Reviews For On The Day I Ran Out Of Sprite. . .
Name: Chikadee (Anonymous) · Date: 10/09/11 - 07:32 am · For: Chapter 2 - What Freud Could Have Guessed
This story is actually pretty awesome...(especially about the hypnosis part)
I havebt figured out this site yet so I cant really sign this///sorry > _
Name: NarutoLover (Signed) · Date: 11/01/10 - 06:29 pm · For: Chapter 2 - What Freud Could Have Guessed
Wow the psychological thing was really cool! I m gonna sound like an idiot if it's not, but is it actually possible to do that?? I wonder who the little kid is.. Hope you update soon! =]
Author's Response: Well, after three months of vanishing from the internet, I'm finally back. Sorry it took me so long to respond. :P The human brain is actually extremely pathetic. Just about everybody but extreme autists can be duped by everything under the sun, hypnosis being only a perfected duping technique, frighteningly similar to genjutsu and the such (I actually did my research, OMG!). It'll probably be a while before I get back into the rythym of fanfics and stuff, but I'll try to update my stories. I'm really glad you liked it. :)
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 29/11/09 - 04:17 pm · For: Chapter 1 - Sioux Falls, a boring city
go throu contact author thing on my bio...less of a hassle to fig out if u spam or not.
Author's Response: Got it, thanks for telling me! Wow, your bio is long! :P
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 28/11/09 - 11:07 pm · For: Chapter 2 - What Freud Could Have Guessed
.....you are rushing again. the ideas are nice but you need to intro them better, im alrite w/ the hypno thing, a chara got to hav sum sort of leg up. ...i dont usually do beta reading because usually im very busy doing crap but, ill be ur beta reader if you want. personal email me if you lik tht.
Author's Response: sorry, it's those two hours a week that are killing me! I got the hypnosis idea when a hypnotist came to school one day and made someone forget the number four by scaring her with a toy spider. Thanks for offering to be my beta-reader! *sending email* ;)
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 28/11/09 - 10:57 pm · For: Chapter 1 - Sioux Falls, a boring city
XD i say the ending was amusing but the story is rushed. the character needs to having more time before relizing where he is..its just too ill-written. It sounds more like a summary in alot of the parts and i feel that only the humor parts and neji fighting eric was acutually pretty ok.
Author's Response: Sorry. I only have around two hours in the week to update two stories, so I'm always really rushed to get it done. I guess I forgot to stress/mention that Eric still doesn't believe where he is still. I'll try to take my time at it next time, but expect the update to take a bit longer. Two hours a week just isn't enough time to do everything.
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 22/10/09 - 10:12 pm · For: Chapter 1 - Sioux Falls, a boring city
Hmm, Nice! Maybe it's a little crowded, make it a little more roomy!
Author's Response: Crowded? Roomy? I have no idea what you mean, but I'll try!
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 22/10/09 - 04:38 pm · For: Chapter 1 - Sioux Falls, a boring city
shorter paragraphs would be nice? besides that, it's pretty good. you gonna keep going?
Author's Response: Are the paragraphs really that long? I'll do my best to keep them short for you, and yes, I am gonna keep on going. Hopefully I can make it better as I go along.