Reviews For Cursed Saint
Name: UzamakiMasumi (Signed) · Date: 06/08/12 - 07:01 pm · For: Taken
Longish longish. Let's see if I can get it all down in one setting and how long this review gets. This is an older chapter, right? Like, what, 2 years old? So it's not like I'll be picking at mistakes since it's so old and you've improved so much. So, that being, the review might be shorterish since it will only be mostly fun comments at things I liked or suspiciousy things. *waves arms around dramatic and creepy like*
Man, I'm still jealous of your ability to write battle scenes, especially considering that this stuff is really old! The relationship between Shiro and Hana is clearly very different from that of Anko and Oro-chi, but the dynamics between the two kind of reminded me of the scene in the Forest of Death. Although, at the same time, it's totally different, too. it just in a way seemed slightly similar. Anywho, I liked it muchly.
At first after the diamond thingies I thought immediately that the girl was Sakura. Then I got confused at the outfit description for a few moments. Took me a bit to think back to before Shippuden and remember what her old outfit was like. But then I was still like, wait, that's not right... Then I realized she was really young and looked up her kid outfit and was like, yeah! I get it now! *rolls eyes*
Drumroll please! And here enters Kono-kun's future scarf! XD Heheh, so fun. I wasn't exactly expecting Ryu and Naruto to be friends, so this is an interesting development. It was also really nice seeing who Ryu is from Sakura's perspective, especially since I know that he has a crush on her later on. And now knowing that Naruto and Ryu are friends and they both like Sakura.... Oh, the drama! XD
Why does Ryu know Shiro!? WHY!? ........ Why is Shiro's last name the same as Ino's!? Why are they all connected to Shiro somehow!? And yet I like him even more now. X3 Great and captivating chapter, Sasa-chan. On to the next chapter.
Out,
Miya-chi TAT
Author's Response: You think this is longish? This is one of the shorter chapters, so just wait until you get to Right Before Your Eyes. Yes, this is about two years old. Maybe a couple months less. Actually, the review is a pretty nice size, so don't worry. Really? Because I still don't see why anyone would think they're so good. They seem a lot better in my head than what I write. Hm..... I can definitely see what you mean. Now that I think about it, they are very similar. Haha. That's funny. Well, I was trying to give her age with her clothes description. I guess that doesn't help too much if you don't know her clothes at a younger age, though XD. I'm sorry for the confusion. I'm surprised Ino's clothes description didn't confuse you as well then. Yeah, I don't think I ever added that into the story. Maybe I will later. I don't know. At first, I didn't really have anything planned when I made them friends. I think it was mostly caused by TG. Though it is the main reason Ryu doesn't try to make it obvious. He doesn't want Naruto to know. He knows Naruto has the crush, but Naruto doesn't know he does as well. This is going to be so much fun XD. Haha. You'll get your answers to that later, so enjoy reading it, Niji-chan. I hope you like it.
Name: UzamakiMasumi (Signed) · Date: 29/07/12 - 12:21 pm · For: Prologue
Okay, so I know that Cursed Saint is old, but I'm still going to review it as it is. I've read some of your more recent stuff, so I won't point out things that I have already seen that you've improved on. I will point out things that I haven't witnessed but you may have improved on, anyway. Okay, that said, let's start.
Number one, and I noticed this immediately (though I'm not really sure if you're doing this anymore). There were a lot of complex sentences but no simple ones. I know in school they try to get the students away from simple sentences, but that's just because many of the nonwriters just use them WAY too much. What you really want is a nice balance of complex, compound, and simple sentences. It gives the writing more variety and a rounder, fuller feel to it.
Hmmm. You don't have the students starting until they're eight... I have them starting when they're five or six I think. But maybe that's innacurate? I have to find out now!
