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Penname: Miko_Yami [Contact]
Real name: Miko
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Name: Miko Yami (not going to tell you my real name)

My age: ?

Birthday: Jan 4

Hair: Black

Eye: Brown almost black (like the Uchiha's eyes)

Skin: Tan

Personality: Well I’m opinionated…very opinionated…I’m easy to get along with, and I’m honest…I really don’t know how to describe myself really…most of the time I’m emotionless so if I writing to you I really don’t have emotion on my face….sad isn’t it….hmm

Oh just a little mockery of twilight (I’m contemplating if I should read it again, I finished the Harry Potter SeriesL) anyway….In case you guys are wondering, I’m unconditionally and irrevocably in love it with Itachi Uchiha. You may ask how can you love ink and paper? Well it’s easy to answer I love his personality and his the smell of his blood (JK JK) I just love his personality, I mean cool and collected different then my scattered brain self who forgets what’s she’s supposed to be doing the second she gets there. I mean there is something in the way he acts. His cool exterior is a complete turn on how gives girls attention but ignores them is completely hot, hot, hot.  Oh…god I’m the type of girls that falls in love with jerks…but Itachi isn’t a jerk he has a soft sweet side that is hidden with harden shell. Itachi:…-/.- UU. I mean reading the few “GOOD”  fan fiction out there, (I will tell you the few later)and I get odd in the inside, like I want to fly this also happens when I look at pictures of him, I love him in his business suit –drool- or naked is always good-nose bleed- Itachi: Children read these things you know     -/.-….Miko: right sorry kids ignore the last comment….-Miko drooling over  Itachi- His looks can make any girl turn heads, long silky black hair that frames his face in a prefect layered manner. And onyx or crimson eyes that seem to stare deep in to your soul. He looks at you sharply reading your moves but eyes long eyelashes giving his sharp look a softer flow to them. I believe if I were ever to meet Itachi Uchiha in real life I would faint as soon as we make eye contact. Itachi: Are you done? Miko: Yeah so yes, I’m head over heels, crazy about Itachi Uchiha…and yes I do need help.

Ten facts about me:

I’m Arab, yep the Middle East baby –peace sign- My parents are from Lebanon cool country check it out. But I’m born in raised in America near the Rocky Mountains my only tools for survival the internet XD (No but I do live near the Rocky Mountain and boy are they beautiful). I do visit Lebanon the jewel of the Middle East (I’m <3 Lebanon). I plan to move there and live near the sea…and live the rest of my life writing (Doesn’t that sound magical)

No I don’t speak Arabic (or Lebanese for you simple brained idiots) but I can understand it if it is being spoken to me. First of I only understand the Lebanon’s Arabic, not Egyptian (yes everybody there is different dialect in the Arab speaking kingdoms) in music I still can’t understand some words. No I can’t read or write Arabic either sorry >.<

I think Disney l is corrupting our youth. My thoughts are that they are in fact trying to take over the world by marketing to the youth. Buy are stuff or you will look like shit. Kids will beg their parents for the latest Miley Cyrus backpack or the coolest high school musical toothbrush that sings when you brush your teeth. The parents curious on what their children are watching soon the parents find themselves brain washed and by Jonus Brothers toilet seat that plays cheese quote from their show every time you flush because they want to RULE THE WORLD!!!!!!!!….but I could be wrong they could be just brain washing the kids into thinking life is an ease thing if you make the right choices. And the Marketing thing is just to a way for their corrupt business to make money. As you can tell I strongly disagree with Disney’s new methods and miss their old stuff I used to watch as a child. Though I do find guilty pleasure watching Phineas and Ferb.

I sadly think Katy Perry and Shakira are hot and would date them if I was a dude but I’m a chick and I still would like to date them though. I mean Shakira has that gorgeous Latino tan and Lebanese features (Yes, Shakira's father is Lebanese) and Katy Perry….Katy is just hot and her music fun to listen to watch this video >>>> Katy Perry!!! Haha told yeah it’s cool.

I slept three hours last night and during that three hour sleep I dreaming I got attacked by squirrels, which were after my nuts. THEY ATTACKTED ME IN MY DREAM. Then I got this letter Dear Miko, we squirrels are after your nuts, please protect your nuts sincerely your favorite nut…I woke up laughing…what I’m telling you…I’m insane  and  perverted a I mean nuts –starts laughing- Itachi:….-/.- so immature Miko: haha they wanted my nuts –holds up a bag of nuts-

Well know that we got over my immatureity am also very mature, I love reading fan fiction especially those that involve Itachi as I explained I’m in love with the mysterious Uchiha….wait falling in love isn’t very mature –shrugs- oh well…

Yes, Yes I do give constructive criticism, I would love to get some back please feel free to read my stories and review –smiles- but if you do decide to flame me make sure there is a purpose for your flame and do not make it one bent up on revenge just cause I criticized you…notice I didn’t flame you I pointed out your flaw that we you need to fix

BANANA, NUTS, ICE, CREAM AND SQURRILLS!!!!!!!!!

