Reviews For The Tale of Two Shuned Wolves
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/08/11 - 07:55 pm · For: The Trick
Hahaha. That was hilariously cruel. I can't believe she'd freak out Chihiro like that. If I could, I'd have to high five Lestelle. Anyway, I can't wait to see where this is going. It's awesome so far, and it keeps me wondering about their past. Amazing work! This story is humorous and has seriousness in it (like the part where she brought up the whole cell thing. I found that serious, even if I don't know why).
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 06/06/11 - 01:52 pm · For: The Trick
Haha, funny prank. I kept having to scroll back up to the color thing at the top, but I kind of got it down now... I think.
That part where Flame says 'sometimes I really think I'm the older one.' kind of confused me at the part where she 'snatched Spark from her older sister's wrath.' So... who's older?
Author's Response: Flame's older, but Chihiro was the one who said "Sometimes I think I'm the older one"
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/06/11 - 08:49 am · For: The Trick
This chapter was a lot better than the first one. There was more description, and it flowed a lot better. I'm impressed with this, good job. I like the characters, and your a slowly introducing their past very well. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Oh, while I'm writing this, I might as well ask you. Did you get my email? It was about your review for my story, 'Rekindle the Lost Flame'. I need to talk to you about your character, if that's alright.
Would it be okay if I change her first name to a more Japanese name? And the same for Spark, I suppose. It was a rule, and I don't want to make any kind of exception for someone, if you understand. I don't wish to be mean or anything, it's just a rule. I hope you understand, please don't hate me :(
Also, you said she was a double agent. Who exactly is she betraying, her father or the heroes? I understand that she is Madara's daughter, which is cool, but if you could be more specific, that'd be awesome.
Anyways, keep up the good work with this story. It's going good so far. Can't wait for more. If you could just get back to me, that'd be awesome.
Author's Response: No, I did not get your email... Sorry about that. It's fine if you change their names. I think it would be better if she betrayed the heroes, because she would win their trust, says she wants to help them defeat Madara, and turns on them. The reason she wants to stay on Madara's side could be by force, or not. It's all up to you.