Reviews For Tainted Hearts
Name: nightninja (Signed) · Date: 07/10/18 - 10:25 am · For: Little Lights
Hey I have some ideas about that what if Naruto story
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/12/14 - 08:09 pm · For: Uchiha Pride
Awesome chapter! Like before you portrayed Sasaui's caring relationship. I cant remember if you put this in the last version of TG about the Uchiha pride thing? Anyways I thought it was good to see how protecting the clan and protecting Naruto was a tug of war in her mind. I liked the ending though ;) I can't wait for the next chapter though. Update soon!
Name: TeamWorkIsKey (Signed) · Date: 27/06/14 - 04:03 pm · For: One Word
So um... I just realized I never reviewed this chapter, and I'm pretty sure I read it when it came out. I liked it, and thought it was a very interesting chapter.
Freaking Fugaku and his 'because I told you so' attitude. I think he should have let her learn to use it, but he is who he is. Oh, Itachi is just so kind. Recently, he's become one of my favorite characters. I loved how you wrote him so well as a great big brother.
Sasaui is a little sneak, I love her! But at first, I thought those shinobi were going to hurt her, then I read the 'blond boy' part and immediately knew they were looking for Naruto who decided to wreak havoc on the city as he always did as a child. Speaking of him, the interaction between Sasaui and Naruto was cute. It was nice to read how she decided to be friends with him even after Reinami warned her not to. I have to say, that little girl (Reinami) is a meanie making her choose between the two. Sasaui definitely chose right by picking Naruto!
I'm excited to read about the two together in the future! As well as this story as a whole. Don't worry about taking forever because I do that too. Life gets busy, except I'm more lazy than that. haha Great chapter!
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 14/01/14 - 09:41 am · For: One Word
That was a good chapter :) heartwarming to say the least also. I would say sasaui is a bit more mature for her age but in a good way so don't think you did a bad job. It sucks that her father banned her ability, is it a precursor to the sharingan? Is that why he banned it? Well not much else to say except good job and update soon
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 12/07/13 - 09:29 pm · For: Little Lights
Just as I expected. Awesome the second time around. It was sweet too, I think you portrayed the strong relationship between the three even better than last time, so good job for that! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I can somewhat see how it's stronger this time. I'm glad that you liked it, Itoko-san, and I hope it continues to be awesome.
Name: TeamWorkIsKey (Signed) · Date: 12/07/13 - 03:04 pm · For: Little Lights
This chapter was very cute at many parts. I liked it a lot. Good descriptions, you've got here. I could imagine how they were moving and what was going on around them. Nice Job!
The relationship between the siblings is great and very realistic. I could see it happening in the actual Naruto. I especially loved how Sasaui and Sasuke are kind of rival-like. And how Sasuke calls her Shrimp and she calls him a butthole. That made me laugh. :) The parents were well in character. Fugaku was of course the son-of-a-nutcracker who compares his other children to Itachi. Mikoto was kind-hearted but scolding when the twins were running in the house (loved that scene as well by the way).
There were a couple of grammar things that need minor fixings. It's mostly missing words or letters. When Sasuke and Sasaui get caught for running, you forgot the word 'times' when Sasuke asks how frequently their mother told them not to run. Pout should be pouting during the dinner part. There's one more I think, but I can't find it. You probably will if you get to going over it.
Great job, Sasaui! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks. I try to do well with the description, so I'm glad you thought it was good. And yeah, this chapter was supposed to be cute. For now everything is good and happy. For now ^.^. I really enjoy the relationship between them, mostly because it is cute. Plus it's fun writing about Sasaui and Sasuke little bit of rivalry. Fugaku is a major son-of-a-nutcracker, but he's still a bit of a father. Mikoto is definitely the better of the two. She's very nice. I liked that scene as well. Again just that cuteness in there. I read through this, but it was on my iPod so I couldn't fix it. I'll probably push it off for a few months before I do it XD. Major procrastinator here. I saw the ones you pointed out and more when I did read it. Thanks a lot for you review, Monica-chan. I really appreciate it.