–Grabs mike from some ones hand- ITACHI UCHIHA I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!-hands mike back to person- Everybody: O.o….so strange Itachi: -/.-U-sweat drop- Miko: -listening to Vocoliods and  shaking head like nothing ever happened-

Yes, this is how mind really is XD I hope you enjoyed the short visit in my mind…

Favorite anime: (Yeah you are all curious since I’m picky about fan fiction I’m also picky about my anime)

My favorite and for most loved anima or Manga would be…-drum roll-…Godchild by Kaori Yuki. What can I say about it? Its art work is beautiful the story line is fantastic and I cried at the end. Not only that, she is the only artist I know that can make death in art work looks beautiful (I know morbid thought). Truthfully I like all works because her style is of fantastic I suggest you read her work.

My second my come to no surprise to some of you, yes I love Black Butler Yana Toboso. I know typical but not because Sebastian is a hot demon. (He very much is) But they way the characters interact with one another. I love Ceil and in each emotion he shows, he is dark but a soft side. And Sebastian who “acts” I repeat “acts” that he cares for Ceil’s life. The art work isn’t as good as Yuki’s but it’s still good.

Descendants of Darkness by Yoko Matsushita has taken place sadly the author won’t continue this story and it left on a really good spot so I wish she would continue…um this anime is goofy but serious at the same time. The story has made me laugh with all the characters side humor and questionable moments while it also left me on the side of my bed trying to piece together the murders and the plot twist. The art reminds me back in the 90’s, it’s good to see old anime art at times.

Demon Detective Neuro Nōgami by Yūsei Matsui, I have only watched the anime but already it’s got me turning my head. The plot line at the moment is simple but characters are funny. The story sort of reminds me of Black Butler…but with a female character instead of Ceil and Neuro actually shows that he doesn’t care about the lead character. It’s funny to watch, with some hidden plot twist waiting to come. The art style is simpleL.

Pandora Hearts by Jun Mochi, is interesting it takes the Alice in Wonderland story and twist it up to a much darker twisted story with a different plot….not much to say about this anime except it is a good read and I suggest you read it the art style is the first thing that brought me to it.

Alice of Heartland by Hoshino Soumei…I know I know this actually a lot lighter than any of Manga/Anime(s) I have mentioned so far…sadly I do have a bit of girly side and do like romantic stuff, while it is somewhat romantic it is also pretty funny with the characters and actually do like the female character cause she is funny and different then everybody she deals with everybody so differently it’s kind of fun to watch her reaction to them. Blood is also a guy I would love to date…Itachi: -glare-Miko: -hides- I’m going to admit the art style is pretty simple so it took me forever to start reading but once I started I couldn’t put it down.

Arina Tanemura works never cease to amuse me…-everybody faints over dead- I know I know she is more high school girl love story…but I’m a girl and I want love –more people fall down dead- is it really that much of a shock. Anyway I Arina’s work because she has her own originality, I mean yeah the character design are all the same but they are different and the best part is even with the character design being the same, she kind of made it signature along with the plot line and I love her for her originality and her art work….yes the big eyes does amuse me, I find it cute…-more people die- Miko: -places head on hand-

Kodocha by Obana Miho this one of the first manga I have ever read and the first to my collection. I just love the expression of the story and characters not only that each character is hard to forget. I mean who could forget Sana she is kind of hard to forget especially in the anime when she stats to sing. I laugh all the time but all good anime must come to an end I was upset that I had to say good bye to my favorite characters. The art is good I like it so it must be good.

Pick of the litter by Yuriko Suda is actually a pretty funny series. It’s the most popular manga I have right now. Its art style is plain though. Sharing the number nine spot is Skip-Beat by Yoshiki Nakamura…it’s girly but still a good manga to read it keeps away from the cliché love scenes and shows the struggle of getting revenge, the art is to plain for my liking but it’s still is an excellent manga that has made me laugh numerous time.

The last manga I like and will always be in my favorite list is….-drum roll- is….DNAngel yep DNAngel, by Yukiru Sugisaki. Truth be told, not many of you know this manga considering how old it is and how long it is taking for the author to write…I loved this manga it was the first manga that I ever loved. It could have helped that I had a huge crush on Dark Mousy; I mean who wouldn’t fall for a guy with purple hair and being voiced by Vic Mignogna. I still find myself screaming every time I see Vic on the internet…-sweat drop- but that’s beside the point for all those who just met me…I know shocker I liked someone beside Itachi Uchiha but yes I was head over heels in love with Dark Mousy. (Of course I screwed up his personality when I was first writing fan fiction, one story you will never see). I used to love this Manga and could name all the characters under a second and give you description of their personality and looks. Now I struggle but it’s still a good Manga to read. The only thing that is a letdown is it isn’t a Yaoi. I mean there is so much going on between the four guy main characters it pisses you off that they have to remind themselves that they are straight!!!! I mean come on there is so many sparks between the guys it pisses you off when you see them kiss on of the Harada twins and not any other guys. For those girls who know DNAngel you guys are probably shaking your head and agreeing with me. For those who don’t read DNAngel read the story its hinted Yaoi but still straight. Any way this is still a good manga and I suggest everybody reads it.

