Reviews For Mission of Matrimony
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 08/10/11 - 06:45 am · For: The Mission
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v376/BattyBigSister/Banners/BeazysBannerSW1213-AMoMbanner.pngMy computer and your website forums don't seem to want to be friends today, so I thought I'd go and give you this the old fashioned way. ;0) Hope you like it!
Author's Response: :D Ah, shucks, BattyBigSis, you didn't have to make me another banner. I'm always honored when you do though, I they're always so awesome! Thank you very much, I love the creativity. Thanks a bunch, you're amazing!
Name: Red Mist (Signed) · Date: 04/10/11 - 06:21 pm · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
Lol, this is so fun! I love the idea, it seems so original. And it's so hilarious to see Shikamaru and Temari acting so reluctant. It's so funny XD
I did look at the doujinshi after you mentioned it though. It's really cute, but yours seems to be taking a more comic route. It's only two chapters in, so I guess I can't really tell. Will this be like the doujinshi? Just wondering.
Author's Response: Oh, well, as I said, I saw a few pictures on the internet that showed this idea, so it's not technically mine. But this won't follow the doujinshi, don't worry. I've got my own stuff planned for this ;) But I'm glad you liked this! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review, I really appreciate it! You rock!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 04/10/11 - 06:11 pm · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
Haha, this was so awesome! I love comedy! Anything that can make me laugh is amazing, and this was hilarious! I loved it! Nice job, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Heehee, I'm glad you liked it. I should have figured though; comedy is your weak spot ;) I hope you continue to enjoy this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 04/10/11 - 02:11 pm · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
Hehe, this was very funny. I really enjoyed this. It was such a build-up of comedy, and it had me smiling and laughing the whole way through.
As some other reviewers have already said, it is a bit strange that Temari doesn't have any Sand acquaintances to be her bridesmaids; and the fact that Chouji is not the best man is a bit of a downer, and it seems overlooked...
But as I said, I really enjoyed the comedy in this. It was very fun to read, and I think you're taking a great route with this story by not jumping right into the wedding or married life. It's a very good process of character development by going through all the stress and pain of setting up the wedding. Oh, poor Temari; she seems so upset about doing the work ;D
Anyway, great job with this. Keep up the amazing work, Wolf-chan!
Author's Response: Heehee, I'm glad this was able to make you laugh. Enjoy the comedy now, for there will be some drama coming up soon ;) Yeah, I know... I probably wasn't too good with the bridesmaids/groomsmen thing... That is my fault, sorry. Aha, the one-shot had a lot of 'jumping right into it', but then again, it was three months slammed into 5000 words, so of course it came out like that... But anyways, I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for the review, you're awesome Rainbow-chan!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 03/10/11 - 08:55 am · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
I'd yell at you for even thinking it was terrible, but then you'd come back around and say I do the same thing....... Why does it seem like I always do this: Okay, and now to the awesomeness that is your story.
Oh man, where do I start? Well, I guess the beginning is as good a start as any, huh? It was, to put it simple, HILARIOUS!!!! I absolutely loved it! The way Temari acted was so understandable. Ino is a little hard to put up with =D, and I, for one, hope that Ino doesn't start helping because, well...... Yeah, that would be hectic. Two bossy girls against Temari...... Don't torture her yet, okay? Okay, it would be pretty funny. I hope she has better luck with Hinata and Tenten.
And what happened with Shikamaru was equally, if not more, hilarious. I absolutely loved it! They were all in character (including the ladies in the previous part of the story), and I'm guessing it's just taking them time to process it if Chouji hasn't said anything yet. That's just what I think is why you didn't add it. Or, well, it was, until I read your responses to the other reviews =P. And I loved the part where Chouji yelled at Naruto not to talk with food in his mouth when he was doing the exact same thing. That was genius. And I was laughing like crazy (on the inside so nobody stared at me) when I saw their respective reactions to the news. I'm seriously wondering who started the rumor and what they'll do when they get their hands on him/her. And I liked his observation at the end. And I'm just curious because of it - Is Lee going to be among the groomsmen? If so, yeah, that'll probably be as hectic as Ino was, though I could be wrong.
Author's Response: Haha, so true. Our relationship must include a lot of hypocrisy, I believe ;) Hehe, I'm glad you thought it was funny. That's what I was aiming for, because in all honesty, it gets a little emotional and dramatic in the next chapter :P I'm glad you think the characters were in character, as I was afraid I made them all a bit too ridiculous (such as Temari acting like a child or something). Haha, if both Ino and Sakura were helping Temari, she would be so overwhelmed, it'd be hilarious. You know, I'm making Temari and Shikamaru be married to one another; I think I'm way passed the point of torture already ;) Heehee, I'm happy you also liked the guys together. Oh, I guess you can look at the Chouji thing like that. It might have been a semi-reason, but not one I initially thought of; that definitely works though, nice thinking ;) Haha, after careful debate, I decided to add the discovery of the rumor starter in the story (as I hadn't planned on it too much), but that'll come later. Eh, I don't know about Lee, but I don't think so, honestly.... Anyways, thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm always happy to receive your positive feedback! You're awesome, Sasaui!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 03/10/11 - 02:23 am · For: The Mission
hmm...
yh...
battybigsis said...
