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Name: CM (Anonymous) · Date: 24/10/13 - 01:12 pm · For: Lost Memories
ROTFLMFAO!!!!!!!

Author's Response: :D ?


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/07/13 - 05:26 pm · For: The Strangeness of Life
I could see more mistakes in this. Usually it was added or missing words. Otherwise it was great, as usual, and I could see that you have read the manga based on some of the information in this.

So Kakashi is still around, huh? And he will be until Neji is born. That's the same name I thought their first son would have. His search on mermaids was kinda humorous. First a librarian nearly laughs at him then an old hag tells him about scary mermaids who eat people. Unless there's different types of mermaids? That would be interesting.

Yikes. Wasn't expecting the whole Sasuke-Sakura thing. But now I'm imagining him with my oc from my SasuOc story.... =P. I thought he may be with Kei, but I believe she's three or four years younger than him. Then again, with how long they live, that may not matter. Of course, they may never even meet. I liked the family thing Kakashi thought of. Besides Sakura, all of Team 7 is without a family. Now they have one. Now I'm curious if Sasuke will go with Kakashi.

Another great chapter, Ontuva-chan. Sadly there's no next button, but I'll be waiting eagerly for another chapter.

Author's Response: I think this is the only chapter that hasn't been proof-read by Sarah-hime (inuyashas_only_1), so most of my mistakes are intact. :D I should probably read this again and remove the ones I find, but as I've said, I'm blind to them. XD
And yes, I read the manga. ^^ I love it. I just don't love the fact that I always have to wait a week for a new chapter. So now I'm "starving" myself and haven't read in a looooong time. I'm waiting for more chapters to arrive, so I have more to read. :3
Yep, Kakashi hasn't left yet. He will soon though. And Neji is just logical name to give to their first born (girls can be Neji too XD).
Kakashi's search on mermaids was a bit of a failure. :D There's a hint of truth in both of them though. There are different types of mermaids like there are different type of people.
Oooh, I think I have to go and read your story at some point. :3 I've been struggling with depression so that's why I've not written or read anything in a while. But I'll come and read your stories at some point. ^^
Someone from fanfiction.net actually suggested Kei/Sasu pairing to me and it didn't sound that bad. I'm not yet sure if it'll happen though. The main focus will be on Sayuri/Kakashi.
Sayuri is around 30 (if I remember right, I don't have my memo with me XD) and Kei is a couple of years younger than her. But Kei is definitely more mature. XD
Team 7 is one big family. ^^ At least I like to think that way. :D Sasuke might of might not go with Kakashi. Or they might meet on the road. Or another village. :3

Thank you very, very, VERY much for your awesome reviews! They cheered me up a lots and have given me a lot of energy so I can continue writing this piece. :) I'll try to update as soon as I'm able. ^^ Thank you! ~


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/07/13 - 05:26 pm · For: Lost Memories
It was definitely different going from Sayuri's PoV to Kakashi's. I can say I'm happy with the pairings. I love NaruHina and, although SasuSaku isn't my favorite, I still like it if that makes sense.

I'm guessing you know the truth of Madara? Or would I be wrong? Anyway, I like how this is after the war. It gives us a look at future Konoha as well. The roof thing was interesting, and I liked it. It set up a type of peaceful atmosphere. Also shows us more of the usually closed off Kakashi.

I most definitely didn't see the Sasuke thing coming. My grandma was giving me a weird look because I kept on smiling while laughing a bit and even questioned me. It was just so hilarious. Sasuke being so worried and Kakashi having to go through this twice. Of course, it's better than the drugs he thought Sasuje was doing. But it just got worse bit hurt so much not to double over laughing at Kakashi and Sasuke with the "sex talk". If that's what you call giving him Icha Icha Paradise and running. I didn't know how to explain that to my grandma, so I had to painfully hold back my laughter, but man, that was hilarious! Genius scene, Ontuva-chan.

The dream was very interesting. I didn't expect him to have amnesia. I expected if anything he'd push it off as his imagination. But instead he forgot and was plagued by that dream. Speaking of, that was very interesting, and I loved his breakthrough moment when he figured out what to do. Slowly he saw the sea, and then younger Sayuri. So what he gave her was a third bell? Haha! So that's why he only uses two? Hilarious and actually very sweet.