 

((If you have question about any of these manga ask me))

Favorite books: (I don’t have a long list I’m behind on my books)

Well my first favorite book is…yep Harry Potter I love J.K. Rowling her writing style is so amazing and she started up so simple and worked her way up. I love how you grew attached to the characters then cried when the book was over. I also love how all her books connect with one another and I love watching the changes of each character. I think J.K. Rowling is a very talented writer and I hope to be a writer like her…Talented!!

My second is the Mercy Thompson By Patricia Briggs…there is nothing much to say about this book, the author isn’t very good at romance scenes but her story lines make up for it…I just suggest you read it if you are tired of Twilight.

Fairy Tales…yep I’m sucker for the Happily Ever After…yep I’m a sucker for those story, well the Grimm versions that is the dark version and truthfully I like screwing around with them…I also enjoy studying them it’s my favorite past time.

Nursery Rhymes, Love me true shows my love for Nursery rhymes, I have two Nursery rhymes placed in there another thing I enjoy studying.

Of course Alice in Wonderland…nothing much to say about this I just like it.

((Yep not very long I told you))

Favorite Fan fictions :( Random order cause I like them all equallyJ) (If you are on my list be happy because I’m rare to please Itachi: -nods head- Miko: ^^)

Between Brothers (An Uchiha Story)  by YamiHigushi (This story is story is so cute different then how I make my OC but refreshing none the less a good read. I enjoy Yami she is super cute and I love how the Main characters are in still in Character a difficult achieve for some of you writers –twist faces ugly grumbles- Itachi: You are easy to upset Miko: -glares at Itachi- Anyway the story line is easy to follow and Yami’s past is another thing to follow. She is well developed you can tell YamiHigushi took some thought in designing her character. You can find YamiHigushi on Quizilla so please rate and review her story)

Heart of Ice, Eyes of Fire by melina678 (It’s an ItachiXReader so a 2nd person story or ItaXYou. You decided how you want to look and your name. This was my first Itachi fan fiction that helped me notice Itachi is out of character in many story. Her story helped me annualize Itachi’s personality and keep him in character and many other characters in character. It has lemons <3.<3 (it was also my first lemon I was begging for more –drool- Itachi: Miko is her perverted old man mood at the moment she is drooling about, porn, hot girls, me, and yaoi she will be back in a few seconds.)

 Favorite couples: (Send me a few fan fiction that are good if they have these couples)(yes this one is in order)ItachiXOC (I love to see peoples OC and I love seeing him being paired with OC’s (that are well created))AkatsukiXOC (So basically any Akatsuki character paired with any OC (again well created)SasuNaru (you know they are meant for each other don’t deny it)ItaDei (it’s adorable I mean they are both so pretty Itachi and Deidara: -sweat drop- )ItaNaru (Itachi’s after Naruto for one reason or another why not add a little bit of boy love into the story)NaruHina (Those belong to each other right after SasuNaru of course)ItaHina (only if it’s AU, I kind of like the bad boy with the good girl and of course in character)DNAngel boys XOC (I have yet to find a good one)DNAngel boys X DNAngel boys ( so basically any Yaoi couple works for me)(Even with my Yaoi fetish I would them to be in character it pisses me off if I see them OOC)

Pet Peeves: (ah yes my favorite part if you got a review from me I suggest you read this it’s important)

OOC, I cannot stress enough on how much it is a pet peeve of mine. It will always have top spot on pet peeves. I have read so much bad Itachi stories where he in fact goes all wacko and OOC for some character (wither its Canon or OC or Yaoi). I have read a lot of ItachiXSakura where Sakura is also out of character. How the hell do you OOC Sakura you guys may ask? Well, making her non-fan girl to Sasuke Uchiha (though in the Anime shows that she is) or making he a complete bad ass and hate her village (unless Sakura has a good reason to hate the village don’t do it) or my favorite is she has Itachi head over heels all over her and chase her around Sakura falling in love and Itachi hardly even looking at another girl or forgetting about Sakura please excuse me for a bit. –grabs chain saw about to walk out the door Itachi grabs Miko places her back on the computer- …well as you can see this really, really bothers me. You Sakura fans make her to perfect thus making her Mary-sue you guys don’t get criticized to harshly because you have paired Itachi with a canon and deserve praises because it’s a Canon not flames their writing style is too amazing to even get flames. I mean come on people get real. Yes I’m talking you feather brained idiots.

Sakura fan girl walks in-

Sakura fan: read this story it’s really good.

