Reviews For Tears of Fire
Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 04/12/10 - 09:15 am · For: Chapter 1: The Mysterious Girl
Ok i like the theme but slow down. You dont have to rush your plot line. Use adjectives. Describe scenes. Describe characters points of view. Slow down. It almost looks like your story was rushed. You want to have a nice natural feel to it. You have a huge plot laid out. Take your time getting to it. People will love it if you slow down. But, it was still good. Not a very original plot line, but still good. Sorry if this is a sort of negative reveiw. I do not intend to be mean. On another note, please read my story one little girl. I want reviews and reads despretly so constructive criticism is appreciated. Bye!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/11/10 - 03:12 pm · For: Chapter 6: Ren
Cool! This chapter is so much nicer. You did well on the description, which makes me smile :) Keep up the awesome writing!
On another note...how could you end this chapter on such a suspenseful moment?! That is so cruel...I cannot wait to see what happens next!
Nice job, and again, keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Thanks!rnrnWell I have to make it suspenseful, that way people keep reading! You just better hope I don't end the series on a cliffhanger :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/11/10 - 07:58 pm · For: Chapter 5: Enter Sasuke
Wow, I'm surprised no one has reviewed yet. I really enjoy reading this. I'm intrigued with the plot and I can't wait to see how you continue.
Just one thing I want to advise you about. You should add more description to the story. It almost seems as if you're rushing things, and the storyline is a little weak as a result. But the plot is amazing and I think that if you just slowed it down to explain some things, it could be really good.
Please keep updating! I really like this story!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reviewing! rnrnI'm trying on being more descriptive, I will definitely take your advice!