Reviews For Even If You Knew What Would You Do
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 10:27 pm · For: Finally Some Excitement
Again this didn't feel up to your former standards, but (now that I'm finished reading) if I were to give you a general piece of advice it would be to work on both your attention detail and the (now) writing quality. Occasionally you produce scenes that really feel a bit stinted and in need of fleshing out, but otherwise your storytelling style is very humourous and highly engaging. This was actually a really fun read, so thank you for taking the time to write and upload it for us. I look forward to future installments.
Author's Response: Thank you for all the reviews and I do feel the same way as you do about it being a bit rushed. I think before I upload another chapter I am going to go over the first three and see if I can't make it a little better. Also, thanks for being honest, constructive criticism does not bother me at all. Actually I welcome it with open arms. ;) I hope you keep reading and thanks again.
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 10:17 pm · For: Strange Fascinating Creatures
That was ... good, I guess, but felt really rushed and as a whole fell well below your former quality, which is a rather disappointing. =0( I know you can do so much better.
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 10:07 pm · For: Prologue
Yes, yes, yes... fine. Chuunin exam. Woop de doo. You still haven't explained why Kakashi didn't come to see Naruto for two whole weeks. I mean, that was seriously odd for the start of a relationship when he was so 'obsessive' before...
Moving on: Gaara! Yay! I love Gaara! Oh... and you didn't indicate the thoughts with anything at all in this, which made them difficult to pick out from the normal text and therefore a tad confusing...