Reviews For "Of your dreams?" | Kiba Inuzuka Love Story |
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/01/12 - 03:31 am · For: Chapter 2
I personally thought his interviewer was going to be the mystery girl of his dreams. That would have been pretty entertaining. Oh well, at least you have the other Naruto characters in this as well, that always makes for an interesting read when they're in the real world XD
I really liked this chapter. Poor Kiba and his bad day. I hate to say it, but it was amusing to read about his horrible morning ;D
I can't wait to see how the interview goes! I hope he gets the job. And maybe he can get to know Koa better, since I'm pretty sure she's the girl ;) Keep up the good work with this story!
Name: Akatsuki-ryda (Anonymous) · Date: 20/01/12 - 01:34 am · For: Chapter 1
Its good. I like the humor an seriousness of the whole idea ^.^ i actualy cant wait to read more! Kiba is the man!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you can tell that there's humor, I didn't want it to be completely serious. He definitely is! Thank you for taking the time to read and review~
Name: Rezzalia (Signed) · Date: 19/01/12 - 05:58 pm · For: Chapter 1
I can't believe this was your first fic. This is great!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! Although this review is so simple, it made me 100x happier. Thank you for reviewing. <3
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/01/12 - 03:20 am · For: Chapter 1
XD I love Kiba....
Anyway, onto the productive part of the review... Your writing so far is pretty good. It's not too short or choppy. But you should work on describing scenes and elaborating on people's actions. Most of this was dialogue, which is fine and dandy, but more description on what is going on would really help.
Other than that, I think this is pretty good so far. The only other productive thing I could say is make sure you don't OOC the canon characters, especially Kiba, obviously, but that's all.
I look forward to seeing where this goes. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I love Kiba too! :D Thank you for pointing that out! I worried about if I described things well enough, now I'll make sure that in the next chapter to add a lot more detail. (: Thank you!~