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Penname: TeamWorkIsKey [Contact]
Real name: Monica
Membership status: Member
Member since: 16/03/11
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My real name is Monica and I'm 18 years old. I'm a fanfic writer...obviously, you may know me if you've seen my work on Fanfiction.net. But anyways I'm Filipino and proud. Hope you like my stories, if not that's ok. :) Feel free to call me by my real name, if you wish. I know TeamWorkIsKey can be a hassle to type out. I came up with it a while ago and I can't change it so, I'm stuck with it. :P Or TWIK... maybe not... but whatever you choose, I'll respond to it. As long as it's appropriate (let's keep it PG and polite please.)

On the subject of Reviews, here is my 1 2 3 about them:

1. When it comes to me reviewing stories, I tend to keep things positive because I like in encourage, not discourage.

2. Yeah, I despise flames/flamers whatever they're called. So like I said up there: don't like my story, don't waste your time telling me you don't because they'll end up deleted anyway. Sound good? Great.

3. I return the favor. You review on my story, I'll try to review one of yours if I'm interested.

Story Progress

Path of my Brothers This story is being edited for the time being. The whole story is being revised and slightly changed. I will update chapters immediately after they are fixed and will let you readers know via my profile page.

Prologue: DONE

Chapter 1: DONE

Chapter 2: DONE

Chapter 3: DONE

Chapter 4: DONE

Chapter 5: DONE

Chapter 6: DONE

Chapter 7: DONE

Chapter 8: DONE

Chapter 9: DONE

Chapter 10: DONE

Chapter 11: DONE

Chapter 12: DONE

Chapter 13: DONE

Chapter 14: DONE

Chapter 15: DONE

Chapter 16: DONE

Chapter 17: DONE

Chapter 18: DONE

Chapter 19: EDITING

Chapter 20: EDITING

Chapter 21: EDITING

Chapter 22: WRITING :P

*NEW* Shi-Hua Shock In the process of being written...still. I wish the show would come back on so I can recapture my ideas. But I'll try and work on it.

The History of my Creative, Imaginative Mind:

I started writing at the end of seventh grade I believe and it started out as an impulsive thing. I was just sitting at home one day after finishing the last book of "Harry Potter" wondering who the heck Draco Malfoy married when it was obviously not Pansy Parkinson. So I did what all of us do when we want to know something: I Googled it. As I was reading the name of Astoria Greengrass I clicked a featured link that brought me to a wonderful site called fanfiction.net. Before I knew it, I was reading the fanfiction written by an amazing writer. The name escapes me of the author mostly because last time I checked, they stopped writing. Anyway, once I was done reading their story, I came up with the idea of writing one of my own. And that's where it all began. The writing at least.

It all started in a notebook where I brainstormed and jotted down how each chapter would go. But I got tired of my hand cramping up and decided to go straight to the computer. A few months later I had finished my first story: "The Key". Yeah, it's not the best story ever written, but I thank those who supported me and gave me nice reviews. I don't exactly know why I still have it up on the other site. Barely anyone reads it, but I guess it's just something to look at to compare what I did then and what I do now.

Time passed after that as I longed to find new inspiration for a new story. I thought and thought and then suddenly it came to me. I remembered that ever since I was in elementary school, I had this idea about Sasuke Uchiha having a long lost twin sister who comes back and reunites with him. And that, ladies and gentlemen, is where "Path of my Brothers" began. Now it didn't start off that way. The titles and character names changed quite frequently to the point where I started all over altogether. If I remember correctly the story went from "The Journey of Another Uchiha" to "The Other Uchiha" and something else that exited my mind. Ayako started off with the name Sachi which was a combination of Sasuke and Itachi's names and was the short version of Sachidan. Etsuyo Terumi used to be Jade Hyuuga, and Nishiya used to Nuurin. Somehow Yumika remained Yumika. But that's just when I was actually typing up the story. Before that, when I was a kid, Ayako was Jade, but when it became Ayako and Yumika, they were Kumi and Yumi. There wasn't even an Etsuyo or Nishiya until later years. Ayako also changed in age as well. She went from twin, to older sister, to younger sister, to twin again. Also, I used to have her work for Orochimaru at one point. It took me over seven years to figure this all out before I actually took the time to write it, post it, and share it.

