Reviews For Dark Laughter
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 01:52 pm · For: Chapter 34: The Fights
Yes! Epicness found! Great fight! Lee and Sal were just amazingly in tune during that battle. And I really think Sal and Lee will be great friends; he deserves some true friends anyway. I like sappy endings, so I liked it XD Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: glad you did. i like sappy endings too, lol. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 03:20 am · For: Chapter 33: The Trick
Holy snap, Sal's so smart XD
Even as a genin, she's able to think quickly on her feet. Good for her :D
Okay, so Lee is now fighting with her, I wonder what will happen to her other teammates. It's amazing how Tenten and Neji can sleep through something like this :P
Another suspenseful chapter! I can't wait for the awesome fight scene! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: the Tenten and Neji thing was they were not included in the Genjutsu like Sal and Onara were...so they had no idea that it was going on. LOL. and she's a puzzle solver...i kinda based that off of myself...and my brain game ways...i could sit for hours and do Soduku...sorry...that's a whole nother subject. LOL.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 02:32 am · For: Chapter 33: The Trick
wow...
tht ws a smart move...
so sal is more brains than brawl... =)
update soon plz...
keep up da great work...
Author's Response: well...she follows the age old tradition of working smarter...not harder. LOL.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 02:23 am · For: Chapter 32: "I knew something like this would happen"
O_O
Wahooo...!!
finally... time for some action... :D
people who workd 4 her father, eh? o_O
cnt wait to read the next part...
Author's Response: yeah...there is something fishy about him...lol...
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 05:58 pm · For: Chapter 32: "I knew something like this would happen"
Hmm, I'm having a hard time getting a grip on Salacia's personality. Well, Im looking forward to the next update!
Author's Response: i'm doing that on purpose...she doesn't know herself well...so the reader shouldn't either...lol...
Name: Eclair (Anonymous) · Date: 06/09/11 - 04:04 pm · For: Chapter 32: "I knew something like this would happen"
update more!! lol, thanks! Great chaper.
Author's Response: i will...itz tough, with school starting and all. lol. i go from 8:30 AM to 9 PM on tuesdays and 8:30 AM to 2:30 PM on thursdays...ah college. lol.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 03:34 pm · For: Chapter 32: "I knew something like this would happen"
Gah?! A bounty on a babysitter?! Either these rogues are really sick in the head, or Onara's is holding out on some serious info!
Wow... They used to work for Sal's dad?! Omg, this is becoming so epic!
I eagerly await more! Keep up the fantastic work with your writing!
Author's Response: could be one...could be another...you will never know...Never...NEV-VAR! rnSorry...lost myself. LOL.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 12:29 am · For: Chapter 31: Past Friend
hmm...
bt isn't onara supposed 2 b a kid too...? wen sal ws small......
anyways... quite a revelation... o.O
tis gettin interesting...
so mny misteries... sals past, the secret admirer, hinata's new crush... n nw onara... lolz
Author's Response: lol. the mysteries are something i love in stories and i'm glad you r enjoying them too...and as with any storie some are easier to resolve than others. :)
Name: Eclair (Anonymous) · Date: 03/09/11 - 08:04 am · For: Chapter 31: Past Friend
Update! Finally someone knows something! MORE!!!!!
Author's Response: yeah...this is going to add something more...i promise you will not be dissapointed.
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 02/09/11 - 08:16 pm · For: Character Info
Why do you list out all of your OC's traits off the start? That kills immersion and doesn't allow the reader to learn about the character you are journeying with throughout the story.
As far as the first chapter goes, I am confused as to why both Guy and Kakashi would be on a mission together. Surely the Hokage wouldn't assign a child-retrieval mission to two high level shinobi that have their own teams to manage. If they were actually on a high level mission and were using Pakkun to search for someone, what would cause them to abandon the mission to bring a random girl back to the Hokage of all people?
I want to be interested in this story, and I know you have an OOC tag, but none of the Naruto characters actions are rational so far. At least give the reader reasons why Kakashi would take such a huge interest in a 9 year old he randomly found.
I wouldn't recommend writing in first person in a story where you don't keep the Naruto characters in character, as it is very hard to explain their actions.
I hope you don't mind honest reviews
Author's Response: i like them just fine...now for my honest rebuttle.rnthe mission was to save the victems of something...it was impromptu...maybe i should have put more emphasis on that in retrospect.rnthe Kakashi thing will be explained later in the series it is supposed to be one of the great mysteries of my stories and finding her was a part of it.rni find it hard to NOT write in first person...it works better for me...and i prefer sometimes to read in first person.rni hope you don't mind honest responses. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 02/09/11 - 05:33 pm · For: Chapter 31: Past Friend
Omg, she was her babysitter. That's so freaky XD Hmm, I wonder if Onara really is telling the truth... Sal should be cautious, just in case.
Whoa, I can't wait to find out what Onara knows. Nice chapter! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: thanx...i wanted some new and interesting twist to the stories. lol.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 01/09/11 - 09:35 am · For: Chapter 30: Missions and and Inside Joke
oh i didnt knw bout ur mom....
