Reviews For San-Kagetsu ஐ [Discontinued]
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 25/09/11 - 09:09 am · For: San-Kagetsu 06
woah...
hearing frm apart a mile O_O :O
thats plain awesome...!!!!
hmm... hone into another's chakra... thats wt yoichi cn do...
kool :) though m nt sure wt tht means :3 xP
wonder wats sukoi's abilities r...
n wat more u hv in store... awesome writing... n awesome chapter...
hmm... the sparks cn b felt in 2 pairs...
hmm... maybe ino'l find a way in yoichi's heart through his stomach... xD
Author's Response: i know, she must be part cat or something. xD what i mean by honing in on ones charka is that hes able to sense someone chakra from afar, like the byakugan but instead of seeing he can feel and sense it. Im sure theres a justu name for it but i didnt feel like figuring it out... :p Oh! Its like Karins ability. :) haha, anyone can make yoichi do anything with food. Thanks for reviewing! :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/09/11 - 05:01 am · For: San-Kagetsu 06
Haha, foreshadowing. Sukoi plans on staying with Hinata for at least two months ;)
Those two scenes were so cute. Is that true about the pressure points thing? If it is, I need to start doing that or something, it looks like it works wonders :D Sukoi already seems really sweet with Hinata, he already seems to care about her. The couples are really sweet so far, though I can't wait to see some YoIno (haha, that is fun to say!).
Keep up the good work, Abegayle-hime!
Author's Response: isn't sukoi and hinata just adorable though? :) and about the pressure points thing, im not sure if it actually works but i got the information from ehow.com so it probably does. And i already have an idea of what im gonna do for yoino and of course its going to be silly. :) thanks for reading silvy! (thats your new nickname c:)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/09/11 - 06:48 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 05
Well, grass and leaf are both plants...... Anyway, this was amazing. For anyone who was mad at you for chapter 3, you are SO redeemed. This chapter was amazing. You did really great with all of them. I can't wait to see what you're going to do next. A lot of things can happen in 2 months and 22 days. I just hope Yoichi doesn't clean out Konoha's food supply.
*shakes head and sighed* Yoichi..... You know, I should give him some rice balls just to let me beat some sense into him. I mean, seriously? For rice balls, he gave up? Wow. Just wow.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/09/11 - 06:09 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 04
This was amazing. I'm really sorry I didn't review before. My brain's been scattered lately. I'm glad I finally got to it, though. Like Silverwolf, I also hope that the flowers mean they'll find their sensei. And I still hold this fear that they will find their sensei, just not, well....... Let's just say not in a good way. I really really REALLY hope I'm wrong, though. I won't know until then, though.
I was anxious when I saw that the Kokage said no, but then that awesome Michio-Sensei came in and saved the day. Great job, Michio!
I can't wait to see what will happen when they get to Konoha. It's bound to be an amazing way that they meet, though. I know it since you wrote it. You're stories are amazing, Abegayle-hime!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 22/09/11 - 10:30 am · For: San-Kagetsu 05
woah...
that ws kool...!!
u nailed shikamaru's personality perfectly..!! :D
n -sigh-
yoich... i mean seriously...?? -sweatdrop-
well, keep up the good work...!! :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/09/11 - 03:15 am · For: San-Kagetsu 05
*facepalm* I can't believe Yoichi sold himself out for some rice balls... I seriously laughed though when I read that part, it really lightened up the mood.
Yay, they have finally met the Konoha people! Oh my goodness, I'm so excited to see what will happen once they're in the Leaf Village. This is so exciting now, I'm all in suspense and whatnot.
Nice job, Abegayle-hime, keep up the awesome work! Two updates in two days, you're amazing! Thank you for posting!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 21/09/11 - 03:16 am · For: San-Kagetsu 04
Oh, I hope that means the flowers are a sign that shows they'll find their sensei soon...
Aww, the reunion with Michio was so nostalgic, if only things were simple like the Academy days... then again, there would be no story ;)
But it's great to know that the village is healing! That's so great to know, I was so worried the cluster of tents represented someone else, and that Kusa was dead or something....
