Reviews For Freedom and Death
Name: Swords_and_Bandages (Signed) · Date: 25/12/07 - 11:50 am · For: Chapter 1
Nice first try. The only thing I would say is that this feels a bit fragmented at times. Maybe group the lyrics and stories in bigger segments before transitioning between them?
Damn... I should really update that list of songs. Some of those songs don't really have a coherent storyline in them, even though they're great songs nonetheless. There are some other songs I should add, too...
Anyways, good work. Merry Christmas!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for having read my oneshot. I am really flattered some people take of their time to read and review the work of a beginner such as myself. Thank you as well for your tip. With the fragmented bits of story I tried to make an effect known in poetry which name I unfortunately do not remember, however it seems it was not a great success. As for the songs, I think they all have stories, sad stories of course (well those I know about), but as I am not a real fan of rap, I cannot really judge them, still I think you chose well. Once again, thank you very much for helping the beginner I am. A Merry Christmas to you as well and a Happy New Year. All my best wishes for 2008, sincerely, with all my respect, Enoko