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Member since: 13/12/09
Website: fanfictionwriters.webs.com
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Fanfictions
Cursed Saint is one of my main stories. It is my most popular story as well, and I hope you like it. It's about a new addition to Konoha, Ryu Sarutobi, the "adopted "grandson of Hiruzen Sarutobi.
Final Wish is my newest Naruto fanfiction. It is a response to my own Naruto challenge, The Nemuri Promise. A trailer has not been written for it, but will be eventually.
Retribution is a co-written story with me and Itoko-san (Shizake Uchiha). It is alternatively updated by the two of us. It will not have a preview/trailer written for it.
Will of the Dragon is my only non-Naruto story on here. It is a One Piece fanfiction, and it is also a SYOC/Joint story, depending on if it is here or if it is at fanfiction.net. Characters are still being accepted and probably will be throughout much of the story.
Bio Part
Why you are looking here is beyond me. Though since you're here, I may as well let you know who I am (writer wise. I don't feel like getting any stalkers, thank you very much). How about we just start with the basics and slowly build, huh?
Basics
User Name: Sasaui Uchiha. It's probably obvious, but you can just call me Sasaui (pronounced Saw-say-you. Yes, it's weird. That's because I made it up). The only other nickname I've gotten is Kawa-cha from the fabulous Yuumai (JubileeOfPuppies).
Likes: I enjoy walking and thinking. It's a strange hobby, I know, but I love it. I also enjoy reading all the amazing stories on this site. So yeah, a lot of them. I enjoy making new friends and talking to Silverwolf and DestinyGirl on Fanfictionwriters.webs.com, my site. They're the ones who are always on there, so I have fun talking to them. As is probably obvious, I love to write.
Dislikes: Cuss words. I can deal with them in writing since I can change them in my mind, but I hate hearing them out loud because I can't do it the same way. I also don't like either Orochimaru or the Joker. I can't figure out which is creepier. Orochimaru just creeps me out because of a nightmare I had about him and the Joker..... Well, if you need an explanation for him, you obviously have not seen him. I also don't like people who are cruel to others just because of their own selfish desires.
Hobbies: Well, like I said before, I have a strange hobby of walking while thinking. Another couple are reading and typing. One of my hobbies you don't know of but is slowly becoming my favorite is Karate. Since October 23, 2011, I have been a yellow belt. I can't remember when I started except that it was last year while I was in the eighth grade around the end of winter. I only remember it was then because we didn't have to run. Another hobby I have is drawing even if I'm not all that good at it. You'll see some of my drawings on the bios I have for my characters in Tainted Guardian.
Personality: Most importantly, I am a Pentecostal Christian. Most important thing about me. I'm a mostly nice person. The only time I say anything mean is when I'm joking. I'll give anything a chance if it catches my interest or if someone asks me to read it unless it's rated 18 for sexual reasons or if it's yaoi/yuri. Christian, remember? I'm also very protective, something that will be shown in my characters. Another thing that may reflect in my characters is how I hate violence and unnecessary pain. It's strange that I hate it yet I'm in Karate, huh? But that's only because I've more or less been raised fighting my older brother. I also believe it's wrong to hurt someone for hurting you. If you already know what it feels like, why be so cruel as to make them go through the same pain?
Favorites
Now we'll get into some random favorites of mine. Why? Well, because. If you don't want to know this information, nobody said you had to read. The number of favorites will vary and I doubt many of the things will be in order.
Favorite Sport: Karate
Favorite Color(s): White and Black
Favorite Food: Chicken
Favorite type of Food: Asian
Favorite Animal: Wolf
Favorite Quote: For God so loved the world, that He gave His only begotten Son, so whosoever believeth in Him should not perish, but have everlasting life.
Favorite Authors/Books:
1)Richelle Mead: Vampire Academy and Bloodlines series
2)Rick Riordan: Percy Jackson and the Olympians and The Heroes of Olympus series
3)Suzanne Collins: Hunger Games series
4) Kelly Armstrong: Darkest Powers series
5) J.K Rowling: Harry Potter series
Favorite Characters from Favorite Books
1) Rose from VA and Adrian from Bloodlines
2) Pery or Luke in PJatO and either Percy, Jason, or possibly Leo for THoO series
3) Peeta. Sorry, Katniss, but I like him better.
4) Derek, definitely Derek.
5) Sirius Black
Favorite Manga:
1) Naruto
2) Kenichi: The Strongest Disciple
3) Psyren
4) Breaker: New Waves
5) Breaker (the first of the manwha series. Manwha is Korean manga)
6) Dragon Quest Dai no Daiboken
7) Fairy Tail
8) Bleach
9) Rave Master
10) O-Parts Hunter
11) 1/2 Prince
12) Hunter x Hunter
13) Inuyasha
Favorite Characters from Favorite Manga:
1) Naruto, Hinata, Itachi, or Nagato. Yes, I'm stuck on all 4.
2)Kenichi
3)Ageha Yoshina
4) Shioon
5) Still Shioon
6) Dai
7) Natsu
8) Keisuke Urahara
9) Haru
10) Jio
11) Gui
12) Gon
13) Inuyasha
Favorite Anime (including movies):
1) Spirited Away
2) Princess Mononoke
3) Naruto
4) Kenichi: The Mightiest Disciple
5) Claymore
6) Does The Last Airbender count as Anime?