I really liked your ability to write the scene with the scuffle between the Anbu and Ryu, just before he bumped into the hokage. I'm really bad at fight scenes, but while I think that it could have been spaced out a little more rather than being one giant paragraph, it was really smooth and easy to understand. It didn't feel awkward at all. I have issues with that. Peanut had told me you were good at fight scenes and that I should study your stuff for hints on improving. Now I see why. XD
It was a little rushed, as Ingo-chan said, but it still really caught my eye. Even if I knew nothing about you or Ryu-kun, I would still want to continue reading this story. You did a reallly good job, and I can't wait to get to the more present stuff where I'm sure your writing skill has improved greatly. XD
Out,
Niji-chan TAT
Author's Response: Yeah, it's actually almost two years old now. Just a couple more months and it will be. I believe I still have that problem. I'll look at my sentences as I type them, and I notice often I seem to do complex sentences. I don't know why that is. Maybe I just feel like they haven't really come to their end yet? I'm not entirely sure. I'll try to keep it in mind when writing (though not too much, because if I do think things over too much as I do them, I mess myself up XP). I've always thought it was around seven or eight, mostly because I think that the massacre happened not too long after Sasuke joined the Academy and I've always thought he was eight when this happened. I can't remember the line of thinking that led me to this, but I believe it was Itachi's age when he left Konoha. Again, I can't remember. I believe I've gotten better, but I'm not sure. I don't believe I'm as good as everyone else makes me seem to be. My writing never compares to the amazingness I see in my head. I know what you mean about it all being together, but, again, this is about two years old XD. I'm glad that you enjoyed the little action thrown in, even if it was bunched together. I hope to see you enjoying this story later on, Niji-chan, and I'm glad that you found it so interesting. I hope it stays that way. Oh, and Ryu says thanks!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 27/03/12 - 06:58 pm · For: Kryptonite
A very realistic interepretation of torture, unlike (forgive me for comparing) mine, something which makes me happy I'm rewriting the story. A little rough here and there, but I liked the way you wrote this chapter, and in fact, was pretty... amazed? Is that the word I'm looking for? No.... I was blown over.
But, LOL, Brekky-chan, that's the first time I've seen the word carefulness.
Author's Response: What do you mean? You're torture was great. I still feel bad for Kokoro when I think about it. As for rewriting it, I don't know how you can deal with rewriting forty-some chapters. Sheesh, that's a lot. As for the chapter, I'm glad you liked it so much. And trust me, it only gets..... Well, worse for Ryu, and I guess same to very slightly better writing. I'm not entirely sure it's a word, but I'm leaving it =D.
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 08/03/12 - 05:05 am · For: Zero to Hero
This was so cool! Everything was so epic and well described. You've outdone yourself, Sasaui! Awesome job! Can't wait to learn more about Yuumai!
Author's Response: Really? I'm glad that you think so. I'm not so sure about outdoing myself, but sure, let's go with that. Don't worry. You'll learn about Yuumai in the next three chapters.
Name: Red Mist (Signed) · Date: 07/03/12 - 05:05 pm · For: Zero to Hero
This was so awesome! This intense mission that just started already seems so epic! I can't wait to see where this is going! Eee! I am so excited just thinking about it!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it so much, Red Mist. As for where this is going, you'll find out whenever I get back to this. It will most definitely be fun.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 07/03/12 - 06:53 am · For: Right Before Your Eyes
woooooahh... =D
kool test u gave em xD
and the whole story was kool and realistic..
you made them think with a 12yr old's mind alright xD
otherwose in some stories... these characters are shown smarter than a 20 year old =L
awesome chapter =D n kool fights and everything ^_^
Kool job Sasu =D
Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I'm also that that you saw it as realistic. I usually have a big problem trying to stay in the right mind set, so it's a big relief that I did. I think it's one of the few times that I'm actually going to have my characters act the age they are.
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 06/03/12 - 07:48 pm · For: Zero to Hero
Wow, sorry for such a late review. This chapter was a doozy to read :P
Anyway...well, wow, where do I begin?
I loved to intricate detail you put into the perry mission. You reloy out a lot of thought into that scene, which surprised me because little assignments like that usually aren't really elaborated. But I enjoyed it all the same.
