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Reviews For A Murderer's Heart

Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/12/12 - 10:56 am · For: My Last Battle as a Shinobi of the Sky
How's you're dog doing now, Dino-chan? Is she doing any better?

=( Ren died. I knew it was coming, but still. I miss him already. Bye-bye, Ren.

Sheesh. Poor Hana. To know her team's dead and even watch one of them die right in front of her. Then, to make matters worse, she was put under the Tsukuyomi. That is not a fate anyone deserves. I wonder what this event will do to her. I guess I won't know until the next chapter.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/12/12 - 08:38 am · For: Aw Fuck
No! Ren must live! Kisame, back off before I six - never mind. I forgot Ryu doesn't like me threatening people with him.......

Two things. One is from last chapter I forgot to mention. You seemed to point out his eyes too much in the span of less than 1000 words. I can't remember how many times, just that it was getting repetitive. The other thing - how did Hana get passed Kisame? He's a S-ranked ninja. Or did he not want to stop her?

Sheesh, it really is getting dangerous. I'm very eager, though afraid, to read the next chapter (I don't want Ren to die T_T). For now, though, I shall watch Yu Gi Oh and then I shall read more.

Author's Response: >.< Kisame's a real jerk, yeah? This isn't the last time they cross paths MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/12/12 - 08:15 am · For: Remember, Hana
Awwww!!! That last scene was so cute XD. Wah!!! Why does her whole team have to die? I like Ren. Haha. Now I can imagine a love triangle with Ren, Hana, and Itachi. So much fun. Anyways, so it's Shina he's after? But why? *strokes imaginary beard*


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/12/12 - 08:08 am · For: The Sushi Screwed Me Over
Out of all the questions she asks....... Haha! Oh, I love Hana. So much fun XD. Though I am very very curious now. Why in the world would Itachi be tracking her? And she thinks her glare can scare Itachi Uchiha? Poor oblivious child. Well, off to read more!


Name: UzamakiMasumi (Signed) · Date: 08/11/12 - 07:15 pm · For: Two Strange Men
First of all, I want to say that I am amazed at the difference in skill since the last time I read any of your stuff. And I was immediately dragged right into this character. She's really interesting, has some charisma. I find her just a bit comparable to your past characters, though. They all have a bit of a cynical outlook, I think. There were a couple grammar mistakes, but it was mostly clean, a bit step up from before. I didn't understand the explanation about why she called her sensei 'Sensei', though. I mean, I understood what it was saying, but I didn't understand what that had to do with calling her 'Sensei'. Also, the little comment in the parenthesis is a big no no. And, is the Akatsuki really that old? Because I know it was quite a long time ago that Jiraiya raised and trained those three so long ago, but was it really over fifty years ago? That might be a little off.

And then the other thing I have to point out is the little dialogue scuffle between the main character and Kenta. I like how it was nice and fast paced, like they were just shooting out the comebacks out at each other, but a bit more description about their expressions, stances, anything physical, and the narrator's thoughts would have been nice.

I just love their sushi and they love my money...and Kenta. Yes, I am reffering to my sushi insult. Of course, sushi deserves so much better than him. I am a little confused.... What about Kenta? O_o

All in all, though, I really loved this chapter and am looking forward to more. I've cleared up my time and have decided to start taking on new authors to beta. I was already beta-ing for you in the past, so would you like for me to beta again, or do you feel prepared to write without a beta now? Just drop me a message if you want me as a beta again.

Out,
Masumi TAT

Author's Response: lol Yes, the sushi joke. Earlier in the chapter, Hana says "And sushi loves you too, Kenta." Hana is just remembering that joke. Also, was this really that big of an improvement? I never got comments on wattpad although I only did one chapter...also, I think I am ready to write without a beta, but I would love it if you could try to keep up with it and point out any huge mistakes in grammer. I kinda have grammer as my enemy...especially in english class. GAH! I HAVE A D IN IT! Of course, it could be I need to clean out my binder...I'm rambling...okay so I know Hana is like Tomi and Willow and Sora and Mai, but (did I really just name them all? lol) I'm planning on finishing Hana's story, and hopefully be able to make a sequel if this story makes it that far...


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 02/11/12 - 06:31 pm · For: Two Strange Men
Um..... You know most of the things I wanted to put already, so, um..... U^_^. Here goes nothing.

Seeing as all my complaints are basically being mentioned in chat, I'll tell you that I have enjoyed it. There are areas for improvement, definitely, but I had fun reading it, and it was nice after your absence. I'm eager to see where this story goes, and I'm definitely eager to see about what the Akatsuki are doing there.

Sorry if it was a short review, but, wel, like I said, I think I got most of the things out of the way that I wanted to in the chat.

Author's Response: :D Glad u liked it. And u will find out! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!


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