I write now because it's a good way for me to express my imagination, creativity, and feelings as well. I use my emotion to write a scene and use what I'm feeling and act as if my character is feeling the same. I don't think I'll ever stop and if I do, hopefully it's after I finally finish the "Path of my Brothers" series, and "Shi-Hua Shock". But I've waited a long time to actually have a plot and story-line for P.O.M.B. so I won't give up!

Well that's The History of my Creative, Imaginative Mind. Thanks for reading!

Want to know the real me?
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Title: She Was Beautiful by BattyBigSister
Rated: 12/12A Liked [Reviews - 64]
Summary:
She Was Beautiful

She was beautiful. He knew it every time he looked at her. Every time she filled his senses and his mind with her bright colour. Every time his trembling fingertips brushed her soft, soft skin. Every time she laughed or called to talk to him. She was bright, beautiful, burning like the sunlight… and she would never love him back.

Gaara was always the sort of man for whom one person could change everything, but in the middle of a chaotic ninja alliance mission he never expected it to be her. As he finds himself drawn more and more into a world of small time politics and bitter shinobi rivals, his biggest challenge remains gaining the heart of the woman he loves.

Set during and after the Fourth Great Ninja War (so Possible Spoiler Alert for anyone who hasn't got that far into the story)
A G/OC featuring the Sand Siblings throughout and most of Team Kakashi during the first 'Half' (try two-thirds and we'd be closer).
Now fully reposted after TONFA's technical difficulties.

Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden
Characters: Gaara, Kakashi Hatake, Kankurou, Mei Terumi (Godaime Mizukage), Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Oonoki (Sandaime Tsuchikage), Pair OCGaa, Sakura Haruno, Team Sand Siblings, Temari, Tsunade
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 62 | Completed: No | Word count: 123735 | Read count: 116110 [Report This]
Published: 27/03/11 | Updated: 30/07/12



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 08/04/11 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 5.o

This is so good! I love it! The ending got me just imagining what would happen next. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you continue to enjoy my story so much. It\'s really great to know that you did. =0)



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 27/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really like it. This first chapter was very detailed and captured my attention. Can't wait to read more :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m flattered by the compliment to my story. =0)



Title: Different. by ChibiItachi
Rated: 12/12A Liked [Reviews - 6]
Summary: He was back, he was alive, and worse, he wanted Ayane...
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Post-Naruto, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata
Characters: OC
Genres: General
Warnings: Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 849 | Read count: 2866 [Report This]
Published: 13/06/11 | Updated: 18/06/11


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 13/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction.

Aww this was so cute. I like is so far, good job! It's already making my brain wonder. Can't wait for the next chapter! :)



Title: Prayer of the Shinobi by Star of the Sky
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 17]
Summary: Inspired both by The Darker Future by cvhoneybee and This is War by 30 seconds to mars. Name came from a Naruto amv I saw. It may change.

Seken. That was the organization that had formed. Seven years of peace has been destoryed by these people. The shinobi with black pupils and red eyes. The shinobi whose chakra is three times that of a normal shinobi. The shinobi whose leader plans on gaining control of the world. Darkness has swallowed the world as a war between the Shinobi and Seken rages, the Shinobi quickly losing. Half of them have already fallen under the control of the Seken leader. Can light blossom within the darkness the Seken have created, or is the world doomed to forever remain in darkness?

You can join!


"Dare to reach out your hand into the darkness, to pull another hand into the light."

-- Norman B. Rice
Category: OC-centric, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU
Characters: All, OC
Genres: None
Warnings: AU, Death
Challenges: , Joint Stories!
Challenge: , Joint Stories!
Series: None
Chapters: 3 | Completed: No | Word count: 1940 | Read count: 4159 [Report This]
Published: 21/06/11 | Updated: 21/07/11


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 21/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Raising

That's quite alright. It's tough to handle many stories at the same time, so it's okay. Though if you don't mind, I might use the name of my character in my story.

But anyways, don't worry about it. At least you've made the decision now instead of 10 chapters into it.

To Sasaui: Don't fret because you've got a lot of other great stories to focus on. And good luck to those! :)



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 08/07/11 Title: Chapter 2: Tale of the Fallen Angels

wow...this just BLEW MY MIND!
I love it so far!
I so can't wait to read more and have the characters added into it.
This was such a great beginning!
Fantastic!

Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it. I was hoping that this part would make everyone excited for what was coming up. I\'ll try to make them as good as this was.



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 21/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Raising

I'd love to join in!

