Okay, first off, in the manga they go straight to the second half. No breaks at all. Then again, it's your story, so you could have decided to just change that. If this is so, you shouldn't have Anko tell the kids to follow her to the next exam since they're about to be dismissed. And, of course, the pesky grammar/spelling mistakes.

A lot of the beginning is just repeat. Okay, most of the chapter is going through the same first test, but not much extra can be added to it except thoughts. Haha. Of course Ayako would be stuck behind Gaara. Just her luck XD. Of course, as of now it doesn't appear he has any interest in her.

It was interesting to see Ayako's thoughts throughout the exams as well as her use of her water technique to inform Yumika how the test was supposed to be. Her own use of her cat jutsus was interesting to see. Then Etsuyo just sat back and relaxed because she could do it all easily XD. I was really glad it was difficult for the other two. Shows that they weren't as prepared for this thing as they thought and is kinda a reality check in a way.

Hehe. Nishiya was interrogated by Ibiki. That's always a pleasant experience. It's really fun seeing her around them because Asuma and Nishiya seem to really clash. If I didn't like AsuKure (or however that is) so much, I'd say it would be fun to see them together XD. Nishiya will take part as a medical ninja? Wonder what that will have to do with things since it can't just be to have her there since all the senseis are. Hm....

I'm a little upset Naruto's speech was excluded, mostly because I wanted to see Team Shizen's reaction to the other side of Naruto. I thought it would be an interesting experience for them. But oh well. Hehe. They seemed a bit mad to find out the truth. Sadly I was laughing at them. Without feeling at all guilty XD. I love how Ayako just automatically facepalms. It's very amusing to imagine.

Again, mostly similar to the actual canon since this is a hard one to switch around, but still awesome chapter.

Author's Response: I honestly haven't read the manga for the beginning of Naruto since... third grade (Nine years ago :O) I used the episode actually, and, hopefully my memory is correct, she says to follow her, but after Ibiki says she jumped the gun, she tells them she'll notify their Jonin sensei where the second portion will be taking place and to meet up with her tomorrow. We then see Ibiki picking up the papers in the late afternoon as the sun sets, but the Genin are shown at the Forest of Death when the sun's still up. I might've misinterpreted the scene changes, but it allows me to add things into the story... like more mysteries. XP I wanted to make at least one of them a smarty-pants and thought Etsuyo can have that title. Nishiya taking part as a medical ninja just to show more about her and it starts to grow some bonds, I'll just say that. I was laughing too, mostly because I can relate. I hate doing a bunch of work and getting all nervous about something only to be told it was unnecessary. It's funny seeing it happen to someone else, even if they're fictional. Last thing I have to say, having to combine the canon with my story sucks. Thanks for your thoughts!