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chouji's didn't say anything at him nt being the best man...
Author's Response: Well, as I told BattyBigSis, that kind of stuff is explained in the next chapter. You'll see more reactions then.
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 03/10/11 - 02:14 am · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
Interesting. You'd think they'd bring over a few of Temari's aquaintances from Suna though to be bridesmaids as well. Makes it more 'believable', as a real wedding... and to be honest you'd have thought Choji is due a bigger reaction about not being best man, all things considered...There were a few mistakes here and there, but otherwise large parts of this were really funny and I enkoyed it.
Author's Response: Eh, I'll admit to being a bit lazy in wanting to make OCs for this story. But I also think that Temari is naturally closer with the Konoha kunoichi. I don't know, I guess that's just how I feel. And you're right about the Chouji and the best man thing. Shikamaru never actually 'mentioned' it, but it was implied while they were busy eating lunch. That kind of nitty-gritty stuff is expressed in the next chapter; it was going to be in this chapter, but I felt this was long enough as it is for now. But other than all that, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot, BattyBigSis! I appreciate your feedback very much!
Name: Salacia101 (Signed) · Date: 02/10/11 - 09:33 pm · For: The Mission
hey, love this story so far. I like the idea...plus...I'm a HUGE ShikaXTem fan. LOL. XD keep up the awesome work. :)
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you like it so far. Heehee, yeah, I'm also obviously a ShikaXTema fan ;D I'm happy you like the idea and the story! Thank you very much for reading, and thanks even more for reviewing! You're awesome!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 02/10/11 - 08:49 pm · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
wow... haha... that was nice n funny xDDD
lol... chouji... *incapable of dropping food frm his lips...
xP
poor temari... trolol...yh no matter hw many preparations are done... they're less for ino... :P
n lol wise of shikamaru not to call lee just yet... or he'd been blabbering bout youthfullness of lov n crap... xD
awesome chapter urufu... :D
lol... i thought mre preference ws for ur other fictions...
Author's Response: Heehee, I'm glad you liked it. I also liked that line about Chouji, it was my attempt at comedy during a partly serious situation. Yeah, I feel kind of bad for Temari, she seems to be taking this harder than necessary :P Eh, I went for the ironic choices in groomsmen, so there was really no room for Lee, in the end XP *sigh* I'd REALLY prefer you to stop pushing for my other stories. I write what I write, and I post what I have written. That's it, end of story. But anyways, thanks for the review. I appreciate it.
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 02/10/11 - 05:49 pm · For: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)
I am amazing, thank you. So was this chapter. I had a big banana grin throughout.
Author's Response: Heh, who said you were amazing? Pfft, alright.... Wait... That's it? Really? You thought this chapter was amazing? It left you with a big banana grin? Hmm... alright, I'll take that :D Thank you very much! I'm very happy now! Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 30/09/11 - 11:59 am · For: The Mission
I enjoyed this. It seemed not only longer, but also more thought out than before the re-write, which was good; things like the reason for the mistrust in the alliance were much better explained. I liked the description, especially in the beginning and you've certainly chosen an... interesting outfit for Temari. Very cute. You overused the word 'gates' in the conversation between her and Shikamaru, which made the conversation a little stilted, but other than that this was great. I do love this story.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked this one better. That's what I was aiming for ;) Now that I've started the rewrite, I know what I want from this story now, so I'm happy that it's all coming out the way I wanted so far :) I'm glad you liked the description, as I was trying to redeem myself for such an awful one-shot. Haha, Temari's outfit is actually something I saw her in a picture in. I may have to post it for a better image for the readers. Yeah, I realized I used 'gates' a lot; I have to get around to fixing that. But I'm still really happy you liked the way this first chapter came out! Thank you very much for reading this, and thanks even more such positive feedback. It makes my day! Thanks again, BattyBigSis!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 18/09/11 - 05:12 pm · For: The Mission
Quick question. What's a doujinshi?
Okay, now on to the awesomeness known as your story. It was, as the previous sentence suggests, awesome! I'm so glad that I decided to read this on my way home (I would have reviewed then, but I couldn't get internet service. I was reading from the version I'd had on the iPod before we left). It was humors to see their reactions. Especially with the part about them both wanting to kill the people/person who started the rumor about them dating. Heck, the whole part after them being told they were getting married was funny. I can't wait to see what will happen in the next three months. I have guesses, but knowing you (and hoping our mind bond will at least mostly keep me tuned out of your thoughts{sheesh, I read too much Vampire Academy}), you'll surprise me. And I'm going to say HA!, because you're not lacking in description when you claim that you're starting to. Even Rainbow Fire says you're the description was good. =P.
