Real name: People call me BS irl. I kid you not. It's short for BigSister. You may also call me Bats, Batty or Batgirl if you prefer.
Membership status: Member
Member since: 26/03/11
Because you're never too old for a good obsession... ;0)
Let's see: I'm in my twenties, live in Britain and have all the makings of an arrogant pretentious cow, but I'm not usually intentionally mean. If I come across as a bit too brusque at times then I'd like to apologize, because I didn't mean it that way at all. If I review for you and try to offer constructive criticism - then it's usually because I think you've got talent enough to be able to improve in that area and - much more crucially - because I actually liked your story. If I didn't I'd just hit the back button, so take heart from that even if I am once again being a cow. (Seriously, I try my hardest to watch what I say, but sometimes my underlying rotten personality just sneaks out on me.)
I also try to always do my best in my writing, so when I review I try to review in a way that I would most like to receive. That doesn't mean that I necessarily expect the same back from you. I'm grateful for anything someone who bothered to read my stories has to say, even if it I was just 'I liked this', because after all its great to know that you did. Don't you think?
My favourites things include: writing, reviews, computer games and animals; and you'll often see references to the last one in my writing - especially hamsters (I love my hamsters!) and cats (I come from a cat-crazy family). I also like grammar and drawing, but I'm not very good at either in my opinion.
Check out my website for more details on me and my stories. There are pictures, character bios and all sorts for those of you who are interested.
Something I never really went into on TONFA much before, but am now using more and more is this thing I dubbed "the review" form. It started out as something to help (lazy/busy) reviewers in SWB by giving them simple questions to answer, but gradually it's evolved into a nice easy scoring system that gives a good overview of different elements of a story or chapter and I've begun using it to review other people's story too.
Feel free to use it/something similar yourself if you like. I usually comment under every section, but don't feel like you have to do that. Just the scores is fine as well.
o/ Plot development? _/10
How the story is progressing. Do I thinking more could have been put/in left out? Is the story progressing too fast/slowly? Are event/explanations/etc being skipped that ought to have been explored in more depth? Does everything in it makes sense to me when I read it?
o/Use of characters? _/10
Are the characters (original & cannon) true to themselves? Are characters appearing in scenes, but adding nothing to the story? Is the author giving someone an excessive amount of 'airtime', which doesn't help with the plot or understanding the story)? Conversely are characters being neglected and aspects of their reactions being unnecessarily skipped over? Has someone failed to react to something that they really ought to have said more about?
o/ Description? _/10
Self-explanatory really. Did the author include description? Was there too much/too little of it? It it add value to the story? Did everything feel real and engaging or not?
o/ Inconsistencies with cannon plot? Characters in-character as regards to the original work? _/10
As specific to fanfiction - fanfiction stuff. Does the author show understanding of the established world & its occupants? Are there specific things that don't match up? Is the author flaming or misportraying a certain character?
o/ Overall quality of the writing? Easy to read? Grammar and Spelling? _/10
Basic literacy and quality of English used, as regards to how easy it is to read what has been published.
o/ Enjoyment? An engaging read? _/10
In the simplest terms: do I like what I'm reading? Is it entertaining? And can I connect with what was happening or not?
o/ Overall? _/10
And finally, an overall picture of what I thought of the chapter.
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 1]
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Post-Naruto, Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Sasuke and Naruto
Characters: All, Hinata Hyuuga, Kiba Inuzuka, Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Pair SasuNaru, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha, Shikamaru Nara
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, General, Humor, Romance
Chapters: 3 | Completed: No | Word count: 4505 | Read count: 1589 [Report This]
Published: 10/03/14 | Updated: 10/03/14
Rated: U [Reviews - 1]
Sasuke/Naruko (female Naruto)
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Other
Characters: Naruto Uzumaki, Sasuke Uchiha
Genres: Drama, Romance, Tragedy
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 790 | Read count: 791 [Report This]
Published: 11/01/14 | Updated: 11/01/14
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 3]
"Little Siblings are the worst."
