Reviews For The White Rose
Name: Angie (Anonymous) · Date: 01/05/13 - 01:11 am · For: Supermassive Black Hole
Good so far!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you :) Glad you're enjoying the reading!
Name: Red Mist (Signed) · Date: 20/11/11 - 03:29 pm · For: Sunday Morning
Lol, I love Kiba's reaction to going to school. I feel that way too, so I feel for him XP
I hope this isn't the end of mischievous Alicia. I quite like that about her. Though Kiba bonding with the OCs is really nice. I feel like it adds a lot more depth to the story. I'm assuming Kiba and Adrianna will end up together, but Kiba actually taking the time to talk to other people is really nice. It's a good change of pace, and that goes for the teen romance too. Thank you so much for not having them instantly fall in love, I really like this fun and childish relationship they have going on.
Which brings me to the pool scene. I should have seen it coming, but didn't, which makes it that much better! I loved the comedy!
Great job on this chapter, this was really a fun chapter! I can't wait to see Kiba in school and check on our other Naruto friends :D Keep up the fabulous work!
Author's Response: Hehe, you're the first to mention Kiba going to school. I have big things planned for that, don't you worry one bit ;) No, mischievous Alicia will not disappear. Most likely only her blackmailing trait will dimmer down. The Kiba and Alicia bonding was really nice for me to write, I feel like it showed more into their personalities. Oh please, as if I could pull off having Adrianna and Kiba instantly falling in love. That just would not work out. I also enjoy the childish relationship those two have though, I think it makes the story more fun to get into. Don't worry, there will be great intensity with the Naruto gang and especially some interesting things for Kiba's first day of high school. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! Thanks again!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 20/11/11 - 11:50 am · For: Sunday Morning
This was genius, it was so funny! The entire last scene of it was just awesome. Kiba pretending to drown and then throwing her in the water was hilarious, it makes me love comedy so much more!
I'm glad that Kiba and Alicia are bonding, and I'm even happier that she's not totally giving up mischief, that would be awful ;D
Great job, Silverwolf! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Heehee, I'm glad you thought it was funny. I had fun writing that scene, it just seemed to flow so well for me. Heh, I figured you'd be happy about Alicia still being devious. She may just be giving up the blackmailing part, but she should still be relatively evil, don't worry ;) Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, you're incredible, Demon Fox!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/11/11 - 05:24 pm · For: Sunday Morning
It hurts! It freaking hurts! You're making me laugh too hard, Silverwolf. This was absolutely hilarious. I loved it. There was absolutely nothing to love about this, especially not with the characters. Kiba's in character and if you're worried about Anna acting like a fangirl, she's not. She's doing just fine. I can't wait to read about what the Naruto characters think and are doing.
As for what's going on in this chapter, I'd have to say my favorite part was the pool scene. I'm glad that Kiba had that little talk with Alicia before hand. Maybe now Anna won't be tortured as much. Anyway, you said Anna was somewhat based off you, and torturing you is my job (yeah, I just had to add that part). Haha. Anna was thrown in the pool. I have to admit, that's my favorite part. I think Kiba and Adrianna's relationship is hilarious. They're so cute together (although they're not actually together together, but that's not the kind of together I mean and.... I'll just stop rambling now) but there's still that silly kid stuff between them. I can't wait to see how they're relationship will progress in the future. Overall this was a mind blowing chapter. So good, in fact, I can't stop myself from doing this:
Sheesh. All but one of the stories (as in the ones you're working on) are on the YOUR STORY list. You're just too good, Silverwolf.
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, my chapter was painful to read!.... Oh wait.... oh, haha, you're hurt from laughing. Well in that case, I meant to do that ;) Ah, I'm always happy when you reassure me about the characters. The fact that Kiba is in character and Anna is not a fangirl makes me very happy. Oh, you'll just have to wait and see how the Naruto characters are doing without Kiba. It should be rather interesting, if what I plan works out nicely.