Name: Naturami Yugoshawa
Gender: Female (I love Kunoichi!)
Age: 16
Weakness: She can't lie which can get her and her teammates into a lot of trouble depending on the situation.
Romance (optional): She can be with your o.c. if you'd like! If not, you can ask me or pick one yourself.
Village: Getsugakure (Village Hidden under the Moon, if that's alright?)
Rank: Chunin
Personality: Naturami is consistently nice until battle. That is where she takes things seriously and has, I guess you could say, an alter ego completely opposite from her natural self. That alter ego takes over and is rude to her comrades and takes down her opponents.
Appearance (pictures accepted): This isn't mine, I found it off the internet.
http://www.theotaku.com/fanart/view/293460/kunoichi_%253Akungfu_pose%253A
Angel or Demon: Angel
History: She was born and raised in Getsugakure being pushed to become a Kunoichi. When Naturami heard the Seken's began to take over, she trained until she felt it was the right time to head out and help out the other villages.
Chakra Nature: Wind
Kekkei Genkai: Long Distance Hearing
Special Abilities: Great user of Senbon and Taijutsu
(above can be unlocked later on)
Other (optional): None for the time being.

Author's Response: Sure. She can be with Zakaru. I think she\'s an awesome character. I love her. I\'m glad you decided to participate in this. I\'ll try my best to do her well.



Title: Sandpaper by tigerseye
Rated: U Liked [Reviews - 9]
Summary: It was a simple escort mission, Si and a girl about the same age. Simple, but why are the Akasuki after her, and why does his heart speed up whenever he sees her?
Category: OC-centric
Characters: OC, Sai
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Challenges: , A Sai/OC story
Challenge: , A Sai/OC story
Series: None
Chapters: 5 | Completed: No | Word count: 4921 | Read count: 6056 [Report This]
Published: 04/07/11 | Updated: 23/08/11


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 15/07/11 Title: Sandpaper

This story is pretty good, I will admit. There's just a little bit of spelling errors but it's nothing to serious. I understand what was being said.
Anyways, I can't wait to read more! Keep it up! :)



Title: Welcome to the Family by RawrTheDinoLycan
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 43]
Summary: TEMPORARY HIATUS! TEMPORARY HIATUS! TEMPORARY HIATUS!

Sorry everyone, it's just that I've been reading through and noticed that this thing is TERRIBLE! Ermergerh, how did you all not point out the atrocious mistakes I was making?! I'm so embarrassed *shameful look*. Anywho, the story will be up again soon, no need to worry. And nothing will change plot-wise :). Sorry for the inconvenience and please don't forget about this story!
Category: OC-centric, Het Romance > Fluff, Het Romance > Angst
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Death, OOC
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 11 | Completed: No | Word count: 53346 | Read count: 14473 [Report This]
Published: 26/07/11 | Updated: 15/01/13


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 28/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really like this idea. I've never read a story where Shikamaru has a sibling. It's pretty refreshing and original. I like her name as well. It's interesting.

Oh, and don't worry I like the story as well. :) So far I think it's great. Good job.

As for your problem with a pairing for Rokariku for some reason my thoughts are pointing towards Gaara because everyone knows Shikamaru has something going on with Temari and I think it would be funny if they BOTH fell for a Sand Sibling. But that's just my opinion.

Otherwise I'd say Naruto because Shikamaru and Naruto get very close later on in the future, and I think it would be sweet if she ended up with Naruto who becomes one of her brothers closest friend.

But, I'm really on the offense about Haku because he ends up dying anyway... unless you change that.

Yeah, so this is the longest review I've given so far (feel honored lol). I'll end it with saying can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: I do feel very honored, thank you! :D Nah, I\'m rescuing Haku because his death just pisses me off. Hmm, it would be pretty funny if they both fell for the Sand Sibs haha. Thanks for your awesome review!



Title: Rotes Blut by BattyBigSister
Rated: 12/12A Liked [Reviews - 14]
Summary:
Rotes

A Kekkei Genkai is a jutsu passed down through the generations in the family's DNA. It isn't supposed to kill its user. Gaara/OC/Kankurou love triangle.
Category: General Fiction > Post-Naruto, OC-centric
Characters: Baki, Gaara, Hidden Sand Ninja, Kankurou, Matsuri, OC, Pair OCGaa, Team Sand Siblings
Genres: Drama, Horror, Romance, Supernatural
Warnings: Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 | Completed: No | Word count: 8301 | Read count: 4904 [Report This]
Published: 11/09/11 | Updated: 21/09/12


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 14/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Oh wow, I've never really read a horror genre story. This is very original.

