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Reviews For Art is a...girl?!

Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 30/10/11 - 06:37 pm · For: Chapter 1 ~First meeting and other problems~ Part A
Yeah, I would have to say nature is my favorite form of art. Okay, now to the story. It was phenomonal!! I absolutely loved it. I was slightly confused when Sasori spoke after Yuki and slightly when Yuki talked in the first scene and this needs proofread for mistakes, but the awesomeness in this chapter so made up for it. You were so descriptive and have me curious about how Yuki being a Huunutsuka will affect everything.

Author's Response: Sorry if I confused you I wrote that chapter a while back. I'm still trying to work out a few kinks here and there. Sorry once again but thanks for the review. Believe it or not I have a story on the Hunnutsuka but will be told in time, other then that Itachi is going be seen using Yuki for just her name thanks for the review again :)


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/06/11 - 03:19 pm · For: Chapter 7 ~Farris Wheel’s with an old legend~ Part B
Oh my goodness. This was a lot better than the previous chapter. Well done. I was impressed with everything that happened. Deidara and Yuki's fight was very believable, and you made it flow very well, especially since it is such a tense moment.

And then Itachi kissed her. Again... oh my goodness. Didn't see that one coming. I was so surprised. But thank you for making Yuki not fall completely head over heels at his kiss. She actually had some dignity when she backed away and kept her feelings for Deidara. Of course she would feel something for Itachi, but thank you for not making Yuki completely love him all of a sudden. You're very good with transitioning these types of things, making the story flow very well.

I wish I could help you with Deidara and Yuki's breakup, but sadly, I really am terrible with that kind of thing. I am so hooked on writing cute romances that I hardly ever write an actual breakup and make it sound decent >_< If I do happen to come up with something that I think would work, you'll be the first to know.... obviously ;D

Keep up the good work with this story, it is definitely progressing very nicely. I am loving where this is going, everything seems really realistic and interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next! Good job!

Author's Response:

Yeah as I explained I enjoyed this chapter, I mean you see more of the characters and their reactions with each other. As for Deidara’s and Yuki’s fight scene I was going to have Deidara not know about the Date but decide it would be really great plot whole filler if he did. I spent days trying to figure out how their fight should go.

I know Itachi kissed her it was more of protection so Kabuto won’t see her face. I was all honesty going to get Yuki to fall for this kiss but as I was writing this it didn’t feel right. I’m kind of glad I chose the direction I went.

And don’t worry about it, I’m talking to me best friend about it and we are bouncing ideas around. Thanks for reviewing any way.

This story will be on stand still, because I have to write finding out for a while and finish the how not to OOC Sakura but don’t worry it won’t be forever just a week or two.



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/05/11 - 07:22 pm · For: Author's Note
Wow, it is actually kind of nice to have everything laid out for the reader. Your description as to what you are thinking when you write the chapters if very good, it helps the reader understand what is being said. I look forward to whatever you post next, chapter or author's note, it is all greatly full of insight!

I'm sorry that you are not getting those reviews you want :( But I am happy that I can make you happy with my reviews :D And oh gosh, there you go again with promoting my stories. Thank you so much, you're awesome!

Keep up the incredible work with this story! You definitely have one dedicated fan who loves your stories!

Author's Response:

Ahaha I’m kind of confusing when I write and I like foreshadowing so I want to show the moments I did do it in, to clear thinks up and answer any questions I have for my dedicated fans (LOL thanks :]). Don’t worry the next thing that will come out will be a chapter seven another chapter that I like.

As for the reviews don’t worry I was getting a little bit depressed because I have those moments were things didn’t feel write(Lol a pun ^O^) at the moment but I feel back to normal. And your reviews always make me happy :) and I’m truthfully happy with people just reading my story :3. I’m glad I could help and I do hope your stories get popular (I will be getting to your stories soon again). And I’m so glad you enjoy my story.



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 20/05/11 - 07:16 pm · For: Chapter 6 ~The truth comes all from a brother~ Part B
Hmm, I will agree with you that this chapter seemed lacking in flow. It wasn't one of your best, but it was necessary for the plot development, so finishing it is an accomplishment all on its own. Some of it seemed kind of forced or rushed; it didn't seem like you enjoyed writing this.

I'm so sorry for sounding mean! I was just giving helpful criticism.

However, I do like the intro to Sasuke. He was very in character (considering you are using his twelve-year-old personality). I like that personality better anyway, so it's all good :D I also understand what you were trying to do with Itachi thinking about business rather than Yuki. It's very believable for Itachi, so good job with that.

Overall, this was a decent chapter. Not great, but not terrible either. I did enjoy what you were trying to do, it just didn't seem to hold your natural talent. I am looking forward to the upcoming chapter, so I do hope you update soon. I'd like to see this carnival, that sounds like an interesting scene filled with humor/drama/fun. I can't wait!

Again, so sorry if this review seemed mean, I just want you to understand another point of view and what I thought was not as great as your other writing. Please don't hate me....

Author's Response:

This wasn’t rude at all it was very truthful and I enjoyed your thoughts. I always enjoy your thoughts :] and I support your review 100%. You’re a very sharp reader, to notice the parts I forced and/or rushed in. I give you props on that.

And yes truthfully I didn’t enjoy writing or typing this story either :[ it was rather difficult to deal with. I had an idea that I want to introduce Sasuke and how but the rest of the chapter was kind of lost I had no idea how to write what was going to happen or even how. Even the introduction to Sasuke was a bit lost because of the lack of thought I truthfully had no idea for this story and thank you for reading this.

Yes, this chapter had basic information that would help get a better understanding on what’s going on with this story. Again not my best work and I thank you for your review :] (It still made my day)

The carnival will be very fun, some plot holes get covered…but I’m posting an author’s note first explaining everything going on.