Now he, though dubiously, remembers Sayuri. What'll happen now? Especially with her finding land. Great chapter, Ontuva-chan.

Author's Response: Kakashi's POV was very hard to write. The next chapter came easier, but this was very hard to give birth to. :'D Yay, I'm glad you like the pairings! And you probably will enjoy the fact that SasuSaku will not be present after this chapter. Poor Sasuke. :(
I know the truth about Madara, yes. I think I have about 10 chapters unread currently, since I like to wait until I have a looooot of reading to do. I hate nothing more than the fact when there is no "next"-button. ;_; So I try to wait patiently. :'D
I've always pictured Kakashi as a roof person. I'd like to have a roof where I could chill out.
HA, I'm glad I got you laughing. :'D I was giggling the whole time I wrote it too. Glad you liked it! Next time just tell your grandma you are reading a funny fanfic, that's how I always explain my mother if I'm having a laughing fit on the computer. :'D (Well, nowadays I have to explain to my boyfriend, since I live with him, but the understands. :'D)
While the ship exploded, he got a really painful bump in his head which caused the amnesia. Poor Kakashi. :(
Yep, he gave her the third bell and now he only has two! (Kakashi hasn't heard of shops and that you can buy more of them. Or maybe he is just too lazy to go buy more. You never know...)
Again, thank you! ^____^ *beaming*


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/07/13 - 05:25 pm · For: Revelations
Like before the only problem I saw were mistakes here and there. Nothing major, though.

Just like last chapter, this chapter had me hooked. I wasn't expecting the time skip, but now I want to know just when this story takes place. Guess I'll have to wait a bit to find out. Boy, Sayuri has had to go around ten years without going out just because of that? And she lost Eri to boot. The only good thing is the silver she got from Kakashi. I must say Sayuri is my favorite of the merfolk royal family. The others just seem so paranoid and afraid. Except for Kei, of course.

Although they annoyed me, I did enjoy finding out about Sayuri's family. Again, it's sad Eri left, but I believe he'll come back sometime. You also gave little merfolk facts like their longer lifespan. With how long it took Sayuri's mother and father to court, I'm going to say it's a very long one. Also we found out a bit about the sea life like how they use the fish as lights.

You really had me wondering when Kei was seen sneaking around. I was really eager to find out just what she was hiding. I thought they'd come up by a ship or something, but to actually be close to land? And they thought they had to worry about Sayuri. So Kei's been out? And on land, too, if she knows about the feet thing. Unless they only kept it from Sayuri since they knew what she'd do.

This is a great set up for her trip to land. I'm so very eager to see it and glad I have too more chapters to read.

Author's Response: Good that there was nothing major. ^^ I'm quite blind to my own mistakes, sadly. :(
This story takes place after the 4th Great Ninja War (the Ninja War happens during the time skip). I'm not sure how many years after, since I don't think that matters that much. But the war is over and Naruto & co. won it. :)
And Sayuri is just lovable. I think she is my favourite OC of the ones I've created currently. (Well, I have to say my OC from my Transformers-story is giving a hard competition, but Sayuri still wins. :''D)
To me, the other royal merfolk are just...very traditional. They don't have the need to go adventuring like Sayuri and Kei do. And Sayuri's father is paranoid. But he has reasons for that.
And Eri will return! :3 I already have planned out how he and Kakashi will meet. *harharhar*
The merfolk live looooong. I haven't yet decided how long. I like to plan things and write at the same time. (Although some facts I do keep in my memo, like eye colors and such, because I wouldn't remember them otherwise.)
Well, the land had to kind of close, because Eri and Sayuri had been there before when they saved Kakashi (and it hadn't taken all the day to get there and back). And sneaky little mermaids who find hidden tunnels are the best. :3
Kei has been out a lot. :'D Sayuri is going nuts when she finds out just how much.
Only very few merpeople know about the feet thing. It's a well guarded secret. Kei stumbled upon it by a chance.
And on to your next review! (You have no idea how much your reviews have cheered me up Sasaui-chan! ^^ I had a horrible day today, but now I'm smiling like a maniac. :'D)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/07/13 - 05:24 pm · For: The Encounter
I'm very glad I decided to read this. The mermaid thing had thrown me off back when it was first published, but thankfully I'm opening myself up to more fanfictions. Which means I am lucky you updated again because I get to read this. Other than mistakes here and there this was great.

