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Title: Naruto: Intimacy by Nesha
Rated: 18 Liked [Reviews - 8]
Summary: “Please Baki, just hold me tonight. Just for tonight, I don’t want to be alone…” [Baki.Yugao]
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Shikamaru and Temari
Characters: Shikamaru Nara, Temari
Genres: Angst, Drama, General, Graphic lemon, Romance
Warnings: AU
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 15585 | Read count: 6809 [Report This]
Published: 01/10/07 | Updated: 26/10/07


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 12/07/08 Title: Chapter 1: Shikamaru and Temari

Interesting... I actually liked that scene between Baki and Yugao. I enjoy watching other people suffer, especially psychological torture from guilt...



Title: People Who Are Important: Book Two by XoxgaaraxoX
Rated: 18 Liked [Reviews - 66]
Summary: {2 New Chapters March 5, 2009} Sasuke's back and Sakura doesn't know how to react to him. Can the emotionally stunted Uchiha fix his mess? Naruto finally starts to see Hinata, Gaara's son turns one, and Shikamaru pops the question! Sasu/Saku, Naru/Hina, Shika/Tema..REVIEW!!!!
Category: Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Neji and Tenten, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Sasuke and Sakura, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Shikamaru and Temari
Characters: Gaara, Hinata Hyuuga, Pair SasuSaku, Pair ShikaTema
Genres: Angst, Drama, Romance
Warnings: Death
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 | Completed: No | Word count: 147431 | Read count: 21151 [Report This]
Published: 03/03/08 | Updated: 19/06/09


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 15/12/08 Title: Chapter 12: Turbulence: Part One

All right, I won't pretend that I like your 'Japanese sprinkles' but if you like to write that way, then I'm no one to change yours because I'm pretty sure my own style annoys someone and I'm not going to change mine.

That being said, I do know a little Japanese myself, but I'm just a beginner, so here's just some hopefully helpful tips.
#1 In Japanese, the particle "no" goes AFTER the modifier and BEFORE the noun (because Japanese lexicon is inside-out with respect to English)
Hence:
Sabaku no Gaara literally means Gaara of the Sand Waterfall (Gaara is the noun and sand waterfall is the modifier)
Hi no Kuni= Fire Country (Lit. Country of Fire)
Karamatsu no Mai= Dance of the willows

#2 Rather than using an English-Japanese dictionary to come up with new jutsu names, get a list of kanji (Wikipedia has the complete Kyouiku kanji with on' and kun' readings) and mix them to make your "own" compounds, and "steal" parts of already existing jutsu names. BTW, when using elemntal release techniques, it might be a good idea to put what the type is (katon, raiton, etc.) because then we (the readers) will understand better.

Anyways, keep up the good work, I'm really enjoying the story so far.



Title: I'm Letting You Go by Swords_and_Bandages
Rated: PG Liked [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Neji had always been there for Tenten. Still, he never noticed how she felt for him. Prequel to "How I Feel About You, Tenten."
Category: Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Neji and Tenten
Characters: Tenten
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: Fate's Intricate Course
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 452 | Read count: 2384 [Report This]
Published: 23/07/08 | Updated: 23/07/08


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 30/07/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow, great letter. It sounds real. Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks. If you want, check out the one that comes after this.



Title: Screw Your Lid Let Me Tell It! by vampirella
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 6]
Summary:
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-Hello there! The name’s Sakura. Just your typical girl looking for some-
-What do you think your doing? What about me?
-What about you, Sasuke? Okay! Uh, lets see, you’re annoying for starters…
-You’re so full of yourself. This is a story about BOTH of us. Not just about you.
-Says who? Besides, I look better in a two piece better than you ever will. That’s reason enough that this story to be mine.
-No, it isn’t. -sigh- Can we just get started on this already?
-Alright alight… -pause- Hey, is that a boner in your pants?

Category: Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Sasuke and Sakura
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 | Completed: No | Word count: 12044 | Read count: 14680 [Report This]
Published: 24/07/08 | Updated: 14/02/09


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 30/07/08 Title: Chapter 1: Rose Petals

The notes are pretty funny, hehe. The actual story is interesting, I want to see where you're going.