The beginning was so descriptive. I could just picture what was going on as though I was actually watching it.

I can't wait until you update because I would love to continue reading.

Author's Response: Neither have I that was one of the reasons I was so interested in writing one. It seemed like a real challenge and I love a challenge. Thank you for your review and I hope you enjoy the new chapter!



Title: Beneath the Darkness by DestinyGirl
Rated: PG Liked [Reviews - 20]
Summary:

A demon who shall love only himself.

The messenger of death who knows no emotions, only darkness itself.

Why . . . was she taken away? Now I'm all alone . . .

Chained by sorrow, treated as evil, what ever happened to that thing called love?

My friend . . . Yami.

Only one has ever understood me . . .

Treated as an outcast and shunned, Yami has never been shown any kindness before. Until she meets Gaara one day . . . This is the companion to Broken Wings. What if Gaara had met a girl like him and made one friend as a child? Follow this story of the Shukaku demon of the sand and the ultimate angel of death. AU

GaaraXOC

 


Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto, Het Romance > Fluff, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Shikamaru and Temari
Characters: All, Pair OCGaa
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Dark, Drama, Fantasy, General, Mystery, Romance, Spiritual, Supernatural, Tragedy
Warnings: AU
Challenge: None
Series: Destiny's Chosen
Chapters: 4 | Completed: No | Word count: 12344 | Read count: 9756 [Report This]
Published: 29/09/11 | Updated: 26/01/12


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 14/11/11 Title: Chapter 2: Part 2: Friends In The Making

Aww wow, this story is so cute! I'm really liking it. Good job!

Author's Response: Thx so much for reading and reviewing!:D



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 24/11/11 Title: Chapter 3: Part 3: Monster In The Dark

What a great chapter. I like Rei, he's pretty cool for what he did. Good job again! :)

Author's Response: Thx so much for reviewing! I really appreciate it, and thanks for liking Rei!:)



Title: Beyond my reach by akuma no sasayaki
Rated: U Liked [Reviews - 7]
Summary:
She wanted to revenge her clan's death... yet her mother doesn't know or doesn't want her to know who's the killer was... But she was determined... until she was aroused while everything about her and Konoha revealed to the little Uchiha.

Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto, Het Romance > Fluff, General Fiction > Pre-Series, Het Romance > Angst, Het Romance > Warned
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Dark, Drama, General, Graphic lemon, Mystery, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Dark, OOC, Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: The Book of the Forsaken Uchiha
Chapters: 14 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 12500 | Read count: 18237 [Report This]
Published: 10/02/12 | Updated: 14/05/12


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 30/03/12 Title: Chapter 7: I am...

wow... o.O... I really like this story! Fantastic job on this! I really like the idea. Congrats on graduating! :)
I can't wait for the next update! I hope it's soon! :D

Author's Response: sorry the update is a bit too late.. but i've been working on it..! i;ll do my best for you guys!!



Title: Three Days by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 36]
Summary:
I always thought death was quick. Painless. Merciful. That's how it should be. I would never wish an agonizing death on anyone.

And yet, someone must have asked Kami to curse my grandfather with a slow and drawn out death. Because when I watched him in the hospital for those three days, there was nothing merciful about it.

It wasn't fair to him. He was a good man.

It was the worst three days of my life.

Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Timeless
Characters: OC
Genres: Dark, Drama, General, Tragedy
Warnings: AU, Dark, Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 14779 | Read count: 5026 [Report This]
Published: 20/03/12 | Updated: 13/04/12


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 24/03/12 Title: Chapter 2: The First Day

Oh my gosh, Silverwolf...this is tremendously good.

I am so sorry for you loss and it must be awfully hard for you to right this. But you're very strong for doing so. Good job on this. I will definitely continue reading.

Author's Response: Well, I'm glad the writing is good :D I appreciate your condolences, thank you for your thoughts. Admittedly, I did cry while writing this chapter, I believe it was the dialogue that did it for me. Thank you for deciding to read this, it means a lot to me. And thanks for the review, I appreciate the feedback.



