hey can I be in the story
Cute story I liked the dogs the reminded of the Leola children when they first appeared in the second chapter. This is a whole bunch of background stories but all in all very interesting it was fun learning about the Naruto characters. Good story and I look forward to your others.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you for enjoying this. This fic was meant to be the background stories for another AU fic that I was going to put up but never got around to. But I'm glad you liked it anyway. Thank you for reading this story, and thank you for your continuous feedback on it. I really appreciate the fact that you took the time to read this and review it.
Aw~ Naruto…he is OOC a little just a personal reminder Naruto is loud he does things without thinking. But it’s still a likable chapter I like him comparing himself to Shierra (I personally see Naruto as a type that does that subconsciously)
Author's Response: Oh no! OOCness! Darn it, it has ruined me! Yeah, you're right about that. I'll have to change that when I go back to rewrite this story. Thanks for the heads up. But I'm glad you liked his tendency to compare himself to Shierra. That was an important factor for this chapter. Thank you so much for the feedback! It's greatly appreciated!
I like learning about Shierra’s past it’s like Naruto’s put up that as warning when people read your story…and I praise you for not bashing on Sakura (though I hate her ^-^). Very interesting and Kiba’s so mean it’s kind of cute XD (sorry short review TT-TT)
Author's Response: Oh, that's a good idea. I didn't even think about putting up a warning, thanks for the advice. I try not to bash the characters, since everyone is important to the plot in some way. But she makes it so hard to portray her in a nice way sometimes. I didn't know someone who was mean could be cute...? Thank again for reviewing, it doesn't matter that it's short. As long as you care, it's all good! Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Poor TenTen yet another Naruto character left in the dust we have no idea on her past life or her family. I think you gave her a reasonable believable past I wonder where else will your story go?
Author's Response: Yeah, I believe that everyone should have their own life story to share. Even if that means I make up their story, they will have a story that defines who they are. As for the rest of this story.... eh, just read the rest of it. This is undergoing construction, so most of it will probably be revised. But thank you anyway for reading. You have no idea how much I appreciate you reading this. Thank you very much for reading this story, and thank you even more for taking the time to review it!
Aw~ Cute chapters the kids are eight at this and it kind of shows. I like the multiple characters you have but that’s going to be extremely difficult putting them in the spotlight. But good chapter the mom or Nami is like any other parent in Konoha. Caring for her child but hating “the monster child”. She isn’t exactly the villain but she isn’t likable right away good job on this chapter ^~^.
Author's Response: Yeah, this was written at the time when I loved making OCs. I couldn't help myself. And I'm happy to hear that you thought Nami was written well. It was kind of hard keeping her personality realistic. Thank you very much for your insight! I love feedback! Thank you for reading this, and thank you even more for reviewing!
I cried for the first time at a characters death, (it was one tear but still). It was a nice chapter I think you did a great job showing Kiba’s character development as who he is and how he became the way he is…though I don’t know about his mom being abusive but I don’t know much about the characters so why not I guess…Kiba was such a cutie as a little kid ^-^
Author's Response: Aw, I'm sorry I made you cry. But I'm glad this seemed like a nice chapter. This was written a while ago, so I was afraid it might seem disorganized or something. This is an AU fic, so I don't think Kiba's mom actually abuses him in the real Naruto world. I just made this happen for this story to go along. But I'm glad you liked this chapter anyway. Thank you so much for reading this, and thanks even more for reviewing it! I appreciate your feedback!
Wow…interesting chapter the kids are actually kids very nice…I felt sorry for the kids I mean the whole rain scene made me feel kind of sad…
And the old lady’s reaction is very realistic after all we aren’t all saints so why should are all our characters be saints too? This is a very interesting chapter it was the kind of chapter that catches your interest and keeps it.
I can’t wait to read more =)
P.S Zuko is soo cute XD
Author's Response: I know, right! It was so sad :( I'm glad you thought Nami was a realistic character. It was kinda hard to write a mean character like her. I'm really happy to hear that you thought it was an interesting chapter. I wrote this so long ago, I am now trying to make it into something better. But I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. And yes, Zuko is amazing =D Thank you so much for reading yet another one of my stories. I really appreciate your input. Thanks so much for reading and thanks even more for reviewing!
I LOVE YOU oh just send me an email ImmortalShapeshifter@yahoo.com
Author's Response: Got it. I shall email you soon!
One, i love it, two its so coool xD
three: ill post asap and i hhope maybe youll be my betttaaa?
Author's Response: Omg, I didn't expect to see you ever here! I wrote this story so long ago that I didn't expect anyone to be reading it, let alone reviewing it! I'm excited to hear that you'll be posting soon. And I would love to be your beta! I am so honored that you would consider me to help you. I am truly honored, and you can contact me anytime.
Wow that was amazing. It was so sad but i couldnt stop reading. Well done
Author's Response: Yay! My first review! Thanks so much for the support. It means a lot to me. :D