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Wow... This was an excellent chapter. And it may sound like I'm just saying this, as I love all of your chapters, but this one really stood out, and I loved the entire thing.

We finally get to see how Naomi is doing, after her little episode. And we also get to see Gaara's growing feelings even more now, as he tries to steady himself with dealing with the pain of seeing the fallen hime. It was great insight to his normally hidden feelings.

When Ren showed up, it was a great display of brotherly affection toward his sister. Normally, Ren comes across as the overprotective slightly strict brother. But this time, he was illustrated as a broken man, as he fears he will lose part of his family. I saw great contrast in him compared to his other chapters, and I loved how he was portrayed.

And of course, the heartwrenching speech by the brother himself, as he describes Naomi's terrible life. It was a wonderful build-up to Naomi's awakening, and it was simply astounding.

The final lines had my eyes wide and my open. It was just that thrilling. It was a mean cliffhanger, but it was still a brilliant way to end the chapter.

I loved this entire chapter, by far one of my personal favorites in terms of installments. Great work with this scene, excellent job well done. It was incredible. I can only imagine what you have coming next. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: It stands out for me too and was one of my favourites to write about. Possibly because we are finally just hinting on a little romance there and that's both familiar and very exiting territory for me.
I was surprised by your interpretation of the scene. It was a little different from mine, but that's a good thing. It's great to get that different perspective on the action in my writing. I don't always spell out things clearly, precisely to allow for a little ambiguity and your ideas are just as valid as mine. Having a second opinion also opens up more possibilities for me in what to do next, so thank you. That's really great.