Reviews For The Tale of Two Shuned Wolves
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 20/07/12 - 05:16 am · For: Wave Arc: Continued!!!
oh I forgot to say, thumbs up for all the bleach references, and to answer, I wish I had reviewers like me!
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 19/07/12 - 06:59 pm · For: Wave Arc: Continued!!!
this is quite good, you've got me hoping for more!
Author's Response: Aww thanks!!! Reviewers like you keep me going!!
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 19/07/12 - 04:42 pm · For: Prologue
my first impression is that this is well writen, I'll post another review when I get to the end telling you what I think of the story as a whole.
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 19/07/12 - 11:01 am · For: Prologue
i'm gunna get to reading this later, but for now, I just wanted to let you know your banner is broken.
Author's Response: I know... But thanks for telling me anyways.
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 02/03/12 - 11:31 pm · For: Prologue
bad.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 02/03/12 - 08:42 pm · For: Begining of The Waves Arc!!
Wo, this was an awesome chapter. Throwing Lestelle in there was highly amusing, making the scene so much better. I can't wait to see what you do with the whole arc. Keep up the good work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/11/11 - 12:23 pm · For: April Fools
Aww, what a mean prank.... but it was pretty funny, in some ways XD
Hehe, Lestelle and Shikamaru, how cute :D He's such a flirt. I think they would be good together.
Sasuke and Lestelle as brother and sister? It's sweet in a way, though I wonder how that will work out.
This chapter moved a bit fast, and the characters may have been a bit OOC, but it was still fun to read anyway :D Nice job, keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: I know it went a bit fast... I had writer's block, sorry. It'll tie together in the end. ^_^
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 28/08/11 - 06:10 pm · For: End of Test
Wow, Lestelle is really cool. I love all of her abilities. They're just plain awesome. I feel really bad because of her mom =(. Poor Lestelle and Chihiro. You did really well at adding Lestelle to the original plot, by the way. I'm so looking forward to your next update!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 08:33 pm · For: Start of test
Is it just me, or are most of the characters with a lot of attitude hilarious? I loved this chapter. You added Lestelle in perfectly. I can't wait to see where you're going with this. It's absolutely amazing!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 15/08/11 - 07:15 am · For: Stupid girly-girls
Lestelle isn't very nice to Kakashi. Oh well, he does deserve it. Anyway, this was a great chapter. I absolutely love your characters. They're just plain awesome. I can't wait to see what's going to happen. I love seeing the different ways ocs effect the original teams.
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/08/11 - 09:12 pm · For: Acception
Other than what silverwolf already said, this chapter was perfect. I loved every second of it. I've become attached to your characters already. They seem to have a happy, fun nature about them that just makes me feel happy as well. You're doing a fabulous job with this story. I love it so far!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your reveiws! I hope you become a frequent reader like silverwolf. That always makes me happy. I'll keep up the good work!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/08/11 - 08:32 pm · For: Past and Secrets
Hm...... Is their kekkei genkai that one thing they did in the first chapter? Could you explain that better to me because I was a little confused? Or are you going to later on?
Okay, even though I'm confused, this chapter was awesome. I love this story. Oh, wait, their kekkei genkai is the future eye thing, isn't it? *face palms*. Okay, ignore the whole first part of this review. That was just something caused by it being 11:30 and my brain not fully operating after 11:03. I love your characters. They seem so cool and original. Overall great story, lilmissmindy!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/08/11 - 07:55 pm · For: The Trick
Hahaha. That was hilariously cruel. I can't believe she'd freak out Chihiro like that. If I could, I'd have to high five Lestelle. Anyway, I can't wait to see where this is going. It's awesome so far, and it keeps me wondering about their past. Amazing work! This story is humorous and has seriousness in it (like the part where she brought up the whole cell thing. I found that serious, even if I don't know why).
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/08/11 - 07:24 pm · For: Prologue
Before I remark on the awesomeness of this story, I must ask: Did they teleport to another place that had their element, or did they become their element and travel to another source of their element?
Okay, now to the awesomeness. I love wolves. They always seem cooler than any other animal. That may just be because I love werewolves. I wonder why their brother was attacking them. I can't wait to find out. This chapter left me with questions that I can't wait to have answered. Great job. This chapter was amazing.
Author's Response: They used their element to teleport. And thank you so much!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 10/08/11 - 07:32 am · For: End of Test
Well, I liked how you described Lestelle in this scene. With her interesting past, I think it flowed rather well.
