Reviews For A new member to the naruto gang
Name: miocherryblossoms (Signed) · Date: 08/11/08 - 02:50 pm · For: Chapter 1
ITs a decent story, i admit, and the story line is good. But i also agree with the other reviews.
Name: A Lovely Lie (Signed) · Date: 17/10/08 - 08:50 pm · For: Chapter 6
I'd have to say writing in 2nd POV wasn't a very smart idea.
Also, godmodding and mary-sue's iare a big no-no. Don't know what they are? Godmodding is when you character is all powerful and beats people really easily (The Sakura and Temari fight). A mary-sue is a perfect character, and in this case, all the guys want 'you.'
In the previous chapter, telling us who went in the close each time was hell annoying. 'Blah and bloop went into the closet. Bloop spins the bottle and it lands on Blec. Blec and Bloop go into the closet. Blec spins the bottle and it lands on Bleh.' That was just really annoying.
Overall, I highly dislike the story.
Name: ItachiUchihaLover (Signed) · Date: 15/10/08 - 02:37 pm · For: Chapter 2
it is a great story, but you need to replace the "you"s with "I"s If you had I would have given it a 9 not a 5.
Name: AikoMatsuo (Signed) · Date: 17/07/08 - 11:39 am · For: Chapter 2
wowi amzing please keep it up.
Love AikoMatsuo
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100000000000000000000000000000000000000000000/10
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 28/03/08 - 10:10 pm · For: Chapter 1
thank god somebody had to beat Sakura;; and Sasuke gets Jess, rite?
Name: Poketto Kunoichi (Signed) · Date: 08/02/08 - 06:22 pm · For: Chapter 1
Hi! I think you a pretty decent writer, but I'd like to point out some things.
Most people don't like second person POV, but I don't have a problem with it. It's just that, how do you know how the reader would react?
Second I don't think Sasuke would be surprised for defeating Sakura in one blow.
And the name, Jessica. :) You could go to a translator for a Japanese name. Let your name be Narufied. n.n
Name: akichan (Signed) · Date: 07/02/08 - 04:39 pm · For: Chapter 1
COOL! More, more more, this is really good. yah, you beat sakura!