I really enjoyed the whole fight as well. My heart sang when I saw Ryu's fighting spirit. It was just such a great moment. And Yuumai, even though not much is known, already seems like a sweetheart. Which means JubileeOfPuppies is as well ;)
Great work on this chapter! It was a fantastically or orchestrated piece of writing. Job well done, Sasaui ;)
Author's Response: Don't worry about it. A late review is still a review, right? I think the whole reason I put so much detail into it is because it shows how team 10 acts with each other and everything. This mission did that pretty well, showing their teamwork in a way any mission (including this little one) can. Yeah, Ryu's fighting spirit is fun. I think any fighting spirit of my characters is fun to write about just because they all have such a strong one. It makes any fight scene they're in fun. And yes, Yuumai is truly a sweetheart. I'm glad that you liked it, Rainbow Fire, and I hope you continue to in the future installments.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 04/03/12 - 07:21 am · For: Zero to Hero
Noooooo Daichi is still alive?! Im in suspense right now...great chapter though!
Author's Response: Yep. He's alive and well. I had to do something with him, right? After all, he did get away. Now you guys know what happened to him. The fun stars when we get into what he is going to do next =D.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 04/03/12 - 06:48 am · For: Right Before Your Eyes
that was a great excercise! I'm glad they all passed it. Great teamwork also! Nice work Sasaui-chan
Author's Response: I'm really glad you enjoy it. But the idea came from Silverwolf having me do a manhunt. After that it all just kinda came together.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 03/03/12 - 07:53 am · For: Promise of a Lifetime
Oh wow great chapter! I'm glad Ryu is getting stronger and stronger. It sucks that he's not on a team with Naruto of Sakura but hey what can you do? I like the progression so far I can't wait to see what's next.
Author's Response: Yep. Like all characters, he has to grow. And he most definitely will. If he had already grown strong, then it wouldn't be right. That would be completely wrong =P. As for not being on their team, I wanted to put a twist on things. Plus I decided this near the Hidan and Kakuzu arc, so yeah.....
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 03/03/12 - 07:29 am · For: Pieces
I liked the shogi game between Asuma and Ryu, Ryu almost had him! I'm glad he's starting to vent his emotions though. I also realized something, he doesnt hang around Naruto too much anymore does he? Maybe later he will...anyways great chapter!
Author's Response: Yeah, I enjoyed that part. From the very beginning I had the idea of having this give a bit of a look into they mystery of his brain. That being the strange moment when he did that strategy. He did need a way to vent his emotions, and this just worked perfectly. That, and I wanted to later bond him and Shikamaru. As for Naruto, he'll hang out with him a little, but mostly this is on team 10. Though their bond of friendship will always be there.
Name: Hazard (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 08:38 pm · For: Taken
O_O Jesus you can write a lot. I can't get chapters anywhere near this size, but great job! I'm really intrigued so far.
Author's Response: This? This isn't me writing a lot. Just look at the chapter called: Right Before Your Eyes. That's almost 15,000 words. Now that's a lot. Anyway, I'm glad that you liked this. I hope that this can keep you interested, Hazard.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 07:56 pm · For: Zero to Hero
Really Sasaui, just read the first four chapters of this story and then read this one. Try and tell me then that you haven't improved.
Seriously, everything in this chapter was beautiful. If I had to pick a favorite thing about this chapter, I'd have to say the description of the surroundings with Ryu's internal struggles coming in a close second. Your elaboration in this installment was brilliant, and don't even think of accusing me of exaggerating because I'm really not. This had to be one of your best description pieces so far.
Yuumai came out just as amazingly as I pictured her when you first told me about her. And what's great is that she actually exists: Koinu-chan!
Wow, Daichi, huh? Didn't see that one coming, but then again, I do remember him running away before anyone could actually kill him... Well, this is going to be an interesting arc :D
You did a fantastic job on this chapter. Everything was written with such amazing depth, even the missions with bugs and the description of the team's relationships, it just all meshed together so well. I think the manliest if the mistakes I saw were adding an 's' at the end of some words, just a result of typing too fast. But this was still incredible, I enjoyed every moment of this installment. It took me two hours to read (including breaks), but it was all worth it. Awesome job, Sasaui!
