Reviews For Moon's Light, Reality's Dream
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 12/07/09 - 05:17 pm · For: 無力 (Powerless)
Loved this chapter 10/10
At some points I can almost feel and visualize the surroundings with the way you write, it is really amazing. Especially the journey to Sunagakure. Gaara stayed in character very well aside from his reaction to ANBU, who he had seen at the chuunin exams. Surely he would have been notified if he was being sent an ANBU. At times your paragraphs are too descriptive or large and left me wondering what the other character was doing. An example was the one before Hitori was excused. You may have realized this by the way you followed up with: Hitori let her head fall lower when she realized he wasn't going to say any more.
Anyway I really enjoy this story so far. More so now that I read the latest Manga chapter! :3
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 07/07/09 - 12:08 am · For: 無慈悲 (Mercilessness)
I'm making a comment before reading the entire thing. YOUR CHAPTERS/PARAGRAPHS ARE HUUUUUUGGGEEE. You need to bring in the lemons in the first sentence or something (joke).
But seriously, you would have many more reviews if your chapters weren't so large. The story itself is incredibly deep and so are the OC's yet most won't have the attention span to go 1000 words in without the word Sasuke or Naruto fitted in somewhere along the way.
Author's Response: I mainly blame it on being an author. We tend to think of it as a novel. We were going to write this story regardless, but we decided why not post it, if we're going to write it. I did take notice that most reviews are towards romantic, lemon infested stories. I'm not saying its bad. The story is going to be long, so we made, insanely epically long chapters. I'm sorry if it is a bit intimidating at first. I figured that the readers could take it paragraph by paragraph, if they were truly intrigued for that matter. It's too late to change anything or go back. As the story goes deeper, the characters of Naruto will appear more. I didn't expect many reviews to begin with. We fully understand that the OC's were not going to be liked, or perhaps their stories would be too long. But we also hoped that the reader would grow to love the characters. The story itself is undergoing being drawn into a manga, so we do our best to make it as descriptive as possible. Maybe someone will appreciate every bit of it, or maybe not. Thank you VERY much for your review. I'll take your suggestions into consideration. rnrn- Lisa
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 01/07/09 - 04:29 pm · For: ダンゾウ (Danzou)
I think you* would continue even if I didn't mention how good the first chapter was ;D
The entire time I had Danzou pictured as some Dr. Evil figure, lmao. You are very descriptive about every detail, it is almost too much. Crinkled papers, reminding about fabric on masks, etc. Amazing at it however. I am a fan of Yomi already.
10/10
Out of curiosity how long have you two been writing? Separately that is. What is your favorite reading material?
Author's Response: rnThank you very much for your prompt response to the story! *_____* rnWe've posted on various sites, but you are sincerely the first, and I am pleased with your review. rnI think we would continue this story, but the reviews are really motivating, so I hoped for some insight on what maybe is favored, and what isn't. rnSo, really very thank you >.< rnI have only been writing for about six years. My favorite reading material is probably manga and other favored fanfiction, in all honesty. The writing was just something I could relate to, and I loved English class, and loved learning new words. I do not believe that whatever you read turns you into that kind of writer, but I haven't read anything spectacular. The twilight series? But is that so damn neat? lol rnAgain! Thank you very much, your review was very much appreciated. rnrn- Lisa rnrnrn---- rnrnYes, thank you very much for such an awesome review! ^_^ As Lisa said, we've both been posting separate works on other sites for several years now. This would only be our second posted collaboration. I've been writing for "a long time." rn My favorite reading.. it's easier to say my favorite authors. For novels I am a fan of Neil Gaiman, Michael Moorcock, Tolkien and several other, perhaps much less well known authors. Manga and anime are always good, and I have more interest there than I could ever possibly list off. Like Lisa, I also loved English, and am passionate about words to an almost sickening degree. rnrn We do thank you very much for the encouraging review. Yomi fan = <3333!!!rnrn-Amyrnrnrn