I really like Sayuri. As Eri said, she is so curious and naive. It's like reading about a child, yet she also holds a kindness to her. Eri is also a very interesting character. He's very strong and brave. I love the mer-people you have introduced us to so far. Yet you also added in some foreshadowing of bad pasts with humans for Eri. Could something have happened to make Sayuri's father not like her going to the surface as well?

So Kakashi was on the ship, huh? And since he only has one eye, this take place after the war and Obito's death. I wonder what kind of state of mind he'll be in. It can't be so bad if he would return the gift of the pearl with silver. He also was acting nice to Sayuri. At least until she was noticed and had to run.

A pirate attack, huh? Will they be a problem later on? I'm very glad Sayuri found Kakashi, and that Eri helped keep her safe as well as keep Kakashi alive. I don't know what I'd do (or the future Konoha) without him. How will this experience affect him, though?

I'm very eager to read more of this. Great chapter, Ontuva-chan.

Author's Response: YAY, A LONG REVIEW! ^^ (They make me melt inside. Thank you~)
Sayuri is a bit like a child and I want her to hold on to that innosence as long as she possibly can. And Eri is definitely coming back! (I already feel Eri-deprived and I know when he's coming back. XD) Both Eri and Sayuri's father have had bad experiences. I don't want to spoil, because I may incorporate them into the story and I'm not yet sure how I'm going to do that.
I think Kakashi is a kind of person who doesn't flinch when something unexpected (like a mermaid popping from sea) happens. Or maybe he is just too lazy to react like normal people would. :'D
Also, pirates will be back. And they will be a problem. Also, they like to sell mermaids. (I may have spoiled a bit. But still, I had to. XD)
Thank you very much for your AWESOME review Sasaui-chan! I'll go answer to rest of your reviews now. :)


Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 23/07/13 - 06:38 am · For: The Strangeness of Life
Wow, this is interesting! Keep up the good work, I can wait for the next chapter! :D

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words! ^^ I try to update as soon as I can. :D


Name: jjunetanya (Anonymous) · Date: 23/07/13 - 04:05 am · For: The Strangeness of Life
Wow!! I'm realllyyy looking forward to the next chapter! Please update!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! ^^ I try to update as fast as I can. :)


Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 09:19 am · For: Lost Memories
This chapter was hilarious. Sasuke's OOCness really had me cracking up, because honestly, I could really see him squirming like that.

The reference to the NaruHina was adorable, it really made my heart tug with joy at the description of Naruto's happy smile :)

And now we finally see Kakashi's memories slightly return to him, and I am definitely excited to see him uncover the truth. I can't wait for more, this is a very well-written and interesting story. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Yay, I managed to make you laugh! :3 And I know, Sasuke was way, way, way OOC. But I kinda wanted him to be. I don't really like him that much in the manga/anime.
And good that I made you happy. ^_^ NaruHina was better suited for this story than NaruSaku, so I chose them. And they are adorable. Hinata is adorable.
Again, thank you! I have the next chapter ready, so I'll probably update sometime in the future. :3


Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 09:06 am · For: Revelations
Wow, time skip. Haha, I like it. We get to see the aftereffects of Sayuri's adventure. Poor Eri, I'll miss him...

Oh, who knew Sayuri's sister was so adventurous, it must run in the family. Gosh, this really opens the plot right up, I can't wait to see what Sayuri does now that she knows she could be a human if she went on the land.

This was very well done, now I must read the next chapter. Good job.

Author's Response: Time skips! This story will have them. (I haven't really written stories with time skips as long as this one, but I try to make them work. XD)
And don't worry! I'm sure this is not the last we hear from Eri. It's strange, he was active in only one chapter and he seems to have a fan base already. o_o
Again, thank you for reading and reviewing. :3 It means a lot to me.


Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 08:44 am · For: The Encounter
Oh, this was amazing! Everything, from the peaceful ocean to the shipwreck, was so vivid and elaborate, I loved it! You've already added such great life to Sayuri and Eri; they're so brilliantly described. And Kakashi and the bell, wow, I love the symbolization there; it's a great reference to the manga.

Oh wow, now I must move onto the next chapter! Excellent work with this!

Author's Response: Hello and sorry for not answering ;_; I'm a terrible person it seems. I usually read every review I get, but sometimes I just forget to answer to them. ;_;
But thank you for your sweet review! It's always nice to receive feedback (every kind) and I'm glad that you like my OC's as well as Kakashi. :D
I'll go and answer your other reviews now! But seriously - thank you for reading and reviewing!


Name: Kakashifan727 (Signed) · Date: 18/08/11 - 04:05 pm · For: Lost Memories
he chars are OOc, but in cute way I guess...It's not so bad so far. I'll probably rev when you have more chs though XD.

Author's Response: Sasuke is a hugely out of character (even I know that XD), but then again we don't really know what happened during the war in my version of the story so I just decided I'd give him a happy ending. And make him a nervewreck. It was fun to write him that way!
rnI'll try to portray Kakashi as in character as I can, but he's really hard to write. o_o
rnHopefully I'll see you again, when I have more chapters! Thank you for sticking with me so far. :D


Name: Kakashifan727 (Signed) · Date: 18/08/11 - 03:38 pm · For: The Encounter
Thought it was going to be LM ripoff, but glad it wasn't. Seems interesting...keep going with it. Have you heard of Ponyo? Kinda like LM but JPN.

Author's Response: A NEW REVIEWER! *happy dance*

rnrnWell, I basically got the idea from Little Mermaid (H.C. Andersen's version, not Disney's, although Sayuri's personality is a bit like Ariel's, I guess), but I didn't want to copy the story straight out from my story book and just change the character names. That would just be wrong.
rnAnd yeah, I've watched Ponyo! I didn't like it as much as I like the rest of Studio Ghibli's work, but still, it was a good movie. :D Can't remember much of it though...
rnHuge thanks to you for taking your time reading AND reviewing, it means a world to me. ^^


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 18/08/11 - 01:22 pm · For: Lost Memories
This... Was... Awesome...

You were brilliant with Kakashi's POV. Really, it was amazing.

I loved the fact that you went the extra mile to describe everything that had happened in Kakashi's life after the war. All that elaboration about Naruto and Sakura and Sasuke, it was wonderful. I just... really enjoyed this chapter, it had everything. Comedy with Sasuke's insecurities, suspense with Kakashi's amnesia, and heartwarming moments at hearing about how good life has been, or should be, I should say.

Oh man, this was just great. I really enjoyed it. Amazing job with this chapter. Keep up the fantastic work!

Author's Response: *sigh of relief* I was a bit terrified (although Sarah-hime told me it was good!) that my way of portraying Kakashi wasn't going to be good enough. I think I put a bit too much pressure on myself when writing him, because, after all, he is my favourite character. But glad to hear I did well! ^_^ Sothank you very, very, VERY much for your kind words! Now I'm grinning like an idiot and feeling that I should go and write the next chapter right now! XD (Although I can't, it's already 0:02 am and I need to sleep too...). But that doesn't mean I couldn't start the next chapter... *ideas running wildly*


Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 14/08/11 - 07:38 pm · For: The Encounter
I am intrigued with this story. Kakashi has, and always will be, one of my favorite characters. You take an original spin on a classic myth of fairy tales, and add your flare on it to make it fit the already great storyline of Naruto. With that, you add another world, and an explanation of that world itself. You add drama and a dash of mystery, which I love. Kid kakashi with his lightning reflexes was spot on, and I loved (what I assumed was) the bell. Please updated as soon as possible, I can not wait for your next chapter. Until then I wish you happy writing.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! (A NEW REVIEWER *bounces around happily*) Seriously speaking: thank you for taking your time to actually post a review (I know many readers who don't do it), it means a lot to me to actually hear from readers. :) If you haven't yet checked out inuyashas_only_1's "Learning to Run" I suggest to read it too. It's also a mermaid OC/Kakashi -story. I'm having a friendly "showdown" with Sarah-hime and gosh it's fun! :D
rnI'm actually really afraid of writing about Kakashi, because his my favourite character too and I don't know whether I can write him. You get what I mean? I fear that he'll be very OOC... But we'll see about that in the next chapter! Which I'll hopefully write soon. But yeah, it was the silver bell! I didn't want to write the word 'bell', because Sayuri wouldn't know what a bell was.
rnGlad to hear that you like this story so far (I kinda took a leap of faith with this one and I'm running wildly with clichés). I'm trying to write an update asap! But I must warn you that I'm a slow updater... ._.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/08/11 - 02:59 pm · For: Revelations
Oh, it is so cool to see this updated!

You did a great summarization of what happened during the time skip. I'm impressed with this chapter, it had a great sense of detail to it, and you have a great feel for Sayuri's emotions.

Everything played out realistically, and your writing helps the reader to sympathize with your character.

Great job with this chapter. I look forward to more! Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading (and taking time to review!), I really appreciate it. ^^ I actually had a bit of trouble with this chapter, but luckily Sarah-hime helps me to keep my thoughts organized. :D
rnI'm having fun writing about Sayuri (especially taking her point of view on things, because I can have fun with it). She's so completely clueless and naïve sometimes and I've always felt comfortable writing with a humorous tint. And with Sayuri the text just comes naturally. I'm actually afraid of changing to Kakashi's point of view, because I'm sure he'll be totally OOC... But then again, I'm writing in AU, he can be OOC! HAHAA!
rnBut enough of my rambling (I got carried away...again). I'm glad you like my story! Hopefully I'll update soon and see you again then! ^^


Name: inuyashas_only_1 (Signed) · Date: 20/06/11 - 12:05 am · For: The Encounter
Of course, as I mentioned in the email, IT'S AWESOME!!! XD

I love the little chibi-Kakashi with his lightning reflexes and pretty hair and the bell (I'm guessing it's a bell...I mean I kept thinking of the bell test he gave to Team 7 in the beginning of the series, haha).

As mentioned, I looooove Eri and Sayuri is so freaking adorable. :3 I can not WAIT for more chapters so let me know each time you update, and keep going...I'm so psyched for this to get going and head in...well, whatever direction you've decided to take this in.

Kisses!
Sarah-hime

Author's Response: Whaat, I'm sure I responded to you! ;_; I HAVEN'T, I'm so sorry... ._.
rnAnd yep, you guessed right about the bell. It was the closest thing I could think Kakashi would actually give away for a pearl. And to Sayuri it's a big treasure!
rnAnd believe me, I haven't felt this good about a story in a very long time! I'm very excited to continue this (and have you as a reader, you are awesome!). :3


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/06/11 - 08:51 am · For: The Encounter
Wow! This was really good! It's different than what is normally found on this site. I really like this. Each sentence seemed to flow right into the next, it was amazing. I really liked this, it started out as innocent and fun, and then turned into an incoming disaster. It was a great first chapter. I will admit I saw a few grammar and spelling errors, but it was okay because I could still understand what I was reading *thumbs up* Keep up the good work with this, this seems really interesting, and I would really like to read more.

Author's Response: Oh thank you, thank you, thank you for reviewing! I was really afraid I wouldn't get them, because just like you said, this isn't what's normally found on this site. :) I wanted to try something different and I went with it! I'm glad my writing seemed to flow (as a Finnish person that's the best comment I can get! It's kind of hard to think something in Finnish and then translate it to English, not to mention to make it actually sound like something an English native would write and like to read.) I'm trying to spot the errors and correct them (I might not succeed as I'm really blind to my own mistakes XD). Glad to hear you still understood what I was trying to say! And thank you very much for your kind words! And supery thanks for reviewing! :3 *bows*


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