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 13/05/11 - 08:53 pm · For: Chapter 5 ~A Date with a Jake-in-the-box~ Part B
Aha, I love the nursery rhyme. That's cute, I like how she continuously teased Itachi with it.

And both Itachi and Yuki have such a skill for banter. They are rivals at playing games, and it really keeps the plot moving when the two are together. I love how you write them together. It is really interesting to see that Itachi has an equal in that kind of thing.

Nice work on their date. It was highly amusing to see them interact for real in this story. And they are on first name basis, which means their relationship is progressing. I can't wait to read more about Yuki and Itachi XD Keep up the great work with this story, cuz you know I love reading your stories ;D

And omg, I was mentioned! Thank you for promoting my stories, you're awesome!

Author's Response:

Well first of Yeah your stories are good they deserve to be promoted I enjoy reading your work too ^^.

As for the Nursery rhyme, yeah I kind of like Nursery rhymes. I have a full self just for Fairytales and Nursery rhymes. And was a little surprised to see that the jack in the box tune had multiple versions. Another thing that surprised me was that nobody ever used it to tease Itachi I mean people spend hours teasing his name well how about a song?

I actually have to sit and think when Yuki and Itachi are together because they are both smart and wouldn’t have conversation that I would normally have. Yuki has a thing for games and I think Itachi plays along just to play along. Thank you for reading my stories I really appreciate that ^^.



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/05/11 - 07:44 am · For: Chapter 4 ~Clay Art can bring out jealousy~ Part B
Wow. Yuki has an interesting past that is slowly being unraveled. Impressive, I can't wait to find out more about her.

Aw, Itachi is jealous! Even if he won't admit it, it is so evident. And he demanded to go on a date with her, jeez. Not romantic at all :P

Anyways, nice work. Yeah, it was fillerish, but at least we did learn some stuff, such as Yuki's mysterious past, Deidara's point of view, and Itachi's jealousy. I can't wait to see this date, it could have a great or terrible ending. I can't wait to find out, so I hope you update soon! Keep up the great work with this story!

Author's Response:

Well her past is different then what is normally seen with OC but I also want to keep it a bit mysterious because there might be parts people don’t like.

Isn’t Itachi cute when he is jealous? But I think he sees her more as property than anything else.

Yeah as I was editing this, I begun to feeling that this was more of a filler. (Though I was excited at the time I was typing it) but still it’s a good chapter to have. Did you notice the name change Itachi and Yuki went through? They stopped addressing each other by their last and into their first.

  



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 02/05/11 - 03:48 pm · For: Chapter 3 ~Dancing and well…that guy~ Part B
That was an intense couple of chapters!

First off, I was surprised when Yuki dumped water on Aqua. But when she gave her some inspiring words, I was impressed. That was a really good scene.

And then the little banter between Itachi and Yuki was very funny, actually. He flusters her so much, I think it's funny.

When that guy appeared behind Aqua, I nearly flipped. I really didn't see that one coming. But you worked it out very nicely, and I really liked Yuki in that scene. You really portray her as a strong woman with an intelligent mind. I really like that about her. She handles things so well, except for Itachi >_>

Good job with this, I look forward to seeing how the trade goes and how Itachi and Yuki will be around each other now. I'd give you a 10/10 stars, but sadly, I can only give you a thumbs up. So I'll give you hit the thumbs up button 10 times!

Author's Response: Were they that intense? Glad you liked it though at least I hope, this was a fun chapter to write =)Lol believe it or not that’s a little OOC of Yuki she is the type that leaves people dying if they are no use to her –sweat drop ^.^U-. But I have a plan for Aqua and she will tie the story together.I’m so glad you like Yuki she is such a difficult character to make. I don’t want her to be Mary-sue so I gave her the common female traits such as being flustered by Itachi (who wouldn’t be). And I really do like this chapter a lot because of the way Yuki ties the story with the “Bad guy” (Sadly he is the typical bad guy V.V)I’m so glad you like my stories and reviews make my day, I’m glad somebody is reading my story. Thanks for your reviews. 


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/04/11 - 12:45 pm · For: Chapter 2 ~A kiss and some games~ Part B
Haha, I think it's funny how Yuki tries to despise Itachi but can't do it in the end. I like how you keep some similarities to the manga while still adding your own flair to it. The secrecy of Akatsuki and their personalities is still the same, which is good. But throwing them into this scenario really brings out more from them, creating a really good story. I really like this, well done. I am excited to see how Itachi plays this 'game' with Yuki. Things should get really interesting now. Keep up the good work with this!

And omg, I was mentioned! :D

Author's Response: Really you really like that about Yuki?! I feel she has a double personality in this story she can never decide what she really wants and I think it shows. I’m all honest not sure where I’m going with her double personality but I like it will continue to roll with it. Eh~ Really I have my own flair O//.//O I’m glad I do, I would love to be an author someday and someone telling me that makes me happy XD.

Of course you are mentioned you give me such fantastic reviews, and you’re honest too and I like that. So thanks for your kind reviews.



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/04/11 - 07:37 pm · For: Chapter 1 ~First meeting and other problems~ Part B
Oooh, tension. I like this. It shows realistic relationships between the characters. And you have an interesting plot to follow, about the museum and the Tailed Beasts Company. The story pertaining to Yuki seems even more interesting, and I can't wait to see how she will react to Itachi. Keep up the good work, and I hope you update soon!

Author's Response:

Haha I’m glad you like it. I wrote this chapter a few years back, back in the beginning of my fanfiction life, I felt this chapter was terrible and I still trying to decide who Yuki was as a person. So Yuki is a very different character then what I normally go with back in the day…I’m trying to keep with the Naruto plot line considering I am writing a Naruto fanfic.



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