I figured you'd enjoy the pool scene. That's so like you. I'm also glad you liked the little talk between Kiba and Alicia, it needed to be done, but I can't guarantee she'll be nicer to her sister. She might only just cool it down on the blackmailing, but her other forms of mischief might not be dampened so easily ;D Yeah, you would like Anna being thrown in the pool, you're just mean like that. I'm glad you like Kiba and Adrianna together, I'm trying to make them... friends, I guess you could say, before any together-togetherness happens. And... as you can see, the friend thing is just them acting like kids.
I'm so happy you liked this chapter, thank you so much, Sasaui! And oh my gosh, a fourth story with the YOUR STORY award... I think I have achieved total happiness for the rest of the year. Thank you so much for your praise, I really appreciate it. You're an awesome reader and reviewer, thanks a lot! You're amazing!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 19/11/11 - 08:18 am · For: Sunday Morning
This was just hilarious, truly a comedic read. I loved this chapter, everything was just so funny.
I loved the cute little moment between Kiba and Alicia, it kinda looks like they're bonding. And to think, I thought Alicia was going to be nice to Adrianna. I guess that was too much to hope for, since she helped Kiba embarrass her in front of the entire pool XP
Speaking of which, the entire scene at the pool was the best part of the chapter. With Kiba pretending to drown and then pushing Adrianna in, I just couldn't stop laughing.
The only mistake I could see was your use of the word, 'bribe.' I think sometimes, you mixed it up. Like with this, when Kiba asks Alicia:
“How long has Alice been bribing you?”
Technically, that's wrong, but other than that little error, everything else was awesome. Great job on this chapter, Wolf-chan! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you found it fun to read. Haha, yeah, Kiba and Alicia will be bonding a bit, it'll kinda evolve into a sibling kind of relationship, I think. Ha, yeah right, like Alicia could ever be nice to Adrianna. You must be out of your mind ;D Between Kiba and Alicia, Adrianna is going to be tearing her hair out. The entire pool scene wasn't even meant to happen, I hadn't really planned it until I decided to make the chapter longer, so I decided to add some fun and hilarious things int to torture Adrianna some more. I guess it worked out ;) Oh my gosh, I can't believe I did that! I'm so embarrassed now... I fixed that one spot, I'll have to continue to check through it to see if there's anything more I messed up (probably a lot, knowing me). Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Rainbow-chan. I am always happy to hear your feedback! Thanks so much, you're awesome!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 18/11/11 - 11:23 pm · For: Supermassive Black Hole
Trolol.....!!!!
Tht was plain awesome..!!! xDDD
The worthy opponent thingy ws a little cocky n overdo... :P (just in my opinion)
but it sure ws funny xP
Lol... anyways... Kiba does hav a lot of concern for Adri dosen't he? Aww... :P
but do u really think tht ws actually enough for alice to change her mind bout Adri... O.o
seriously? Hmm... maybe for the time being... I guess.... But the way I see alice... I feel it wont b long till she is back to her old mischiefs.... N there the pool incident xDDDD
Lol... very very well written scenes...!!!! a few mistakes here n there... goody*-2-shoes...
n 40 degree celcius???? R ya friggin kidding me...?? N that to in winter...???? O_O'
eh... Is Richardson town on the equator or something...?? N WTH with 87 degreesr...??? Anybody who enters tht hot pool will come out roasted... -.-"
did u go wrong with figures or ws it seriously meant to b tht way? D:
DDD the end scene ws my favourite... ;P
lol... even I didn't quite understand wt happnd in the beginning... bt than I read it again... n LOL down in the water...xDD
poor adri... she already hd aljice to make her life a hell... n now kiba to double it...(rather triple it.. with the shinobi stunts he hs up his sleeves... :P)
and kiba is gonna join school...? :O which grade? :P most probably adri's class I gues... bt hw in the world is he gonna manage all tht... when he dosent knw all the basic stuff in this world...