–Miko reads story turns towards girl-

Miko: How old did Sakura when she graduated college?

Sakura fan: At age 16 but that’s because she’s really smart.

Miko:…-.-Okay why is Itachi obsessing over her and why does everybody like her?

Sakura fan: Because she is really pretty and isn’t fan girl for Sasuke and hello she is gothic that should scare everybody away and she is super cool and can do everything with ease and everybody she  is already head doctor and she didn’t even half to try oh yeah Itachi feels sorry her because her parents hate her.

Miko: sounds like a Mary-sue…Why the hell is Itachi describing the Kiss?!?! O.o –vain twitch- Sakura fan girl: Don’t you know Itachi’s in love with Sakura after all everybody boys to gothicness

Miko:-twitch- I think its retard

Sakura fan girl: don’t like don’t read, it’s my story after all and I can do whatever I want

Miko: -grabs chain saw again-

Itachi:-struggling to Keep Miko down-

Sakura fan: Ita-kun why are you with that flamer who doesn’t know how to read and is completely rude to us amazing writers that can make Sakura a completely assume. I brought her to be with you.

Mary-sue Sakura: -touches Itachi’s arm- leave that nimrod alone.

Miko: -gets out of Itachi’s grasp- DON’T YOU DARE TOUCH HIM

-Miko chases fan girls-

Itachi: she’ll be back within the next hour

Well yeah that’s basically how people create Sakura as you can see I hate it. I hate OOC’s so damn much then they give me that damn excuse its (Fan) fiction I can do whatever I want yes people I have gotten that excuse before. Before you even throw that excuse let me ask you. Do “you” and I emphasize on the word you to let the fans know what fan fiction is. It’s taking your favorite characters and pairing them anyway “You” wants and creating whatever story “You” want. Not creating the characters personality as “You” would like. Then you just took the name of the characters and claimed them as yours, even with that disclaimer. As fellow author I find it rude when somebody OOC’s my characters it’s just plain disrespectful…

Following my OOC talk people who tease Sasuke and Sakura in their story or just plainly disrespecting them. YamiHigushi makes a great point in one of her chapters in Writing a Naruto Fanfiction this is how the author created the character leave them alone if you want tension between the characters go ahead. For those Sasuke haters (I’m one as well –sweat drop-) if you paired and character with Itachi please considered what Itachi would think of Sakura or your OC if she going on about Sasuke and teases him making comments on how weak he is and how she wishes he would die. I don’t think Itachi would be very happy after all he did care about him. Or if you made your OC tease Sakura all the time…Sakura is pretty hard headed I think she can stand up for herself and fight and I don’t think Sasuke will like your OC. Truthfully I hate Sakura but I’m going to still get her in character tension between Yuki and her…yes they are after the same guy but still Sakura will be in character. And as much as I hate Sasuke I’m going to get Yuki to tease him and joke around with. Please if you bashing characters you’re not going to get many fans or you’ll probably lose some.

For some strange reason I really hate the Half-Japanese shit you writers put in your writing. I’m saying the whole “Kawaii”, “Hei” or everybody’s favorite “baka”. I hate it it’s such a noob thing to do and I suggest everybody to stay away from it.

The “fan girl” all of you know what fan girl I’m talking about that short skirt big boob bimbo that only wants any guy that has a penis and is enemy of the main female character. Might I remind everybody that there is more than one girl out there, putting that fan girl in there means you have no creative ability. Seriously people it doesn’t take long to create a female character that isn’t a slut or isn’t after the only male in the story. Might I remind you I’m a fan girl for Itachi and I’m not wearing slutty clothing. It took me two seconds in Love Me True to create a fan girl for Itachi that wasn’t slutty. What type of fan girl she was? The type that gets hurt easily and cry’s too quickly (I created her with Hinata in mind.) Hinata a fan girl?!?! So is Sakura. Come on people let’s get over the typical fan girl and put more interesting characters instead of those brain dead character that is just all wrapped up in slutiness and evil.

(Well that’s all for now on things I hate)

Stories idea I have
  Art is a…girl?!: Itachi Uchiha is dangerous he is tall dark and handsome but most of all mysterious. He is hiding so much
and Yuki Hunnutsuka is curious to find about him before her clan begins the trade of drugs. She also wants to stay quite about herself so “he” wouldn’t find her. While Itachi finds it weird that people are being murdered like a fairytale/nurse rhyme. ItaxOC 

Love Me True complete: Yuki hates school life she has been an outcast most of her life in school, what happens when Deidara begins talking to her and makes her school life more interesting and who is the mysterious flower giver? ItaXOC

100 theme challenge: A whole bunch of short stories with Itachi and Yuki.