Darn it, why'd you have to mention your other stories? Now you're making me want to read them. Speaking of which, when's your next update? *holds up Tobi (who she doesn't know how she got ahold of) and cries, "Tobi, human shield!"* Sorry, I shouldn't have done that, but I couldn't resist the urge.
Author's Response: A doujinshi is a fan-made manga or anime. An FF.Net user pointed it out to me, so I had to edit the author notes into including it. Anyways, I'm glad you liked this! Hehe, I might have to include who the person was who spread the rumor about them dating ;) Their reactions will be priceless, especially if you liked their reactions now. Haha, poor Shikamaru and Temari.... maybe I'm not just mean to my OCs, I'm mean to the normal characters as well XD Ah, it'll be an interesting three months. I kind of want to know what your guesses are for torturing Shikamaru and Temari during their marriage; if they're similar to mine, then maybe we truly have connected telepathically. *sigh* That's because I made sure I was paying attention to what I was writing this time. When this was a one-shot, it was HORRIBLE in terms of description and elaboration, so I'm making sure that the rewrite is better. Oh, sorry about mentioning my other stories. You can read them if you want... it'll just be rereading what's already there :D *twitch* Ah, Sasaui, you definitely know how to make me involuntarily twitch... It's a good thing you're a friend, otherwise, Akamaru would be hunting you down right now. Anyways, thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm always grateful to receive such positive reviews from you! Thanks a bunch!
Name: Demon Fox (Signed) · Date: 18/09/11 - 02:44 pm · For: The Mission
XD This sounds amazingly funny! I really can't wait to see the two together, it already sounds like it's going to be loads of fun! Nice job, Silverwolf! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you're interested in this. I hope the two together ends up having a lot of humor as well ;D Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I extremely appreciate it!
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 18/09/11 - 01:54 pm · For: The Mission
Ah, I didn't read this before because it was under construction. Now that you're starting it up again, I can read it :)
It's really interesting how you the two are forced to be married to each other. I wonder what they'll go through as husband and wife ;D
Your description was very good in this, I was able to picture everything very clearly. I don't know what happened with the one-shot, but I do know that this chapter was definitely up to par with your other works so far in terms of elaboration.
I look forward to reading more. Shikamaru and Temari being married as a mission sounds really fun, and I can only imagine how things will turn out. Keep up the good work, Wolf-chan!
Author's Response: Yeah, I wouldn't have wanted you to read the one-shot, it was awful. You would have bitten my head off, it was so bad. But I'm glad you're reading it now, and that you liked it! Oh, I can make those two go through a lot as husband and wife ;) Ah, it's good to know the description improved... of course, you don't know how bad the elaboration was in the one-shot; but I'm glad you think this was as good as some of my more recent work. I hope you continue to enjoy this. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate your positive feedback. You're awesome!
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 11:42 pm · For: The Mission
hmm... nice :D
bt does tht mean tht the other stories will b delayed...??
n oh... i dnt exactly remember da exact words so can't quite tell da difference between da 2...
bt cnt tell tht this one looks more detailed...
Author's Response: No, as I said in the beginning author notes, my other stories hold a higher priority over this one. This is honestly something I'll work on if I'm bored of getting an overflow of ideas for my other stories. Well, if you can't remember my horrible one-shot, then I'll take that as a good thing :) This one should have more detail and possibly new ideas thrown in there. Anyways, thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!
Name: tigerseye (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 09:25 pm · For: The Mission
You are amazing!!!! I am so glad you decided to extend this!!!!! Looking forward to the next chapter!!!!!
Author's Response: Aww, shucks, I'm not amazing. I love compliments, but there's no need for flattering ;) I hope you continue to enjoy this as it keeps going. Thank you very much for reading and thank you even more for reviewing!
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 17/09/11 - 09:23 pm · For: The Mission
I look forward to the bantering between the two of them. You have a lot of good detail in the chapter, though when you go so far as to mention the turning of door knobs and such it may be pushing it. It's well done so far. I don't know if Kankuro already having a girlfriend would suffice as an excuse though haha
Author's Response: Haha, I'm also looking forward to the bantering between them. I'm glad you liked the detail in this... yeah, the door knob thing is probably pushing it, I guess I got too caught up in picturing things with detail XD But it's definitely better than when it was a one-shot, you really don't want to know what it was like then. It was awful... Haha, well, if Kankurou didn't have a girlfriend, I don't really know how else I could excuse him. I'll have to be more creative next time ;) But thank you very much for reviewing! I appreciate the feedback, thanks a bunch! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!