Lol Adri's gonna hv to b his private teacher... xP
Kiba was well in character... I think... O.o
coz this experience is obviously new for hi... so tht I feel is the expected behaviour from him...
n alice... oh damn!!! I wish I hd such a sister :'(
infact, I'd giv anything to get such a sister...!!!
m a one an only child... so I hv nobody to fight with at home...
oh well... :[
as for Adri... she ws simply as awesome as alwaysr...:D
lol... she gets as easily irritated as u do... Easy to tease... hv fun with(rather make fun of)...but friendly(maybe)... n trust worthy... n as usual... a Kiba freak =_= xDDD
Kool chapter!!! Thnx for updating :DDD
Yer the Best writer on Tonfa.... :D well in my list atleast xP
Keep up the awesome job....!!!! :]
so... wen's da next update...? :3
Author's Response: Hmm, cocky? Really? I don't personally think it's cocky, Adrianna just realizes that Kiba is going to be a challenge, kinda like a clash with her personality. But I'm glad you thought it was funny anyway :)
Yeah, Kiba is growing a soft spot for Adrianna. But that could just be because he's grateful to her for helping him. Actually, perhaps for the time being, I think it is suitable that Kiba was able to turn Alicia away from blackmailing and such. She is only ten years old, so while she is very manipulative, she is also easily manipulated. She's not giving up her mischief ways, just the blackmailing part.
Bah, stupid spelling and grammar, I seriously hate it.... Haha, good-two-shoes... Thanks for telling me, I just fixed it :P
Celsius?! No no no, I'm using Fahrenheit. Do you have that where you live? It's measured smaller than Celsius, so forty degrees is really cold and eight-seven degrees is really hot. Not hot enough to roast, just enough for anyone standing around to sweat, so it's nice for people who get to go in the water. The figures are fine, I guess I just should have specified that everything is in Fahrenheit.
Haha, yes, I was debating whether I should put that scene in at all, but it ended up being too funny not to put in. I'm glad you liked it.
Yeah, Kiba will be in Adrianna's grade, since they're the same age. The fact that Kiba doesn't know anything about the real world is the fun part, so Anna's going to be doing a lot of tutoring. She didn't really think that far ahead.
I'm so happy I got Kiba in character, writing about him always scares me because I want to make sure he's not OOC. Hehe, Alicia has been getting a mixed audience; some people like her and some don't. I'm kinda surprised. Well, I think I mentioned that Adrianna was slightly based off of me. It's easier to write a real world character with my personality because that's more comfortable for me. I will say that not everything about her is the same as me, so just keep that in mind.
I don't know why you keep saying I'm the best writer on TONFA, I seriously doubt that. But thanks for reading and reviewing, I appreciate your feedback!... And I'm not answering your last question.
Name: Candy (Anonymous) · Date: 20/10/11 - 10:20 pm · For: Upside Down
OMG I LOVE THIS STORY!!! you better finish it! it really good... :) you are an awsome writer and kiba was a liiiiiitle ooc and alicia was an awesome little sister though i do think shes a little to overbearing. but i still love it. you cant find good writers like you anymore!
Author's Response: :D I'm glad you love this story, that's so amazing to hear! I will definitely finish, don't you worry one bit.... I just don't know when it will be completed... o_O Gah, I knew I got him OOC in some places, I really need to watch him a bit closely, seeing as how he's kind of important to the story, and I don't want this to be one of those romance stories with an immense amount of OOCness that it is unbelievable. Haha, it's funny that you mention Alicia; a lot of people had the same reaction as you. The funny part of that is... my sister (who this character was based off of) really likes Alicia. So I don't know, opinions vary :P Wow, you think my writing is that good? Well, this is an awesome start to my day :D Thank you very much for reading, I'm really honored that you read my story. And thanks a ton for the kind review, I really appreciate it.
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 09/10/11 - 01:38 pm · For: Haunted
No more Shino T_T *hangs head* I'm going to have to write a one shot or something cause I'm going into withdrawal for some reason.