Well anyways, great chapter! You did really well with this one. Keep up the awesome work!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 20/09/11 - 11:17 pm · For: Character Profiles & Intro
LOL xP
nah... his da bettr part of iruka... :P
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 20/09/11 - 09:08 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 04
kokage... hmm... yh nice idea...
hehe... seemed like a nice reunion... like team 7 n iruka...
michio seems so much like him(iruka)
hmm... the village is healing :D
n they're finally off on their mission... towards the borders of konoha if mnt wrong....
Author's Response: I did base him off of Iruka, but hopefully he doesn't seem as strict as Iruka is. :P Shh, they're not supposed to know that they're heading to Konoha. xD
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 01:49 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 03
Wow. That was just plain amazing. I loved it, Abegayle-chan! I absolutely loved it. I can't believe just how amazing this story is becoming. You keep us in complete suspense with the whole village-thing. I can't wait to see what will happen next. And I"m really worried about their sensei. I mean, I believe they'll find them, but what I want to know in what kinda condition he'll be in.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 02:04 am · For: San-Kagetsu 03
Woah...
people living in tents... that means that is a massive destruction... :(
hmm... cnt wait to see wat dey do nxt...
keep up da great job..!! :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/09/11 - 05:43 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 03
Short, but still suspenseful as always. It's reallly heartbreaking to hear what happened to their village. I sure hope they find help soon, or else their ninety days will be up O_O
Nice job, even if it was short. I do hope the next update has more ;) Haha, just kidding, I love whatever you post. Keep up the awesome work!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 16/09/11 - 01:57 am · For: Character Profiles & Intro
gav da poll...
Author's Response: thanks! (:
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 09:52 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 02
:)
it ws a nice chapter...
it showed the aftreffects of war.... :(
i lol'd at *food, shelter....food* xDDD
hehe... he's starting 2 bcm 1 of my favourites too... xD
n oh i tried giving da poll... bt it seems it ain't working via mobile net... I'll try l8tr frm a pc....
Name: Rezzalia (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 07:18 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 02
CLIFFHANGER! :D
Great, amazing, wonderful job! I really love this story!
Something constructive, though: it's a little dialogue heavy. D: Don't get me wrong, the conversations are very interesting and emotion-filled, but try adding a little more detail to what the scenery looks like or how the characters are truly feeling inside.
I hope that helps! ^^
Author's Response: It does! I always wonder if I have enough details in my stories. Thank you. (:
Name: Rezzalia (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 07:12 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 01
This chapter was sweet. :'] I like how they think of themselves as a family instead of a team.
Name: Rezzalia (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 07:08 pm · For: Character Profiles & Intro
I already love all the characters. :D Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! It actually takes me a few days to come with character details, even though I never put up all of the details in a post. I guess it's just a pet peeve of mine, but before I start writing a story, I always come up with a storyline, characters, and at least 3 possible endings.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 04:31 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 02
First off, this reminds me of what I'm going to do for one of my stories. Guess great minds think alike, huh? Oh, and for the poll thing, I did: 5, Definitely, and Yes!.
Now for the awesomeness that is your story. It's just amazing. Out of this world Phenomenal even. Just everything about it is great. Your characters are so amazing and original. Your plot is awesome. It keeps making me want to know how things will progress through the days, how they'll find themselves in Konoha, what will become of their sensei. Oh darn! I need answers! Please write more soon, please.
P.S I'm still sooooo sorry about At the Same Sky. I still need to finish reading it *sigh*. Stupid busy schedule.
Author's Response: Woot! :D Aww, thank you so much. (: I definitely will! I actually have a great idea for the next few chapters, they should be up soon too. :D P.S.S Pleaaasae don't worry about it! Take all the time you need. (:
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 04:17 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 02
I think that's a great place to end it anyway. Well, great in the sense that it's a cliffhanger. What I don't think is great is the fact that their home is destroyed :( That's so depressing...
