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Reviews For Broken Wings

Name: Like-What0527 (Signed) · Date: 01/08/15 - 05:44 am · For: Twist of Fate
I love this story!!!!! I really think you should consider a writing career maybe become an author I know I'd read your works! X)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/03/12 - 06:01 pm · For: Rivaled Hearts
Have you ever had a day where you just don't feel like reviewing anything and just being lazy? Well, I feel like that now, so I'm sorry if I forget something or just ramble or something.

I absolutely love Hikari. She's just so great and caring. I loved when she met Kakashi by the KIA stone. It makes me think of something in TG. I won't tell you what, though.

This entire chapter was amazing. There were, admittedly, some mistakes. But there was so much awesomeness in this story it was covered up. I think it was really nice to see how Hikari affected the Narutoverse now and how everyone acts because of her involvement. One of these things includes how Sasuke asked if she wanted to sit.

I love how you seem to show Yami without actually having Yami there. I find that quite interesting. I'm also really interested in the bird. I want to know what it has to do with everything. Everything about this has me intrigued.

I can't wait to see how all Hikari affects the future of team 7. I'm sure it will be an interesting one and I can't wait to see what you have in store.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 13/03/12 - 04:44 pm · For: Rivaled Hearts
Aww, I felt so bad for Hikari being so worried. I really just wanted to comfort her and tell her everything would be alright and that Naruto would be her friend no matter what, even though I pretty much assumed they would be on the same team together.

A lot of this really was just repeating things from the manga, which is always tedious. Sadly, it is always a necessary setup. I remember banging my head against the wall when writing stuff that just repeated what Kishimoto-sama already wrote. But even though it was repeating, you did very well with placing Hikari there. Just her general presence always calms people and just makes people happier. Even having her be friends wih everyone when they were children really played a big part I making people not as mean or cold or anything. You really molded it very well.

My favorite part was when Hikari told Kakashi to take his time. Just that one line, just those three words, it reminded me of why I like Hikari so much. She's just so sweet.

Overall, excellent chapter, Destiny-chan. A few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but I really liked this. Great job!


Name: Hinata-Snow (Anonymous) · Date: 10/03/12 - 06:00 pm · For: Twist of Fate
New chapter again! This time versus Xaldin.

Wow, it's just like Hikari to make friends like this! I guess this time Ino and Sakura aren't going to fight, cause I support SasuSaku but don't want Ino and Sakura to fight. Of course Sakura would be all nervous around him, it's almost funny.

Itachi…it doesn't suprise me that Hikari sensed something wrong with him. I am surprised that Naruto could sense it through Hikari, though. I almost wish it didn't have to happen. But at least Sasuke had a final, fun afternoon with some friends.

So…it happened. The Uchiha massacre. I hate what Sasuke becomes…hopefully Hikari and Naruto could use their lights to purge him of Darkness.

Kiyori Mamuro:………If Sasuke thinks he knows true pain and hatred, he is sadly mistaken. But I know. *Walks away.*

Kimiko: Oh, naïve Uchiha. There is so much worse evil in the world. I would know. *walks away*

Me: Don't ask. Long story. But great chapter!

Warm regards, Snow.


Name: awesomecomiclol (Anonymous) · Date: 23/01/12 - 01:54 pm · For: The Connection
I see you might be a bit stuck after this chapter. A word of advice:Dont change up the story too much or the original comic itself will not sound like your story at all. Skip to the Shippuden Era if you have to. I trust your decison (after all, this is your story) and make a dramatic ending that will make readers cry. Good luck and ahppy newyear to you too :D

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm definitely going to be changing it up. In the chapter after this next one you'll see what I mean. I've read too many original fics where they still keep in the Land of Waves Arc. So I'm going to do something completely original!:D Thanks so much for the review and advice, I really appreciate readers like you! I hope you continue to enjoy BW, check out its companion called Beneath the Darkness when you get a chance ;) Thank you so so much!:D


Name: Hinata-Snow (Anonymous) · Date: 17/01/12 - 08:25 pm · For: This Little Light of Mine
New chapter!

Man, it's been a while since I read Broken Wings. I liked the imagery of Hikari's angelic light. Will it be like Garra's sand? Or will it be better?

I laughed when I read about the ramen visit. Ramen is supreme to Naruto! But the Hokage's right: something special is happening.

Warm regards, Snow.

