Reviews For The Ten Tails
Name: MissMuffinman (Signed) · Date: 01/01/17 - 12:50 am · For: Chapter 1
I posted it on wattpad my account name is The Anime Muffin. Here's the link: http://my.w.tt/UiNb/GmAV3vaOzz I will post it on TONFA soon just need to revise more stuff. Ahhhhhhh I'm so nervous!!! 〣( ^Δ^ )〣
Author's Response: I have a wattpad too. I was thinking about posting this story there after I finish it here. Don't. E nervous!! Hope you enjoy the chapter! Happy new years
Name: naash (Signed) · Date: 28/01/16 - 07:43 am · For: Chapter 1
Wow.
For a kid to have deep feelings and thoughts meant that she must have went through a lot.
It's like another gaara.
Love the cliffhanger
Name: MissMuffinman (Signed) · Date: 07/02/15 - 04:59 pm · For: Chapter 1
Man why does everyone was have to be so mean, just let them love each other. Poor Kiyoko!:( The father should have loved Kiyoko when she was little to keep the mother's wishes. This chapter was wonderful. Thank you for writing!!!:)
Author's Response: I'll update later today. Thanks for commenting.
Name: NinjaRace (Signed) · Date: 23/09/14 - 02:49 pm · For: Chapter 1
Interesting, you put the tension on right away. The details were realistic and painted a not so pretty picture but did so well.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for giving my story a chance. Hope you like the rest.
Name: MissMuffinman (Signed) · Date: 25/06/14 - 08:16 am · For: Chapter 1
Hey really good chapter. Poor suzu though that must suck! I am in shock right now so i dont know what to put but zamn that was a really good chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Name: Rezzalia (Signed) · Date: 16/06/14 - 06:31 pm · For: Chapter 1
I like it so far! :] Kind of reminds me of "Boulevard of Broken Dreams" by Green Day! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read my story. I treasure of my readers so thanks so much! I hope you enjoy the rest of my story
Name: MissMuffinman (Signed) · Date: 12/06/14 - 05:01 am · For: Chapter 1
This is one of the fanfic i have ever read and by far i think this be my favorite one! I love all the detail you put in it. It has an amazing plot! I couldn't sit still while, some points i walked away because was too funny,cheesy, or sad.c: I like how you put in Kaskashi's side. I love how how has something depressing to the back story to her life and it is really good. I stayed up all night reading it! You are a really good writer!^-^ It is BEAUTIFUL! 😊 Thank you for writing and plz hurry up and finish it. Im deading to know what happening next!!:)
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!!!! I'm glad to know my story is liked. This story is long from over an I plan to make it long so readers can really understand Kiyoko character. Thank you so much that you like it
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/02/14 - 12:06 pm · For: Chapter 1
Okay, first off the little nitpicks. There were some fragmented sentences. Most can be fixed with maybe an extra word or two. Another thing is you basically explained the character and her past all in the very first chapter. That takes away from the bond that grows between reader and the character. Like maybe you could have had the attack and then gradually explain her hard past. Another thing is your dialogue. Example: You have no choice.” This is taken from one of the last paragraphs. The problem here is the period. If you end dialogue with a period and then go on to express how they spoke (that wording may be a bit confusing. I apologize), as you did, with "one of them said, there should be a comma instead. So it'll look like this: "You have no choice," one of them said. If, however, you went right from dialogue to action, you would keep the period. (ex: "You have no choice." He threw another kunai in my direction,). I think that was most of it. Oh, also I was a bit confused. Like you jumped right from explaining her past to what she was presently doing. That threw me off at first.
Despite the size of the before, I enjoyed the first chapter. Kiyoko seems interesting and I like how and has no clue what's going on. For whatever reason I love doing that seeing as I am doing/going to do that to all the main ocs in my stories. I'm eager to learn more about her as well. I'm curious about how the whole thing came about of her hosting the demon, so I will admit you didn't tell us everything about her past. I can take guesses due to the name of the village, but still. What drove the decision? Or was it even a human choice?
Also, I am under the age of 18, so would you mind explaining the reason behind the rating?
Author's Response: thanks for the feedback. The first couple chapters are written in my phone that's why there are so many mistakes. I'll try to fix that, so keep commenting on the mistakes I like it. Well there is a lot about her past that the reader doesn't know, even Kiyoko doesn't know about it herself. I don't know why the rating is 18. I'll change it. Thanks.
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 16/02/14 - 04:50 am · For: Chapter 1
Oh goodness Kiyoko seems cornered.
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/14 - 10:26 am · For: Chapter 1
Interesting start, look forward to reading more.
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 20/01/14 - 09:27 pm · For: Chapter 1
Ooh! Looks mighty interesting! I look forward to seeing where you take this :)