Reviews For Drawn Together
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 12:39 am · For: Siblings and Bullies
lolol..!!!
they look mre lke siblings than lovers....
n kool Ezra's mom :D
lol hikari ain't Ezra's mom anymore...... :P
Author's Response: Haha, I just wanted to make certain that they wouldn't be in a relationship. And yes, Hikari isn't Ezra's mom any longer.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 02/09/11 - 03:07 pm · For: Siblings and Bullies
Technically it would be wrong seeing as she would be considered his second cousin (she's Tsunade's great niece and from the way this sounds, Ezra is her nephew. Unless, of course, I'm wrong). As for liking it, yes, I very much did. You did perfect with Hikari and I loved how they bonded like that. It's just so amazing. Oh, and sorry for not reviewing the Naruto Gx: Light Saga (did I get the name right?) fanfic. I've been pretty busy lately with school and my own fanfictions. This was amazing, though. The introduction had me hooked, and then you left it at that cliffhanger. I can't wait to see what will happen. I am in love with all your stories. You just make the ocs your own and do so much with them and your own oc. I can't wait for the next update! As for the ice cream thing, was that inspired by the Roxas/HPO/Axel and Xion ice cream thing or is it just a coincidence you like KH and had that?
Author's Response: Yes, Tsunade is Ezra's aunt. And you kinda missed something on the title: Naruto GX: The Society of Light Saga. Oh well. Oh yeah, and the Ice Cream thing was inspired by Axel, Xion [can you please tell me how to pronounce her name, it's really confusing.] and Roxas. Kingdom Hearts is AWESOME!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 02/09/11 - 07:29 am · For: Siblings and Bullies
Whoa... Interesting stuff about Ezra's mysterious family. So... That would make Ezra... Tsunade's nephew, correct? If that's right... Why isn't she nicer to him?!
Great intro to Hikari! After reading her submission, I think she was perfect. I think it was very sweet that Ezra was so kind to her.
Awesome job with this chapter! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: You'll find out. Haha, I'm glad you liked it! Now I have to go and write another chapter. Thanks!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 25/08/11 - 09:39 pm · For: The Date
lol tht ws cute....
N nice....
Cnt wait 4 da nxt chappie.....
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/08/11 - 07:54 pm · For: The Date
AWWWW! This was so cute! I'm so happy that Hinata and Ezra had a nice time.
Hmm, I'm beginning to notice that you REALLY don't like Hiashi. And here I thought he would be a decent man. He's just as manipulative as you always write him ;)
Wow, I can't wait to see how Ezra and Hinata continue on with being together. Nice job on this chapter, can't wait for more! Keep up the awesome work!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/08/11 - 06:22 pm · For: The Date
At first I was like, Ah, Hiashi is actually nice and fatherly In this one! And then I read the end of that paragraph........ At least in this one he isn't being hurt by Hiashi all the time. This was a great story. I loved the star gazing thing. The end with Hinata and Ezra was cute, and I'm glad he has eaten and will eat tomorrow. I can't wait for the next update!!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 08:49 pm · For: Ezra's Confession.
wahahaaa...
cool! so he cn read thoughts or something...?
lol riku.. xD he actually slapped ezra...? :P
awesome chaptrr...
Author's Response: Thanks!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 02:12 pm · For: Ezra's Confession.
Wow. These characters were just plain awesome. Then again, this whole chapter was just plain awesome. I can't wait to read more of it. I hope that you write more of this story again soon, because it's just plain amazing. And this is just a guess, but can Ezra look into people's hearts, because that would both explain his last name and what he does.
Author's Response: I can't tell you anything, since that would Ruin it for you.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 11:44 am · For: Ezra's Confession.
What?! He hasn't eaten for a month?! (Any normal person would seriously be dead) But still?! Don't these restaurants have any kind of sympathy for him?! Some people, gosh! I'll never understand them....
Great intro to Akemi and Riku. You got her personality just right, and Riku was hilarious. I laughed when he called Hinata pretty.
Aww, Ezra totally stole Yoru's idea of star gazing, but at least it will hopefully make for a romantic and cute date XD
Great work with this chapter. It's sad to see Ezra's pain, but at least the EzraXHina theme is moving along now! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Haha! Yeah, but he isn't normal.rnrnThank you! I'm glad I got her personality right! And Riku was hilarious, I'm glad you liked that!rnrnHaha, Ezra did, but you're right! I hope the date makes up for it, Thanks!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 21/08/11 - 03:50 pm · For: Ezra Kokoro's Profile
Hey, can my oc for Next Generation be Akira's adopted brother?
Author's Response: Yup, sure! Love the idea!
Name: Starless__Night (Signed) · Date: 20/08/11 - 11:23 am · For: Join!
I guess my character fits 4, but if he doesn't tell me.