Author's Response: i hope to go pretty far =]\r\n\r\nl:~Ileana



Title: Akatsuki- Pokemon Join the Team by Hailo95100
Rated: PG Liked [Reviews - 8]
Summary: The Akatsuki team suddenly find red and white balls in there room. What happens when they find out that they are Pokeballs and had POKEMON in them?
Category: MadFic > Other, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Crossovers, General Fiction > Timeless
Characters: Akatsuki
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 | Completed: No | Word count: 4873 | Read count: 17747 [Report This]
Published: 01/08/08 | Updated: 11/11/08


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 05/08/08 Title: Chapter 1: Pokemon Appear

ROFL... this is the first pokenaru fanfic I've seen. Man, ya have to update this.



Title: Another Survivor: Uchiha Love Blossoms by Crimson Lily
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 283]
Summary: Eight year old Katsumi Uchiha ran through the blood stained streets of the Uchiha compound, looking for him. He was important, he was her best friend. If she didn’t find him, life wouldn’t be worth living anymore. She had to find him before the Uchiha Clan killer did. Where are you? She thought frantically, trying to hold back the tears she knew were coming. Where are you, Sasuke?
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Naruto, Het Romance > Fluff
Characters: All, Pair OCSasu
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: AU
Challenges: SASUKExOC,
Challenge: SASUKExOC,
Series: None
Chapters: 51 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 134305 | Read count: 113616 [Report This]
Published: 05/10/08 | Updated: 14/09/11


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 03/09/09 Title: Another Survivor: Uchiha Love Blossoms

Um... okay, I know I'm always nitpicking at the little details, but anyways...

Either Katsumi is really bad at using Henge no Jutsu or that guy has some sort of extra-sensory power. Naruto's Henge no Jutsu was enough to confuse Kiba into attacking Akamaru and to fool the Hidden Rain ninja. How would some guy that doesn't really know Katsumi be able to see through her Henge?

Author's Response: okay, i get where you\'re coming from. I dont really know what to say because the truth is...im a total failure at that kind of stuff, and I dont really think of it when I write it. I just added it as a kinda filler chapter, except the fact that he knew where Tsunade was, I might even cut out the part where he discovers her identity...cuz reading it makes me cringe, and i start thinking, \"wtf was i on when i wrote that\". Thanks for reviewing!!!



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 30/01/09 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Uchiha...or Hyuuga? A Secret Love Triangle

Nice story... Sasuke fighting Neji? I hope he gets his ass kicked.

Author's Response: haha thx! but..uh, who are u talking about when u say \"i hope he gets his ass kicked\"? neji or sasuke?\r\nhope u keep reviewing! :P



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 03/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Beautiful Innocence

Sorry... yeah, I meant Sasuke got his ass kicked... I really hate that guy.

I hate traitors.

Author's Response: well, i really doubt that sasuke will get his butt kicked, as he is one of the main characters, but i hope u still enjoy the story even though he\'s in it! \r\nkeep reviewing!



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 26/02/09 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Red, Blue, and Silver

To answer your question, yes you are taking the relationship too fast. Remember, Sasuke is still a twelve-year-old (emotionally stunted) boy who only three or so hours before realized his feelings for Katsumi. Right now he should be in the 'terrified, awkward, she's-gonna-laugh-at-me-when-I-tell-her phase', (never mind that it's obvious that Katsumi obviously feels the same way towards him. At that age, we're always insecure) NOT acting like a fifteen-year-old Casanova. Katsumi is sort of acting her age, but Sasuke... nope. Sorry if I was rude.

Author's Response: no not at all! its great to hear some dirt from someone! (you weren\'t rude at all, u just were honest, and i appreciate that you are willing to state your opinion!)\r\n Hmm, u do have a good point, but i also have to argue that Sasuke isn\'t the same boy he is in the manga. in the manga, i agree, he is a emotionally stunted boy who is very awkward when it comes to relating to others. but in my version story, he has his best friend katsumi, who is also dealing with the same experience, to help him handle the fear and pain of being alone. yes i agree that we are all insecure at twelve, but think about them not as children, but the tasks and responsibilities as ninja they are given. a ninja rule is to lock away all your feelings and not to cry, because that is their duty to their village. do you really think that after seeing as much as team 7 has seen that they are still so young and innocent anymore? i mean, they were trained to act like adults, and that training starts when they enter the academy at eight years old. and seeing as Sasuke and Katsumi are a bit mature for their age, do you really think its so strange for them to take advantage of their attraction towards one another? and i also agree that im making them a little older, but i also (i think i put this in earlier chapters, not sure. if i havent i will do so from now on) think that i have added a inexperienced light to Sasuke\'s character. He has no idea what to do when it comes to love. He knows he loves Katsumi, but he\'s still awkward in his own silent way. \r\nbut i really appreciate your input, and i hope that you read this and understand my point of view a little better than before. I hope that you still enjoy the manga, and hope to get more of ur reviews!\r\n~crimson lily



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 04/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Beautiful Innocence

Ooh... Neji got rejected. I expected more reactions, but then again, he IS cold and emotionless.