Author's Response:

Yay, and I absolutely loved it Gabe! I still can't believe Serenna and Zexion have a little boy - Itzal! *Mutters excitedly to self*

Ahem! Back to the review.... Yeah, I haven't been able to post it on Fanpop because I have so much going on, but I will try today and tomorrow to get some more chapters up! ^_^ Hmm... Interesting questions. It likes to defend Hikari, and knows what she's feeling and everything. It has more special abilities than Gaara's sand... So I guess I'm going to let you decide on that one as we get further into BW.

Ramen is awesome! ^_^ Yes, Sarutobi knows what's going on... More so than you think;) Thx so much for your review!



Name: awesomecomiclol (Anonymous) · Date: 10/01/12 - 03:41 pm · For: Forever Promises
Beautiful story. Amazing plot and I have to admit, a bit more entertaining than the original Naruto series! Idk about you, but i would think abut submitting this to Mashimoto (the writer for those of you dumb enough not to know who he is). Srsly, he can giveyou probably a prize for it. Or better, make a mini series of your cmic for Shone Jump. Damn it, im typing this on mykindle, and i cant erase the mistakes i made! im partly japanese, and fluent so i can translate your work! Doesn't look that hard. Maybe i will, and you can send it to Mashimoto. Hey you never know!

Author's Response:

Wow, thank you so much! You have no idea how blown away I am from your review, you've inspired me so much with your words!:D Seriously? You think it's that amazing that Kishimoto-sensei himself would enjoy it? Holy crow! Thanks so much!!! That would be so awesome if Kishimoto-sensei EVER got a hold of this and read it... I would be deeply honored, the Naruto series has helped me and inspired me so much with my own writing (I'm an author myself, just none of my novels are published yet). If you could translate it to japanese, I would love that.

So thank you so much (whoever you are), and I hope you have a blessed New Year!:D



Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 07/01/12 - 06:17 pm · For: The Connection
Wow. I loved the dream at the beginning. I'm pretty sure I know who it is, though I may be wrong. Either way I really liked it. It was really sweet seeing Naruto's caring nature toward Hikari. It definitely goes both ways since she takes so much care of him. I thought the entire thing with her and Hinata was pretty funny. I never expected Hikari to be the one to be the shopaholic. That was definitely a funny addition.

Even though you had most of it being from the manga, I think it was a lot better since Hikari in it. It was just so amazing and adorable. This chapter was an especially fun to read. I loved the addition of the drunken dude. It was a nice change and helped show more of her light's power. It was also pretty original.

And then you had the parts that we all know and love, yet you added your own little twist. I kinda expected him to change into Hikari after Naruto told him that, but I still shook my head in, well, maybe exasperation (not a bad thing, just me thinking "what is wrong with these boys").

And then we finally found out about her origin to the Leaf. Wow, now that was amazing. It was very original and unique. I thought if was a fabulous thing to add and am glad we finally learned it. Thanks a lot for that, DestinyGirl!

Overall it was a fabulous chapter with a fabulous character. I really liked that last thought. It seemed to make her seem more realistic in my eyes. There were a few mistakes, but the awesomeness totally covered up. I can't wait to read more, DestinyGirl!

Author's Response:

Thx so much Sasaui! I tried to make it obvious, but since Hikari herself didn't know I didn't exactly point it out. Yeah, it's in Hikari's nature to take care of him, since Naruto's been in her life for so long. Haha, it was a nice twist to things:P Just wait till she has ALL the kunoichi girls with her on a shopping trip!

Thank you, I tried my best! I'm glad you enjoyed it:D

Haha, definitely! Boys will be boys I guess:P

Yeah, that was more of a short version since I didn't want to spill anything too quick. Sort of like how Kishimoto-sensei does to us, give a little of the past in the beginning, and then wait till later in Shippuden to finally reveal it all. At just the right time, I just hope I do it as well as he does - probably not, though, since he IS the author of Naruto. Your welcome, Sasaui!

Thx for your words, I really appreciate them! Yes, I will try to correct those mistakes as soon as I am able! (Meaning, when I finally go home and get on my desktop with spelling check) Thank you so so much, Sasaui!:D



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/01/12 - 09:09 pm · For: The Connection
AWW! It was so cute! I know that a lot of it is basically manga/anime stuff, but it's still so adorable. Even more so when Hikari is thrown into the bunch.