I do wish you included more description, as the dialogue was rather excessive. There was no elaboration on the characters or their actions as they talked. If you work on that, your writing will improve.
I know that this is a common scene that everyone knows about, but still, it's always better to describe it in a way that it is yours; that means adding your own descriptive flare to it.
Other than that, I really like Lestelle's attacks, they seem really unique and interesting. I look forward to learning more about her.
Keep up the good work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/08/11 - 06:09 pm · For: Start of test
Hmm, I like how you're sticking to the manga plotline while adding her in there. It's actually pretty funny, I can't help but laugh everytime she says something :P Nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! It motivates me to find out that there are still people reading this. I try my hardest on the humor even though I know I suck. The next chapter is not related to the plot at all, but it's very important!rnrnOn a different note: I read the chapter of 'Reincarnation of a Legend' today. I almost cried! How could you do that!? And isn't Madara the one who sets the Kyuubi off? Thank you so much for the review!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/07/11 - 07:14 pm · For: Stupid girly-girls
Nice! AS I keep saying, I really like the girls and their pups. How on earth did they forget their own dogs?.... -__-
I do think the classroom scene was a little rushed, even with the skipping time thing. Slow down a bit, it'll be very beneficial in the future.
Ooh, another prank :D Yay! Can't wait for more! Keep up the good work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 01/07/11 - 06:58 pm · For: Acception
O_O Oh gosh, who did they forget? I feel like it's so obvious, but I seriously don't know now... -_-
Haha, I love Lestelle and Chihiro. I don't know, they're just so fun! I do think the fact that Lestelle was able to get Kakashi so easily was a bit OOC for his case, but that was really it. I do like this! I can't wait for more fun with these girls, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: He didn't expect it so he was still in shock when he was caught.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/06/11 - 06:52 pm · For: Past and Secrets
Cool! I love their back story, it's so interesting! And I think the relationships between the girls and their dogs is very fun, I like it. I really liked this chapter, it was fun while also really informative. Great work! I look forward to more. Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Thanks! You keep up the good work too!
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 06/06/11 - 01:52 pm · For: The Trick
Haha, funny prank. I kept having to scroll back up to the color thing at the top, but I kind of got it down now... I think.
That part where Flame says 'sometimes I really think I'm the older one.' kind of confused me at the part where she 'snatched Spark from her older sister's wrath.' So... who's older?
Author's Response: Flame's older, but Chihiro was the one who said "Sometimes I think I'm the older one"
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/06/11 - 08:49 am · For: The Trick
This chapter was a lot better than the first one. There was more description, and it flowed a lot better. I'm impressed with this, good job. I like the characters, and your a slowly introducing their past very well. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Oh, while I'm writing this, I might as well ask you. Did you get my email? It was about your review for my story, 'Rekindle the Lost Flame'. I need to talk to you about your character, if that's alright.
Would it be okay if I change her first name to a more Japanese name? And the same for Spark, I suppose. It was a rule, and I don't want to make any kind of exception for someone, if you understand. I don't wish to be mean or anything, it's just a rule. I hope you understand, please don't hate me :(
Also, you said she was a double agent. Who exactly is she betraying, her father or the heroes? I understand that she is Madara's daughter, which is cool, but if you could be more specific, that'd be awesome.
Anyways, keep up the good work with this story. It's going good so far. Can't wait for more. If you could just get back to me, that'd be awesome.
Author's Response: No, I did not get your email... Sorry about that. It's fine if you change their names. I think it would be better if she betrayed the heroes, because she would win their trust, says she wants to help them defeat Madara, and turns on them. The reason she wants to stay on Madara's side could be by force, or not. It's all up to you.
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 17/05/11 - 08:53 pm · For: Prologue
I was kind of confused in the first paragraph. There are three people right? I think, two girls, twins, and their brother? But, interesting so far.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/05/11 - 06:41 pm · For: Prologue
Yay, wolves! I love wolves!
The descriptions of the characters were very interesting. They seem really creative with intriguing qualities.
I would like to say that I think some real description and elaboration are needed. This seems well-written, but I think it's kind of lacking in flow. There was no flow to the reading, it seemed kind of quick. It's good to slow down and take the time to describe what is going on. Elaborate on the back story, describe the surroundings, talk about appearances and physical features, you know, that sort of thing.
It's one thing to say what is going on, it is a whole different level to paint the picture and show what is happening. If you just improve and illustrate the writing, then it'll be much better.
This story has potential, and with just a little more flow, everything will be amazing. Keep up the good work with this, I hope to see another chapter for this soon!