Author's Response: Okay. I haven't improved ;). I feel like I did a pretty okay job to begin with, but then I felt like it began to decline. I've always been pretty good with internal struggles, so I'm not surprised that would be the close second. I'm not sure why it is I write those kind of moments so well...... Well, fine, I won't say you're exaggerating. I'll just say you're crazy =D. I'm glad that you seem to like Yuumai. I just hope I can keep her in character and keep her so that Yuumai likes her. It's a good thing you remembered that. I was actually wondering how many people would remember that he had run away before the jonin got there. So yeah, he's still alive and well. Yeah, it sure will be interesting. Especially since you get answers two things about Ryu in two more chapters. For some reason you describing the 's' thing as the manliest mistakes made me laugh. I don't know why, but it did. I'm really glad that you liked this, and I'm sorry it took you so long to read. I'm just going to blame you because I didn't start writing this long of chapters until you did.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 06:53 pm · For: Superman
Oh wow this chapter was really intense...you created such a dark moood also...That jutsu sounded terrifying, i havent felt anything this dark in a long time. Good chapter, i really enjoyed reading it. I like dark things
Author's Response: I think this is one of my more intense chapters for this story. It's also one of my favorites as well. I really looked forward to this story before I even got too far into the story. That and a chapter that won't happen for a while. The jutsu..... Yeah, it was terrifying, for both the user and the attacked. Actually, it destroyed them both, only in different ways. Is it bad that the destroyed look on his face was the part I was looking forward to the most?
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 06:48 pm · For: Zero to Hero
Answer to your question, Shikamaru. I refuse to read it again to cheat, so let me know if I'm right! What!? WHAT!? I read the description of Yuumai, and I was thinking, wow! She looks li,ke me! Then you named her Yuumai, and I was think, WIAT! WHAT!? AH! I was beginning to wonder if you'd read my chapter of Reality Check while I wasn't looking or something, then AH! I don't even know what to say! This just blows my mind! I'm actually a part of your story Kawa-cha! It's like I'm in three different worlds now, mt own, yours, and Reality Check! And you gave me a wild dog! I love those little zebra killers! I doubt they're in the naruto world, but they're still my all time faorite animal Kawa-cha! My personality wasn't too off, I was justa bit of a damsel lol I have a necklace that I wear all the time too, it looks like HIdan's. I have a locket from my mom, but I don't wear it much for fear of losing it. SOme of the insults very much sounded like things I would say, so that was awesome. I'm just a bit more... I don't know :P ANyhow, this was an all out great chapter even before I showed up all sudden like! This is the first non food related preasant I've gotton today, so this is amazing Kawa-cha! I really love your writing and I can't believe you added such a personal twist! Feel free to e-mail me if you want to know more of I'd act, or read my chapters of reality check. BY the way, is Naruto's mission that was mentioned the Zabuza arc? If so, wonderful job in incorparating the actual plot without involving Ryu! Wait a minute... DAICHI!? NO! NONONONONON! You're supposed to be dead! AGH! This review is very scattered... Anyhow, thank you so much for the gift Kawa-cha, it was far more than I expected!
Author's Response: Ding ding ding ding! That is correct, Yuumai! Shikamaru's shadow began to give in at the end. So now that I've (finally) replied, you don't have to go back and look. Hahaha. I thought that the description would either really throw you off or freak you out. No, I haven't read Reality Check. I'm starting to, but with all the stories I'm catching up on, it's hard. Sheesh, Yuumai. You're just popular apparently. You deserve to be in every one of the stories you're in. Of course I'd give you a wild dog. They're your favorite after all. I thought it would be a nice tradition. I'm sorry about the damsel in distress thing. I didn't think of having you to begin with, instead having a random family, so it was kinda a thing I couldn't find out how to avoid. But don't worry, I'll ask you when I start to write that chapter to help get it more accurate. I got the turtle thing from a chapter of NEFN Masumi-chan gave me. I just had to add it somehow. I hope the rest of your birthday was nice. Yes! Someone caught that. The mission mentioned is, indeed, the one to the land of waves. I was hoping someone would notice it. As for Daichi, I never said that he was dead. No, he still has some plans up his sleeve.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 06:22 pm · For: Kryptonite
I like the bond between Ryu and Sakura. You've done a good job at making me hate Daichi and Shiro though :P I cant wait to read more
Author's Response: Their bond is a really fun thing to do. It's one of my favorite things about this part of the story is the bond. As for Daichi and Shiro, they're two bad guys that really shape who Ryu is. I never even expected them to be much, but they suddenly helped develop his character more than I thought.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/03/12 - 03:31 pm · For: Taken
aw poor Sakura...I hate bullies. Jeez I wonder what these guys want with them...and why is Ino's relative an escapee...Good chapter
Author's Response: Yeah, bullies suck. Aki is extremely mean because she knows just what to go for since everyone else did as well before and while she did. As for her relative, well. You'll just have to wait and read on (which you obviously have.....)