I really liked how Konohamaru was attacked by that drunk guy though. And then he was saved by Naruto and Hikari. That was awesome.

And then Konohamaru used the Sexy Jutsu to transform into Hikari... Really DestinyGirl, I'm quite shocked that you did that. It was funny all the same though ;)

It was such a lighthearted and fun chapter that the last line of this made me want to cry for Naruto and Hikari. They were having such fun and all, and then she thinks about what if they are separated... It's so sad, I hope they get to be on the same teams...

Great chapter, DestinyGirl! It was wonderful! A couple spelling errors, nothing big though. I really enjoyed this chapter. Especially when Naruto blushed at being questioned if he liked Hikari. Best part out of the whole thing ;D Excellent job on this chapter. Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response:

Haha, yeah I figured since they're still young that I should make it as cute as possible:P Yeah, I wanted their meeting with Konohamaru to be slightly different from the original manga/anime.

Was it that shocking? I'm glad you found it funny, I just thought of it and went with it:P

That was the goal in this chapter: lighthearted and fun. After this they'll be assigned missions and things will start to get more serious as they learn more about what it is to be a shinobi.

Sorry about the spelling errors (I really hate those), I'm on someone's labtop and unfortunately they don't have spelling check AT ALL! I'll get those fixed as soon as I can, thx for telling me. Haha, that was probably my favorite part to write - the beginning of something big. I'm glad you enjoyed this, Wolf-chan! Thx so much for reading and reviewing!:D



Name: RawrTheDinoLycan (Signed) · Date: 16/10/11 - 12:04 am · For: Frightening Revelations
Hmm, interesting. I look foward to seeing how this developes :D
Please don't make Hikari a Mary-sue :(

Author's Response: Thx so much for reading and reviewing!:D I'm posting a Halloween special if ya want to check it out:P I'm going to try and not let that happen... I'm just writing her out with how I think a true angel and the element of light manifested would be like... Though if I do cross into Mary-sue territory please let me know! ^_^


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 14/10/11 - 10:36 am · For: Forever Promises
wow...
so innocent... :')
i mean i could almost Feel hr innocence... her pain, loneliness ws reflectd through her talk...
brilliantly written kayla-chan :D

Author's Response: Thx so much!!! I love your reviews, and thank you for taking the time to read this, I really do appreciate this. And I try to be as decriptive as can be with my characters! Hopefully not TOO descriptive, lol:P Thx so much for reviewing!!!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/10/11 - 03:14 pm · For: Frightening Revelations
Well, first of all, I need to do this:



I have this story under my list, but I never gave you the reward, so....

First, I have to laugh again. Are we all just going to involve our characters in the Mizuki event? Are we all just mentally linked? If you haven't read Silverwolf's latest update on Reincarnation of a Legend, you'd understand. It was a great chapter. Although I saw the mistake with your and you're in a few places. Other than that, absolute perfection! I am so in love with your story, DestinyGirl. It's breath-taking. You do a fabulous job at molding your own character into the actual plot. Sheesh, you two (you and silverwolf) make me feel so inferior sometimes........ Okay, on the bright side, I am eager to read what comes next! Wait, how's that on the bright side since it means I have to wait.....? Either way I'll wait, because any true fan would. Which I definitely am. Any stories of yours will have me as a person on the #1 Fan list.

Author's Response:

Awesome!!! Again, I feel so honored that I've gotten a YOUR STORY AWARD!!! ^_^ (Makes me feel special)

Lol, I guess so:P Great minds DO think alike, as they say. Yeah, I just got tired of reading and watching the first part of Naruto so I turned it off and just went with it, made up my own.:P Thx so much, I try my best!:D HEY! You're not inferior!!! Ha, yeah, you ARE my #1 Fan!XD Thx so much for reviewing Sasaui!



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/10/11 - 01:47 pm · For: Frightening Revelations
:D Oh my gosh, update! And an amazing one too! This was so wonderful!

Seriously, you fit Hikari so well into this part of the manga, it's almost as if the manga/anime was meant to have the story of angels included.

Wow... This was so wonderful. I really enjoyed all of this. Excellent work, DestinyGirl! You did fantastic on this! Keep up the amazing work with your writing!

Author's Response:

Thanks! Your always so quick to respond!:D

Thanks so much! I really tried my hardest on this chappie, I'm glad to know I didn't disappoint you.

