Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/02/12 - 05:55 pm · For: Chapter 66-71
Wow, what an awesome mission! All four of them did great! I wonder if Natsuro somehow lived though; I'm paranoid like that :P
Shizake and his family are all really sweet. It's just a whole big reunion when they're all together, and I really like that. It's such a nice picture.
Great job on this! I'll be back in a few more minutes with another review ;D
Author's Response: guess you will have to just keep reading :) But i finally wanted to give Shizake a quiet and peaceful setting with the whole Sakura/Naruto incident that happened beforehand. Did you think I did a good job with it? Thank you though!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/02/12 - 05:46 pm · For: Chapter 60-65
I can't believe I almost missed all these updates! What is wrong with me?!
Wow, anyway, I think it's really sweet that Hinata and Kuzake are getting to know each other. They'll make a sweet family wiht Shizake.
I figured Sasuke would still want to destroy the Leaf, I just hope Shizake can find some way to stop him...
Ooh, new mission! I wonder what will happen! It's exciting because I have two new chapters to read :D
Author's Response: haha well all I can tell you is you are in for a huge treat! not just with the mission but with Sasuke also :D
Name: Hazard (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 02:17 pm · For: Chapter 11-15
Really fun story to read! just keep writing away, can't wait to see more of this!
Author's Response: Thanks! There's a lot in store more for you to read :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 01:30 pm · For: Chapters 54-59
Crap. No next button =(. Oh well, as long as I know there will be a next button eventually, I'm fine.
That was a great fight scene. It would be pretty cool to see this acted out. Though for now all I can do is imagine it in my mind. Ahhh!!! Shizake proposed to Hinata. I loved that scene. And just out of curiosity, are they all still about 16.
Author's Response: Well as much as I hate to admit it I kinda hate the fact of them being in their 30's (due to the fact of them having sons) but this might seem weird but I want to keep the reader guessing their age because I love the spirit a 16-18 year old has.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 12:59 pm · For: Chapter 52-54
Sweet! Shizake and Naruto are going to kick Pein's butt. Those two together are too awesome not to. I loved this chapter, even if Sasuke is still siding with darkness *sigh* Oh well, it was still great. And you're doing amazingly well at adding Shizake to the plot. Overall well done!
Author's Response: Your in for a treat with this battle :) I want shizake to be as much of the plot as any character would be
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 12:53 pm · For: Chapter 51
Quick, Shizake! Grab Sasuke and run before Madara gets there!!!! If Sasuke and Shizake get there before Madara do (if this follows the manga and Madara does come), that would be awesome. This was a great scene, Shizake-san! I loved it and can't wait to read what happens next (which I can do since I'm behind =P).
Author's Response: Thank you sasaui :) I'm glad your a fan of my story
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 12:30 pm · For: Chapters 46-50
Okay, well, I've finally gotten back to this. Sorry it took so long. This was a great chapter. I'm really glad everything has been forgiven. And the Uchiha brother's fight plus Shizake? That's awesome!!
Author's Response: What did you think of Itachi still being alive? Regardless of what happened after. But sasuke I know I'm sorry I wanted to stay true to the story. Thank you though!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 11:48 am · For: Chapters 54-59
They won! Awesome! Wow, what a way to end the fight, that was amazing. I really enjoyed that action scene.
However, I liked the cutesy Shizake and Hinata scenes more. He proposed, I can't believe it! That's adorable :D And everything seems to be alright now, which is so nice to see.
Great job! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It brings relief to my heart sometimes to know that I did good. Sometimes I cant tell if I did good or not :p but thank you so much again
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 10:24 am · For: Chapter 52-54
Ah, a fight with Naruto and Shizake versus Pain. Awesome! This is so cool, it kinda sounds better than the original fight ;) Can't wait to read more, hope you update soon!
Oh, if you have 200 pages of this story saved, how many chapters would you say that is? I'm just curious to know how much of this story you have :P
Author's Response: So far I would say 70 maybe more. But thank you so much! I wasn't sure if I did a good job setting up the battle heh heh.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/12 - 10:13 am · For: Chapter 51
Wow, awesome fight! It was so intense. I kinda wanted to see what would happen if Shizake and Sasuke teamed up, but I guess it wasn't meant to be. Oh well. This was still cool anyway :)
Author's Response: Don't worry, this isn't the last we will see of sasuke. The bond remains between him and shizake. Thank you!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/12 - 09:34 pm · For: Chapters 46-50
Wow, this story is so intense. I'm very hooked. Your writing style is different, I've never read a script-like fic before, but it's very entertaining. I really enjoy this, nice job! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: thank you :) I'm truly glad that you like it
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/12 - 09:03 pm · For: Prolouge
I got chills reading this... The beginning was really eerie. And then just the whole tone of the speaker, it just made me feel sad for Shizake, even if there were a couple happy moments here. I just feel so bad, I can't help it... It does make me want to read more though, and I think I shall!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It really means so much to me that you said that. I wasnt sure if people werent going to like the story. I will add more for sure :) I already have a huge story about (200 pages) played out already so you have a good amount to read!