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 22/02/12 - 03:26 pm · For: Right Before Your Eyes
Brother? Ooooh. I want to know more! ANyhoe, first things first. I love Shikamaru. You got his character (and everyone else's) perfect! I really like how you swapped view point so smoothly so that I could tell what they thought of each other. It was also really neat to see what Shikamaru had noticed about Ryu over the years. The Sakura thing was awesome. I thought they had him when they got thr cat, but then BAM! Shadow clone! I really like this team and I like how you did the survival training. It was amazingly awesome. I'm glad and depressed to be caught up at the same time! Update soon-like please Kawa-cha! I loved this so much! The way you incorparated the InoShikaCho formation along with Ryu's lightning style was very good. I can see why Hiruzen put Ryu on those three's team. Overall I thoroughly enjoyed this and I can't wait to see where you take this plot. Best of wished to you Kawa-cha!
Author's Response: Yes, brother. Haven't I thrown in a lot of subtle hints of his brothers? I'm glad that you think I got all of them in character. I think one of the things I was most afraid of was their character. I'm glad you liked how easily I switched between points of view. For Shikamaru's notice of Ryu's change, I did it because I realized that there was, in fact, a big change, and I wanted to show others saw it as well rather than it just being there. Does that make sense? Nope, the black cat didn't bring them any luck =P. I'm really glad that you liked it, Yuumai. As for the idea for the survival training, that all Silverwolf. I just went with what she'd wanted (a manhunt kinda thing). It's sorta difficult to take their perfect formation and try to add to it without messing them up. That's one of the things I'm really afraid of.
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 22/02/12 - 04:30 am · For: Promise of a Lifetime
Since Asuma has personally trained him for 2 years now... Ryu surely seems to have grown pretty strong now =D
and kool... Elemental jutsu..=O n lightning =D awesome... =D
can i knw wat all elements he uses..? hasa it been mentioned as in i forgot or still to be revealed...?
anyways...lol at the love triangle... wait O.o Quadraple xDbetween sasuke sakura ryu n naruto.. :P thoguh poor naruto hardly has any chance :P
well...
LOL at the naruto-sasuke kiss xDDDDD
u put it in well.. xD n lol at atleast one of us would survive xD
and hehe :P at him feeling like kickin sasuke out of the way xD
Well.... sakura is a bird brain to like sasuke aftr all ryu did... n she actually tries not to admit tht she likes ryu.. O.o is she nuts -.-"
hehe.. :P
tht part where he promised her was really really cute =DD
I personally loved it =DD
Awesome chapter Sasaui-chan =DD
Author's Response: Yeah, Ryu sure is growing strong. I enjoyed having it so he was being trained liked that, and it allows him to be stronger but not too strong. As for his elemental chakra, he only has lightning, though that doesn't mean he doesn't have any special abilities that I've kept hidden. Yeah, everyone seems focused on Sakura, though Sasuke doesn't like Sakura and Sasukra doesn't like Naruto. What's strange is Ryu and Sakura are the only ones who like each other, yet she still won't admit it to herself. Wait, I just said that and I'm the one writing it XP. I've always found the kiss scene funny, even if Ryu never really realized what was going on except that Naruto was close to death. I think it's fun writing in Ryu's mind, because he seems so different yet so similar to my usual characters. Maybe it's just because he's a guy =P. She does like him, but she realizes it will only be trouble if she admits it since she still likes Sasuke more. I liked the promise, and it will influence a scene in the future that will be altered from the original manga/anime.
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 21/02/12 - 05:23 pm · For: Promise of a Lifetime
InoShikaCho and Ryu!? I wans't expecting that! That's a really awesome twist! ANyhow, you'll give me a surprise on my birthday? That's way too much! Birthdays'a ren't a big deal with my family, so the thought is enough for me Kawa-cha. I'll try to catch up by then anyway :) Anyhow, this was a great chapter. I just love Ryu and I think he brings out the best in Sakura. I like the pink haired girl in every scene that has nothing to do with Sasuke. If she could fall for someone else her character would be so much more likable. That aside, I like the choice in friends you gave Ryu. I find it hard to write about more than two characters at a time, so getting to this point always is a struggle for me when it comes to Mouken. I wonder if Mouken and Ryu would make good friends... Anyhow, I just love this story. There really are no other statements that get that message across. I wish you the best of luck! I only have one more chapter!