ANYWAY~
I would like to see a fic where Adrianna goes to a cosplay convention or something, that would be humorous. I see where this fic is going now.
Author's Response: As I said, he might make an appearance again, so don't worry ;) Though I wonder about your obsession with him... Well, I think I mentioned that Adrianna's parents don't know about her Naruto obsession, so a cosplay convention might be out of reach for her. It could happen though, I might use that idea :) Hmm, you see where this fic is going? Well... could you tell me? Because I really don't know... Thanks for reading! I appreciate it!
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 09/10/11 - 01:33 pm · For: Supermassive Black Hole
A well done first chapter, you handled the characters very well and it moved along at a good pace. Shino's reaction to his bugs being absorbed was needed and you delivered. The action scene was long enough to display Konotorou's abilities and is a good way to introduce him. I'm still not the biggest fan of the narrative style, but that is my opinion I suppose. Disappointing to see only 4 chapters so far because I was hoping for some more Shino. Only gripe I have beside that is a lack of Shino's characteristic "After all," explanatory dialogue trademark.
Author's Response: Hmm, I'm glad you liked this first chapter. I thought it was too short, especially for a battle scene, but if you thought it had a nice pace, then I'm okay with it :) Huh, I'm sorry you dislike my narrative style so much, but I've had difficulty changing it while I write, so I guess you're stuck with it for now until I get better at writing. Sorry ;) I'm disappointed there's only four chapters as well, I'm upset with myself XP If you hang around for a while, you might just see Shino again. I do intend to include the Narutoverse scenes while Kiba is away, contrary to other stories. So have a little hope :) I actually never recognized Shino's dialogue trademark; it always went completely over my head, so that's why I never wrote about it. I apologize. Anyway, I'm glad you decided to read this, and I hope it keeps your interest. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!
Name: Red Mist (Signed) · Date: 05/10/11 - 05:42 am · For: Upside Down
Lol, this is so hilarious! I love how you write Kiba in the real world, it's just so funny. And thank god, Adrianna isn't a Mary Sue or a fangirl. You're doing perfectly with her. And Alicia is adorable; I like the fact that you've included a sibling to be in on the secret. It makes for an even funnier read XD
Haha, keep up the awesome work with your stories!
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you liked it! I'm really happy to hear that you like Adrianna; I'm always worried I'll make her too unlikable to the readers. Haha, Alicia is quite the catch, let's just say ;) Heehee, I'm glad you like this so much! Thank you very much for the support you show my stories! I appreciate it so much!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 07:48 pm · For: Upside Down
I finally got to it, and you'd think after all that time, I'd be prepared for your awesomeness. But I wasn't. You completely blew me away. I one hundred percent loved this. It was so mind-blowing. You make it so hilarious yet at the same time you don't make it be too hilarious it's unrealistic.
First of about her being a fan-girl: She wasn't. She acted really good, barely even truly showing her feelings except with the occasional blush.
Now to all the funny parts: I lost count of how many times I laughed. But that's not all it was. It was also very interesting and kept me asking questions, since I don't want you to think all I cared about was the humor in it. Though the part with her shoving Kiba under her bed and then the jealousy from Cookie. Poor dog. She'll be squashed by Akamaru. And then the "Metal monster" was great, and I had to laugh when he stuck his head out the window. I'm starting to wonder whose the dog- Kiba or Akamaru. Well, Kasumi did say that Akamaru had a nice dog (or something similar to that). I would say that I think you're making Alicia *cough Demon Fox cough* seem the way most little sisters act (which isn't a good thing because it leads to angering them, I think), but then I saw that she said you were doing just fine with her. Does she really blackmail you that much? If so, give her a high-five for me =D. As for the brain freeze thing, I HATE THOSE!!! Why didn't you warn me as well? Sheesh, Kiba's right? What kinda friend are you? Okay, now on to the serious part of that review. The intensity of his anger there was something that I enjoyed, because it showed that he wasn't all fluffy and happy just from hanging out with them for a little while. And the Anna glare thing was something I found amusing. And tell Adrianna I applaud her for making Kiba apologize twice. She deserves some chocolate since Alicia now has her entire stash.
