Wow! This was incredible! I love my character, let me just say that. Her attitude seems a heck of a lot like mine, especially when she's angry. The resemblance is amazing.

Now, I know I say this way too often, but your description really astounds me. It's so elaborate, but not to the point where it's boring. It's helpful and in all honesty, brilliant.

I loved the action! It was a quick change from the annoyed chuunin to the fearful suspense. Nice transition, I loved it. And now we finally see the grey child awake and possibly ready to destroy some more.

I'm so excited, I really can't wait for more now! And if you're wondering, yes, this cheered me up a whole lot. Thanks for caring so much, but it really was an amazing chapter. Great work!

Author's Response: Yes, the changeover from humour to action scene was one of which I confess I'm actually proud. I think the sheer speed of it helps ensure that the reader isn't totally ready when Naruto gets thrown into action and that helps keep things unbalanced and sudden. Something which I thought worked well *touch wood* *touch wood* *touch wood* *touch wood*... (considering how often I do that, I really should explain to you that in the UK when we say 'touch' wood it means the same as 'knock on' wood in America.) That doesn't really means it's as great as I think it is. In fact I'm always aware that being the author means I'm prone to that wonderful thing where I read 'what I thought I wrote' as opposed to what I 'really did' - but I'm fairly confident that this worked nicely (*touch wood*). Ask me again when I reread this in about three months time and I may just be pulling my hair out.
I'm glad you liked your character. That is such a relief. I had a bit of a challenge finding different ways to express the very lovely personalities of three very lovely girls without making you all seem the same and without upsetting anyone. Yours was probably the one where I took some of the bigger risks, so I'm really glad you actually liked it. I was going for a mysterious reticent kind-of vibe and trying keep her personality distinctive and separate from the wolf's (who is probably one of my all-time favourites in this entire story), while still having the two compliment each other. I think all three cameos came out pretty well, as characters, but the opinions of the people they were based on is much more important in this case...