7) Yu-Gi-Oh
8) Dragon Ball (Z, GT)
Favorite Character from Favorite Anime:
1) Haku
2) Ashitaka
3) Again it's between Naruto, Hinata, Itachi, and Nagato
4) Kenichi
5) Rocky
6) Zuko
7) Between Yugi and Yusei
8) Either Goku, Trunks, or Vegeta
Favorite Video Games:
1) Kingdom Hearts
2) Pokemon: Black
3) .Hack
4) Final Fantasy 7
5) Chrono Cross
6) Final Fantasy: Crisis Core
Favorite Character from Favorite Game:
1) It's between Sora, Roxas, Axel, and Riku
2) I think I'd say N for this
3) Haseo
4) Cloud
5) Serge or Glenn
6) Zack
Favorite Bands:
1) Thousand Foot Krutch
2) Red
3) Pillar
4) Skillet
5) Story of the Year
6) Crossfade
7) Breaking Benjamin
8) Three Days Grace
9)Sr-71
10) Simple Plan
Well, I think that's all for bands.......
Favorite Song(s) by Favorite Bands:
1) Between The Part that Hurts the Most (Is You), Faith, Love, and Happiness, and Slow Bleed
2) Between Death of Me and Shadows I think......
3) Not Without A Fight
4) Hero
5) Just Close Your Eyes
6) Colors
7) I Will Not Bow
8) Never Too Late or Break
9) Tomorrow
10) Save You
Now I believe I am done with favorites. Sheesh, that was a long list.......
Writer
As a writer, and by that I do not mean fanfiction writer but an actual writer, I have written one complete story that keeps jumping around in page length for some recent. The first time I checked it was 400+ pages and then it was suddenly 600+ pages next time I checked. I have a million other ideas swirling around in my head, but I haven't written most of them mostly because I've been focusing on this one story. I've been trying to get a literacy agent and before long I may just have one. Fingers crossed and prays being sent.
Fanfiction
I didn't even know what fanfiction was until I was in the fifth grade. That's when I learned about it and it was by complete accident. Some kid I knew was showing around pictures of Naruto. I got a few of the pictures, and there was a link at the bottom - Narutoworld.com. Curious, I went to it.
Sadly, Narutoworld no longer has a part for fanfiction. When I first visited it, though, it did. I checked it out because I wanted to see what it was and that is where I first read fanfiction. I still remember the two that I actually read, too. Well, one title and another one just what it was about. The first one was Colors of Life and Death. It's funny that it's actually here on Tonfa now. The other was about a girl who had known Sasuke as a child returning to Konoha. It showed them bonding again and everything, until the end where Itachi returned and killed her. It was during this time I even found out about fanfiction.
Since the fanfiction part of Narutoworld was taken off, I began to search for a new fanfiction site. Somehow during this search, I found Tonfa. After reading a few of the fanfictions, mostly one done by an author maybe a few of you know known as WolfTeam000. She was a great author and is probably the main reason I stuck with fanfiction rather than got bored. I've recently refound her on Fanfiction.net writing Fairy Tail fanfiction because I got bored and looked at her fanfiction.net account and saw she had updated. Then my friends began to vary and more people began writing wonderful stories such as RowanRose's Kokoro Uchiha fanfic. It started way back when. Sheesh, I feel old yet I'm only 15.
My first ever fanfiction was similar to Never Too Late: a girl came to Konoha to help team 7 with the chuunin exams. The only thing was it was with Naruto and Sakura and Sasuke had actually run off to Orochimaru. The girl's name was still Kina, she had the same kekkei genkai, but she was working for Sasuke and had a demon in her. That's not how it is now. It was called Unknown Secret, which is also the name of Never Too Late's first arc.
After this fanfiction, I began to write a few more, most of which shall never see the light of day again. One that has stuck with me, though, since around when I first began as Bre2k8 is Tainted Guardian. Some may remember it as Sasaui Uchiha. It was inspired after reading a few SasuOc fanfics where the female of the group was another survivor. Primarily this was Crimson Lily's fanfic, Another Survivor: Uchiha Love Blossoms.
Now I am mostly where I am today, still working on stories I came up later on and even reviving a few of my ideas from back when I was Bre2k8. I've made some great friends and am very glad I joined Tonfa.
Fanfictionwriters.webs.com
This is my website. If anyone is just looking for a very weird place to hang out and be strange, this is a place you should go. Though I must warn you, it may be too strange and make you go insane.
YOUR STORY Reward
YOUR STORY is the best compliment I will give a person. If you get out of this world or something similar or weird (such as eight thumbs up), then you're really close to YOUR STORY. Or I just forget to tell you =P. Anyway, it's basically like saying that your story is just so great, it becomes an adjective itself that explains its awesomeness because no adjective can. Does that make sense?
Anyway, here's a list of the stories (that I remember) are on the YOUR STORY list:
Reincarnation of a Legend by Silverwofl213
Rekindle the Lost Flame by Silverwolf1213
Pirates of the Mist by Silverwolf1213
The White Rose by Silverwolf1213
Broken Wings by Destiny Girl
Beneath the Darkness by DestinyGirl
How to Adapt and Overcome by xXxTiNkXxX
Rotes Blut by BattyBigSister
She Was Beautiful by BattyBigSister
Child of Hex by JubileeOfPuppies
Endeavor by JubileeOfPuppies
Space Children by Firestar83
Fire Escape by DropDeadThenDance
The Naruto Games by Konan
Three Days by Silverwolf1213
Stereotype by DropDeadThenDance
Cygnus Olor by RowanRose
Reality Check by UzamakiMasumi
A Tale Best Told Dead by Silverwolf1213
The Path Each Takes series by Shizake Uchiha
Reverse This Curse by xXxTiNkXxX
The Princess and The Freeman by BrontesWorld and DropDeadThenDance
If I have told you that your story is YOUR STORY but forgot to mention it, please let me know.
