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Summary:

She was beautiful. He knew it every time he looked at her. Every time she filled his senses and his mind with her bright colour. Every time his trembling fingertips brushed her soft, soft skin. Every time she laughed or called to talk to him. She was bright, beautiful, burning like the sunlight… and she would never love him back.

Gaara was always the sort of man for whom one person could change everything, but in the middle of a chaotic ninja alliance mission he never expected it to be her. As he finds himself drawn more and more into a world of small time politics and bitter shinobi rivals, his biggest challenge remains gaining the heart of the woman he loves.

Set during and after the Fourth Great Ninja War (so Possible Spoiler Alert for anyone who hasn't got that far into the story)
A G/OC featuring the Sand Siblings throughout and most of Team Kakashi during the first 'Half' (try two-thirds and we'd be closer).
Now fully reposted after TONFA's technical difficulties.
Rating: 12/12A
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden
Characters: Gaara, Kakashi Hatake, Kankurou, Mei Terumi (Godaime Mizukage), Naruto Uzumaki, OC, Oonoki (Sandaime Tsuchikage), Pair OCGaa, Sakura Haruno, Team Sand Siblings, Temari, Tsunade
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapter: 62 Completed: No
Words: 123735 Read: 250653
Published: 27/03/11 Updated: 30/07/12

My apologies for any decline in quality btw. After TONFA's technical difficulties I had to repost an earlier version of this story.

Disclaimer: Naruto, both manga and anime, and any related work do not in any way belong to me. This is a fan-made story, unrelated to the original creators of Naruto, intended purely for the amusement of other fans. No defamation of any sort is intended towards the original manga and anime, its characters and creators or anyone else related to the official Naruto franchise. This work is available for free, on a wholly non-commercial basis, and no profit has been made or is intended to be made by its production and distribution. 1. Chapter 1 by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 8] (1391 words)

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I hope this is not against site rules, but on other sites I posted on I got into the habit of splitting my chapters up into segments to make them easier to read (because they are huge, full-length, as-you-would-find-in-a-book-sized things. That's why). I figured I'd do the same here, because it is actually much easier to read like this. I hope that's okay, if not just let me know and I'll edit this. (Same with the banner actually...)
3. Chapter 2.b by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 2] (608 words)

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Hello my precious chickens! And may I be the first to welcome you to Chapter 4. Probably the only person sad enough to bother doing so, come to that, but no matter.
How have you been enjoying it so far? Has it been good? Has it been dull? Has it been bogged down in tasteless description and character errors? Is it frankly just too weighty for light reading? Or is there just not enough dirty action? Do let me know!
My deepest and most heartfelt gratitude goes to Enara6, the only person so far kind wonderful and generous enough to do the decent humanitarian thing and put me out of my miserable torment by reviewing. That's no exaggeration either.
I was absolutely despondent wondering why people didn't seem to like my story enough for even a short little review. I'm still agonizing actually over that same question - there do seem to be people reading after all. Do they not like it?
So for Enara, who at least did seem to like this story of mine, here is Chapter 4:

Best wishes!

BattyBigSister
12. Chapter 4.b by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 2] (1082 words)

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Hello my beautiful ducklets and willkommen bei Kapitel Fünf! First of the bat, I owe some of you guys an apology. There was a bit of a mix up around… I think it was section 4d (that's 14 to those of you not working on my system). I accidentally posted 4e in its place for a while. Thankfully I was playing around with the chapters anyway and noticed after just a few hours, but if you got confused then… I'm really, really sorry! =0(
Deux; regarding reviews. My eternal love and thanks go to Lenore-Light, KebechetOfTheSand and twice over to MaxRideLover for all their lovely reviews and positive feedback for both this story and Gaara's Little Friend. I'm so grateful to know that I have people who enjoy reading this story and enjoy the work I put into it.
That said I am still really discouraged about the general lack of feedback & even more so because I really can't point my finger on exactly what the problem is – and, being me, it wasn't long before I came up with a solution, which I hope will let me come up with some answers. Introducing the 'Review Form':