Name: Yoru Saito
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Here's the link if it doesn't show:
http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/294/6/5/kaguya_dimitria___by_gunjester-d317pu0.jpg
Family: All dead, and he stays with Sakura and her family because they adopted him. His parents knew them, so they were his godparents. Does that count as him knowing them very well?
Romance: Whoever
Past: His parents were killed during the war when all the other Kaguya died, and since he was left behind, he went to find Sakura's parents who he knew were his godparents. Many people feared him because of his bone kekkei genkai. He, like Naruto, struggled and wasn't the strongest of people.
Personality: He's calm no matter what the situation. Sometime his calmness annoys people, though. He enjoys being in quiet places, and he rarely talks unless he knows someone really well. He can be a really good friend to have, though, and will protect your back no matter what. He has quite a temper, but if you're close to him, he'll do his best not to get too angry. The temper is caused by so many fearing him because of his kekkei genkai. Due to this, he tries to be a hero and rid people of that fear. He loves animals and especially loves Cerberus (three headed demon dog pet). Because of this, he gets along well with Inuzukas.
How they are introduced: He enjoys gazing at the stars at night with Cerberus, so maybe Ezra can come across him and fight him or something. Or maybe Yoru knows him from a past event or something. Sorry, but I really can't think of anything else......
Fighting Abilities: He relies on his kekkei genkai a bit much, preferring to use his special ability (He can fracture ones entire bone with a simply touch if he adds chakra to his fingers and touching the bone). He tries to keep his distance and then strike when he sees an opening.
Kekkei Genkai: the bone kekkei genkai
Author's Response: Cool! A Bone Kekkei Genkai? Awesome!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 09:01 pm · For: Sasuke's Friends!
lolz
it ws kool....!!!
but.....i Kinda got confused......
wat part ws flashback n wat was goin on..?
n aww....ezra n hinata'l make a cute couple... :D
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 08:58 pm · For: Sasuke's Friends!
Man, why does Hinata always end up getting hurt? I can't wait until the Ezra/Hinata thing happens so that she won't be in pain anymore. I love this story and I really can't wait to see where it's going. I can't wait to read more of your amazing story, Theez.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 08:40 pm · For: Join!
*Face palm* Oh, that's just bull crap! I guess that means the site doesn't like my picture. T_T What a mean site!
Anyway, here's the link:
http://a1.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash4/254709_238760106158574_100000737605128_796453_2519723_n.jpg
Now here's the rest.
Family: Her father is Tsunade's nephew, but he dies from a disease. Her mom's name is Sakurako, her sister (22) is Tsubame, and Yosuke is her brother (19)
Romance: It doesn't matter.
Past: Her sister ran away when she was 17 because she was tired of living like they were, just barely holding on. Her mother works three jobs just to keep her son and daughter fed. Her brother can only do small jobs because he was paralyzed recently due to a mission. Hikari does everything she can, doing every mission no matter how hard, just to help get money. She's often bullied because her father was believed to be a murderer. She doesn't let her brother or mother know because she doesn't want to worsen their lives.
Personality: She's very kind and gentle, and she does everything she can to protect people from bullies because she knows what it's like. She even protects them from physical pain because she also knows it, being hurt from the bullies. So basically she protects people from what she always feels. She's usually nice unless you insult or hurt someone she cares about, especially if they're her family.
How they are introduced: I thought since she's always bullied, maybe Ezra could find her while she's being bullied or after she's been bullied. Then she either saves them from the bullies or helps comfort her from the mental pain.
Fighting Style: She goes far past her limits to protect the people she cares about. She won't even feel pain if she's protecting people. She is well balanced when it comes to fighting, using a fair amount of tai- and ninjutsu. Her chakra natures are earth and water.
Kekkei Genkai: Wood if you want.
Author's Response: Thank you! Alright.................Nice Character!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 08:09 pm · For: Join!
I guess option 3.
Name: Hikari Zenjin
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Appearance: (this actually does belong to me =P. As for the eyes, in this fanfic, they're both green and she doesn't have the Uchiha crest. Sorry about the blurriness)
Author's Response: Uh............This isn't complete, and there isn't a picture. Is there a reason for that?
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 07:41 pm · For: The Meeting! Kurenai's Dark Vendetta!
Wow. Just wow. This was so amazing/sad. Amazing because of how cool this chapter was. Sad becasue of what happened to Ezra. And yeah, I know, he's an Uchiha in the other story. I just wasn't thinking of it when I did it. I was thinking of him from Naruto GX. Either way I want to send in Sasaui to kick the crap o fevery single oen of them. I'm so glad there's more updates so I can read on =D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 04:17 pm · For: Sasuke's Friends!
Gosh, first Ezra and then Hinata? You just love breaking hearts, don't you? But at least Hinata knows that Ezra cares...right?
