Ugh, the computer screen hurts my eyes... It's times like this when I don't enjoy swimming, the darn chlorine level is off the charts... I'd take my glasses off to help ease the pain in my eyes, but then I wouldn't be able to write the review... *sigh*

Anyway, other than the awful burning...

I'm going to give the review form a shot, let's see how my comments come out when I have guidelines to tell me what you want to know ;)

o/ Plot development? 10/10

What can I say? I've missed reading about Ren. Seeing him in the middle of the action is a real contrast to the previous chapter, where there were debates and conflicts. There was more suspense here, which also helps move the story along. The fact that it's the last installment of Chapter 7 also helps ;D

o/Use of characters? 10/10

You always do so well with characters, whether they be yours or Kishimoto-sensei's. You know how to use them, you know how to portray them, and you know how to write them. Your brilliant with OCs and canon alike.

o/ Description? 10/10

Okay, seriously, why do you have this section up for yourself? I've always wondered if you get tired of me telling you just how amazing your description is. This chapter was great with elaboration, giving the chapter enough to understand the scene while also not giving too much that it's excessive. It was a great balance of scenery and actions.

o/ Inconsistencies with cannon plot? Characters in-character as regards to the original work? 10/10

Oh, never! You've never had this problem, ever! And that's not just because this is an original plot that deviates from the manga a bit. Everyone is in character, the plot makes sense, and everything was just great.

I think this would be the correct section to say that I loved Ren in this. Just the way he was caring for Momoka made me think of his role as the protective brother to Naomi. He was a bit scolding of his student since she didn't obey his advice, but he was stll so sweet and caring towards her. It's one of the reasons I like him so much :)

o/ Overall quality of the writing? Easy to read? Grammar and Spelling? 9/10

*facepalm* I did see mistakes here. Only a couple times when there was a word missing that made it hard to understand what the sentence said. Words like 'as', 'has', etc... But other than that, it was still awesome.

o/ Enjoyment? An engaging read? 10/10

For me personally, it's either a 10 or zero. If I don't enjoy something, I'm not going to read it. And you know I enjoy everything you write ;)

o/ Overall? 10/10

Loved it. Intense, suspenseful, and awesome. Everything was just... seriously amazing. I really enjoyed the plot development here, it really was a great read. Great job, Batty-O'Nee-san!

Now I'm going to get eye drops... Ick...

Author's Response: Honey, if your eyes hurt that much you should have gotten the eye drops first. The review could easily have waited until they felt better!

Wow! All those tens... I feel honoured. I know you think highly of me, but seeing it like that... Well, thank you! I'll try to keep that high standard... And yes, I know what you mean about mistakes. Recently I'm finding more and more mistakes like that creeping in... I'll think one thing and type another or not type something I thought I did... It's very annoying... Urgh... I need to start looking for a beta again really...