So, now that my bio is finally ended, those who deemed it worthy enough to read, you can rest your eyes.
Rated: 15
[Reviews - 220]
Let's break it down. Naruto's a reckless young shinobi with passion and heart. Striving to get attention and respect, he has an attitude that makes those around want to shut his loud mouth. Then there's his rival teammate, Sasuke, a boy who keeps himself at distance and makes no personal ties. His one-track vengeful mind and lust for his brother's demise has carried him through a life of hatred and solitude. Along comes the damsel in distress, Sakura, ditzy and unrequitedly in love with our dark, brooding avenger. Her low self-esteem and lack of ninja tact makes her a casualty for her team, and nothing more. Enter their mission - Rayne Sayomi, a carefree individual with the strength that would make a mountain shake. Her personality makes those around instantly like her, though her short temperament can bring out the demon inside. Literally. Together, these four are going to shape the paths they each take in life, but there are about ninety-nine ways to die between them and their future.
CHAPTERS CURRENTLY UNDER REVISION AS OF 7/21/15
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto
Characters: Akatsuki, Dosu Kinuta, Hidden Leaf Ninja, Hidden Sound Ninja, Itachi Uchiha, Izumo Kamizuki, Kakashi Hatake, Kin Tsuchi, Kyuubi (Kurama), Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Orochimaru, Pair OCSasu, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha, Zaku Abumi
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Humor, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 45 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 200080 | Read count: 139821 [Report This]
Published: 19/07/10 | Updated: 12/11/12
Date: 02/08/10 Title: Chapter 5: First Steps Into Konoha - Not Exactly Steps
HAHAHAHA! I love your story's plot, characters, and everydangthing! It's always leaving me laughing and craving more.
Author's Response: Again, thank you so much! It\'s wonderful to hear that ^^
\r\nI tell ya, when I logged on today and saw 4 new reviews I was like OuO -explodes-
\r\nYou\'ve definitely pumped me up to go write another chapter!~ Lol, I love writing this <3
\r\nI\'m sure I\'m going to like your story just as much when my computer actually lets me read it ._. -Rock Lee karate kicks computer-
Date: 06/02/12 Title: Chapter 31: I am Woman, Hear Me Roar!
I should be sympathizing with Rayne since I'm a fellow girl (though it wasn't as bad as hers), but I was laughing at her the entire time.
I loved the part about learning a bijuu's name. It has me wondering just how having a more experienced jinchuuriki there with him from the beginning.
Even though I knew it was going to have to happen, I was grinning like crazy when Naruto busted the balloon. GO NARUTO! I thought it was funny how Pervy Sage knew about her little shopping trip, but it was Naruto's final comment that had me laughing like crazy. I wonder how Naruto will live with both Rayne and shippuden Sakura. And now I really can't wait until Rayne and Tsunade meet. Great job! This was amazing!
Date: 03/02/12 Title: Chapter 30: Bonds of Hatred
Well, first off, congrats on getting all the Cardcaptor Sakura mangas. I've never read it, but it's clear you like it. Anyway.......
ITACHI AND RAYNE ARE SO FUN. I may hate them being like that because it hurts Sasuke more, but I still can't help but love Itachi and Rayne, and I loved how Itachi told her to protect Sasuke.
I'm really glad that Rayne will be joining Naruto and Jariya. Though her and Tsunade..... Well, we'll see just how big their two fires combines are.
Date: 25/01/12 Title: Chapter 29: Crimson Nightmare
Sheesh. It took me a few days, but I did it! I reviewed each of your sudden and unexpected updates (which I'm very glad you released). Okay, now on to the chapter review!
Holy flying chocolate monkeys x2.5! That was just amazing. I love how easily you've added Rayne into the original plot. You do a truly exceptional job at it. And you also do a great job at tying her into the past of other characters (such as Zaku and Itachi) without messing anything up. That's also a great feat.
*face palm* You just gotta love Rayne's mind. Who else can be thinking of the threat before her at the same time as thinking of how sexy they are? And I just loved what Itachi said about her more vulgar (I think that's the right word) language. I just found it immensely funny for some reason. And I loved the way you had them know each other.
Though I really am curious as to if Itachi likes Rayne or who she reminds him of. Dang you! How date you leave such an evil mystery? It seems like it's her because of the Uchiha men comment, but then the eyes thing has me curious. Oh, and I loved x10 the end about her yelling at herself. Your story is humerous yet has some serious moments.
As for the possible sequel, I really hope you do it. But as the writer, that's your decision. Either I know it (just like this) would earn the title of YOUR STORY.
Author's Response: Thank you ;3; I try to tie it in precisely and to the best of my ability~ MUAHAHA! I WILL NEVER TELL HOW ITACHI FEELS! ONLY I KNOW THE SECRET! ...I love Itachi just as much as I love Sasuke, but I won\'t go out of character and reveal everything easily ;3 Well, in the comments on my first chapter I said I have BIG plans for this story...as in I already have all events of this story mapped out, as well as how it\'s ending, and, in addition, have a complete outline of the sequel...I\'M ON FIREEEEE!
Date: 06/03/12 Title: Chapter 32: Snake Eyes
Who needs monster Sakura when you have Rayne? Sheesh, she's kinda scary. I thought it would be cool to see her and Tsunade fight, but the old toad fart got in the way.