Growing up in the shadow of Team Seven wasn't necessarily simple, even before they were famous. These are extracts from the lives of the much maligned little brothers and sisters.
Story told as a series of stand-alone scenes. A possibility of yaoi/shounen-ai later on, but nothing's decided yet.
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU
Characters: All, Naruto Uzumaki, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha
Genres: General, Humor, WAFF
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 4114 | Read count: 1664 [Report This]
Published: 18/09/12 | Updated: 28/11/12
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 2]
I guess I always knew something was wrong, but I never guessed it would be this. Coming here, doing this: technically I'm betraying him - but the thing is, he has already betrayed me.
The Third Shinobi War never went hot, but the feudal lords didn't neglect their hidden villages. In fact they advanced them and bolstered them, pushing forward technology and bringing with it a surprising amount of economic prosperity across the whole continent.
The result Cyber-Ninja: true assassins of the modern era, skilled in everything from technology to murder.
Corny, I know - but I felt like it. Ita/Saku, Sasu/Naru(& Naru/Sasu too, for you sticklers out there.)
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > High School Fics, Het Romance > Angst, Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Angst (Shonen-ai/Yaoi), Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Sasuke and Naruto
Characters: All, Itachi Uchiha, Naruto Uzumaki, Pair ItaSaku, Pair SasuNaru, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha
Warnings: AU, Yaoi
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 4862 | Read count: 1498 [Report This]
Published: 17/09/12 | Updated: 23/11/12
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 14]
A Kekkei Genkai is a jutsu passed down through the generations in the family's DNA. It isn't supposed to kill its user. Gaara/OC/Kankurou love triangle.
Category: General Fiction > Post-Naruto, OC-centric
Characters: Baki, Gaara, Hidden Sand Ninja, Kankurou, Matsuri, OC, Pair OCGaa, Team Sand Siblings
Genres: Drama, Horror, Romance, Supernatural
Chapters: 4 | Completed: No | Word count: 8301 | Read count: 3032 [Report This]
Published: 11/09/11 | Updated: 21/09/12
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 64]
Gaara was always the sort of man for whom one person could change everything, but in the middle of a chaotic ninja alliance mission he never expected it to be her. As he finds himself drawn more and more into a world of small time politics and bitter shinobi rivals, his biggest challenge remains gaining the heart of the woman he loves.
Set during and after the Fourth Great Ninja War (so Possible Spoiler Alert for anyone who hasn't got that far into the story)
A G/OC featuring the Sand Siblings throughout and most of Team Kakashi during the first 'Half' (try two-thirds and we'd be closer).
Now fully reposted after TONFA's technical difficulties.
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden
Characters: Gaara, Kakashi Hatake, Kankurou, Mei Terumi (Godaime Mizukage), Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Oonoki (Sandaime Tsuchikage), Pair OCGaa, Sakura Haruno, Team Sand Siblings, Temari, Tsunade
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Chapters: 62 | Completed: No | Word count: 123735 | Read count: 92827 [Report This]
Published: 27/03/11 | Updated: 30/07/12
Rated: U [Reviews - 4]
This is just a very simple scene I wrote out as an ideas gathering thing when I agreed to co-author Star Angel with Sasaui Uchiha (a very talented young auhor, who I definately recommend you check out!). I never used this scene in the end but thought it worth recording here for posterity.
Category: General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto
Characters: Ino Yamanaka, Sakura Haruno
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 726 | Read count: 1054 [Report This]
Published: 24/08/11 | Updated: 24/08/11
Rated: 12/12A [Reviews - 19]
Gaara gets an unusual birthday gift. It's furry... and chews bars. Can he learn to love it?
Basically I just felt like combining my two favourite obsessions: Gaara ... and hamsters.
Category: General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden
Characters: Baki, Gaara, Kankurou, Temari
Genres: General, Humor, WAFF
Chapters: 5 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 6738 | Read count: 4456 [Report This]
Published: 08/06/11 | Updated: 22/06/11