By the way, I understand your point about ninjas being more mature, but... um, honestly, when it comes to women, guys need to have experience before they begin to get over the awkwardness. In other words, ninja training doesn't help us at all. I remember being sixteen and having beaten the crap out of this guy twice my size and then stuttering the next day when a girl I used to like talked to me. But anyways, I liked the fact that Sasuke was nervous in Chapter 24.

Oh and also, when is there going to be more action?

Author's Response: haha totally. \r\nhehe...kinda odd...but i just realized that you\'re a guy. WOW WAS THAT WEIRD!!! i was reading your review and im like \"hey...how does this person know so much from the guy point of view, but then i read it all, and lightbulbs flashed and so on! \r\nanyway, thanks so much for your advice (like seriously...thanks! Sorry if it seems a little unnatural in that respect, but im still finding it a bit difficult to include guys emotions and feelings of romantic nature!)\r\nand about the action, DONT WORRY! the ball sequence is officially over, and the Forest of Death is next! time to whip out the bad-ass fighting skills and kick some booty! \r\n*sigh* im so immature...please bear with me. \r\nThanks for reviewing, and i hope you like the rest!\r\n:P



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 20/07/09 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40: Pervy Sage

Oooh, nice chapter. I like all the confusion. It's like a real battle.

Author's Response: thanks! :P



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed
Date: 11/09/09 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43: Tsunade's Location

Yay, edited out! I like this chapter a lot more than the way it was originally.

Author's Response: thank you! I think its better too. :P



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 30/10/09 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45: Necklace of Sorrow

Um, it's NEEsan for sister (and for the older one, niisan is for older brothers). Aside from that, it was a pretty good chapter. I liked it.

Author's Response: oh, sorry bout that. but please understand that i know absolutely NOTHING about that japanese suffix stuff, i was making a guess. Thanks for reviewing!!!



Title: A small Crack in Perfection by eternalshiva
Rated: 18 Liked [Reviews - 22]
Summary: In a modern world, Hinata was barely exposed to Naruto's constant belief in himself. Now in her mid 20s, she meets him again and discovers a crack in her careful wall of Hyuuga perfection. Posted on FF.net; AFF.net; deviantArt
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Real World, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata
Characters: Pair NaruHina
Genres: Graphic lemon, Humor, Romance
Warnings: AU, Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 13 | Completed: No | Word count: 92035 | Read count: 12157 [Report This]
Published: 03/07/09 | Updated: 25/01/11


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 06/03/10 Title: Chapter 11: The proof is in the pudding

Excellent. I really like the whole hacking subplot. And the Kiba interruption was well-played, too. Man, this story keeps getting better and better. Update soon!

PS: Congrats about the baby! =D How far along are you?

Author's Response: I\'m at 15 weeks right now :D Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 28/11/09 Title: Chapter 1: Past and Present

Excellent story, I just read it from the beginning to the end. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you :)



Title: Diaries Of The Supernatural by Crimson Lily
Rated: U Liked [Reviews - 21]
Summary: Most people wish that they were anything but normal. Wish for that supernatural quality that made you so different from everyone else. But for some, being supernatural was a curse. A gift…and yet a curse that prevented even the chance for a normal life. This was the very reason that these four children were being hunted. They were being hunted by the Doctors that gave them these supernatural qualities. On the day that these children escaped from the Experimental Station that they were being held in, two of the four were separated from the group, and no matter how hard the remaining two searched, those children were nowhere to be found. The two remaining children assumed that the two lost friends were dead, and continued running, running far away from the Station and the men that ran it. But in their hearts, they both wished that maybe…just maybe, their friends were alive, somehow. That they would find their friends again, and they would all remain together to try to live a somewhat normal life. Because trust me, being supernatural isn't something that anyone should wish for. Photobucket
Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > High School Fics, Het Romance > Fluff, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Real World
Characters: Hinata Hyuuga, Naruto Uzumaki, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor, Romance, Supernatural
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 6 | Completed: No | Word count: 11329 | Read count: 10788 [Report This]
Published: 22/07/09 | Updated: 29/12/09


Reviewer: Tetsuryuumaru Signed Liked
Date: 14/12/09 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 3: Strange Things

Excellent, it was a pity it took so long to update. Update sooner!