I will! I was so nervous about this, but you've put'em at ease for me... well, for now... Thx for reviewing!



Name: SandShinobi21 (Signed) · Date: 01/02/11 - 12:50 pm · For: Forever Promises
Yay this is great! You did an awesome job with Hikari and the prologue, leaving mystery and future plot opertunities and still reverting to the 'NARUTO' plot line! I Loved how you started with the academy parts, not a lot of people give enough attention to that time so it was refreshing and nice! =] Go little naruto people! lol

Overall this is great! Plus Naruto being one of my favorite characters is a bonus. ;) Please update soon! I Love this!

Author's Response:

I'm sooo glad you like Broken Wings!:D Thanks, it took me a while to write each chapter and figure out the plot and all - I'm still writing Part 2 of BW now. I loved the original plot from Naruto so I decided to keep it and just make changes to it! ^^ I agree, I like to not rush things, start in the beginning and let everyone know each character more that way it makes a great and memorable story:) Lol, their so cute and chibi when their little!

Thank you so much! I agree, Naruto's the best!!:D I'll try and unleash Part 2 of this whenever I can, thx so much for your review!



Name: darroth (Signed) · Date: 16/12/10 - 10:37 am · For: Twist of Fate
that was FANTASTIC!
beautifully written! so sad at the end... i LOVE IT!

do you thing you'll make a seperate story for part 6 or stay under the name broken wings?

Author's Response:

I'm glad to hear that BW (Broken Wings) was fantastic, and that you loved it!:) Thank you so much, I even teared up some when writing this chapter! And I'll be staying under the name Broken Wings still, it's just I decided to make "parts" in my story so that way it's easier to find a certain event in the story for readers later on. It's a bit like how they did Naruto, dividing it up in separate arcs. In the next part for instance, they'll be older and graduating from the academy, it won't be long till part 3, so some of the parts or arcs may not be that long.

But thanks so much for taking some time and reading this and reviewing, it really helps me out a lot!:) Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 10/12/10 - 04:27 pm · For: Twist of Fate
Wow. That was so good. You're an awesome writer. Your development of Hikari fits so well with the story. There are no holes or anything. Your writing is amazing. This chapter is flawless, just as all the others are. I don't even know what else to say except that your story is fantastic, and your talent as a writer is very impressive. Your story is becoming more and more...what's a good word...incredible! Your writing is so inspiring. Keep up the good work, even though you don't need me to tell you that. But hey, everyone needs encouragement :)

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!!! I'm glad Hikari is developing well, 'cause I know it's different for the author and reader so I try and put myself in the reader's shoes after I get done typing the chapter up:) I'm glad there's no holes in my work, and I'm really glad to hear that you think my writing is amazing! That really helps out a lot, thank you. Hopefully Part 2 will make Broken Wings even more incredible in your eyes, after all, they'll be grown up and going on their very first missions!

Thank you so much, that's always the beauty of writing - telling a story and inspiring others to do their best also, and I hope you become a greater and greater writer! And everyone really does need encouragement, even the most top-notch authors and artists and anyone else needs encouragement from others from time-to-time. Thanks a lot for taking some time and reading this and reviewing, it always helps me out a lot knowing I have people reading my story and wanting more!

And also, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!



Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 10/12/10 - 01:48 pm · For: Twist of Fate
T_T I've always hated the part where Sasuke grows cold. I hate it. I wish he was still that happy, energetic kid. And, once again, T_T for Hikari. She's going to have to live for those years blaming herself. I feel bad for the two of them. I can't wait to read part 2, DestinyGirl. Oh, and sorry I haven't replied to your E-mail yet. I will as soon as I get time to, but I haven't had time to check my mail in a while. Please write more soon!

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! Yeah, I didn't really like that part either, but it had to happen in order for this story to progress! But perhaps things will turn out differently for Sasuke in Broken Wings, I hated how he turnd out in Shippuden, I just didn't like it and I'm still hoping he changes back to the good ol' Sasuke that I remember back in Naruto! I don't know, it would be a complete shame and waste if he died evil.:(

And yes, the guilt will eat at Hikari as years pass by, which everyone will soon see in later chapters:) I'm glad you're looking forward to Part 2 of this! I decided it would be easier if I divided the story up into separate "parts" that way it would be easier for readers reading later on to tell which arc their on (sort of like how they done with actual Naruto). Thanks, and don't worry about the e-mail, just respond whenever you can, I was wondering about how you upload things on here...(pictures, songs, etc.) But thanks so much for your support, I'll write sometime probably after the holidays - when I get the computer back lol:P



Name: darroth (Signed) · Date: 29/11/10 - 08:58 pm · For: This Little Light of Mine
i really am enjoying this story! its amazingly well written, and there are no plot holes! seeems as though this is how it should have happened. i now consider you a better writer than the original author of naruto!