• o/The story is stagnated and lacks real action in its plot: True/False
  
• o/I enjoyed the description: True/False
  
• o/The character's actions aren't really believable: True/False
  
• o/The writing is too long, wordy & convoluted in places: True/False
  
• o/I found your writing style engaging: True/False
  
• o/Out of Ten, I give your story so far:
  
• o/I love you BattyBigSister and will house, feed, clothe and wait on you forever if you just keep on writing for me: False/Even More False

So for the lovely Lenore-Light (Have you read her story by the way? I think it's awesome), for KebechetOfTheSand and of course for the indomitable and charming MaxRideLover, I bring you Chapter 5! Happy Reading!
19. Chapter 5.b by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 0] (2015 words)

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Hello my precious goslings and congratulations on having made it as far as Chapter 6. Some of you made it sound like it's been quite the chore, but that just makes me all the more grateful that you actually bothered to read all 32 instalments (which is quite a feat really if there were things bothering you about them) and give me much needed criticism. That really is very kind of you. Thank you! =0D
Sorry if I sound a little blunt here btw. I originally wrote a much longer author's note, but it ended up much too long to actually post like that, so this is just a summary. I'll probably put the original up on the website if you're interested (which I doubt).
While I pride myself on maintaining a little mystique and not giving everything away right at the start, even I have to admit that the last couple of chapters may have ended up confusing more because of a lack of attention to writing quality than by plot design. I really hated writing them and struggled to get them done, and I think that came across more than it should have, but I simply couldn't figure out how to make the plot work without them. It should get easier from here on out.
Oh… and for those of you who expressed concern, Gaara's ladylove is already in the story. I'm quite surprised you haven't spotted her already.

So here, either for their kind and helpful reviews, is Chapter Six for butiloveyou, t recorder, QueenoftheKill, ReadinFromPhone, littlewarrior911 (twice over), PyroPinkMokey12, LittleEcho12 and of course many times over for hitsugayataichoda, Shifuni and Aithre Lenore-Light all of whom have been reviewing and supporting me for ages now. Thank you so much! An extra special mention goes to Shifuni as well for the impressive feat of reviewing every single chapter. I feel that alone deserves commendation. For those of you who really enjoyed this story – I hope you continue to – and for those who nevertheless gave me helpful criticism regardless – thank you!

With love,
BattyBigSister, xoxox
34. Chapter 6.b by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 0] (2026 words)

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I decided to post this on TONFA first, because I wanted silverwolf1213's opinion on Shifuni. Not sure how she's worked out.
48. Chapter 7.c by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 1] (3102 words)

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Hello my pretty, pretty chickadees and welcome to Chapter 8 (& my 60th SWB installment)! We got here! I was hoping I'd get to all of this in the last chapter, but no matter… I should have known better really. For those of you used to receiving reviews from me, you'll note I broke some of my own rules in the intro scene of this chapter. In fact I did it on purpose. I wanted that slightly rougher feel to the text. You'll have to let me know how you think it works.

Speaking of reviews, you know you don't have to be intimidated by the review form. Just review however you like. It's only there as a help if you want it. You know, for those of you on ff-dot-net, a review can really act as sort of a bookmark, letting you pick up the story from where you left off in your review history. Just saying….

Anyway, my thanks this time around go to: Lieutenant Winter, Shifuni (of course), Lily, Angelic Snowdrop (formerly Lenore-Light), Regin, smileintothechoas and Rain (Yes, I am British and thank you for some very insightful reviews). From TONFA I would like to thank: silverwolf1213, Uchiha Sasaui, DeadManTyping and WinterzDream.

For all of you, here is Chapter 8!
61. Chapter 8.b by BattyBigSister [Reviews - 1] (2410 words)

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Original Script by Rivka, current release to be found at Source Forge. TONFA is not affiliated with any of the creators of Naruto, nor with Bandai.

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