My condolences.....
As fr the story.... It ws nice...
Interesting... Lol onara luks like sme ego freak... :P
Author's Response: thanx. i'm honest about my issues n live and writing helps me cope. rnyeah, i meant her to seem that way...but sal being who she is seems to have knocked her down a peg or twol lol. :)
Name: Swrestler12 (Signed) · Date: 01/09/11 - 09:17 am · For: Character Info
I really like your stories so far. All of them are unique and i personally enjoy reading them. ^_^
Author's Response: thank you very much. glad you are enjoying them.
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 31/08/11 - 11:18 pm · For: Chapter 30: Missions and and Inside Joke
So this woman knows who Sal is, interesting plot twist! I'm exited to see what's next!
Author's Response: yes. but will Sal find out how and who she is? lol you'll just have to wait and see.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 30/08/11 - 04:10 pm · For: Chapter 30: Missions and and Inside Joke
First off, I wish you and your family my deepest condolences for your tragic loss. I'm very sorry to hear about your mother.
But this was an awesome chapter! I love inside jokes between friends, they're the best XD Also, I can't wait to see how the mission goes, especially if Sal has doubts about it being easy.
Great job with this chappie! Keep up the wonderful work!
Author's Response: i was feeling silly so i had to. and thank you for your kind words. i am so glad you are enjoying the story. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/08/11 - 06:04 pm · For: Chapter 29: A New Kind of Bad Dream
Aww, I love Hinata. She's so kind and sweet, and she's such an excellent friend to Sal. She's also thinking very rationally about this secret admirer dilemma, though I'm fairly certain Sal is probably more accurate ;) Well, can't wait to unravel more secrets! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: yeah...maybe. lol. and the mysteries will be unraveled soon, just a time skip away...oops...gave a hint. lol. (though not like in my Sasuke fic. lol)
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 24/08/11 - 02:29 am · For: Chapter 28: The Party
lol poor naruto..
hmm... kiba...?? for both... sal n hinata...?
just guessing xP
Author's Response: lol. sal loves Naruto and always will i think. lol. he's just oblivious as to why lol.
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 10:38 pm · For: Chapter 28: The Party
Sal is really sweet, she'll go out with naruto no matter what anyone says! my guess as to who hinata likes... Kiba? It's interesting how each person developes in your story. Keep writing!
Author's Response: thank you for the compliments. i like to give depth to even minor characters in anything i write because even if they are just in the background they r some1 in reality we should recognize. lol. and it might be or it may be someone completely unexpected. lol.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 10:37 pm · For: Chapter 28: The Party
Aw, cute birthday ;D Ooh, who is Hinata's crush then? I want to say either Kiba or Shino, but I feel like you'll surprise me with someone else.
And who is Sal's secret admirer?! This is getting so suspenseful!
Keep up the awesome work though! This is really good!
Author's Response: you'll b shocked. lol. :p on both of those. lol. i have got some things in store for the upcoming chapters that no one will see coming. lol.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 07:40 am · For: Chapter 27: The Gifts
nice chapter... short n sweet...
lol naruto n Sal look so cute together....
it reminds me of somethin......xP
if the mystery guy is somebody we can't expect it must b someone really kool...
my first doubt ws neji...
is it shino......?? o.O
Author's Response: you'll see. i have it planned...but i just need to time the revalation of it. lol.
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 12:37 am · For: Chapter 27: The Gifts
Interesting, I’m trying to figure out who her admirer is, if it is I can’t figure out where Naruto would her have gotten the locket or why he would send it secretly. It seems like someone else is involved.
Author's Response: you'll see and the locket was hidden so her dad wouldn't find out and the admirer is some1 no1 will expect. lol.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 12:00 am · For: Chapter 27: The Gifts
XD They're so cute! I love those two together! It's so sweet that Sal has such confidence in him and he does for her too. Heehee, I can't wait to find out who the secret admirer is! That's so exciting! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: yeah, itz gonna b a surprise. lol. glad ur enjoying it.
Name: Eclair (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 06:20 pm · For: Chapter 26: Christmas Day Surprise
Thanks for the update, please post another soon. ^.^
Author's Response: i will as soon as i can. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 04:30 pm · For: Chapter 26: Christmas Day Surprise
Aww, I love Christmas!
Such wonderful gifts from her friends and daddy! And ooh, a secret gift from Naruto and a secret admirer? Spooky but suspenseful!
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: i know. :) lol. things r gonna get interesting. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 07:14 am · For: Chapter 25: Gift Giving
Aww, Sal has such an awesome relationship with not only Kakashi but Iruka as well ^_^ It's so cute.
That's also very sweet for Sal to go to each person and give them presents. And Iruka is definitely right about the first kiss thing, that's a very smart way to put it.
Great job on this chapter, it was very sweet. Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: thanx. i thought it fit well. :) he's got a great care for sal and she loves having him as her advice center. lol.