I still love Yoichi, he's just so funny XD I also like Sukoi; he's a great contrast to his teammate. And Nanami is as sweet as anything. You have yourself a nice group of characters here. Good job! Keep up the awesome work. Now I'm off to do your quiz :D
Author's Response: I know! I felt like changing it, but it's sort of needed for the story. :( But not to worry! Like every other village, it'll be build back up. :D Haha, I can't help but love him. I actually based him off of one of my good friends, then Sukoi is more like my older brother, then Nanami is like another one of my close friends. Thank you! c:
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 02:23 am · For: Character Profiles & Intro
cute* :P
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 01:31 am · For: San-Kagetsu 01
haha... wow , the ending was cut...
bt oh.. they lost their sensei... :(
so thats wat it means... so the three months start...
so yer counting in da backwards direction...? i thought it ws a scene from the last day... :P
n bout the que...
yh... maybe 3 days after chapter will b fine... depending on da size of da stuff happening each day... if big u cn shw 2 like this on.. or oly 1 if its bigger... somethin like tht maybe...
anyways awesome chappie...
cnt wait to see wt happens nxt...
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 06:14 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 01
Wow. Gosh, I truly don't know what to say. That was amazing. Purely breath taking. You really had me worried at the beginning that Nanami would be hurt. And then you added Yoichi's hunger again. Even though you said he'd be with Hinata, I keep on seeing Ino chastising him about the food thing like she did Chouji. And don't change them if you want it to be the pairing Silverwolf said. I was just giving my opinion.
As for the ending, I loved it. Despite how awesome everything else was, this part was my favorite. The bracelet thing was nice, and then you threw in the family thing. It has me hooked to it and I love how it shows their bond with their Sensei. I hope Nanami is right and it is a sign they'll find them. I just hope that when they do, he's alive. Plus I loved it being Sukoi's treat. That was just hilarious. Overall it was an amazing chapter. I love your story, Abegayle!
Author's Response: Oh my gosh. You're definitely giving me more praise than I deserve. ._. To be honest, I'm never satisfied with my work, I always feel like it's not enough or that it doesn't flow correctly. But whenever I read reviews like yours, it only inspires me to write more. :3 Thank you so much. (: I'm actually thinking about switching up the pairings a bit, I feel like when I thought about the original ones, I just randomly threw them together (and based Yoichi x Hinata off of Naruto x Hinata xD). I feel like I should have some reasoning behind the pairings I decide. The ending was my favorite part to write! I based the bracelet thing off of a set of bracelet that my dad and I have, so i guess it was a little easier for me to write about. Did you notice the flower reference? I promised myself I wouldn't have any kind of significance to flowers in this story, since At the Same Sky was basically based off of them, but I guess I'm not going to keep that promise. xD Thank yoooooou!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 05:45 pm · For: San-Kagetsu 01
Aww, that last scene was so adorable. Just like a family... That's so sweet! Heehee, I love how Yoichi is always hungry XD
Gosh... Less than three months now... I hope they do find him.
Oh, well, I think it is a good to skip a few days. I don't think grouping them in any particular way is important. You could honestly skip one day and then skip five the next. Whatever helps the story move.
Nice chapter though! I'm really excited to see where this goes now that the plot has been established. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you! Haha, I do too. I can already tell that he's going to be my favorite oc so far. :D Maybe they will, maybe they won't? :o That's what I was thinking, but I was worried that it would feel like the story was missing some parts, but I guess it would make a little more sense skipping some unimportant days. Thanks again! c:
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 05:18 am · For: Character Profiles & Intro
well...
the pairing... coz basically... u put them in order... :P
othr than tht... yoichi looks like w pretty... um eh.. innocent personality... lik hinata...
n the othr tw...
Author's Response: Yeah, I just sort of noticed it. xD
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 05:12 am · For: Character Profiles & Intro
wow......
tht ws a pretty neat intro...:D
only personality...? so their abilitiss remain a suspense fr now... :)
hmm... nanami n shikamaru...
yoichi n hinata...
sukoi n ino...
lol... i guess
cnt wait to see wt happens next...
Author's Response: Thanks! (: That's right! :D