Finding out: After a three year divorce Yuki final is over Itachi Uchiha and ready to settle in with her prince charming. Prince William of Thermoplais (made up island). What happens when a few college friends of our old lovers hear the news? What will they do to make sure Yuki and Itachi do get back together? (A combined story with my friend)

Yuki and the seven Akatsuki: A story following snow white and the seven dwarfs (it will be pretty close to a drabble)

Miscellaneous:  A thirteen year old prodigy who can play music just so beautifully but he has one devil of a secret that he doesn’t even know about… (A dark fic)

Bloody Moon: A sick twelve year old boy meets a beautiful vampire girl…who will come out to be the victor… (Another dark fic)

Ways to contact me:

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(I’m willing to become your friend if you guys can find me)

Just for randomness, Katy’s Perry song E.T. reminds me of Yuki….odd.

Oh yes watch this video it makes me cry

Uchiha brothers - an Itachi tribute



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Challenges by Miko_Yami [0]
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Reviews by Miko_Yami


Title: Kokoro Uchiha by Rowanrose
Rated: PG Liked [Reviews - 125]
Summary: Kokoro-DO NOT READ

Any of you have not read Kokoro Uchiha before, a new version called Cygnus Olor is up, so don't spoiler yourselves. =_=. For those of you who have and have been waiting for an update, please go ahead and read the latest chapter; it's an announcement. (no i'm not dropping Kokoro Uchiha) Thank you~
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto, General Fiction > Timeless
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: Death
Challenge: None
Series: Kokoro Uchiha
Chapters: 43 | Completed: No | Word count: 86283 | Read count: 63829 [Report This]
Published: 21/07/09 | Updated: 23/06/12


Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 11/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Calm before the Storm

It was interesting felt a bit rushed...-raises eyebrow- here is my opinion.
I liked it it was good I don't normally read stories where the the main character (or in many cases the OC) is named Uchiha. To me that is always sounds a warning sign of Mary-sue and a big no-no -holds hand up- but...I think you did a good job with Kokoro and I wish to learn more.
More on a serious case like I explained it felt rush reading this chapter I could sense you are talented as getting the characters down and in character and of course everybody acting their age. Kokoro acting six and not knowing much...don't forget though she is a Uchiha and Fugaku's child. I would expect from a man like him to teach his children a lot since birth..but Kokoro is fine.
I will repeat I do wish there was more build up. Build up that would got us closer to Kokoro and understanding a bit more why Itachi killing the clan effected her. More family moments with the Uchiha's and such.
The story was interesting and flowed well. I do want to read more now that finished this chapter...

Author's Response: AHHHHHHH Miko-chan THIS IS THE OLD VERSION OF MY STORY!!! ITS THREE YEARS OLD!!! *cries* NO One is supposed to read it, since it's rewritten version is already up. TTT___TTT Aw, didn't you see the signs? Ah well, thanks for reviewing though. But what you read and said is different, actually, from what I've heard before. I didn't consider that, actually, building things up a bit. Thinking about it, that would actually give the readers more time to bond with Kokoro... Hmm. Well, it would be awesome if you could read "Cygnus Olor" and tell me what you think on the buildup? Oh, and Cygnus Olor is my only active story right now. XD Thanks for reviewing! I really liked your insight.



Title: Their Stories by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 11]
Summary:
UNDER CONSTRUCTION: I AM WORKING TO MAKE A SERIES OUT OF THIS.


In a dangerous, chaotic world filled with shinobi, everyone has a story. Some are filled with despair, and some are filled with friendship. And even though some might not want to admit it, everyone's story, in some way, becomes intertwined with another's.
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto
Characters: Clan Inuzuka, Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Sakura Haruno
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, General
Warnings: Death, OOC
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 16805 | Read count: 8796 [Report This]
Published: 02/11/10 | Updated: 06/11/10


Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 02/05/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: The Sanjay Children

Poor TenTen yet another Naruto character left in the dust we have no idea on her past life or her family. I think you gave her a reasonable believable past I wonder where else will your story go?



Author's Response: Yeah, I believe that everyone should have their own life story to share. Even if that means I make up their story, they will have a story that defines who they are. As for the rest of this story.... eh, just read the rest of it. This is undergoing construction, so most of it will probably be revised. But thank you anyway for reading. You have no idea how much I appreciate you reading this. Thank you very much for reading this story, and thank you even more for taking the time to review it!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 04/05/11 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Canine Companions

Cute story I liked the dogs the reminded of the Leola children when they first appeared in the second chapter. This is a whole bunch of background stories but all in all very interesting it was fun learning about the Naruto characters. Good story and I look forward to your others.



Author's Response: Aw, thank you for enjoying this. This fic was meant to be the background stories for another AU fic that I was going to put up but never got around to. But I\'m glad you liked it anyway. Thank you for reading this story, and thank you for your continuous feedback on it. I really appreciate the fact that you took the time to read this and review it.



