely have talent, I really like what I've seen so far. And I haven't even read the next chapter yet! The description and emotion and character elaboration you've put into this was amazing. I really like this so far. Now I must go read chapter two.
Author's Response: Sorry for the late response, thank you for your review. I decided to rework the chapters to try and add more fleshiness where ever possible. I definitely made Sakura out to where I want her to end up: fearless, mindful, knowledgeable, intelligent, and a honey badger (as in they don't give a fuck) :P
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 04/07/12 - 10:08 am · For: Chapter 1 - It's our Job, damn it!
Well hey, I gotta say I liked it. The writing style flows very well and you managed to keep Sakura in character. Though...I can't imagine Sasuke saying kitty...Or teasing like he was doing. Otherwise it was a nice chapter and I can't wait to read more. Oh and don't over-think the battle scenes. Just let them come to you naturally. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind review, Shizake Uchiha! And for popping my review cherry. ;P I really appreciate your kind words and constructive views about how I am characterizing the characters. I will definitely keep in mind about the dialogue and how Uchiha would speak (which I hope I fixed in chapter two). Have to say Uchiha is a bit difficult and Sakura is simply loads of fun. Thanks, again. C: