Reviews For She Was Beautiful
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 20/07/11 - 07:28 pm · For: Chapter 2.a
Once again it was as if Gaara was writing this himself. You kept everyone in character, which can be hard for some people. I was entranced from the very beginning. You wrote so well I could make it a movie in my head. I don't know what to say it was so impressive. I guess I can only say I LOVED LOVED LOVED x23.62953 (just a random decimal I came up with). I'm so glad I took the time to read this.
Another random thing: If a hamster made of cookie doe ate a chocolate monkey, would it make a chocolate chip hamster? I just had to ask because I started thinking of hamsters and then the monkeys started swarming. By the way, I tried to send them through, but I'm not sure if it worked. I know it didn't work when I tried to email my sister to Siberia *sigh*. Having my own room would have been so cool, too.
As you'll notice, my brain rarely stays in one place. So, I must ask forgiveness for my brain.
And, the most important part of the review...........*dramatic pause*....... IT WAS AMAZINGLY AWESOME!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really pleased you're enjoying the story. Not everybody reads passed the first chapter, so its great that continued to give me feedback. Thank you. It's great to hear people's opinions. I don't think I've ever had a review for this particular part, so thank you!rnrnI already answered your question in silverwolf's forums, but I am inclined to agree with you that it probably would make a choc chip hamster - probably with a chocolate filling, given the size difference. Perhaps we should get you some cookie dough hamsters to protect you from those monkeys?
Name: WinterzDream (Signed) · Date: 16/07/11 - 07:14 pm · For: Chapter 2.a
ooooh interesting! I'm just now getting the chance to actually read chapter two....>.> but I love how detailed your writing is and its SOOO LONG! my god it is like a novel. loves it though :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I try my best. My best may not always be good enough, but I don't consider that an excuse not to try. In fact I attempt to always try for perfection - whether I can achieve that or, as in virtually every case, not. You know better than anyone how high my standards are, being one of the small group people I hold to anything like them. With other people I have standards based on the skill and talent I judge each individual to have - with myself though I simply expect 'perfection': Fun engaging entertainment that leaps out of the page into your mind and broad artistic writing skill that brings out my themes and ideas. Obviously I'm no where near good enough to actually achieve that level, but that is what I have in mind every time I sit down to write. Having someone I judge to be as talented as you (and SilverWolf and the others) actually sit down read my work and provide me with insight into what you liked and didn't like is one of the highest honours for me. So thank you for coming back to not only read chapter 2, but also to review for me. That is truely amazing and makes me very happy.
rnAnd yes, well spotted, this is actually meant to be a Naruto novel - no holds barred and no compromises - in the way it's laid out and set up. I wanted to challenge my writing and take it to the next level and this is my attempt to do that. Whether I've actually created something worth reading or not - I couldn't say - Sometimes I love it. Sometimes I hate it - but I'm determined to finish it regardless. If only to prove that I can.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/03/11 - 03:47 am · For: Chapter 2.a
Cool! Mission! This was very good, and an interesting plot development at that. And yeah, I'm pretty sure splitting a chapter is fine. I've seen other authors do it on here before, so I don't see why not you. But anyways, this chapter was very interesting, and I look forward to seeing what happens next. Update soon please!