Title: Shizake Chronicles: The Awakening by Shizake Uchiha
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 12]
Summary: A bunch of one-shots about one of my OC's. Follow Shizake on many of his adventures that weren't included in the main story.
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Dark, Drama, General, Mystery, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: AU, Dark, Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 | Completed: No | Word count: 29047 | Read count: 6898 [Report This]
Published: 04/10/12 | Updated: 30/07/14


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 19/05/14 Title: Chapter 8: Blood Clash

Nice fight scene! I really liked reading it, even though I'm not completely caught up in your story, this didn't really need any background information, but I guess that's how it is with random writing (duh haha). But I do have a question, how are they cousins? Or will I find that out once I keep reading your story? Anyway, awesome job with this chapter. I always have troubles with fight scenes but you make it look easy because of how epic it turned out. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm really glad you liked it, I went for as much epic ness as possible. Yeah no worries you don't need to be caught up unless you want to know the whole reason why they're fighting but it's not important. Ah well in my story I don't really explain much about shizake's parents but they are cousins by blood. So fugaku is shizakes uncle.haha ah it was nothing your not bad at fight scenes it's just that the fights are my favorite parts. Well once again I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the review :)



Title: Shadows of Vengeance by Shizake Uchiha
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 50]
Summary:
So close no matter how far…

“I don't know how they could've done that to me…but what I do know is that they are going to die.”

Couldn’t be much more from the heart…

“They killed the two people I cared about the most in this world. My whole life was ripped away in an instant…”

Forever trust in who we are…

“This is why I don’t make bonds, why I don’t have friends. I only have one goal in my life and I plan on doing it alone. Anyone who gets in my way will perish by my hands.”

And nothing else matters…

“I’ve gone through too much to quit here. I’ve traveled the lands looking for answers. I’ve learned many great things, attained much knowledge, and gained power. Through blood and tears I’ve carried a hardship I’ll always endure on my shoulders. You may say you understand me but…you don’t and you never will.”

In a cruel world where certain ninja vie for ultimate power, a young boy lost among the crowd that is life becomes a target. On a normal day like any other his path is carved for vengeance. He sets out to discover his true strength but more importantly himself. Through all the lands and all the villages he sets out for knowledge, self-insight, the power he was born with, and most importantly, revenge.


Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure, Dark, Drama, General, Mystery, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: AU, Dark, Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 | Completed: No | Word count: 57635 | Read count: 16563 [Report This]
Published: 22/01/13 | Updated: 01/07/15


Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 25/06/14 Title: Chapter 7: Rude Awakening

Alrighty, finally getting to this chapter. Sorry, I've been M.I.A. I was trying to work on my story and the chapter that was a pain... I was reading this, I just never got to reviewing, but now here I am!

This chapter was great to read and I loved how Ikari helped out Rayne by bringing her to Itachi. I also loved how Itachi didn't go back on his word and taught him the missing step. You know, Itachi became one of my favorite characters recently. He was such a good shinobi, I'm sad he's gone.

Anyway, Rayne and Ikari, huh? Haha, that was a cute little end you put to the chapter. Good job again!

Author's Response: Haha no worries for real. You don't have to apologize to me. I know how busy life can get. Yeah same here! Itachi has become one of my favorite, I mean he was already before, but even more now. Ha I couldnt help it :P I'm glad you enjoyed and thanks for the review!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 13/07/14 Title: Chapter 15: Blood Diamonds

Hurray, new chapter! Well first off, I think you did really great with the summoning fight. Go Ikari, and Gaara. (Ew to how the spider was killed though. haha He ripped it apart and I could easily imagine it... yucky XP) The description created a vivid picture and was written quite nicely.

Aw, he got a headband from the Sand. And eased the tensions with Kankuro. That was nice. Now, off he goes to continue his wind training. I can't wait to see how it all goes. Hope you update soon! I'm eager to read more. :)

Author's Response: Ah I'm glad you think I did well with the fight :D Haha I had to make it as gruesome as possible. Thanks :) Everytthing seems to be going well for now, and yep I will update soon :) Thanks for your wonderful review!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 29/06/14 Title: Chapter 9: Reclamation

Awww, no he's leaving Rayne! :( That was a sad part to read, especially how they ended on a sour note. But I get it. Ikari had to leave since there's all the other elements he has to learn.

Darn that Kirikage and saying it was rogue ninjas that killed the twins, and the parents as if it never happened. That's disrespectful in many ways! I can't wait for Ikari to take action on them. They deserve a good butt-kicking! XD

So now he's on his way to the Sand Village? YAY! He's going to meet the Sand Siblings, isn't he? Oh that's exciting because they're my absolute favorites! I'm seeing some heads banging though with Ikari's whatever attitude and Gaara's no-bs attitude. But I'm sure everything will turn out okay in the end. Onto the next chapter, I go!