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you finally found time to read this. Awesomeness? Pfft, alright, whatever you say... I do appreciate the fact that you said it wasn't too hilarious that it was unrealistic; as I often say, I'm trying to keep this real, it's my main goal for this story. Oh, well I'm glad you don't think Adrianna was a fan girl, that's always reassuring to know, especially with this story. I may have to tune it down on the blushing, as I'm worried I make her blush too much. Hehe, I'm glad this chapter was able to make you laugh. Interesting and kept you asking questions? Bonus points, heck yeah! Heehee, Kiba being pushed under the bed and the jealous Cookie were some of my favorite parts, because it was so funny XD Aha, the metal monster was also one of my crowd pleasers, I tried to keep people interested during the car scene. Hmm, you would think little sisters would be angry with the way they are portrayed... ha, not my sister. She takes pride in being evil, and she has told me that she wants to be portrayed as such. Well, the blackmailing part is a little extreme, but then again, I've never had to keep an anime guy a secret from my parents, so this may very well be an accurate portrayal of Demon Fox ;) I'm sorry I didn't warn you about the brain freeze! I had thought I should, but I didn't want to spoil it for you. Hmm, I get what you mean about Kiba being fluffy and happy and all that; even though I love him, I identify his personality flaws: his temper. So I had to keep that close to accurate. Haha, the Anna Glare actually exists, it's pretty funny when you see the reactions of others in real life XD Adrianna is happy that you acknowledged her skill in getting Kiba to apologize twice. I would give her some chocolate, but I'm on a chocolate crave right now and really need some for myself.... Anyways, I'm glad you enjoyed this! It's always nice to know that you like my stories! Thank you very much for the positive review, Sasaui, you're amazing!
Name: Chair (Anonymous) · Date: 05/09/11 - 02:10 am · For: Haunted
Akamaru, we're not in Kansas anymore... I like this, it's a new take on something overused. I also enjoyed the carefree way that your OC introductions flowed seamlessly with the actual story. It's hard to find that. Thanks.
Author's Response: Haha, I love the Wizard of Oz reference. I didn't even think of that, but that is funny. I'm glad you like it :) You're right in saying that the idea is overused, that is why I am trying to be different and original. I'm glad it's working :D I'm also glad that you like my intro to the OCs, it's always reassuring to know that the readers like my OCs. Thank you very much for reading and thanks a ton for reviewing! I appreciate it!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 24/08/11 - 12:18 am · For: Upside Down
Haha, Alicia is just like me XD You write me so well, Sis ;)
This was a hilarious chapter, I loved it. Shopping with Kiba was a lot of fun, and the ice cream scene was so funny. And when he got mad, I was really worried that he would stay mad. But it was really cute that he forgave Adrianna like that. Haha, I can't wait to see how Alicia plays matchmaker ;D Great work on this chapter, it was awesome! I can't wait for more, keep up the great work, Sis!
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you like Alicia so much :D I thought the shopping scene was pretty funny myself, and the ice cream idea was just too much fun to ignore. Aw, it was pretty nice when Kiba forgave Adrianna. Ah, you would be interested in the matchmaking bit, wouldn't you ;) Thanks so much for the wonderful support! I'm glad you really like this; I hope you continue to! Thanks again for reading and reviewing, you're awesome!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 11:46 pm · For: Sweet Dreams
Alicia is oddly like me ;) Haha, nice work with her XD This was awesome, I can't wait to see how Kiba handles fitting in with the real world. Hehe, it even sounds fun :D Nice job, Sis! This was really good!