I loved the part where Rayne talked to Jiraiya. It was just so heartfelt. It made me really miss the Third as well. I liked the part where Jiraiya said: “Sometimes a shinobi’s strongest feelings can be his greatest strength.” That was my favorite sentence in the entire chapter.
The second one being: We’re ALIKE?! No way! My chest can’t grow that huge! NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!'
That is probably one of the best ways you could end a chapter like this. You have all this sad and tense stuff, and then you end it with some great humor. This was an awesome chapter that I can't help but love. Great job, xXxTiNkXxX!
Date: 13/07/12 Title: Chapter 36: Konoha Sports Festival Revived!
*staring at ground with red face* I'm probably your only reviewer who, rather than laughed, blushed/became embarrassed reading the perverted parts in this. I didn't exactly understand some of those parts, but the parts I did had me in a place between embarrassment reading it and blushing seeing as I can picture most things I read (specifically didn't do it during the woods scene since, well......). Yeah yeah, sheltered, innocent, similar woods. I know. It's pointed out quite often.
Anyway, I really liked this chapter. It was a fun chapter to read, giving us a bit of time to relax after everything like the previous chapter. I enjoyed seeing the competition between her and Sasuke, as well as her bickering with Neji. It was just so fun XD. And the Sasuke and Rayne moments were just so cute and fluffy! I loved it! The only part that made me sad was the part where Sakura asked her about Sasuke. I really don't want their friendship destroyed over him!
I especially liked the new challenge at the end, and how you had Rayne help Naruto with his bathroom problem. It gave it a nice Rayne flare to it!
Great job with this chapter, Tink-chan. I really enjoyed it.
Author's Response: The Sports Festival OVA was so entertaining that I knew I'd want to include it in my story (even though the OVA's and movies are supposed to have nothing to do with the anime). I'm sorry I put my perverse humor in there and threw you off; it's just me xD ..Everything needs a Rayne flare! Even Naruto's bowel movements!! :x ... xD Thank you for reviewing!! Much love xoxo~
Date: 06/08/10 Title: Chapter 8: Find the Crimson Four Leafed Clover! Part II
Okay, I'm half glad I didn't know what all of that meant. Mostly the more perverted stuff. I guess that's because I'm only a thirteen year old, even though, sadly, most people my age already know all of that stuff. *shakes head and thinks: Kids today* Anyway, great chapter. I can't wait for the next one. If you update on this, I'll update on Never Too Late.
Author's Response: Lol ^^;;; well then, beware of some of the other perverse stuff that I may put in chapters
Rayne is a little..risque ;D
-shakes head with you- I know right? Isn\'t it sad? I thought boys were icky even when I was 13...and I still do lol I UPDATED! NOW YOU UPDATE! HAHA! C:<
Date: 06/08/10 Title: Chapter 7: Find the Crimson Four Leafed Clover! Part I
I love your story, like I've put almost every time. And, since I'm repeating myself, this story is just too dang hilarious. I can't wait to read the next chapter. BTW, I have no clue what's wrong with Sasaui Uchiha. Is Never Too Late the only one that works or something?
Author's Response: The only one that doesn\'t work is Sasaui Uchiha :I All the others do, which is totally weird, and totally sucks, because I\'d love to read the store >:C I swear this site hates me ;A; I don\'t know why it won\'t work for me when other people can read it
Date: 27/07/11 Title: Chapter 26: 16000 Yen on Naruto Uzumaki!
Sorry but first off I must point something out. I've seen this a few times, and for all I know I'm the wrong one, but I'm pretty sure that he failed the regular clone jutsu and then learned the shadow clone jutsu from the scroll. Ok, now to the good stuff. It was an amazing chapter. You continue to make me laugh with the things rayne does (rayne isn't uppercase because I'm doing this on an iPod). Her seeing Izumo and the bet where both funny and (with the bet) continued to show rayne's faith in naruto. Even though I've heard naruto's speech before, I had goosebumps. I especially liked how well you added rayne into both the story and his speech. Yeah, I probably should have mentioned how well and easily you've added rayne into the story a while ago. Anyway, your story was once again YOUR STORY. Great job!
Author's Response: When I watched the episode where Naruto and Neji fight, unless I\'m deaf, Naruto said Shadow Clone Jutsu...you may be right, but that\'s what I heard Naruto say...unless I\'m deaf xD And I\'m too lazy to go back and look trololol.. anyway, thank you so much again! And thank you so so much for being a constant reviewer... ;3; I love you xoxo-
Date: 23/06/12 Title: Chapter 34: Snake, Toad, Slug, Weasel
Sorry it took me so long to review. I read this once, but I never got to reading it. Again, sorry.
Anyway, this was an amazing update. I really enjoyed it. It was an extremely fun read, filled with action, bonding, fun, and Rayneness.
I loved seeing the bond form between Rayne and Rokubi. It's nice to see the demon and human bonded like friends. I thought it was very sweet and cute. Nobody, not even a demon, should be all alone and hated like the bijuu.
The fighting was mind blowing. I loved seeing that smug snake freak getting his butt kicked. And it was definitely a chapter of personal growth for Rayne concerning Orofreak.
The end was extremely cute. I absolutely loved it. Rayne and Sasuke's love-hate relationship is so fun and very expected when Sasuke is involved. I hope she can figure out everything, and I can't wait to see how Rayne affects the Sasuke Retrival arc.