Author's Response:

WOW. That's all I can say, I'm speechless. Thank you so much for your inspiring words, they really help out an author to do more than what they're already doing so I thank you for that! I'm glad you're enjoying my story thus far, I try to proofread everything because I don't like poor grammar in a story. But wow! Your words make me feel honored, especially if you consider ME better than Masashi Kishimoto! I'm super glad about that! I hope I continue to do great on this story so it will be great in my readers' eyes when they read it! Oh yeah, and I'll try and have the next chapter up sometime this week!:)

Have a joyful day!

♥Kayla



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/11/10 - 08:13 pm · For: This Little Light of Mine
Omg, this story is so good! Your writing is so amazing! You have no idea how excited I was to see a new chapter! Please continue because I love reading this story!

Author's Response:

Wow! Thank you so so much!!! I'm glad you love reading my story Broken Wings, I try my best and everything so I'm glad to see that people are enjoying reading it!:D But I just love getting reviews from new people, it makes ME excited!

But have a joyful day!

♥Kayla



Name: Swrestler12 (Signed) · Date: 24/11/10 - 10:42 pm · For: This Little Light of Mine
I cant wait, this leaves me curious.

Author's Response: I'm glad! Thanks so much for reviewing!♥


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 22/11/10 - 07:43 pm · For: This Little Light of Mine
Wow. Really great chapter, DestinyGirl! I absolutely loved this chapter, and I liked the chapter name. Please get the next chapter up soon! I can't wait to read the next chapter. This story is AMAZING. I wonder what will happen next. I want to know how this light will affect Hikari.

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much Sasaui!!! I'm so glad you loved this chapter, I spent a lot of time on it since it would lead up to a LOT of things in the story later on. I'll try and get the next chapter out as soon as I can! And always, thank you so much for your inspiring reviews!:D


Name: Swrestler12 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/10 - 12:16 pm · For: Bloodlines and Dreams
Yay, I liked this chapter. i liked everything about it and thought it was pretty cool what hapened with Hinata. Well Done

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, I always like to put a twist to things when I'm writing so I'm glad it turned out alright to the reader:)

Thanks so much for liking it and giving me a review!♥



Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 16/10/10 - 03:44 am · For: Bloodlines and Dreams
Great chapter! I absolutely loved it, though it took me two days to read since I was so tired last night. I'm excited every single time I see there's a new chapter because I know I'm going to get to read yet another fabulous chapter written by you. Please update again soon!

Author's Response:

Aw, thanks!:D Thanks for all of your super comments!!! They really help me a LOT:D

And sorry I haven't responded to your last e-mail in God knows how long, my e-mail's been messing up but hopefully I'll get it fixed today! But thanks so much for reviewing!♥



Name: Swrestler12 (Signed) · Date: 11/10/10 - 03:51 pm · For: Friendships Begin!
This was a very interesting chapter and i liked how you had the different characters reacted to Hikari and Naruto. Well done again.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!!! There will be more to come real soon, but thanks a lot for reviewing!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 09/10/10 - 03:52 pm · For: Friendships Begin!
I reallllllly liked it, DestinyGirl. I can't believe your writing is so freaking good yet you can complement mine. :-) You did a great job at it, and I love how things are going between the two. Please write more soon. I absolutely love it. And why'd you only do Kiba's POV and none of the others? I'm just curious about it.


P.S PLEASE update SOON!!!!!

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked it Sasaui!:D And hey, your writing is great too!!! And the reason I only did Kiba's POV is because I just wanted to show you how the main shinobi parents think of Hikari... plus I know Tsume's personality better than the other kids' parents, lol. But I'll have more POVs of other kids up in other chapters as the story progresses... Hope that answered your question! Thanks so much for your review, I'll try and update sometime next week when I get the chance!

Lots of love,

DestinyGirl



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