Author's Response: Hmm, I wonder why Alicia is like you ;D Kiba fitting in is going to be amazingly fun to write, I can't wait! I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and thanks even more for reviewing! It always makes my day!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 11:31 pm · For: Haunted
Haha, Kiba and Adrianna were both awesome! It was such a realistic scene, I loved it! Kiba was so confused with what was going on, and Adrianna just ignored him when he said he was a ninja. This was an awesome chapter! Nice work!
Author's Response: Yeah, I tried to keep things realistic, since this does take place in the modern world. I really enjoyed writing both of them during this, since it seemed like such a fun yet real scene to write. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks a bunch for reading and reviewing!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 23/08/11 - 11:06 pm · For: Supermassive Black Hole
Now that... was an awesome battle. I think we all know where Kiba's going, but the way you wrote it was still very exciting anyway. Great job!
Author's Response: Oh thank you, I thought the battle was particularly short, but I'm glad you liked it :) Hmm, do you know where Kiba's going, do you really? Haha, just kidding. Thanks for reading and reviewing, it always makes me happy!
Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 10/08/11 - 09:52 pm · For: Supermassive Black Hole
this is really awesome can't wait till the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad you like it! It's so encouraging to know that people like this! Thank you so much for reading and thanks even more for taking the time to review!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/08/11 - 08:22 pm · For: Upside Down
I don't think Adrianna was fan girl-ish at all. I really like how her character is coming out. Maybe tune it down on the blushing, as she reminds me of Hinata a bit. Then again, the different events in this chapter that made her blush actually made sense, such as the shower, hiding under her bed, etc....
Kiba seems really good so far! Not too mushy that he's completely out of character, but not too mean that he comes across as a cold person. I think you wrote him well.
And Alicia is adorable! Evil and conniving, but still a great character to have, I think. She adds even more humor to the story, which I love.
This is a great story, and I can't wait for more. This is very good so far, keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: *slams head against desk* I knew it! I knew I overdid it on something. Yeah, I guess you're right about the blushing. I'll have to watch that. Thank you. But other than that, I'm glad you like how Adrianna is appearing in this. And whoo! Kiba wasn't OOC! It's one of my biggest writing fears to completley butcher his character, especially since he's my favorite. Alicia was adorable? Really? O_O Well, anyways, I'm super glad that you like this so far. I hope it continues to capture your attention. Thank you so much for the awesome feedback, it is highly appreciated! Thanks a bunch!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/08/11 - 07:51 pm · For: Sweet Dreams
Ooh, I think I like where this is going. Fitting in, huh? I wonder how that will turn out for our poor unknowing shinobi. Heehee...
I also really liked the realistic interplay between Kiba and Adrianna. You didn't make them suddenly buddy-buddy, which I really appreciate. It's good to have them establish trust first, and of course, the awesome scene before that, where Kiba doesn't trust her at all and tries to attack her, was a great way to show some reality in the situation.
Nice job!
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm debating with myself if there is a limit to which I should torture Kiba. I love him, but it's too good of chance to pass up by throwing him into the real world and seeing how he does XD What the heck, why does everyone seem to enjoy Adrianna being attacked? Well, yeah, I guess it is realistic in the sense that Kiba's a ninja and won't trust anyone so quickly. That's what I was going for, but yeesh, people seem to like seeing Adrianna squirm. But anyway, I'm glad you found this realistic, as I'm trying to keep it so. Thank you for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/08/11 - 07:26 pm · For: Haunted
I absolutely loved this! It's about time someone wrote an original story. I've seen way too many of those random girls who fall into the Narutoverse. Those girls are either damsels in distress or freakishly amazing ninja right off the bat. I don't get it. But this actually has originality, which I'm so thankful for. And what's more, your writing is great. You add in humor with the suspense, making for an enjoyable chapter. I love this! I would say more about how awesome this is, but I must read more! Nice job!