This was a great chapter, Tink-chan (is it okay if I call you that). Now I must read more! Oh, and great picture. I love it. It's so fun and silly.
Author's Response: No need to apologize! I always appreciate reading your reviews, whenever you have the time to make them!! (; Tink-chan is wonderful. I've never been called "chan" before *u* Zomg I feel loved! Thanks for the review, it brought a big smile to my face!
Date: 25/07/11 Title: Chapter 25: Me, Myself, and My Bijuu
Oh boy. A love triangle. I'm not sure if I feel bad for Sasuke or if I should feel bad for Naruto. Man, I want to see what's going to happen. I'm especially excited to see how Rayne will fit in with the upcoming chunin exams end. You have me jumping up and down in excitement. Like always, your story is YOUR STORY. I seriously need to come up with some new compliments....... Only problem is there's no compliment in the world to describe your story. I'll have to make a list of all these illegal stories and send them to the cops. As for another story by YOU, of course you should do it. More humor from you would be amazing and probably kill me from laughing, but still. This story had me laughing at the beginning, and then I was hooked with the confession of the demons thing. And to put it all together, you end with a LOVE confession. I should have seen it coming and all, but you still surprised me after the Sasuke thing two chapters ago. Please write more soon or I might just die. You never know until it happens.
Author's Response: Mmm...you know, honestly, I was thinking of making a love triangle between the three of them...but I don\'t want to make my characters suffer more than they are going to xD I\'ve pretty much mapped out the entire remainder of this story, and I have to say, I just love putting people through traumatic events >u>
\r\nThe love confession can be seen two ways, and it is meant two ways. For one, it\'s a brotherly sisterly love. That\'s a definite, because thats the way I want Rayne and Naruto\'s relationship to be. However, the second meaning, is what you picked up on. For Naruto, Rayne is the only person that fully accepts him for who he is, and she\'s the only person he has been able to bond with in life so quickly. Naruto is in love with her, hands down. And as much as he accepts their brotherly sisterly love, when he tells her that he loves her, he means it in a much deeper way. For now though, Rayne is fancying Sasuke, buuuut you never know what may happen (;
Date: 07/08/10 Title: Chapter 9: Weeds, Garbage, and Doggies! OH MY!
HAHAHAHA! I absolutely love Rayne. I can't wait to read more. By the way, I came through with my promise, only a few hours late. -_-". Sorry. Anyway, please update soon. And have you tried going to Sasaui Uchiha on the Recent page, or is this site sticking to its decision to hate you?
Author's Response: =u= I love her too <3333 Hurrr.
-is going to read your story now-
Yeah, I\'ve tried reading it from the Recent Page, on your profile, and in the search when I search it...and I just can\'t read it. The text doesn\'t appear for me =A=
Date: 02/08/10 Title: Chapter 4: Two of A Kind
Oh man! Sasuke must be feeling seriously whack since he doesn't usually talk to anyone like that. I'd feel weird, too, if I were to talk to someone about hormones....and some of the more perverted stuff..... Anyway, good chapter. No, correction, amazing chapter. Cannot wait to read more!
Author's Response: Someone has to crack his shell ;] Who better than Rayne herself? Because...we all know Sakura would crack it in...a different way... >_>
Date: 01/09/12 Title: Chapter 37: Firework; Naruto's Birthday!
I..... I don't know. I'm very iffy about the beginning of the chapter. I'm not sure if it's been like this and I haven't noticed and it's just hitting hard or if it was just more in this chapter (I'm guessing the latter), but this just, to tell the truth, kinda irked me. They were just..... Well, acting too much like kids at my school I really don't like. The under age drinking, some things I saw that in my mind were OOC, and just all the hormonal stuff. I can see some of the stuff at the end, but at the beginning it just seemed like too much for me. I'm sorry - this is just the way my mind works. It has nothing to do with you're writing, because it was great. It's just how I am.
As they all dispersed, I began to enjoy it. You are doing a good job with this relationship, I believe. Especially with Sasuke's uncertainty of his feelings. Love is most definitely the most difficult emotion to understand.
I feel bad for this review, especially since everyone else seemed to like it. I'm just, well, different.
Author's Response: I had a feeling that at least someone was going to have a gripe with this chapter. I had to look into a lot before I wrote it, and I'm going to try and help you understand. We live in America, and the drinking age is a set 21. Overseas, a lot of countries don't have actually have drinking ages. Not only that, but this is set in a completely separate time or whatever you want to call it from modern ideals. It's only natural that you'd find it strange since it's different from our morals here. Also, by this in the story, they're all thirteen. Thirteen is one of the "coming of age" ages where more "responsibility" and "growing emotionally" comes into play. Naruto wasn't written with all of this inculded, so I'm trying my best to include the actual feelings of the characters that haven't been shown. We see enough to understand their basic characteristics in the manga/anime, but they are rarely represented outside of episodes where they're on a mission or fighting some new enemy. We don't see who they are as young teens, and that's what I'm trying to show.. I'm not being defensive in any way, I'm just trying to explain my point of you so you can enjoy what I write more in upcoming chapters. Thank you for reviewing, as always (: xoxo
Date: 20/10/12 Title: Chapter 40: Victory; Spiraling Downfall
Wow. It has been forever since I watched this episode. I almost want to go watch it now, but in doing so, I wouldn't be able to read more (I really need to catch up TT_TT).