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 04/05/11 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Naruto Uzumaki

Aw~ Naruto…he is OOC a little just a personal reminder Naruto is loud he does things without thinking. But it’s still a likable chapter I like him comparing himself to Shierra (I personally see Naruto as a type that does that subconsciously)



Author's Response: Oh no! OOCness! Darn it, it has ruined me! Yeah, you\'re right about that. I\'ll have to change that when I go back to rewrite this story. Thanks for the heads up. But I\'m glad you liked his tendency to compare himself to Shierra. That was an important factor for this chapter. Thank you so much for the feedback! It\'s greatly appreciated!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 03/05/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Friendship

I like learning about Shierra’s past it’s like Naruto’s put up that as warning when people read your story…and I praise you for not bashing on Sakura (though  I hate her ^-^). Very interesting and Kiba’s so mean it’s kind of cute XD (sorry short review TT-TT)



Author's Response: Oh, that\'s a good idea. I didn\'t even think about putting up a warning, thanks for the advice. I try not to bash the characters, since everyone is important to the plot in some way. But she makes it so hard to portray her in a nice way sometimes. I didn\'t know someone who was mean could be cute...? Thank again for reviewing, it doesn\'t matter that it\'s short. As long as you care, it\'s all good! Thank you for reading and reviewing!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 02/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Leola Children

Wow…interesting chapter the kids are actually kids very nice…I felt sorry for the kids I mean the whole rain scene made me feel kind of sad…

And the old lady’s reaction is very realistic after all we aren’t all saints so why should are all our characters be saints too? This is a very interesting chapter it was the kind of chapter that catches your interest and keeps it.

I can’t wait to read more =)

P.S Zuko is soo cute XD



Author's Response: I know, right! It was so sad :( I\'m glad you thought Nami was a realistic character. It was kinda hard to write a mean character like her. I\'m really happy to hear that you thought it was an interesting chapter. I wrote this so long ago, I am now trying to make it into something better. But I\'m glad to hear you enjoyed it. And yes, Zuko is amazing =D Thank you so much for reading yet another one of my stories. I really appreciate your input. Thanks so much for reading and thanks even more for reviewing!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 02/05/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Kiara Tati

Aw~ Cute chapters the kids are eight at this and it kind of shows. I like the multiple characters you have but that’s going to be extremely difficult putting them in the spotlight. But good chapter the mom or Nami is like any other parent in Konoha. Caring for her child but hating “the monster child”. She isn’t exactly the villain but she isn’t likable right away good job on this chapter ^~^.



Author's Response: Yeah, this was written at the time when I loved making OCs. I couldn\'t help myself. And I\'m happy to hear that you thought Nami was written well. It was kind of hard keeping her personality realistic. Thank you very much for your insight! I love feedback! Thank you for reading this, and thank you even more for reviewing!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 02/05/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Inuzuka Children

I cried for the first time at a characters death, (it was one tear but still). It was a nice chapter I think you did a great job showing Kiba’s character development as who he is and how he became the way he is…though I don’t know about his mom being abusive but I don’t know much about the characters so why not I guess…Kiba was such a cutie as a little kid ^-^



Author's Response: Aw, I\'m sorry I made you cry. But I\'m glad this seemed like a nice chapter. This was written a while ago, so I was afraid it might seem disorganized or something. This is an AU fic, so I don\'t think Kiba\'s mom actually abuses him in the real Naruto world. I just made this happen for this story to go along. But I\'m glad you liked this chapter anyway. Thank you so much for reading this, and thanks even more for reviewing it! I appreciate your feedback!



Title: Freshman Year by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 17]
Summary:
UNDER CONSTRUCTION: THIS STORY WILL UNDERGO SERIOUS REVISION DUE TO LACK OF INSPIRATION.




Thanks to BattyBigSister for the wonderful banner!


Who knew high school life was so complicated? The Naruto gang is headed for their first year at Konoha High School. And they find out that high school life is not all it's cracked up to be.

With romance, testing, and just life in general, how is anyone supposed to survive their first year at Konoha High?

Warning: Minor crossover of characters. Sirius of Harry Potter and Zuko of Avatar are included in this story because I like those characters.
Category: OC-centric, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Crossovers, General Fiction > Character-Centric, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > High School Fics, Het Romance > Fluff, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Real World, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Neji and Tenten, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Shikamaru and Temari
Characters: All, OC
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: OOC, Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: High School Never Ends
Chapters: 6 | Completed: No | Word count: 23728 | Read count: 17451 [Report This]
Published: 07/11/10 | Updated: 07/02/11


Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 05/06/11 Title: Chapter 6: To The Mall!

I like that Sakura and Ino are slowly becoming friendly towards each other that is so cute considering they were friends back in the day, so it really cute.

And thank your understanding that knowing fashion and dressing up for an event such as an outing to the mall is a completely girl like thing. I was kind of getting tired of seeing girls who didn’t care about dressing up but still look and then claiming they are different but I have seen the same girl about a hundred thousand times you’re not that different so good job on switching up a bit.

Oh you kept some of his Kyuubi traits before you explain why in later chapters or you will have a giant plot hole in the story. It’s not important now but if events like this keeping happening then an explanation is defiantly worthy. (Sorry if I sound mean at all >< in any of the reviews I give you).