Author's Response: Yeah :/ it was sad to write but it had to come. It's not the Kirikage's fault though, the parents went to great lengths to cover up everything and made it appear as if rogue ninja did it. Yes the sand village :D You'll just have to read and find out ;) Thank you for another wonderful review, always appreciated!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 30/06/14 Title: Chapter 10: Adamant

Alright, time to review another one of your fantastic chapters. This one was definitely interesting. I guessed that seeing the Kazekage wouldn't be that easy, but I didn't expect Ikari to run into Baki. That was pretty exciting and cool, especially their little fight. It probably wasn't the best idea for him to suggest that since, Baki is a wind user and that usually beats lightning, but hey he didn't know!

I thought it was very sweet for Ikari to help those siblings from the shop keeper. It was kind of him to step in, even though he wasn't completely sure what he was doing. At least, Baki saw it as a good act and now he's going to help him. Hurray! I can't wait for him to meet the Kazekage.

Author's Response: Yes things are off to rocky start for Ikari but in the end it seemed to have paid off. Yes he's one more stop closer to meeting the Kazekage and one more step closer to mastering wind release. Slowly but surely. Thank you again for these awesome string of reviews! They always help encourage me to write more and I always appreciate some nice words.



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 27/06/14 Title: Chapter 8: Horizon

Sweet little fight scene with A. I even got curious when Ikari's chakra wrapped around his arm. I wonder what that was about. But it was nice that A wanted to test his skill and wasn't all cranky about it.

So they got drunk, huh? That was pretty funny to read. I liked how he finally told Rayne what happened to his siblings. He's opening up a little bit. But you got me there with the dream. I actually thought it was real for a second and was like 'wtf?' haha. I also started to laugh when Ikari threw Rayne off the couch and she thought they were under attack. XD Good chapter!

Author's Response: Yeah I felt I had to put him interacting more with A in there. It was a short but important fight. Haha yes they did get drunk :P I felt it was the only way for Ikari to open up like he did. That would be bad if the dream was real ;) haha had to put a little humor in it. Thanks for another review, they truly are appreciated!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 06/07/14 Title: Chapter 13: Deep Within

I could easily imagine each one of the enemy being picked up and disposed of while everyone else goes on with their business like everything's fine. That was great. At least they got the scrolls and Ikari can resume his training with Temari.

I feel like she could use her being his teacher to her advantage more if she really wanted to learn more on his past. But it's nice that she doesn't push it too far.

Okay, I have one last chapter and then I'm caught up! Hurray!

Author's Response: Heck yeah! I was inspired by Assassins creed. Dunno if you've ever played that game but I had to put something like that in there and I'm glad you liked it! Yeah Temari, I feel, is one of those people that would like to know but doesn't care enough to push it. Yay, thanks for the review.



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 12/07/13 Title: Chapter 5: Thunderclap

Interesting chapter. My favorite part would be the ending where you bring the two stories together. You know, you're and Rayne's. It was great to read and it really highlighted the point of the story: Vengeance. As I said before, these reviews are going to get shorter, I'm sorry. I would love to say more but honestly, saying it's fantastic sums it all up. Haha

I'll get to the other chapters immediately with reviews. Sorry there was a gap of time from the last one to this one. Great Job Shizake!

Author's Response: I was unsure about bringing the two stories together but I thought it would be a nice little tribute to Tink and her character plus it helped add to the development. Hey I'll appreciate a review now matter how short or long they are. So no need to apologize. And don't worry about the gap, I won't get mad or frustrated ever. You're on your own time so do what you do. Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 01/07/14 Title: Chapter 11: Hurricane

Yes! He met Gaara! There conversation was pretty close to what I imagined. He had to be trusted first before any help could be given. Of course he'd read Ikari's eyes as well. It made sense why Gaara pushed for an explanation, and at least Ikari didn't make too big a deal out of it or freaked out.

Kankuro is just a very protective brother, and I'm glad you captured that side to him. At this point he no longer fears Gaara and just wants whats best for him, so I see why you had him go against the Kazekage's orders, so to speak. Good thing Temari stepped in before anything really bad happened.