Anyway, I really liked this chapter. Although it didn't vary too much in anime with how it all turned out, I loved every moment of it more with Rayne there. It was both hilarious and fluffy in some parts, though the biggest amount at the end. And the jealousy - that is always amusing, especially from Sasuke.
Then that ending...... Wow, poor Rayne and Sakura. Their friendship was so great. Darn you, Sakura! Why did you have to come in? Haha. I'd say Ryu can comfort her, but I don't think you would know what I mean. I hope they can patch things up. I feared going through something like this just recently. I didn't lose my friend, but fearing I had still did a lot of damage. Again, I hope everything turns out all right for them.
This was an amazing chapter. I absolutely loved it!
P.S. You weren't being hostile or anything. I just felt I explained it wrong. The way I explained it simply because of morals living in this time period and this country formed. That was part of it, but keeping in mind this was a different era and country (as well as just a fanfiction) could have made me overlooked that. The real reason was my simple hate of anyone being drunk due to bad events in my family that involved drinking, and because of that it was harder to overlook.
P.P.S. I looked it up on wikia. It says "Despite having become the Fifth Kazekage during the time skip". So no, Gaara was not Kazekage then, even if the clothes may have been similar.
Author's Response: By the time you catch up, I'm sure you'll want to punch me in the face xD Hehehe. I HAD to make Sasuke jealous, I just HAD to >u> It took a while to work in, but I did it!
Sakura ruin everything! She had to come in!! I'm glad you reconciled with your friend (: I have a lot of fights with my best friend; A LOT, so I know the fear and pain that comes along with it.. Again, in reference to the drinking thing, my family has had its past with alcohol as well, so I completely understand where you're coming from (: All throughout high school, I kept myself away from anyone that drank, smoked, or did any type of drug because it repulsed me. Now that I'm nearly 19, the drinking doesn't bother me as much, but the smoking and drugs still do. AND, as for Gaara being Kazekage...oopsie ^^;; Thanks for correcting me! Haha (:
Date: 05/07/11 Title: Chapter 24: Curse My Morality!
Have you ever gone through a moment in life where you can't think of a single thing to say? Yeah, that's what I'm feeling right now. I can't read your story without being left speechless. Like the last chapter, it's YOUR STORY. Actually, it may be out of this world x13 now instead of x10. It's just so freaking awesome.
I loved the training between Sakura and Rayne. I pity her. Having to be in Orochimaru's skin. *shivers* You'll notice I shiver whenever the snake dude is mentioned. It was a cool fight scene, though. I loved how she motivated Sakura by making her think of the things that made her want to grow stronger. I wonder what would happen if Sakura found out......
Anyway, I can't wait for the next update. Maybe I'll think of another adjective besides YOUR STORY by then.
Author's Response: xD You\'re too nice to me, I swear. You have no idea how much your flattery urges me to continue writing. THANK YOU, THANK YOU! I\'ll start writing the next chapter ASAP!
Date: 03/12/12 Title: Chapter 45: -//Epilogue//-
As I was reading this, I thought back to maybe two or three years ago, sitting on my camper seat, happy to have Internet at the camp site. I remember seeing my mom asleep as I woke early to check Tonfa and seeing this updated like a few times before. I remember thinking: What the heck, why not? Then I read it.
And no matter what I may have not loved reading, I do not regret it for a second. I have been happy and angry, have laughed and cried, have deduced what may happen next and be blown away in surprise, felt love and felt hatred, and so so much more. I have fallen in love with a great oc and made a new friend. How could I not read on after all that, Tink-chan. No matter how uneasiness some parts made me, all the other parts I loved.
Thank you for the shout-out, Tink-chan. This story deserved everything I said about it and more. How To Adapt and Overcome has definitely earned to right to be the first YOUR STORY. I just wish that reward could mean more, because this story is just so, so amazing.
I'm glad this is not a goodbye to Rayne's story at least, and look forward to reading the sequel. Sadly I have tortured myself and told myself I cannot read anything new until I am caught up in other fanfictions.
So, until them, amazing story, Tink-chan.
Author's Response: You're so wonderful ;___; I really wish I could come hug you. For now, this will suffice.
Me -> (>;u;Y^^<) <- You.
You have always made me feel really good about what I was writing, and I cannot thank you for helping me press on with my story. If it wasn't for a devoted reader like you, continuing to read my story even after I stopped updating for a year, I wouldn't have decided to continue on. For a while, I had no idea if anyone else was reading HTAO. But honestly, I kept updating for you and I, and whoever else might have been reading. Soon enough, Silverwolf and others came along, and it was successful, but as I said, you were with me all the way.
This may sound incredibly cheesy, but years from now, even when I'm 70.. when I think back to the time I wrote my first fan fiction story on this website, I'm always going to remember you. Always. Writing is a huge part of who I am now, and I have you to thank for being part of it.
Take your time with reading, by all means. I'm not the only author out there (: I look forward to hearing from you again. Xoxoxoxoxoxo X 9,001 (ITS OVER 9,000!) ~ Shann(:
Date: 03/12/12 Title: Chapter 44: Withered Past, Blurry Future
I guess I didn't cry because I was expecting but..... But......
She's dead? She can't be...... I mean, I even accidentally saw the picture for the sequel, so I am 90% sure she'll have something to do with it. But.... What? No, she can't be dead. She's too amazing and awesome and full of life. She CANNOT be dead.
But, well..... I have to admit, I found the entire thing absolutely beautiful and quite like something I would do (accept I couldn't bring myself to kill a character. At least until the end of their story. Or set it up so it seemed that way. Anyway, adding in all those raw feelings. Her thoughts in response to what Sasuke was saying, her own truths to him that I have wanted to scream at him, her trying to release Rokobi......