Name: Hazard (Signed) · Date: 24/02/12 - 05:59 pm · For: Chapter 1-3
A good idea, don't get me wrong but I have an issue with this story and it lies with the format. Not a dock on you as a writer or your creativity, its just its so widely spaced. fix that(or not I suppose)and you'll only hear good things from me.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice man, I really do want this to be good for the reader. I do appreciate it. I'll get right to it actually. Thanks though
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/02/12 - 01:40 pm · For: Chapters 41-45
Wait, is Shizake spying on the Akatsuki, because the end part sorta confused me to tell the truth. I really hope that's it. I don't want Shizake to be evil T_T.
Author's Response: Yeah pretty much he took on a mission on his own freewill as a way of proving his strength
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/02/12 - 01:35 pm · For: Chapters 36-40
Sheesh, those two really don't like each other. I hope Naruto and Shizake can make up sometime. And the end with Shizake protecting Sakura was so cute!!!
Author's Response: Did you think it was good to end the chapter in a flashback? But yeah I kinda enjoyed writing it, it's kinda a backstory to go on while the main stuff is still going on.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/02/12 - 05:26 pm · For: Chapters 28-35
Ahh. Itachi is dead? I mean, I know he's a bad guy, but I still love him. Once again I enjoy your jutsus. They are all nice and original. Great job, Shizake-San!!
Author's Response: i'll give you a hint because you've reviewed my chapters :) *ahem* Itachi didn't seem as if he was trying his hardest was he? thank you though :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/02/12 - 03:23 pm · For: Chapters 22-27
Another trip to the hospital? Sheesh, he just needs a full time pass or something. I love this, though. The entire idea is just amazing! Though I'm starting to wonder if we'll ever get a glimpse of Nitatachi's bijuu's power. A crane bijuu is definitely original, by the way.
Author's Response: I know right! haha. You will get a glimpse of his power later on (which that paticular scene i think you will enjoy) but I dont think it's for a while. Nitatchi hardly ever uses it because it's such a docile bijuu but he will use it later on. I guarantee it :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/02/12 - 03:15 pm · For: Chapter 16-21
Seriously? They're still fighting over Sasuke? That's just crazy. I can't believe them. Oh, and if you want to see anything about Sasaui, you can read about her in Tainted Guardian (a fanfic of mine here). Oh, and nice job with the Chidori Razor Spear. That was an interesting technique. Well, after Shizake going to the hospital so much, I guess it's only fair Nitatachi would go eventually, too. I hope he's alright, though.
Author's Response: haha yeah I thought it would offer up a bit of drama. And i did read about Sasaui and honestly I really enjoy her as a character! Thank you though :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/02/12 - 07:26 am · For: Chapter 11-15
I really like Shezji and Kuzake. I loved their training. It made me think of Naruto and Sasuke despite Kuzake being nothing like Sasuke despite their blood relation. I think it's cute to see the girls and guys together.
Author's Response: I wanted to make Shezji and Kuzake a bit different from their fathers, a little more opitimistic about everything but still that hard determination, they start to mature more later on though.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/02/12 - 07:15 am · For: Chapter 7-10
Yeah, poison kunais are quite annoying.... Anyway, I'm glad that Shizake is okay. He seriously just attracts trouble, doesn't he? Anyway, great chapter, Shizake-san!
Author's Response: heh heh, he does doesn't he?
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 22/02/12 - 06:44 pm · For: Chapter 4-6
I like your jutsus. You're very original with them. I can't wait to see what will happen with this upcoming mission. Great job, Shizake-san!
Author's Response: heh heh i'm glad you like it! I just write very straightforward and contemporary. You'll see some of my made up jutsu's later on in the story. It get's pretty intense in some parts (at least I think so). But this mission is over lol they just killed a few sound ninja's but dont worry there will be a lot more! and they will be way better and more in depth. Thank you though! :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 22/02/12 - 02:19 pm · For: Chapter 1-3
So far I really like Nitatachi. I was afraid Shizake was going to be in trouble there. But he's forgiven =D. I hope Shizake can prove his strength to himself before someone really gets hurt.
Author's Response: Thanks! This is the first time someone other than myself has read this story. I'm really glad people will finally get to view it, read it, and review it so I can make it better. After reading some of the stories on here i think im the only one who writes in a play format. As for Shizake...well your in for a good treat. Again thank you! I'll be posting chapters 3-6 in a couple of days. btw i didnt mean to write chapters 1-3 i meant 1-2