I'm excited to see Temari train him now. I find that there's no one better to teach wind techniques than the character who has a giant fan strapped to her back. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: I'm glad I got the things right about Gaara :D Really, I worry everytime about OOCing a character. Also with Kankuro. It's fun writing all those different aspects and personalities. Haha yeah I figured Temari would be the best so I made it happen :). Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 05/07/13 Title: Chapter 1: Sunrise

You know, I never read this before, because I was too preoccupied with my own story. Now that I'm kind of doing whatever I can to get away from editing (I don't really know why), I'm starting to read other fanfictions on here and I must say, I have no idea why I didn't pick this one a while ago... I enjoy it already.

So Kekkei Dota, huh? Where a person can control the five elements. All I can say to that is awesome. It honestly reminds of my story in so many ways, and makes me wish I was farther ahead in it to right about the nature stuff I've got going on. Anyway, this is quite creative. I'm eager to see how it'll play into this.

I like Ikari already. His personality in this chapter was so adorable especially when he made his siblings pinky-swear and when he said "Night mommy" at the end. So cute! :P His father on this other hand, I'm not sure if I like him, personality wise, I mean. I agree with Mikara that he's too hard. But then again, most fathers in Naruto are hard on their children, especially when their older siblings are strong. Mikara is so sweet. I love the relationship between her and her son. It's pretty heartwarming.

Well, since I'm only on chapter one, and there's still nine more to go, I'm going to continue on. You'll be receiving reviews on them as well. Good work!

Author's Response: Wow! I jumped for joy when I saw you had reviewed. It's been a while since I've had a new reviewer :) I'm so glad you enjoy it too :) Yes Kekkei Dota, I liked the idea of possession of all elements since it'll provide for unlimited jutsu combinations as well as a story to uncover. I'm glad you like Ikari too! I really enjoy using him. :P I'm glad you found everything cute that's what I was going for :) I'll be looking for your reviews thank you so much for reviewing!



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed Liked
Date: 06/07/14 Title: Chapter 14: Gust

First off, FINALLY I CAUGHT UP!! It only took... a year, like exactly... holy crap I am a slow reader! :P

I started cringes at the thought of Ikari's experience with learning wind release and how it felt to be stabbed a bunch of times. Yikes, that must have hurt like hell, but... at least he got it! Oh, his past still makes me sad. His siblings were so awesome! Gaara packed his wounds with sand?... Ew... I only say that because sand in a cut doesn't sound too helpful. Though, whatever works, right? And a giant spider? Seriously? You've got me squirming all over the place, I hate spiders! If I ever saw a giant one, I'd give up on the spot! haha.

This was a very interesting chapter to say the least. I was surprised Ikari can now heal himself, kind of like a Jinchuriki. It's pretty cool, nonetheless. I can't wait until you update! (Geez, I don't think I ever said that in a review for this story before.) Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Haha hey it's not a bad thing! I always tell readers to take their time, there's no rush at all. Oh yeah It had to be as painful as possible especially since Lightning is weak against wind and Ikari just learned lightning soo.... Yeah I had to think of something Gaara could do. It would hurt but at least Ikari was knocked out at the time. haha sorry about that it was the first thing that popped into my head. Well it wasn't really that he can heal himself, but his rage just happened to activate another ability of Kekkei Dota. Thanks for the review! I'll update as soon as possible



Reviewer: TeamWorkIsKey Signed
Date: 05/07/13 Title: Chapter 2: Suspicions

Another great chapter.

First off, Zakumo made me laugh when he got all awkward because Ikari made lava come out of the stone, and Kino seems like a nice kid. It was nice of Ikari to invite him over and even more nicer for Zumaku to train him since his dad is always gone.

I wonder what those Jonin were talking about with his parents. The subject is obvious, it's just I want to know what they said. I'm excited to read about what's in store with Ikari.

Yay! Hitari and Kikoro are back! Their relationship with their little brother is very sweet. They're so nice to him, it's cute. But what a mistake to take him out to sneak around. I loved how they got caught too. It's like the most common ways and most seen on T.V. and stuff but it's still funny to imagine. I wonder what they're going to be talking about with their parents.

Onto the next chapter! I love this more and more as I keep reading.

Author's Response: Yes the lava, I had a tough time thinking of a way to hint at Kekkei Dota but I got it out :P Hitari and Kikoro might be ANBU but they have emotions when it comes to their brother :) There's a lot more in store. Thanks for the review! and I'll get to reviewing more of your story also :)