But what I loved the most was the flash backs of their time together mixed with her thoughts. That is one of the things that really drove into my heart. It just seemed so beautiful. So amazing, so heart wrenching........
And then Sasuke. Oh my gosh, Sasuke. I was on the verge of absolutely hating him. But to see him so heart broken as well. All I could think was - did she die saving him? Or will he fall again? I really do not know without reading the sequel.
I loved this chapter. It was my favorite, no matter how much it hurt me. Even with the picture warning and seeing the sequel, I hurt reading this chapter. I hurt greatly. I just loved Rayne so much......
P.S I know it's wrong for me to be the one talking about the drunk thing after that one chapter. I think it's just because, although I hate the thought of getting drunk, Drunken style really interests me. Drunken Master is an amazing movie XD.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed the end, I really am (: I hope it lived up to your expectations of my writing. Evoking your emotion for all the characters was definitely what I wanted, and I'm happy it worked. Especially with Sasuke, because even though he never told her how he felt, his heart still broke. I cried myself...not just once...but a couple of times.. xD Thank you for leaving such a sweet review. I'm happy I did my job as an author. Xoxo~
Date: 03/12/12 Title: Chapter 43: To Have Purpose
Only two complaints, really. One is I saw what seemed like more mistakes that would momentarily leave me confused from time to time. The other may just be me, but I didn't think Lee was acting, well, drunk enough. He was all silly and weird during that fight. In this he almost seemed like his normal self. You mentioned his speed increase, but other than the occasional speech, there wasn't too much difference between his normal (Lee-standard normal, that is) self.
Okay, complaints aside, to the good stuff.
This was a really interesting chapter. I love seeing the fire that is burning in Rayne. This showed both when she was trying to get Sasuke out and when she snapped at Kimmimaro about purpose and stuff.
Speaking of, I really liked that rivalry between them. It was interesting, and it just molded Rayne into the Orochimaru thing even more, which in the way you do it is a good thing. You make it all nice and clean without any holes. The fight was also just awesome, and I love Lee's speech. First thing he says is how Kimmimaro cannot hurt an angel. Haha hehe.
Well, only one more chapter and then acknowledgements. Time to see about that picture.
Author's Response: I have one thing to say... you telling me that someone isn't drunk enough made me LOL x) It was weird in the episodes.. he'd act seriousseriousserious...then be drunk. I was trying to get to Rayne and Kimmimaro bickering and fighting themselves. So, that surely was a flaw. ::I was itching to write the last chapter::
YES!!! Being told that I've molded her into Orochimaru and the past without any holes is a huge compliment for me. I've spent a lot of time doing my best to make it flawless, and I'm so happy to hear you approve (:
Thank you! Can't wait to hear your remarks on the next chapter >___> Xoxo~
Date: 13/07/12 Title: Chapter 35: Happy Merry Birthday, Rayne!
Reading this story makes me really miss writing Never Too Late. Of course, I could never do a great job with Sasuke like you do (at least I don't believe I could) or make a character as awesome as Rayne.
Anyway, I love the emotional conflict going through Rayne with Naruto and Sasuke. It is very realistic for her, seeing as she is very close to both. Of course, I feel bad for Naruto since we all know who Rayne is leaning toward, seeing him as more of a brother.
Then Izumo was just thrown in. I found their interaction almost as funny as when Rayne and Sasuke bicker. It's humerous, and it added some fun into this emotional chapter, seeing as of now I'm not too sure if that romantic issue is as much of a problem and mess as her emotions with Sasuke here. I may have rambled there, so if I confused you, sorry.
I was also glad to see Tsunade question her. Of course, loving Rayne, I wanted to yell at her, but it was realistic and seemed like a nice way to show Tsunade's Holage side.
Ahh, Sasuke and Rayne. At first, I was pretty much laughing at all their trouble. I'm just a mean person like that. Part of me wanted to slap him, though, for confusing Rayne (as well as me) so much. There were moment's he was a complete jerk, then others where you could see a bit of his emotion. And then I was mentally squealing at the fluffy ending. It was just so cute. I was happy to see Sasuke's emotions finally come out (and in front of Ino. Haha XD). I loved it the most out of the chapter, simply because I really miss this Sasuke in the manga/anime. Pre-Sasuke Retrival Arc Sasuke is among my top 5 favorite characters.
Great job, Tink-chan. I absolutely loved this chapter.
Author's Response: Every character a writer creates is fantastic, you just have to keep up with them and make sure they don't get out of character. An OC going OOC... oh, the irony. I'm really glad you're positive with the way I'm writing the interaction between Sasuke and Rayne. I'm trying to keep him Sasuke-esque, but also trying to represent him in an appropriate way if he were in such a situation with a girl. It's actually very difficult ^^;; ...This Sasuke is my favorite as well. I stopped watching Naruto after Sasuke left. It was bland and drawn out.. haha, anyway, thank you for reading AND reviewing. Always appreciated!! Xoxo
Date: 05/07/11 Title: Chapter 23: To the Birthday Boy
I don't know if this was more humorous or more romantic. But I do know one thing........ I can't think of a word that is accurate enough to describe your story. Something that has to do with out of this world x10 or something. What would would fit that description. Oh, duh. I can think of the word. YOUR STORY. Everything about this draws me in and refuses to let me go. And if you could tell me another adjective that would fit your story other than YOUR STORY, please tell me so I can say it later on. Oh, and one last thing.......