Author's Response: Ah, thank you so much! I was actually thinking the same thing in terms of originality when I started writing this. I get tired of reading some of those stories too, so I decided to mix it up. I'm glad my idea is paying off. And wow, thanks for the compliment about my writing! I'm so happy to hear that you like my writing. Thank you so much for the encouragement!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/08/11 - 07:05 pm · For: Supermassive Black Hole
Oh my gosh! That was a pretty awesome fight scene! I can't wait to see what happened to Kiba and Akamaru! :D I'm off to read more!
Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you liked the fight scene, though I think I'm personally terrible at writing them. But it's nice to know that you liked it :) I hope you continue you enjoy this! Thanks so much for reading this, and thanks even more for reviewing!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 06:41 am · For: Sweet Dreams
Hm..... I just began to wonder.... what would it be like if instead of a canon character coming to our world, what would happen if the ocs we created came to our world? That would be interesting. Anyway, great chapter. It was once again realistic. Every second of it was awesome. I love how many times Adrianna got flung into the tree. =D. And if Alicia is who I think she is, please tell me you don't give her chocolate. Please please please. Or let me be wrong, which I doubt I am. Kiba was in character again. Your sister needs to stop using Cookie as a way of defense on Wolf's Den. She seems pretty cute and I don't want her to get caught up in the crossfire. This is an amazingly original story with awesomeness everywhere I look. Great story, Silverwolf. You are awesome!
Author's Response: No, you are awesome for giving me so many compliments! I'm seriously really excited right now :D Oh, that idea sounds like something for your challenge, Meeting of OCs, I believe it was? Hmm, that would be interesting, now that I think about it :) Ooh, realistic and awesome, huh? Two birds with one stone :D What the heck, you like the part when Adrianna is being threatened? That's kind of sadistic, Sasaui. Ah... haha... It's quite ironic, actually... As I am writing this response, my sister and I are eating chocolate we received from camp, so.... yeah.... And yeah, Alicia is exactly who you're thinking of ;) Whoo, Kiba's not OOC! Accomplishment! I'm actually honestly afraid of OOCing him too much. *nods head* Don't worry, I'll tell Demon Fox not to use Cookie for defense anymore, but just so you know, our little Yorky is cute but annoying. But of course I don't want her caught in the crossfire. Gosh, thank you for so many compliments! I'm so glad you find this story original and awesome. Thank you so much! You're amazing for giving me so much support!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/07/11 - 06:02 am · For: Haunted
Okay, first, I can't wait to find out more about Jeffery because I have so many questions in my head. Second, BRILLIANT! This chapter was brilliant. You did a perfect job, making Adrianna think exactly the kinds of things I think people would think in this kind of situation. You were both original and in character. Man, I'm starting to want to write a story like this, but I can't because I still have to focus on all my other stories....... Great chapter!
Author's Response: Wow, you are one of the few people who actually cares about finding out about Jeffrey. I'm glad that didn't go by unnoticed. And again, WOW! I'm glad you liked this chapter so much! I'm so glad this was realistic, I tend to hate random things that are suddenly thrown in and it's considered amazing. I am trying to break that trend by being realistic but also creative and original. And I'm glad I accomplished that in this chapter. Ah, I'm flattered I made you want to write a story like this, and no matter how much I love reading your writing, I'm telling you not to do it! Don't hurt yourself with more work! But anyways, thanks for reading and sharing you wonderful insight! I'm glad you liked it so much! Thanks so much, Sasaui!
Name: Zack (Anonymous) · Date: 24/07/11 - 03:52 am · For: Upside Down
lol i've been reading this story on my wii, so im constantly scrolling side to side and up and down, so my eyes are just a little off lol. and when i saw the notes in the beginning, i almost had a heart attack. hahaha well, i was thinking about adrianna's development and came up with a conclusion, she couldnt be a fangirl, because fangirls always dream about what they dont/cant have, but she has what she wants. alice is awesome. shes just like my 2 twin sisters, so she is the perfect little sis. and kiba is just as i would expect him to be. oh and, there were some spelling and grammar issues but its ok this time since the chapter was so ginormous. (omg, i think my hand will fall off, i wrote all of that on the wii, point and click, point and click. hahaha.)