Well, great work! Sad, but I'm waiting for things to get better for everyone! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: No, I love healing hearts, but tO do that, I have to break a heart.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 12:00 pm · For: Join!
wahoo...!!! another joint story... :D
he cn b minato's n kushina's friend....
name: Kazuki ushiro... :P as always
age: older than kurenai xD
gender: Male
appearance: blonde spikes, green eyes, black tank top, cargo pants, ninja shoes, yellow locket....
family: his parents...... who r pretty old by now... they stay in the kiri village...
romance: kurenai...... (woops she hs a kid... but if u cn manage...... :P)
past: he used to live in the kiri(mist) village with his parents wen he ws a kid... bt wen he ws around 16, he got bored of the village... n left oldern a journey.... in the leaf village, he met up with minato... n they bcame good friends...
hw introduced: he is a jounin.... plus he is very fast... so u cn introduce him like saving ezra from falling or something like that...
fighting abilities: very quick due 2 wind chakra
kekkei genkai: wind release...
personality: fun-loving, h:Pppy-go-lucky, friendly, n flirty......y
Author's Response: Welp it is Kazuki. Yeah! Alright, you're in!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 11:41 am · For: Join!
Yay, another joint story! Oh, by the way, if you want people to include personality, place that in the template so they remember ;)
Name: Akemi Takahashi
Age: Uh... however old Hinata and her teammates are, so around 16 maybe, right?
Gender: Female
Appearance: (not my picture)
I guess this makes her the sword wielder.
Family: She has no parents, but she has a brother named Riku, who is twelve.
Romance [Cannot be Hinata, Naruto, Ezra, or Sakura]: Kiba (haha, if you really knew me, you would have seen this one coming)
Past: Her parents died on a mission when she was ten. Since then, she's been taking care of her younger brother while also managing her job and other things.
How they are introduced [as in, how would you like them put into the story? Attack's Ezra? Help's him? Thing's like that.]: Make her like a sisterly figure to Ezra. Since she's spent so much time with her brother, she's very caring towards others, so she can help him become more confident.
Personality: As I said, she's very caring because she has helped her little brother for so many years. She's very cautious only because she's afraid of her close friends and brother getting hurt. But she'll do anything, even put her life on the line, to protect those who are close to her.
Fighting abilities: She uses the sword almost always in battle. She's decent at taijutsu.
Kekkei Genkai: Her bloodline is wind-release. She only knows a few jutsu with wind style, but she usually uses her wind chakra to make her sword stronger, sharper, etc.
I hope this was a decent submission. Please tell me if I need to change anything. Good luck!
Author's Response: Actually, I read your bio, so I did see that coming! Haha, you're in!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 11:41 am · For: The Meeting! Kurenai's Dark Vendetta!
aww... poor guy...
well... m a kurenai fan....n such a behavior seems strange... bt nice story u made there bout her grandparents... :D
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 11:32 am · For: Introduction!
hmm...
nice.. lol poor Ezra...he is lik a duplicate of lil hinata...
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 10:43 am · For: The Meeting! Kurenai's Dark Vendetta!
X( POOR EZRA! It's so sad! Well, what happened to Kurenai is sad too, but poor Ezra is always getting blamed. I hope his new team makes him feel better.
Great work on this chapter! It was so interesting to see that Kurenai doesn't have such a great first impression of him; I hope she lets go of her vendetta soon.
Keep up the great work with this story!
Author's Response: Haha, I have to make you feel this way in the story! But yes, POOR EZRA! Haha! Thanks!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 14/08/11 - 05:00 pm · For: Introduction!
Is it just me, or does that innocence make Ezra the kind of person you just want to protect? It makes me want to send in Sasaui to kick Kinomaru's butt. After all, she is Sasuke's sister, and Ezra is his brothers, so...... This was a great introduction. I can't wait to see how Ezra is going to effect team 8. I hope they befriend him soon. Seeing him all depressed and stuff sucks. It's as bad as someone kicking a dog just for fun. Terrible people *sigh in exasperation*.
Author's Response: *falls over* Waah! Ow. So, Ezra has ANOTHER sister?! Oh well...........Wait, that's the AU Ezra in Naruto GX. This Ezra isn't an Uchiha. But you can still kick Kinomaru's butt.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/08/11 - 11:59 am · For: Introduction!
Interesting introduction. Poor Ezra seems so innocent, I feel bad for him :(
Oh man, I can't wait to see how Ezra does with Team 8! That sounds exciting! Keep up the awesome work, this was a really good first chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's what I was going for, you have to feel sorry for him. Glad you liked it!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 - 03:44 pm · For: Ezra Kokoro's Profile
Yeah, I can't wait for this story either. Speaking of stories done by you, sorry I haven't read Universe Disorder lately. I've been kinda busy working on my own stories. I keep on meaning to get to it, but every time I plan to, something else comes up. I love any story with Ezra. He's just plain amazing.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was wondering what you were doing, whether you had stopped reading Universe Disorder, or just decided not to review. But that's okay! At least I know you want to read it! Thanks!