Author's Response: Yeah, I decided to stray from the usual team 7 and went with putting him with team 10. Not only that, but at the time, I had just gotten through with reading about Asuma, so I kinda fell in love with team 10 then. Yeah, I'm gonna do it, but I can't promise how much you like it. It all depends on who you are (and in your case, I hope your one of the people who will like what I'm going to do). It doesn't matter if birthdays aren't a big thing with your family. My family celebrates it, and that's that. Sakura with Ryu is a lot better than the annoying girl with Sasuke. She's a lot more likable when Sasuke leaves. I mean, I wish the stupid Uchiha hadn't, but still, she acts a lot better. That's shown with how she acts around Ryu. I couldn't think of too many people he'd hang out with, and I've always liked Hinata, so I kinda just stuck with her. Then Naruto he's just been friends with since the first day of the Academy. I think you do an amazing job with Mouken no matter when it is you write her. You're just an amazing writer like that. Hm.... I think they'd make good friends. Ryu would definitely be able to help her because of his own past pains. Don't worry, you don't have to get across just how much you love it. As long as I know you love it, I'm happy.
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 17/02/12 - 06:51 pm · For: Pieces
Whoa... I do the exact same thing with my stress, so I related to this very well. The difference is that I have an awesome God I can pray to about hard times. Poor Ryu is so lost. I'm touched with how you incorporated Asuma, I hate thinking about what this would be like if you write up to the point where Asuma dies. I also really like what you did with Sakura, and how you made Ryu fall behind instead of being awesome. You're really very good. I noticed that this chapter just seemed to have so much more emotions than then others. And the song you used at the top! I love RED, but I've never heard that song. I've been listening to it the entire time while I read this. I think this was my absolute favorite chapter Kawa-cha. Don't worry, I'm not disappointed that he'll get older soon. I hope to do the same with Mouken soon. Anyhow, wonderful chapter, I really hope you continue by the time I catch up!
Author's Response: Yeah, I do so as well, though I don't have any memories nearly as bad as poor Ryu. And having God to talk to is definitely a big help. It always seems to calm me down and just get my mind off things. Yeah, like you said, poor Ryu. I think I may just put him through more crap then I do most of my other characters. You're worried about Asuma? Well, there's one other person you need to be worrying about first. Though yes, you're right about hating to think of it. I find myself crying just trying to imagine Ryu's pain, and it truly sucks because I have a pretty vivid imagination. And if he was perfect, where would the fun be? People will sometimes say I write better with emotional stuff. I think I've done a couple of chapters like that for Tainted Guardian and other things that I usually deleted. I can't think of any other things I've really done so with. Yes, RED is absolutely awesome. Is it just me, or do I use a lot of bands you know but songs you don't? Sheesh, Yuumai, I think I"m just doing it to make you listen to more songs. I'm surprised that this one beat Superman seeing as you seemed to like it so much. I'm glad that you enjoyed it, though. As for older, I'm pretty sure he is in the next chapter. Wait, Mouken? Older? I can't wait! I think I'll continue on March 1 ;)
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 13/02/12 - 07:21 am · For: Prologue
oh my god...
=DDD haha awesome...!!
u r a pentecostal too...! ^_^
rare to find one on the net... =P
m one too... =)
actually wen i ws searchin this fic to read... i saw tht ur bio ws bigger... =P so i hought i'd just take a look... :P
random info... my fav quote is "romans:28:2" xD
dnt u lik Chris tomlin...? :P
Author's Response: Oh, you're Pentecostal (I think I forgot the -al for my word =P). Yeah, well, most people just say they're Christian, so most don't know exactly what religion they are. Hahaha. I guess that was a nice surprise for you when you were just going to read this story. Hm, I can't think of what that is right now, but I'm sure it's a great quote. If you mean by asking that that it seems like I don't because I didn't add his name, yes, I do like him, but he's mostly one of the people I just listen to on the radio. The ones I have listed are ones I listen to all the time.