Author's Response: Stupid spelling/grammar! Stop bothering me! Oh, haha, I'm sorry my abnormally long chapter caused so much trouble. I hope your hand is alright... And your eyes as well... And your heart. O_O Wow, that chapter really did a number on you, didn't it? I'm sorry... Oh wow, that is an interesting thought about fangirls. I've never thought about it that way, but it makes sense when I think about it now. Wow, thanks for reassuring me about Adrianna. It's always a little tough to make the main character likeable to the readers. Wow, you have twin sisters just like Alicia? You have two Alicia's? I don't know if I should pity you or not... but as long as you love them, I think it's alright ;) I'm also glad I kept Kiba in character; it's always good to hear that I'm not completely butchering the Naruto cast :P Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your awesome feedback! Now, go and get some ice for your hand.... and some eye drops for your eyes.... and then go to the hospital for your heart attack.... Oh gosh....
Name: Miko_Yami (Signed) · Date: 23/07/11 - 12:10 pm · For: Upside Down
I’m going so say Adrianna shoving Kiba and Akamaru under the bed is kind of funny. I really had to laugh at that and I could see it…all of us if we had the guy we liked in our room with our mother on the other side of the door, grantee 50% of us would hide our favorite character under the bed while the other 50% in the closet lol.
“A cute boy was standing in her bedroom, his full attention on her. “Wouldn’t that be nice XD.
Oh you went on consideration on how Kiba (or the Naruto characters normally wear the same thing) but taking into consideration they do take a shower most likely everyday because of missions, they really don’t want to smell like a dog right? And I love the way Kiba completely just brushed her off with the girl comment I can oddly see him as the type that judges people by gender.
Aw~ how cute I love the jealous dog ^^
-dying of a nosebleed- That’s such a hot image all that considering I really could care less about Kiba but that’s so hot!! And as for Alice is a very insightful a ten year old. Of course the pickle Adrianna is in right now with her sister but isn’t bribing her sister all the time going to cause a really problem with each other?
Lol Adrianna and I have the same problem with our hair, but I can’t believe to the sister just blurted it out like that lol.
Kiba is scared of the “Metal monster” I love it. Of course Kiba having the Natural dog like behavior to stick out his head during ride is of funny.
The whole shopping experience is kind of funny.
All in all I really enjoyed this chapter and I do hope you update soon. Sorry for this review for taking so long.
P.S. I kind of wonder what’s going on in the Naruto world right now, now that Kiba is missing, did the story line change? Did something change at all?
Author's Response: Haha, that scene was just really interesting to write. It seemed both expected and unexpected that something like that would happen. Ah, a cute boy standing in the bedroom with his full attention... if only that happened more often ;) Well, I'm hoping the Naruto cast takes showers. Otherwise, that's just gross. And yeah, even though I love Kiba, I do see his faults; his comments can be mean sometimes. Cookie is always adorable, as jealous and annoying as she may be, she's always cute :D I know, right! No matter how much you want to deny it, Kiba just coming out of the shower is the hottest image ever! Yeah, Alicia is quite the little troublemaker, in blackmailing and annoying her sister. But don't worry about the bribing thing, the rest of that will be explained later ;) Well, I thought Kiba and the car episode would be something that just seemed fitting. And shopping with Kiba... well, that pretty much speaks for itself ;D Ah, don't worry about the late review. I'm honored that you read and reviewed this chapter in the first place. Oh, and you're quite insightful. Ah... yeah, I'm not saying anything about the Naruto storyline. I got that all figured out, but I'm not spoiling it for you ;) Thank you so much for reading and sharing your valuable feedback! I really appreciate it! I'm so glad you like this story. Thank you very much for reading this chapter and reviewing it as well! You're awesome!