The boys seem like gossiping girls; even the Naruto men have a feminine side.

Yep the Uchiha’s are the police force in Konoha so good job with that, I wonder what role Itachi plays. And I really can’t wait for the party ^O^.

Besides all that Shierra, is so cute worrying about an unsupervised party.

But I really enjoyed the fight scene between Lee and Gaara (You kept him in character). It happened in the Manga why not in AU world right.



Author's Response: Yup, I can\'t not make Sakura and Ino friends, it just seemed like the right thing to do. Okay, so about these girly things.... I like to say I\'m different, but I mean really, I\'m still a girl, and for an outing to the mall and trying to catch a boy\'s eye, a girl should definitely get dolled up. In my opinion anyway. Hmm, I\'ll definitely keep that in mind about the Kyuubi traits, thanks for warning me. And about the guys.... well, I tend to think some guys are worse than girls when it comes to gossiping. My guy friends are perfect examples, but that\'s an entirely different topic ;D Haha, I also cannot wait for the party! And yeah, I thought the fight scene would be interesting between Lee and Gaara. Glad to know I kept him in character as well. And no, your reviews have not been mean at all! I really appreciate everything you have to say. Thank you so much for sharing all of your thoughts with me. You\'re an awesome reviewer!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed Liked
Date: 05/06/11 Title: Chapter 5: The Showdown

Sasuke seemed in character in this chapter, I meaning not showing an ounce of concern though he is worried and how he stayed emotionless even with Zuko holding him.

And I really enjoyed Naruto’s personality on this he is the kind of guy that sticks up for his friends even they aren’t there, him lecturing Ino is very Naruto. Not only that angry Naruto is kind of cute don’ you think good gob describing him.

As for Ino, poor Ino but don’t forget Sakura worked the same way she broke her friendship with Ino because she saw Ino as rival this is just a reminder. Other than that I really like how Ino is developing.

Yea, you didn’t make Naruto have his phone magically in his hand. He forgot to charge it so of course it will be missing when he needs it the most…I wonder why I didn’t catch that.

OMG I just realized something you’re basing this story off of the second ending for Naruto shippuden. O.o that’s pretty clever. I’ve always wanted to read a fanfic based on that little ending the fact that you did it is pretty cool. ^^

This is by far the best chapter. I like Shierra is this chapter too, she sort of wraps up the whole fight scene pretty nicely doesn’t she.

 



Author's Response: Yes! I got Sasuke in character. Time for a celebration! I loved writing about Naruto in this chapter, it honestly just made me love him more. Haha, angry Naruto is definitely cute, I will have to agree with you ;D Hmm, that is true about Sakura. I should have remembered that, darn. But I\'m glad you still like how Ino is developing. Haha, you\'re the first to comment on the phone thing. Yeah, see? All things are connected in a way, I don\'t make this stuff up as I go along.... most of the time. YAY! You are the first person to catch the similarity! Yeah, I saw that ending for Naruto Shippuden, and I fell in love. I thought it would make a pretty good intro arc for a high school fic, so I used it. Ah, Shierra does wrap things up rather nicely. Thanks for noticing. Thank you again for reading this. You\'re a very observant reader and a very insightful reviewer. Thank you a lot for all of your comments! You\'re amazing!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed Liked
Date: 05/06/11 Title: Chapter 4: Lightning Strikes When You Least Expect It

Whoa!! I like it Lighting bull taking the girls I was surprised but what really surprised when Ino told Naruto excellent. I knew you had it in you to step out of that card board cut out slut people always go for Woot but this chapter was pretty shocking and most of the characters were in fact in character good job



Author's Response: Haha, see? I told you that you would have to read the next couple chapters. Oh gosh, wait until you get to the next chapter ;D I am very excited that you liked this. It took you by surprise, which is exactly what I was aiming for. And there was no OOCness? Hurray! I\'m glad that you enjoyed this. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! You\'re awesome!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 04/06/11 Title: Chapter 3: Halfway There...

Wow good chapter Naruto getting trouble on the first day is so him, I love it. Of course Sasuke was in character considering he is a hard character. Though him being scared of Ino seems off, he’ll probably scare her off like he does with Sakura.

Careful with Ino I mean it’s nice to have the classical villain slut but give her more of a three dimension feel to her. Make her different then what everybody else has in their story. I know you can do it, you more creative than half the people on FF.Net.

Other then that I liked how you brought each character out and how they reacted with each other.



Author's Response: Haha, yeah, Naruto can\'t seem to go a day without getting in trouble. Yeah, after I wrote about Sasuke being afraid of Ino, I instantly knew I was wrong. But I kept it because I thought it would add some sort of humor. Bah, OOCness only makes it worse! And about Ino.... eh, I\'ll just wait for you to read the next couple chapters. I do give her more depth in the following chapters, so don\'t worry. But I\'m really happy to hear that you think I\'m that creative. Thanks so much! I\'m really glad you liked this chapter. Thanks so much for still reading and thanks a bunch for still reviewing! Your advice makes my day!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 20/05/11 Title: Chapter 2: Enter! The Incoming Freshmen!

