Fuck yea! They are back~~~~ but not zombies....
Odd...thought that another long lost Uchiha fic was gonna drive me insane, bus its cool so far. Now I need to get something to eat XD.
Well, I usually start a story and read and write reviews as I read chapter to chapter but, yours was well too addicting to just read at my usual lesure pace. At some parts I was in shock of the change in course of the story and what you introduce as twists but, the best stories are the original ones. That's a concept that many writers, even I have hard time grasping.
I must say I found your story captivating! Yama has been through so much and has to adapt so quickly that like you mentioned in the more recent chapters, she imbodies innocentence in the story and now I feel she's starting to lose it as well. I find her attitude and struggles truly moving; it's like poetry I suppose, your story. I will go back and review each chapter, picking out their English flaws, but I can't say much about the plot and course you choose to follow with it.
I find this amusing in some ways for a spell now, most stories I've critic have basic elementry flaws and I'm not as moved or interested in them as I was with yours. Of course some were witty and kept me smiling but, yours has life, breathe, soul! It made me feel happy, joyful, amused, sadden, angry, and understanding; in the sense of losing precious things in life. I feel that this work of words and sentences have some how drawn me in and feel apart of the story.
Now that might sound strange and 'creepy' to you, but, it's a good thing to hear from a reader. That's the purpose of a story; to make the reader one with the characters. To make them feel lost in the story and enveloped in it's depths of emotions and termoil. It makes it feel real.
I found many good things in this story of yours and shall perhaps continue to as long as you continue to write. I'm supremely happy to finally get to reading stories I've labeled "look at" and find a jewel amongest the rocks. Keep the poetry up my friend and....find happiness in your works of words and life.
Dude. It's been like a year. Me thinks it's time for you to update. Yes, I know you're busy, and yes, your life is hectic and you don't have time to worry about fanfiction. But you can't just leave it right there where you left it, right in the middle of some deep shit, where there's a lot of drama going on. I bet you don't even remember what it's mostly about. And the problem with that is, that once you get outside the story like that, it's hard to continue writing because it's almost like you've extricated yourself from the whole thing. People are being nice to you and telling you, "oh please right more! I love it so much and I'm going to die if you don't write more!!" Except with much worse grammar. Problem is, you don't deserve the sympathy of "Oh, I know you're busy!!" I don't mean to sound like a bitch, but you need a wake-up call! It's been a YEAR. That's too long to go without notice, my friend. Now get your ass back here and start writing!!!
Now I will proceed to take a different argument to get you to come back, by essentially kissing your ass. I'll tell you what. I stayed up until five a.m. to finish reading it, and by that time I was an emotional wreck. I couldn't even go to sleep, and I had to get a glass of water to calm myself down. Not in a bad way, of course. You had me at the edge of my seat; I sometimes wanted to cry, I sometimes wanted to laugh. And according to the reviews, others had the same experience. Once you start this kind of thing, you have a commitment to it, to all the people who grovel at your feet for being such an amazing writer. But you have let us down, and you're getting off easy for it. And frankly, I for one don't find it acceptable.
omg! really really good! i love this story! i hope you update some time.
omg!!! its jason!!
hahahahah*wipes some tears away* i was laughing a good deal in this one.
lol cool! kakashi got faced!
Oh my god!!!
This is sooooo good!!!
Keep up the awesome-ness!!!
awwww they are so cute! i luved it as ususal! u really explained Kakashi and his feelings quite accurately, and i cant wait to see how their relationship plays out!!
I just read all twenty-five chapters....
AND I'VE FALLEN IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY.
Yes! I LOVE this story! =D =D =D
AHHHHHHHHHH why r u so cruel!!! u cant just leave the end like that!!! :(
soooo good! poor yama! no clothes!!! lol!
plz plzplz write more!!!!!!!!
...okay your story is the best (in my opion) in the whole site. So I'm asking...no I'm begging please please please write them a tiny bit faster. like this 1 took about 2 months. anywayzzz THE ENDING OF THE CHAPTER ROCKS!
awwwww i luv this chapter!!! yama and kakashi r just too cute!!! plz let them stay together!! when i got to kakashi's letter i almost cried!!! he cant never b with her again!!! luv the story sooo much!! plz write more!!! luvluvluvluvluvluv it!!!!!
Uh . . . if the Sharringan gene is only passed down by the female uchihas the how does yama have it , because her mother wasnt an Uchiha . . . .?
brilliant story so far though! you can really write!!!!!
Author's Response: That question's been asked a lot actually. It's going to be answered in the Momiji no Kyuuden arc (which is where the story is at right now) so be patient. XD
I must say, it took me a good week to read the whole thing but it wwas well worth my time! I was really hoping in fact that you would bring Zabuza and Haku in soon. I almost thought you wouldn't.
This story by the way is very well put together and I love every twist it takes. Please continue this soon.
P.S.: My favorite Chapters are probably this one and 'Freak Out Session'... I like them all really, please don't ask me to choose.
I rated this 10/10 by the way, I don't know if it tells you or not-.-'
I was beginning to think you weren't going to continue the story (cue heart dieing)! ^^ Hurry with the next chappie, 'cus this one made me thirsty for more!
Keep up the great work!
You have to write more it's awesome!!!
omg i look at the dates of the posts and i noticed that u haven't been here for a long time. But if ur somewhere out-there [looks into the sky as if expecting writer-sama glide to her from Heavens with an update...] PLEASE!!!!!!!!!! ONEGAI!!!!!!!!!!!! i need that update more than chocolate in my life
besides ur storry telling is really great ^^ really fun to read. And... well... u know.... KAKASHI omg Kakashi is like sooooo real and darn cute, and smexy ^____^ yeah i'm a total fangirl........
SO please update !! i can rant about that for hours. i luv ur story sooo much [puppy eyes] ONEGAI writer-sama
I absolutely love this story. You're an awesome writer. Please update soon