I LOVE THIS STORY!
P.S Sorry I missed when you first updated this chapter. I've been busy.
Author's Response: Thank you c: I\'m glad you loved this chapter, it\'s a big piece to the puzzle of my story <3
Date: 06/11/12 Title: Chapter 42: Consumed! Will of Fire Ignites!
First of all, I have a headache and am exhausted from not being able to sleep more than 2 1/2 hours last night, and then some this morning, so this may not be the best and I may be a bit scattered. I don't know. We shall see, won't we?
It was so sad seeing Rayne's heartbroken state at the very beginning. She truly was taken down by this. Nobody deserves that. Sasuke needs to stop hurting people! Especially Rayne, who has already been hurt so much T_T. I'm glad that she is later helped.
Gah - I am torn between my favorite part. I can't decide if I like the scene with Rokubi and Rayne best or the very last scene, especially with that paragraph. Did that really happen? This is the only part of this arc I never saw (Chouji vs Jiroubou), and I love this arc, so I should probably watch it sometime...... U^_^. But I did greatly enjoy both, and both showed Rayne crawling out of the shroud of pain Sasuke put around her. They're both just so great..... I cannot decide which I like best. One is the beginning of the removal and the other seems to be where she gets her complete resolve. Drat. So, so hard.
There was some nice emotion from here. It isn't as painfully raw as the last, probably because she has grown numb, but the emotion was still incredibly strong and really made us feel for Rayne. I hope she can knock some sense into Sasuke. I just can't help but wonder, though, if she'll end up wanting to save him enough to go to Orochimaru O_o. I doubt it, but twists are always fun.
Anyway, one last thing before I end this review:
HAPPY BIRTHDAY, TINK-CHAN!!!!!
I hope it has been a very happy one ^_^.
Author's Response: Yes, it did happen c: Chouji was staggering through the woods to catch up with the others, and he found a tree that had markings on them. What I wrote, aside from Rayne's comment on the tree, was straight from the anime. It was so touching, and I still cry whenever I watch it xD - Rayne's mentality has been shattered. At this point, she's almost clueless as to what she'll do, and is asking herself a lot of questions. Thank you so much for the birthday wish!! It made me smile to see someone on here wish me a happy birthday!! (: It was a very good day, and you wishing me a nice one made it even better~ Xoxo
Date: 04/11/12 Title: Chapter 41: Drift
I still think "What in the world" when I remember Naruto and Rayne have kissed a couple times, and yet she has not kissed Sasuke once. Oh, Rayne *sigh*. This cannot happen! Naruto must end up with Hinata or, at least, Sakura! Haha =P. NaruHina fan here, sorry.
To tell the truth, I don't think the Sakura vs Rayne fight was realistic at all. Sakura would have been more worried about them being okay for one. She almost risked her life by running out in front of them. Plus, she never even fought Ino to begin with. Instead she just hurt. I'm sorry, I liked it, but I can't see it ever actually happy (sorry, trying my best to be honest even if I feel bad =/). I found it interesting, whether realistic or not, and was sad to see their friendship had such a break into it. Maybe they'll become friends again like Ino and Sakura.
It's always interesting to see how Rayne acts with the Sound ninja since she knows them. And I found it interesting they saw her. It makes everything more interesting.
Sasuke..... Sasuke gave her up. Just like that, he gave her up for revenge. I am shocked, though I guess I should have seen it coming. I was just hoping that she would somehow pull it through.... Dang it, Sasuke! You word-I-can't-say!
This chapter was very powerful emotion wise. I was very close to crying by the end of this chapter, and that's saying something because it's hard to get me to tear up reading stuff unless I'm crying because they are (a habit I have gained from putting myself in their mind). This time it was just because of my love of Rayne and seeing her in such pain. The emotion was great, even out of the parts at the end.
This was a spectacular chapter, Tink-chan, and I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: To be honest, I threw their fight in with haste. I wanted to make it clear that they were breaking apart and losing their friendship :D I don't really mind that you didn't find it realistic, because, in the grand scheme of things, it really wasn't well written. I rushed it. I'm glad to hear you love Rayne so much (>^^)> If THIS chapter almost made you cry...oh, just you wait.. >_____>
Date: 03/08/10 Title: Chapter 6: Girls Night
Still laughing my lungs out when I read this. Well, I have to be quiet because I'm camping and everyone around me is sleeping. But I still laughed anyway. I can't wait to read more. I love(x 10) your story!
Author's Response: Lmao, thank you so much *_* I\'m glad
Btw, I keep trying to read your story, Sasaui Uchiha, and it won\'t friggin work for me >:C I\'m really getting pissed off. I can look at all your other stories, except that one. I don\'t get it. Nothing shows up when i click on it. ;A; this site hates me
Date: 23/01/11 Title: Chapter 15: Don't Be A Hero
Okay, Rayne kissed Naruto on the cheek because she cares for him, so what's so bad for kissing Sasuke on the cheek if she cares for him as well? Anyway, great chapter. I can't wait to read more of you AMAZING story. I hope it comes out before Saturday because it is just too dang awesome. I'll die if you don't write more within a weeks. I just like your story that much.
Author's Response: Because Sasuke doesn\'t like to show emotion even though he knows he cares about people other than himself ;P And that\'s why we love himmmmm *u* <3 I\'m so glad you love my story enough to review every chapter and rate it. You always say things that build up my ego and make me want to write more xD