I really like how you brought in each character. Naruto screaming randomly who he is and how great he is so Naruto –roll’s eyes-. Of course Naruto and Sasuke’s fights are always fun to read.

Aw~ Naruto has a crush on Shierra that’s so cute. I can’t wait to read more.

Oh yeah Shierra seems realistic, I mean working on school to keep her grades I like that a lot ^^.



Author's Response: Yay! I\'m glad you liked the intro to the characters, that was fun for me to write as well. And of course, Naruto... well, we all know how he can get. Naruto and Sasuke are always arguing about something, so I have to make sure to get those right. Haha, Naruto\'s crush on Shierra seemed like a fun thing to write about, so we\'ll see where that goes. I\'m also glad to hear that you think Shierra is realistic. I figure someone in the group has to be dedicated to school grades, so I made it her. I\'m glad to hear you like that :D Thank you so much for reading this and thank you even more for reviewing. I really appreciate your feedback!



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 16/05/11 Title: Chapter 1: Heading Out to High School

I like that Gato, he was in the beginning of Naruto series. That was clever keeping the original villain Masashi Kishimoto had put in very thought out.  I like that =) a lot. And the best part is Gato was originally a drug dealer =). Other then that I think you got most of the characters in characters. I could all the Naruto characters reaction upon getting the text. Hinata never planning on doing anything because she is quiet, Sai and Sasuke not caring, Sakura though I hate her, I think you did a good job not bashing on her. As for Shino, I think he would be one that wasn’t planning anything but we can’t have too many Sai and Sasuke now can we so I’m getting were you are going at (so it’s alright and besides you didn’t ooc him =]). Zuka I think is off but I haven’t watched the Anime in forever so who am I to judge ;). Aw~ poor Naruto but very in character of him, forgetting to charge his phone. Thinking he’ll be the next big. I was snickering at his part and thinking of all the trouble he will get himself into. I really can’t wait to see what happens when he gets to school. Any way good job for an AU story usual they are bit difficult because you are rolling with their personality but not a very stable back story I think you did a good job =)  

Author's Response: Oh, thank you for noticing Gato. You\'re the first one to comment on that :) I\'m glad I got most of the characters in character. The text was very fun to think of, honestly. And now that I think about it, you\'re right about Shino. But I was going for the part of him that gets fed up with being unnoticed, so he would want to stand out in some way. I\'m trying to portray Zuko as the older brother tye, and it is kinda hard... Oh, poor poor Naruto... I am so cruel to our favorite blonde. Hmm, unstable back story. I\'ll go back and work on that, thanks for saying something about that. Thanks for the supporting review, though! I really appreciate you reading a bunch of my stories. Thank you so much for reading this and thanks even more for reviewing! You\'re an awesome reader/reviewer!



Title: One Little Girl by Fantasy Madeline
Rated: 12/12A Liked [Reviews - 81]
Summary: Book One Of The Trilogy

A mysterious girl. An unknown past. A dark secret. Who is this bloodthirsty girl and why is Naruto afraid of her? A dark tale full of action and suspense. A must-read. Book Two Coming Shortly
Category: General Fiction > Naruto
Characters: Team Kakashi
Genres: Dark
Warnings: AU
Challenge: None
Series: One Little Girl Trilogy
Chapters: 29 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 38495 | Read count: 39321 [Report This]
Published: 24/11/10 | Updated: 29/07/12


Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 9: ANBU

Her senses are too strong to even be human. But still good chapter I like reading your work ^-^



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 8: Mission Complete: You Guys Fail! Sorta..

awww poor Madeline she couldn't be a ninja...

Be careful with The ANBU part that is a hard spot to get. Even Itachi had to pass a test to become ANBU



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 10: Teamwork

Good she has weakness, that’s an important part on making an OC you have to give her human like weakness. Don’t be afraid to make the weakness part of her faults as a person



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 11: Meet the Team

Hmmm I like how got team seven reaction with each other pretty much close to character good job.



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 12: Mission! Escort the Bridge Builder!

Not one of my favorite chapter…(sorry please forgive me) the whole rebelling thing seemed a little off.



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 13: ROOT

Interesting chapter



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 14: Bonus Chapter! Secret Kage Files!

Nice to see a bio



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 15: BONUS CHAPTER

Your disruption is good and I can see some improvement from your first chapter till now good job ^-^



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 16: ROOT Part 2

Impressive plot twist



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 17: BONUS CHAPTER: Ranks

How sad T-T good chapter



Reviewer: Miko_Yami Signed
Date: 08/05/11 Title: Chapter 18: A Mission Like No Others

I like you bring each Naruto characters in your story