Reviews For Two Friends+Mercenary Jobs=One Crazy Adventure!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/05/11 - 07:23 pm · For: Chapter 6: Shopping Time!
Yay, you're back! I've missed this story. And I loved this chapter, I love the humor of it all! And I very much enjoy Max and Ash's relationship, and it's kind of cute (in a brotherly sisterly manner) how he can help her shop. Normally, that doesn't happen but it is so nice when it does. And it is quite upsetting that Seth will not be around them forever. They make such a nice trio. Anyways, nice excellent work on this chapter. I really really liked this. Keep up the great work, and I really hope you update soon!
Author's Response: I Know! I Missed writing it actually, but I promise it should come out more regularly after the next week or two since school will be over then! HURRAY FOR SUMMER!! Haha...Anyway, I'm so glad you liked the chapter and found it funny! I Really don't think I have a very good sense of humor, so thanks. xD ---- I'm glad you like their relationship! I Thought people might not approve...lol ------ Now, I do believe Seth was the one who said they wouldn't be around forever, I on the other hand, haven't decided what shall happen yet. We shall see in the future....-evil smirk- ;)rnThank you so much for continuing to read and review this story! You're the best! =]
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 18/02/11 - 03:40 am · For: Chapter 5: Who!? What!? Where!? When!?
Woohoo! Another chapter! I'm so happy! And it was long! Even better! But the map didn't show up :( However, I liked the little description of how the world is divided. And Seth's background is getting interesting. Seth's shock at how awesome Max and Ash are made me laugh. I'm hoping for a lot of action in the upcoming chapters. Good job on this chapter, I enjoyed everything about it! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I Know!! I Still can't get it to show up, I've tried everything! *sigh* However if you do want to see it, it is posted on my deviantART page in all it's crappy glory. lol rnI'm gonna try my best at the action and work on my fight scenes, since there should be some coming up, and I'm glad it made you laugh! That's what I was going for! ;P Thank you so much for your reveiws and rating! It means a lot! I'm still gonna wait for the return of your stories! <3
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/01/11 - 02:15 pm · For: Chapter 4: Hotel Time!
You're right, it was very short. I'm kinda sad. But after hearing that the next chapter is gonna be nice and long, I'm very happy. So I forgive you :)
Thanks so much for the shoutout! I'm honored. And that's really sweet how you recommended my stories. You're so nice!
Anyways, as I said before, I really like Max and Ash. Their relationship is very brother/sister-like, and you write it in a very believable manner. Your writing portrays the two very well, which is very helpful.
Great job on this chapter! It was very good in describing your characters. Keep up the good work, and I'm going to keep an eye out for the next chapter XD
Author's Response: Grasias! =] I Am going to try hard to make it long..hehe Your very welcome! You gave a shoutout to me, plus you bothered to read and review so you deserve it! And your stories are amazing so they should be recommended! ^_^ rnI'm glad you like them! There are so many stories where the two best friends fall in love, and not that I dislike that it's pretty cool sometimes, but I just wanted to make them brother/sisterly. They're relationship is most likely going to remain platonic. rnThank you I'll try to get it out soon! =] (And please update yours as well!) xD ;)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/11 - 04:45 pm · For: Chapter 3: Pizza? Or RAMEN!
Wow. This is pretty good. I don't usually read non-Naruto fanfictions. But I have to say.... this is really awesome! This entire idea is absolutely unique, and I love the characters. I love Max and Ash! They're just amazing! Your description is great, and you actually take the time to elaborate on details. That, I am very thankful for.
Your fight scenes were very well-written. I especially liked the Max versus Seth part. I am a big fan of feminine power ;)
Now, I only have two complaints. One, it would really help if you possibly separated the dialogue lines. Sometimes, you put two people's lines right next to each other, which is a bit confusing. Just space it out, please. Second complaint, longer chapters! I mean, I understand if you can't write more, but longer chapters make everyone happy :D
Again, this is a very good story. I am very pleased with how this is turning out. Please update soon because you left it at a pretty interesting part. I want to know what happens next!
Author's Response: OMG Thank you for reviewing! (and I feel bad for not responding sooner, computer on the fritz!) I'm so glad you liked it!! Especially if you don't read non-naruto fics a lot! It makes me feel really honored... :)rnI'm glad you like my OC's too! YAY! I Know right, some people don't put enough in and I feel like it takes away from the story, so I tried to put in enough that it was good, but not too many to make it boring! I'm happy it worked! rnHaha I Know what you mean, girl power rocks! Yeah! XD I personally don't think my fight scenes are that great, but I'm working on getting better and I'm glad you thought it was good! ^_^rnrnThank you so much for the advice! I Want to make my stories as good as possible and I love finding out what I can do to improve! I'm going to try and space the lines more in the chapter I'm uploading today, and as for the longer thing, well ch. 4 is gonna be really short, but chapter 5 (Which I'm trying to put on my computer) is hopefully going to be much longer! rnrnThanks again, it really means a lot! And I'm updating today! :)