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 12/02/12 - 12:57 pm · For: Superman
I read your bio, the whole the thing! I was thinking, wow, we have quite a bit in common. I especially like Christian stuff and walking while thinking. (When I read stories with sexual themes, I ask the author to warn me where those parts are) Anyhow, on to the story! Wow! Pure thrilling, amazing, not rushed, entrancing awesomeness! I love the way incorparated the other characters, and how you described Ryu's strange jutsu was just amazing. My heart was wrenched by the description of his face, which as you could guess is rare for me. I don't care how long it was, this chapter was worth reading a hundred times over! (I may actually read it again) The decriptoin, the fighting, the emotion. I'm so glad I started this story and I hope you can continue it by the time I catch up! Over all an excellent chapter Kawa-cha!
Author's Response: My bio is long, isn't it? I'm not sure if that's what you meant when you said the whole thing, but it is long. Well, at least I'm not the only one who walks while they think. I was beginning to think I was crazy. Or, well, crazier. I'm glad that you liked this story. And you don't think it was rush. *phew* That's a relief. Yes! I also added the other characters well. Again something I was afraid of - just throwing them all in there. Yeah, Ryu's ability was very strange, wasn't it? Wow. I actually made your heart wrench? I didn't think that was possible. I didn't think I'd done the look on his face as well as I'd seen it in my head, but that fear is now gone. A hundred times? You think it was that good? Well, I'm not sure I agree, but thanks a lot! As for by the time you catch up, well, if you can do that before you're birthday, you may just get a treat that day =D.
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 11/02/12 - 04:41 pm · For: Kryptonite
OH, I feel so bad for them. This chapter was amazing, Kawa-cha! The description of the pain was just excellent! I feel that I know Ryu more and more with every chapter, which is always a plus. I have to wonder though, was that a nightmare, or was it a nightmarish memory? From the sound of it Ryu is some sort of monster, or something. You've done an awesome job in keeping me interested, that's what not answering question does lol If I answered all of my readers' questions, no would be as interested as they are now! Same goes to you. I personally love a story that keeps me guessing. (Ha! I don't know your pain!) ANyhow, I'm loving the story so far and I hope that they're not kidnapped forever!
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm not exactly nice to my characters. I never have been. I just don't find it as fun to read a story if the characters don't go through crap. That's probably not a good thing, but oh well. Do you mean the thing Shiro saw or the Ryu part when he was forced asleep? I think you mean the first one, which was neither. It was something else all together. What, though, I'm not telling you =D. Ryu's not a monster, no. He is most definitely not a monster. What kind of monster is as nice as he is? I'm glad that you continue to be interested, Yuumai. Then again, if you weren't, I don't think I'd be replying to this review right now. You're right about the questions thing, and I know that. I enjoy reading them as well. I'm just not used to being given as many questions as you make so often. I mean, it seems like I'll get 10 questions, then I'll have one answered just to get three more. I love you story, but sheesh, you know how to keep me guessing. Anyway, no they won't be kidnapped forever. There wouldn't be any fun that way =P.
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 10/02/12 - 05:03 pm · For: Taken
I don't even know what to say. This was, was... Completely exhilarating! I didn't expect you to start with Anbu, no one does that! (At least not that I know of) And then you made Shiro and Hana related to Sakura and Ino!? Taht's amazing! And I love Ryu and realy want to know what happened to him! I'm so glad I read this and I hope you continue it from your current place. This is a great story, Sasaui. And AHG! I hate Aki! She's evil, and annopying and, and.... I'm done.
Author's Response: Well, I'm sorry I left you speechless then. At least I know you regained it since there's more in the review. It was a different type of beginning, huh? I think I like it more because of that, though. Yep. Shiro is (though mostly just by clan) related to Ino and Hana is Sakura's aunt. I don't think I've seen many stories with the relatives taking a big role in the story. And once again you are made to wonder about Ryu's past. The shoe is on the other foot now, Yuumai. You can now see how I feel. Though I am starting to feel bad for all the people I torture with it now that I know how it feels. I hope I can continue like this, but it wouldn't surprise me if I messed it up somewhere. I hope you continue to read and enjoy, Yuumai.